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|IELTS Task 2: Nowadays, the crime level experiences a rise
2 - Nowadays, the crime level experiences a rise. The opening sentence feels a little redundant to the prompt. It should...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Dec 7, 2015 / iSasha - Dec 7, 2015
|How do cars affect our life and what can we do to address the problems cars caused
Writing Feedbackxdx24 - Dec 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 7, 2015
|There is a lot of remedial steps that can be done to reduce crime rate - IELTS2
2 - This is caused by economic factors and unemployment. Therefore, job vacancies should be increased and the efficiency and performance...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Dec 7, 2015 / ab0m1nat10n - Dec 7, 2015
|ACAD IELTS TASK 2 - Many people worry about the growing number of obese children
4 - In many countries, many people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. What do you think...
Writing FeedbackLizScarlet - Dec 7, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Dec 7, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - The rise of crime rate and how to prevent it.
NEW - Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime what could be done to prevent this...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Dec 7, 2015 / — -
|IELTS-TASK1 : PROPORTION OF ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES IN FAIRMONT ISLAND, ACCORDING TO VISITORS
2 - Hi, let me try to give you some suggestion for this writing. A proportion of the most general...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 20, 2015 / broibra - Dec 7, 2015
|An explanation regarding developing populations in the Chorleywood village near London - ielts 1
2 - Hi Arundyna. Let me give you some polishes feedback... An explanation regarding developing populations in the Chorleywood village...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Dec 6, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Dec 7, 2015
|IELTS-TASK 2: Young people say that traveling to different countries benefits them and the society.
6 - Hi majid11, I do have some great english teachers behind me, but I am a IELTS candidate just like...
Writing Feedbackmajid11 - Dec 4, 2015 / Guang - Dec 6, 2015
|It is a highly debated issue whether video games have bad effects on young generation
NEW - Some people think that computer games are bad for children, while others believe that they are useful. Discuss the...
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|Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products
2 - Hello Ursulawu, Your Body paragraph shows you have a good writing skills, however, you introduction lack of one sentences....
Writing Feedbackursulawu - Dec 6, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Dec 6, 2015
|The diagram shows the process of coffee production and preparation before packaging it for sale
NEW - The diagram shows the process of coffee production and how to package it for sale to the market. What...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Dec 6, 2015 / — -
|Reducing writing and reading skills as result of using mobiles - is it true or not?
3 - hello, nice to see your writing... well, i have few suggestions for you to improve your writing skill.. ...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 5, 2015 / Arundyna - Dec 6, 2015
|Self-confidence is the most important factor for success in school or at work.
3 - Nadir, you need to consider some other factors with regards to the use of self-confidence in school or at...
Writing FeedbackNadir_97 - Dec 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 6, 2015
|Using renewable energy to generate electricity - to preserve our earth from climate change - task2
2 - Hi, Rahmat Fahdli. ... to alter the conventional plantations such as coal, oil, and ... While thisit is...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Dec 6, 2015 / xchan - Dec 6, 2015
|Comparison of coffee production and preparation for distributing to several supermarkets and stores
NEW - A comparison of coffee production and preparation for distributing to several huge supermarkets and stores, this process is illustrated...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Dec 6, 2015 / — -
|The percentage of Australian children aged 5-14 years and their activities
2 - Hi Taufiqul. I closely read your writing. I will give you few suggestions and hope these can improve your...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Dec 5, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Dec 5, 2015
|'I am alone and defenceless' - Gothic horror essay
NEW - My black, leather jacket is being repeatedly buffeted by the howling gale. The smell of fresh blood proceeding to...
Writing FeedbackDaisyLouise26xx - Dec 5, 2015 / — -
|The hardest dilemma about which choice we should take - SAT essay
2 - I would change the following parts: Cofound isn't used correctly. Here's an example from dictionary.com: The complicated directions confounded...
Writing Feedbackloverenminki - Dec 5, 2015 / danbrespadkit - Dec 5, 2015
|IELTS task 1 - The lost of heat because of air leaks
NEW - The diagram shows a house with a heater which is wasted its energy because the exterior air come into...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Dec 5, 2015 / — -
|The easiest way to convert salt water into drinking water (IELTS)
3 - Hello Syafira, nice to meet you here on EF. Let's learn together to be a better writer for Ielts....
Writing Feedbackxchan - Dec 5, 2015 / M3L1 - Dec 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Power sources to cities and transports that are generated from fossil fuels
4 - First, the process to generate the electric energies from the fossil fuels spend cost extremely and is so complex....
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Dec 4, 2015 / pikul - Dec 5, 2015
|TASK 1- the graph below gives information about the prefered leisure activities of Australian kids
2 - Sharfina, while I understand that the overview can be presented within one short and one long paragraph, you need...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Dec 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 5, 2015
|Air circulation. It leaks out through the cracks of some rooms such as bathrooms and other.
2 - Hi Ibrahim :-) Not a bad essay. The grammar can be further improved upon though. Please note the corrections...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Dec 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 5, 2015
|IELTS: In this modern time, there are numerous people who have to work continuously in a long time
2 - Nguyen, when you write this kind of essay, always present the side that you do not support first. You...
Writing FeedbackCruella - Dec 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 5, 2015
|Percentage of diverse leisure activities chosen by Australian boys and girls aging from 5 to 14
2 - Dynar, when you are preparing a report for academic lecture, it is important that you always use the keywords...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Dec 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 4, 2015
|What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity? IELTS
2 - Risky, this is a grammatically flawed but well thought out and discussed essay. Therefore, you can expect to receive...
Writing Feedbackriskycw - Dec 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 4, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 - Process of changing sea water to drinking water
NEW - The diagram presents the making process of drinking water from sea using conventional tools. Although the process takes a...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Dec 4, 2015 / — -
|IELTS task 2 - Renewable energy is difficult to replace the fossil fuels
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Dec 4, 2015 / dynaranjani - Dec 4, 2015
|Is technology effects on communication good or bad?
NEW - Nowadays communication technology is developing rapidly; people communicate in different ways. Is it a positive or negative development? Give...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 4, 2015 / — -
|IELTS WRITING TASK2: Robots' benefits and drawbacks to human society
Writing FeedbackMike Wong - Dec 4, 2015 / fahmisadja - Dec 4, 2015
|TASK 1. The diagram gives a breakdown how heat released and energy wasted from the air
2 - The diagram gives a breakdown how heat released ... The diagram shows the ins and outs of air circulation...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Dec 4, 2015 / eddies - Dec 4, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: A process about the system of air coming in and out of a house
2 - This is good. However, I have made some changes on the intro and overview. A process about the system...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Dec 4, 2015 / eddies - Dec 4, 2015
|Many linguistic specialists justified the phenomenon of kids' learning a foreign language very early
2 - Hi Cruella.. I closely read your writing. This writing is very good. I will give you few suggestion. I...
Writing FeedbackCruella - Dec 3, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Dec 4, 2015
|The number of private vehicles has been increased annually since everyone depend on them every day
2 - Hi, Dewi. Let discuss this essay, particularly your introduction... The number of private automobile has been increased annually...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Dec 4, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Dec 4, 2015
|The pleasant and unpleasant tourist's experiences to explore Fairmont lsland (lELTS)
2 - Hi Syafira, I'm Luthfia. Overall, I like your essay. You have utilized more advance words. However, the number of...
Writing Feedbackxchan - Dec 4, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Dec 4, 2015
|IELTS-TASK2 : Is it right that use of natural power is better than use the fossil fuels ?
2 - Some people argue that the coal, oil, and gas which is functioned for existence of cities and transport is...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Dec 3, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Dec 4, 2015
|Fairmont Island Travel - attractive and boring places (IELTS)
2 - hello dina... I try to rewrite your introduction... The two distinct pie charts illustrate the most common benefits...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Dec 2, 2015 / Arundyna - Dec 4, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Working mothers cause the problems young people, agree or disagree?
NEW - Essay Topic: The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the...
Writing Feedbackhuytran - Dec 4, 2015 / — -
|People do not wear tradditional dresses these days and are more open to try various types of clothes
2 - It is always good to have a meaningful title in the subject field when you open a new thread....
Writing Feedbackpret42 - Nov 28, 2015 / eddies - Dec 3, 2015
|In order to complete goals quickly, a growing number of people are prone to make decisions at once.
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Dec 3, 2015 / akiraaa - Dec 3, 2015
|A simple device for changing sea water to a drinking water - purifying process. IELTS
2 - A diagram presents process purifying sea water to ... The ongoing process of how a water purification system works...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Dec 3, 2015 / eddies - Dec 3, 2015
|Major cities are good for spending vacations or for money but to live I prefer a small town.
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Dec 3, 2015 / Jonyface - Dec 3, 2015
|Media brings solutions for communication problems - IELTS task 2
2 - Intro: In the sophisticated world today, we have attained a situation where technologies are incredibly advancing. Electronic media have...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Dec 2, 2015 / eddies - Dec 3, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Consuming so much junk food is one of complex problems in health for citizens
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 3, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Renewable Energy Has Some Drawbacks, But People Need It To Protect The Earth
2 - However, to harnessing this alternative energy, that can be gotten from nature and used to generate infrastructure, requires...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Dec 3, 2015 / sharfina - Dec 3, 2015
|The ownership of cars should be limited to one per family in order to reduce traffic and pollution
2 - primary factor --> is better if you use predominant factor. " in order to reduce the traffic congestion" ,...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Dec 3, 2015 / sharfina - Dec 3, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: Information regarding the results of the communication skills
2 - The table illustrates information regarding the results of the A communication skills survey DONE between in 1997 and 2006....
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Dec 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 3, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: Which One Is More Important, Internal or External Communication Skills?
2 - The polling results of important communication skills in at work are presented in the table COVERING THE YEARS between...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Dec 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 3, 2015
|El Nino affects climate in countries on both sides of the Pacific Ocean
2 - Ibrahim, watch out for the capitalization of words in your essay. Always remember to capitalize the first letter of...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 30, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 3, 2015
|TASK 1. Internal and external communication influence on the selling products or services
2 - Hi Rahmat Fadli. I'm Luthfia. May I give you some suggestions? ... skills which people needed in their...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Dec 2, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Dec 3, 2015
|If I would be able to change something, I would like to enhance security of my town.
2 - hi Ssakshijain, i advice that you can combine your second and third part into one paragraph because they...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Dec 2, 2015 / akiraaa - Dec 3, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Many citizens argue that using the electronic media has a drawback to relationships
NEW - The use of electronic has a negative effect on personal relationship between people. To what extent do you agree...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Dec 3, 2015 / — -
|Writing Task IELTS - complain from tourist regarding holidays on the Fairmont Island
2 - Hi Putra This writing is good to grammar. If you attach picture of the chat about Fairmont Island,...
Writing FeedbackJanuary - Dec 2, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Dec 2, 2015
|Writing Task 1 - the most general things that people like and dislike about Fairmont Island
NEW - The pie charts show the most general things that people like and dislike about Fairmont Island based on observation...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Dec 2, 2015 / — -
|Electronic media: distant relationships is possible but it confuses people sometimes (IELTS)
NEW - The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Dec 2, 2015 / — -
|IELTS-TASK1 : THE SURVEYS OF IMPORTANT COMMUNICATION SKILLS FOR PEOPLE OCCUPATIONS.
NEW - A comparison of the results of two surveys between 1997 and 2006 in term of people were asked about...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Dec 2, 2015 / — -
|Every person has his own reason to visit museum as everyone thinks different.
NEW - Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Dec 2, 2015 / — -
|Library can be useful when the net has many information
2 - Hi Anna This writing is good to grammar. Turning to structure, you need systematic explanation to describe...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 29, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Dec 2, 2015
|Vanishing handwriting tools - reasons and consequences
NEW - Handwriting skills (using a pencil, a pen or a brush) are on decline. What can be the reasons for...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Dec 2, 2015 / — -
|IELTS task 1: forecast of weather in Australian Bureu of Meteorology
2 - ... to collect data for foreseeing THE reliable weather by the ... ... process is divided into three immense...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Dec 2, 2015 / annahatef - Dec 2, 2015
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