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|Unethical methods in advertising today
3 - This essay will automatically a failing score under the TA section. You have created your own discussion requirements as...
Writing FeedbackMartinmirror - Jan 31, 2020 / Holt - Feb 1, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumption.
3 - While this presentation is good enough to help assess your English writing and comprehension abilities, you should have considered...
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Jan 31, 2020 / Holt - Jan 31, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task I: UK Cinema Attendance of different age citizens, from 1990 to 2010
5 - Your vocaulary really makes me amazed. But I suggest that you should harmonize between 2 bodies in terms of...
Writing Feedbackkanzanism - Jan 17, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 31, 2020
|Four modes of transport in terms of the amounts of goods they conveyed in the UK from 1974 to 2002
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Jan 30, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 31, 2020
|[ IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Topic: Obesity is a serious problem today
5 - There are 2 problems points in your presentation as I see it. The introduction paraphrase and the concluding statement....
Writing FeedbackSam an - Jan 30, 2020 / Holt - Jan 31, 2020
|The presented graph compares four types of transport in terms of the amount of goods transported
3 - You need to be accurate in your representation of the graph information. There is no reference to "mail" in...
Writing FeedbackAmanda92 - Jan 30, 2020 / Holt - Jan 31, 2020
|Aging populations in countries - WRITING TASK 1 Ielts
5 - I suggest that you should pharaphrase a few words like percentage, proportion <=> figure, then <=> over the following...
Writing Feedbackanhthythy - Jan 5, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 30, 2020
|Adult education - bar chart and pie chart for ielts writing
3 - I suggest you should use some words like: mention, quote or cite for better expression. For example, instead of...
Writing Feedbackmimiya - Jan 25, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 30, 2020
|The proportion of visitors to England who paid a visit to four diverse attractions in Brighton
2 - I think that it is a very good essay but there are some spelling mistakes such as remaining, meantime....
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Jan 30, 2020 / Amanda92 - Jan 30, 2020
|The table gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked
5 - Try to observe the data vertically (by age groups) first, then horizontally. You can start by creating general statements...
Writing Feedbackeyesliu0715 - Jan 27, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 29, 2020
|Animal products no longer needed?
4 - @wizardA Thank you for your feedback. @Holt Could you please highlight grammar issues in my essay? Thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackHanoian - Jan 23, 2020 / Hanoian - Jan 28, 2020
|Ielts essay on land availability in countryside
5 - What makes me feel positive about your essay is that you have a wide range of vocabularies, proper ways...
Writing Feedbacksv_megha - Jan 25, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 28, 2020
|Some people believe mental strength is more important for success in sports while others think...
5 - @quynhnhi2801 Your essay sounds cool, however you need to go through your grammar again as they are some errors....
Writing Feedbackquynhnhi2801 - Jan 22, 2020 / ReginaOtu - Jan 27, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Which is the main environmental problem?
2 - The paraphrased introduction is incorrect. There are two points of view prior to your personal opinion to be discussed....
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Jan 27, 2020 / Holt - Jan 27, 2020
|Australia and France comparison in terms of electricity production by different fuel resources
4 - I think you didn't need to split up into lots of paragraphs. Instead merge the relevant information into one...
Writing Feedbackyazan ajlouni - Jan 24, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 27, 2020
|The amount of China and India's population from 2000 until now and the predicted number up to 2050
3 - Thanks you so much dear @ Holt. Your notes can obviously improve my writings and any other reader's for...
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 24, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 25, 2020
|Export earnings 2015-2016. IELTS writing task 1
3 - I suggest you to search for more model task 1 essays to have a smoother approach in writing. You've...
Writing FeedbackTdtd10 - Jan 24, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 24, 2020
|IELTS TASK 1 - the number of live births per thousand of population per year in China and the USA
Writing Feedbackthaihuynh - Jan 20, 2020 / thaihuynh - Jan 22, 2020
|Certain talents, for instance for music and sport - acquired or learned?
3 - This is another example of a 5 paragraph essay that became tangential in response because of a misrepresentation of...
Writing FeedbackAmanda92 - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS - Discuss whether employees should be forced to disclosure their private data; job interview
2 - The paraphrasing in the first paragraph is incomplete. You omitted the paraphrase of the original instruction, which made your...
Writing FeedbackRachelrc - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] To accept or try to improve a bad situation?
2 - You have not properly discussed the given topic. Neither did you properly respond to the task requirements. Look at...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Video games: harmless fun or useful educational tool?
6 - I think you should avoid from using the phrases '' as mentioned above" or "into something'' because i find...
Writing FeedbackNgoc Lam - Jan 18, 2020 / Hung Dang - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Curfew effects on teens
6 - I don't think it is necessary to write like this ... during weekdays as well as weekends. It is...
Writing Feedbackprab0694 - Jan 17, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 20, 2020
|IELTS line graph - task 1 - thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 14, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 20, 2020
|IELTS2; We should invest in advanced railway lines for fast trains to facilitate our commuting
Writing FeedbackRwannajjar - Jan 19, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 20, 2020
|Essay about woven baskets from the prehistoric village of Palea (GRE)
Writing Feedbackchiwchang - Jan 19, 2020 / chiwchang - Jan 20, 2020
|How to Help the Impact of Social Media on Children: Rough Draft
2 - The essay lacks a range of discussion development throughout the presentation. These are not even complete paragraph presentations. It...
Writing Feedbacklauramphillips - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 19, 2020
|The statistics of afforestation on all continents over the world
4 - It will be extremely difficult for you to gain a passing score for this type of presentation. The main...
Writing Feedbackangelaaa - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|Task 2: some people think that video games are advantageous - opinion essay
Writing FeedbackThuytran9977 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: SHOULD WE ACCEPT WHAT LIFE GAVE US OR STAND UP AND FIGHT
4 - A personal opinion should not be presented int he introduction paraphrase because there isn't enough sentence space left for...
Writing Feedbackemillia2003 - Jan 2, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS WT2: Studying other country's cultures
2 - Where is your response to the prompt requirement? I do not see it in the final sentence of your...
Writing FeedbackThanghoang - Jan 17, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS 2. Children should always follow parents advice till they become more independent and mature
2 - One of the first things that the examiner will check for with your essay is the word count. You...
Writing Feedbackdikyung - Jan 17, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because ...
3 - @Holt Thank you for your comments. I was aiming for a "balanced" view response not "strong " or "partially...
Writing Feedbackparviz - Jan 16, 2020 / parviz - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS task2: man-made activities are making global temperatures higher
3 - Thank you! That is really helpful. I will practice how to paraphrase according to you suggestion!...
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 15, 2020 / Annie97 - Jan 17, 2020
|Ielts 1 - The proportion of household expenditures between Japan and Malaysia in the same year 2010
Writing Feedbackhau15122001 - Jan 15, 2020 / hau15122001 - Jan 16, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002 - local, international, mobiles
Writing Feedbackbestsp - Jan 15, 2020 / bestsp - Jan 16, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: Some people think that the use of computers should be restricted. Do you agree or not?
4 - For the TA score, due to the lack of proper response to the given prompt, this will most likely...
Writing Feedbackplinh175 - Jan 1, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Day-by-day people's lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What is the reason and how to solve
3 - There are spelling errors in this essay (thier = their) which could have been caught and corrected through proof...
Writing Feedbackchloeec - Dec 31, 2019 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Writing IELTS Task 1: Line graph about the movement to urban area in 3 countries
4 - You have a tendency to write run-on sentences instead of a mix of long and short sentences to create...
Writing Feedbacktienphat - Dec 20, 2019 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Opinion Essay. City or country?
2 - This essay is riddled with grammatical errors. The sentences do not make any sense in most instances due to...
Writing FeedbackMartaJones - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|A tendency to let children approach the basic education earlier than at the average school age
3 - In your introduction paragraph, you have an incomplete sentence. You refer to 7. A reader who does not know...
Writing Feedbackpenny0127 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Task 1: the percentage of water for different purpose - industry, agriculture and domestic
2 - I cannot accurately review your work without the chart / image provided for this task. Please remember to include...
Writing Feedbackkelly33 - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - FRIENDS WITH PEOPLE WITH SAME OPINION OR NOT
4 - There is a lack of clarity in the introduction paragraph. Your paraphrase does not include a reference to the...
Writing FeedbackeNVi - Dec 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Task 2: The problem of child abuse. How respond to this problem?
4 - For a task 2 essay that has a limited time constraint, you should not be writing almost 400 words....
Writing FeedbackThangnguyen315 - Dec 23, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.
4 - That was one heck of a confusing first paragraph. It doesn't really summarize the task well enough to score...
Writing FeedbackHirumi - Dec 21, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS task2- It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife?
3 - When you write the introduction, spend time in formulating the summary of the prompt. Avoid writing long sentence because...
Writing FeedbackOliverH - Dec 24, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|TOEFL ESSAY - About restriction for marketing strategies directed at kids (eg. TV's advertising)
2 - It is not a question of whether more regulation is required when it comes to advertising to children, it...
Writing Feedbackkokot - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|ielts task 2; Millions of people doing unhealthy activities which are harmful
3 - The introduction must accurately summarize the content of the prompt in order for it to gain a proper TA...
Writing Feedbackmichellejoy1222 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE GROWTH OF ONLINE SHOPPING
Writing FeedbackYuki Nguyen - Jan 7, 2020 / Yuki Nguyen - Jan 14, 2020
|I agree that the media coverage of celebrities have a negative impact on children
4 - Points will be deducted for the missing 25 words. The TA assessment for this essay falls under a 4...
Writing FeedbackPHANTAMANH - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Overpopulation in urban areas has led to some serious problems. Identify some problems and solutions
3 - Your presentation is good but the ideas are little developed. It would be better if you learn to use...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Ngoc Huon - Jan 5, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Some believe homework should be given everyday, others do not in order to success in school. Discuss
Writing Feedbackapprajapati - Jan 8, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|The internet provide us with easy connection to other people, however it also isolates us
2 - The complete prompt for this essay indicates that requires a clear degree of dis/agreement with the given topic. As...
Writing FeedbackMsm87 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Even in this new era, millions of people still do not have enough food to eat
Writing Feedbackbehnooshsamavat - Jan 13, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Regional household recycling rates - MY FIRST IELTS WRITING TASK 1
3 - Try to write at least 3 sentences for every paragraph. That way you increase the word count and your...
Writing FeedbackTria170393 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|People consider computers to be the most important breakthrough
3 - Well, you certainly made your opinion clear in the essay, even with the problematic grammar and sentence presentations. You...
Writing Feedbackngoan - Jan 10, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|IELTS - Task 1 - Physical Activity awareness among different sexes and age people in Australia
4 - The summary paragraph is missing a trending statement at the end. The summary paragraph is the first paragraph of...
Writing FeedbackRwannajjar - Dec 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Goods from Japan and US - HOW TO WRITE A TASK 1 OF IELTS
3 - The introduction paragraph is incomplete. Since this is a summary of the graph information, it should contain a list...
Writing Feedbacktdung512 - Jan 9, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are. (The Idealist)
Writing FeedbackFamai - Jan 13, 2020 / karmalea - Jan 13, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Car theft, house burgling and street robbery - statistics in two countries
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