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|I agree that mass media should arrange the publicity of celebrities
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 17, 2015 / daveandrei - Nov 18, 2015
|The bar chart compares the proportion of certain categorized people living in Australia
NEW - The bar chart compares the proportion of certain categorized people living in Australia who visit four selected places which...
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|The cinema is the most popular place for the inhabitants living in Australia
NEW - A breakdown of people living and visiting four different public facilities in Australia is revealed in the chart. Overall,...
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|TASK 1. The recruitment of foreign language teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007.
4 - Rahmat, first of all, it's good that you plugged the graph in the essay, most of the students forget...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 18, 2015
|IELTS task 1 - enrolled educator for regularly job in Ontario
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 14, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 18, 2015
|An in-depth drill in drug abuse - the death toll has been increasing exponentially
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Nov 17, 2015 / fidelissari - Nov 18, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Charge in museum - it should be balanced with a better service
2 - Museums have a variety of purposes and budgets, it causes them having difference in charge. Improving museum facility and...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 18, 2015 / eddies - Nov 18, 2015
|The study-work culture in Denmark has always fascinated a lot of international students
Writing FeedbackYashwanth - Nov 17, 2015 / Yashwanth - Nov 18, 2015
|Children being the most naive and easy target of the media influence, become a victim. GRE essay
Writing Feedbackchandnimaishery - Nov 18, 2015 / chandnimaishery - Nov 18, 2015
|Same national curriculum; imbalance in the development rather than the intended unity for the school
2 - Every child has its own potential of learning ... Every child has own interests and potentials in their...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 17, 2015 / ochio - Nov 18, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Life and a relation of entertainers (such as actors, singers or footballs)
2 - Life and a relation of entertainers (such as actors, singers or footballs) are reported by the media. There is...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 18, 2015 / ochio - Nov 18, 2015
|Ielts task 2 - the aim of university education
4 - Hi ngong, happy to read your writing. let me give some suggestions. Comment. *much for noun uncountable,...
Writing FeedbackLucy Ngong - Nov 17, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 18, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - Media like to expose famous people activities
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 17, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 18, 2015
|IELTS-TASK2 : Whether the media should notice ordinary people than famous people ?
4 - hello Sir Nofynorman let me give you little suggestion for your consideration The world of media has taken...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 17, 2015 / Arundyna - Nov 17, 2015
|TOEFL ESSAY: professional athletes or performers shouldn't be involved in politics.
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Nov 16, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 17, 2015
|"Is 18 the right age limit for voting?" Can you tell me if my essay is off-topic or not?
3 - Thanks, I appreciate your suggestion. Yes, you are right, I'm arguing that the age limit is not fairly set...
Writing FeedbackAnthonyJ - Nov 17, 2015 / AnthonyJ - Nov 17, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities.
2 - Let me give your suggestion In my opinion, you miss one word, regarding singing in the first paragraph, which...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 17, 2015 / Arundyna - Nov 17, 2015
|TOEFL Writing--whether parents should exchange their ideas about education methods with teachers
Writing FeedbackDousiyu - Oct 20, 2015 / broibra - Nov 17, 2015
|How does higher education in Denmark differ from India?
7 - Hi Shiring, in answer to your first question, you certainly can get creative in writing your response to the...
Writing Feedbackshiring - Nov 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 17, 2015
|IELTS : satisfaction customer levels in US airlines. Task 1.
2 - A comparison regarding customer ... A comparison of the proportion of how people felt about the service offered by...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 17, 2015 / eddies - Nov 17, 2015
|Ielts task 1 : Consumer of stuff in Britain - explanation of the graph
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 16, 2015 / broibra - Nov 17, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Famous People Like Celebrities or Athletes Almost Are Reported by The Media
2 - Hello fahmi, I guess this is an familiar topic for you and you give your best idea to answering...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 17, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Nov 17, 2015
|Which is more effective - consultancy from consultants or listening to employees
2 - Hello.., i really enjoy your topic came up.. I will give you some suggest for the content.. 1....
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 16, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Nov 17, 2015
|A breakdown of the number of people both female and male participating four evening courses - IELTS1
2 - Hi Fidelis... I will try to closely read your writing.. I will give you few suggestions. I hope that...
Writing Feedbackfidelissari - Nov 16, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 17, 2015
|Theater satisfaction - what two groups of people think of a new theatre? ielts task 1
3 - Hi soyoung, Happy to discuss with you. Comment. *Gerund/Verb-ing as subject is singular. *need verb in your...
Writing FeedbackSOYOUNG - Nov 16, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 16, 2015
|TOEFL ESSAY: New devices vs well-adopted devices - which do you prefer?
10 - WOW！Thanks for reminding me what i may not be aware of, TJLuschen! Your advice really helped me a...
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Nov 11, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 16, 2015
|Global warming - human's activity have nothing to do with this rapidly increase in temperature
NEW - Please could someone correct my mistakes? To know, it is not an essay and either intended to be formal....
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|Rewarding students to improve their academic results
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 16, 2015 / iban - Nov 16, 2015
|Three reasons for visiting museums
4 - Hey Adrian Sorry if it was misunderstood: By childish I only meant I found it less persuasive: ...
Writing Feedbackadrianw - Nov 14, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 16, 2015
|Opinion Essay: Success considered to be the most effective method to assess intelligence
2 - I don't really know what is required for this essay, but you might want to cite your sources. The...
Writing FeedbackBlackForestGirl - Nov 16, 2015 / auapeterson - Nov 16, 2015
|The figures who apply for teaching job in two different subjects in Ontario between 2001 and 2007
3 - The line graph presents the proportion of graduates who applied for jobs as teachers of both French and...
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 15, 2015 / eddies - Nov 16, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: The people who must give responsibility to solve children unhealthy lifestyle problem
2 - It is claimed that children today live in a sedentary. As such, people argue that school and parents...
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 15, 2015 / eddies - Nov 16, 2015
|The famous people should be prepared to be a celebrity - and it's not always a pleasure.
7 - hi SparkDark, I think you could add more details about your part of the advantage part. Otherwise it...
Writing FeedbackSparkDark - Oct 19, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 15, 2015
|A breakdown of the proportion of student attending four secondary schools had changed each year.
NEW - A breakdown of the proportion of student attendance in four different types of secondary schools from 2000 to 2009,...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 15, 2015 / — -
|IELTS Task 1: Information regarding recruitment of English teachers and French teachers in Ontario
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 14, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 15, 2015
|The power of advertising increases the number of product sales and spurs their popularity
2 - Ihsan, your argument is quite compelling when we consider the way that advertising influences the way people consider buying...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 15, 2015
|Sociological Imagination on life intersection : Essay admission for entering a university
3 - Louisa, this is what I am afraid of. Let me think and re-arrange my essay and hopefully will meet...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Nov 14, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 15, 2015
|Some people think the technology makes life complex, so we could spend the life simpler without it
NEW - Some people think the technology makes life complex, so we should make the life simpler without using the technology....
Writing Feedbacksophisticate - Nov 14, 2015 / — -
|These days the health of children have become an immense problem to deal with
2 - Furthermore, school also have big responsibility to tackle that problem by giving additional insight for their pupils, and providing...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 14, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 14, 2015
|IELTS-TASK2 : RECRUITMENT OF TEACHERS IN ONTARIO BETWEEN 2001 AND 2007
2 - The line graph highlights PRESENTS THE PERCENTAGE OF GRADUATES WHO APPLY FOR JOBS AS TEACHERS OF ENGLISH AND FRENCH...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 14, 2015 / eddies - Nov 14, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007
NEW - The rate of recruiting teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 is displayed in the bar chart, and is...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 14, 2015 / — -
|IELTS Task 1: English and French Teachers Who Apply to Teach Regularly in Ontario
2 - Initially, teachers of both languages had approximately a 70% success rate in finding jobs. As per...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 14, 2015 / eddies - Nov 14, 2015
|Nowadays, a large number of young people have the way of living which is unhealthy.
4 - Apart from this, government could also encourage children to have a healthy life. It is vital to design...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 12, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Older leaders or young directors? IELTS TASK 2
NEW - TOPIC: Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally elder people.Some people think younger leader would be better. Do...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Nov 13, 2015 / — -
|Out of country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to prevention
3 - In this globalization era, many people argue that charge of country's health should be spent for treatment regarding health...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 11, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Football World Cup and similar international sports are gathering masses of people and sports lovers
2 - Football World Cup and similar international ... Here is my edit; Sports events bring world peace. As...
Writing Feedbacki_shaikh - Nov 13, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Unhealthy lifestyle among people, particularly young generation
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 13, 2015 / eddies - Nov 13, 2015
|Tourists can bring demerits to the visited country. Yet, tourism business can contribute financially
2 - In this case, you are being asked 2 QUESTIONS but unfortunately your thesis statement did not successfully answer...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 13, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 13, 2015
|IELTS-TASK1 : UNHEALTY LIFESTYLE OF CHILDREN
3 - Based on the prompt, you are being asked 'to what extent do you agree with the statement saying...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 12, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 13, 2015
|New policy of working four days a week. Toefl TPO1: integrated writing
3 - Hi Chloe, I am pleased to know you here. Anyway let me give some additional comment for your writing....
Writing FeedbackChloeChen - Oct 31, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 13, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: A Number Of Young People Are Unhealthful To Undergo Their Way that They Live
2 - Prompt: Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle. Both school and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 12, 2015 / sntinn - Nov 13, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - Parents and Schools are responsible for children's unhealty lifestyle
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 12, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 13, 2015
|New breed of millet to combat vitamin A deficiency -GRE argument essay
NEW - An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus,...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|Decision based on emotions leads to poor decision making.
NEW - Time taken exact 30 minutes. Thank you in advance for feedback on every correction/suggestion. People who make decisions...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|Who uses the internet in Australia and what the reasons they use it.
NEW - People who use the internet and the reasons why they use it are explained in the bar chart and...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2 : certain talents as sport and music for people, both view
NEW - In general believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 12, 2015 / — -
|Obesity, Type 2 Diabetes, and heart disease! Can sugar sweetened drinks be to blame?
3 - Hello there, thank you so much for going over my rough draft. I am going take the feedback you...
Writing Feedbackrrjones79 - Nov 7, 2015 / rrjones79 - Nov 12, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Children are more dependent on junk foods rather than eating healthy food.
2 - 1. You must add information about the government in your introduction, since there is a description about the...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 12, 2015 / Pramudita - Nov 12, 2015
|Ielts task 1 : UK telephone calls divided into three categories, 1995 - 2002.
NEW - Answer. An explanation regarding the total number of minutes (in billions) of the total calls in the UK...
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|ielts task 1 - different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia
2 - comment : make sure your tenses in your introduction. I try to give suggestion overall. Overall,...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 12, 2015 / nsahmad - Nov 12, 2015
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