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|student misbehave as severe problems faced by schools: causes and solutions
2 - Some causes such as advancement of technology and restriction on teacher role TEACHER ROLE'S RESTRICTIONS in school stand out...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 26, 2016 / ainirere - Mar 26, 2016
|Foreign language acquisition for primary school students - it's best time to learn
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 26, 2016 / khumayra - Mar 26, 2016
|The numbers of skyscrapers buildings have increased in some countries especially develop countries.
2 - Hello Mr. Yusri, I had a pleasant time while I read your writing. However, I found some mistakes on...
Writing FeedbackYusri31 - Mar 26, 2016 / Trisulastri - Mar 26, 2016
|Skyscrapers construction as the demand of overcrowded population
2 - I have corrected some grammar mistakes in the first TWO paragraphs for you. You'd better double check your essay...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 26, 2016 / JanFan - Mar 26, 2016
|Balance between city development and life quality. Commercialisation of Residential Neighbourhoods
2 - Dear Afuro I will try to give you several suggestions. Please, check your essay, to be honest i...
Writing Feedbackaforuhar - Mar 26, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|The rise trend of worked women as well as the increasing number of youth delinquency
NEW - The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young...
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|Juvenile delinquency has become the pivotal problem which must be overcome as soon as possible.
NEW - In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this?...
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|The young leaders have a great deal of excellence than the old leaders
NEW - Most leaders or directors generally belong to an older age group, but some people believe that young leaders are...
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|Summary of Crush Course - Economics
2 - IN THIS VIDEO, There're two hosts who are introducing what is THE STUDY OF economics which is the study...
Writing FeedbackEstherJ - Mar 25, 2016 / ainirere - Mar 26, 2016
|Recent technology such as e-books may erase the printed media like books, newspapers and magazines
NEW - The recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will...
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|The main purpose of universities is to give info and skill to fullfill requirement for work-force
2 - hi, amirulmukminin. as you can see there are many corrections i made for your essay. keep writing. to fullfill...
Writing FeedbackAmirulmumin - Mar 16, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|Should children, when they'll grow up, do same kind of jobs like their parents? - I have some doubts
6 - Hay,,,, I will try to give you some suggestions on the introduction part, please check your answer and the...
Writing FeedbackOathbinder - Mar 18, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|In the university, students get the knowledge in two ways, practical and theory. Purpose of study
2 - I will try you some suggestions on the introduction part. 1. Please, check clearly the question : what,...
Writing Feedbackgiligrp - Mar 17, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 26, 2016
|The Alterations Occured on West Side of Junior High School
4 - The most noticeable change(s) was the replacement of green ... Between 1980 and 2010, car park had been...
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 23, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 26, 2016
|Results of two different surveys - citizens were questioned on crucial communication skills in a job
3 - Overall, it can obviously be seen that the most communication skill ... let me modify your introduction :...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 28, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 26, 2016
|News: the truth should be objective rather than subjective
6 - hi, aviniwirastri. here my comments. keep writing so that news should be presented as objective as possible...
Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Mar 20, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|IELTS 2: majority people are sometimes judged by their dress code as symbol of their characteristic
2 - Hy, Mita. here my comments. keep writing judged by their dress code -->dress code is something particular...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 28, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 26, 2016
|Do the Benefits of Vaccines Outweigh the Risks? Everyone should be aware of the immunization effects
3 - hi, brittssstyle, nice writing, here my comment. thanks Having a child usually means there will be a trip...
Writing Feedbackbrittsstyle - Mar 24, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 25, 2016
|Advanced devices used foolishly can also bring some dire effects to people's lives.
2 - hi, Mita, nice writing. yet, this is my commentaries. I would argue that advanced technology gives ...you need...
Writing Feedbackmita23 - Feb 28, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 25, 2016
|Several changes in agricultural lands and buildings in Stokeford village from 1930 to 2010
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 24, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 25, 2016
|The criminal should do some community services rather than putting them inside the prison. IELTS 2
2 - Hi, The Everest. here my comments for you writing. moreover, you need to pay attention on your sentence so...
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 24, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 25, 2016
|The factors which affect population increment are good health care, promiscuity, government's role..
2 - Hello friends, I have read your essay and here is my mark for your consideration. 1st paragraph: The...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 24, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 25, 2016
|Money distribution by government on roads, highways versus public transport.
NEW - People have different ideas about whether it is better when governments spend more money on improving roads and highways...
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|Responsibility for teaching children how to behave.
3 - Hello Hoang, I have read your writing and here is my suggestion for you. 1. Your thesis statement...
Writing Feedbacktrunhiuhoang1998 - Mar 25, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 25, 2016
|TARGET GROUP on which group of people we are interested in.
2 - This game is applicable to people who are 10 and above as(DUE TO THE REASON THAT) it may require...
Writing FeedbackSpecialOne - Mar 24, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 25, 2016
|The flight is more important today for any purposes such as leisure, business and commercial matters
2 - In today's world, the flight has been [...] such flights which I will discuss in this essay.(why you didn't...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Mar 25, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 25, 2016
|Recent research has shown that media like the internet and TV have a greater influence on people
2 - Hello anirere, here is my suggestion for your writing for your consideration. Currently researcher has presentedrevealed (word choice)...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Mar 25, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 25, 2016
|Infrastructure improvement in Stockford during 1930 until 2010
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 24, 2016 / ainirere - Mar 25, 2016
|The changes of Stokeford village - the transformation have occurred in the countryside in 80 years
2 - Hai Miss Nisa In the north area, there were the shops(two shops)beside(between) housing area and post office in...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 24, 2016 / Trisulastri - Mar 24, 2016
|I strongly agree that the increasing number of global population is the biggest issue to deal with
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 24, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 24, 2016
|Difficult problem to solve - the global population increase is the greatest problem faced by human
2 - the opening paragraph is good. The increasing of global population in many parts of the world has been...
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 24, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 24, 2016
|Replacement of many green areas with several houses and other changes in the village of Stokeford
2 - Hai miss Nida :) The maps illustrate the changes which have occurred in Stokeford village from1930 to 2010....
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 24, 2016 / Trisulastri - Mar 24, 2016
|The hot air goes out of the house through holes in the attic hatch. How heat is lost in a home.
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 24, 2016
|The pictures informs about the development of Stockford village during 1930 until 2010 - IELTS 1
3 - Hi Tri, I would like to share some corrections that will hopefully modify your essay when you do the...
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 24, 2016
|Population explosion: the risks and causes. Is it the biggest problem faced by humanity?
3 - The global population is progressively risen year by year which is caused by diverse reasons. At first, different with...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 23, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 24, 2016
|Uncontrolled population growth rate has been a contemporary issue in many countries in recent years.
4 - This problem (is) usually associated with social belief and the government do not pays enough attention. suggestion: i...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 23, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 24, 2016
|This essay will discuss factors why population is rising and why it affects the sociality.
2 - As, it is commonly understood that the increasing of world's population [...] agree that the growing population will affect...
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 24, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 24, 2016
|Characteristics of wireless channel in communication - is this paragraph well written ?
4 - Hi Suhib, thanks a lot for appreciating our work here on EF, there's nothing more like words of thanks...
Writing Feedbacksuhib - Mar 21, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 24, 2016
|Stokeford village landscape's changes - much more houses had been built, overtook the farmland
3 - ... the lost of farmland which scattered in(over/on/about, carefully about preposition and collocation) the early 19s century. The causes...
Writing Feedbackangga93 - Mar 23, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 24, 2016
|Functional shift of green large farmland and green area over the 8 decade period in Stokeford area
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 23, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|Does the increasing of human population become the worst problem?
2 - Hello Yonathan, it is better if you include an opening phrase which indicate that it is your conclusion. In...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 23, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 23, 2016
|The most recognizable changes visible in Stokeford were farmland and roads during the period.
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 23, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - The diagram illustrates the process of heat loss and energy wasted in the house
3 - Hi Fifi, i have read your writing, and i found some unsuitable word. So let me give you correction...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 23, 2016 / yonathan66 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS 1 - The Process of reusing the rainwater for household - diagram
2 - Hi, Inastia. You have a great essay. Let me give suggestion for your essay. Please correct me, if I...
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 23, 2016 / nida26 - Mar 23, 2016
|Learning from parents is always an easy-going process - are they the best mentors possible?
2 - Some people believe that parents [...] can be our best teachers. I will try to give you example...
Writing Feedbackkhumayra - Mar 23, 2016 / Yusri31 - Mar 23, 2016
|The decision if boys and girls should be in separate classroom or not. Different teaching techniques
2 - At first, please make it clear the difference between introduction, body, and conclusion, simply by enter the space to...
Writing Feedbackcirora - Mar 23, 2016 / RAY93 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - Environmental impacts due to over logging activities.
Writing FeedbackThe Everest - Mar 23, 2016 / angga93 - Mar 23, 2016
|The picture gives information about the process of retention and reuse of rainwater.
2 - hi astri, let me paraphrase your introduction. Overall, it can be seen that the process involves four major...
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 23, 2016 / nurannisaputry92 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 - The changes in the west side of Secondary School in 1950, 1980 and 2010
Writing FeedbackInastia47 - Mar 23, 2016 / Trisulastri - Mar 23, 2016
|The diagram presents the several processes for rainwater recycling
2 - The diagram presents information regarding the rainwater treatment process. After being treated, water can be used...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / MisterWandering - Mar 23, 2016
|The changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School (IELTS TASK 1)
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 22, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|There are some different steps to treat the rainwater to produce the quality of water
2 - -rainwater isbeing reused for - are some different steps - to use it for several aimspurposes ....
Writing Feedbacknurannisaputry92 - Mar 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|The changes which have occurred in West Park Secondary School,
2 - Hi miss Nida, I have read your good writing, but, let me give my opinion about your writing :)...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / Inastia47 - Mar 23, 2016
|It can be noticed that most of the air from the basement flow into the house. IELTS Task
2 - illustrates how the circulationillustrates the circulation or illustrates how the air circulates in a house. flows thru maybe you...
Writing Feedbacknida26 - Mar 23, 2016 / cirora - Mar 23, 2016
|The development of West Park secondary school since its contraction in 1950
Writing FeedbackTrisulastri - Mar 23, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|Method of losing heat and wasting energy by transferring air
Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|TOEFL: Is There More Need for Land To Be Left In Natural Condition Or To Be Developed for Industry
2 - the opening paragraph is so beautiful. i like to read it. in the Amalfi Coast should be built some...
Writing Feedbackcirora - Mar 23, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Mar 23, 2016
|Water Cycle Base on The Location Where It is Dropped
2 - Hi Yonathan, I would like to help modify your essay, to start, your overall analysis is good, however, it...
Writing Feedbackyonathan66 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|The air flows out and into the house thus causing inefficient consuming energy on heater operating
2 - - The diagram informsillustrates the ways - of air flowing -thusthat caused - inefficient consumingconsumption of energy on -...
Writing FeedbackRAY93 - Mar 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Mar 23, 2016
|IELTS task 1: New buildings arrangement - West Park Secondary School maps
2 - 30 years interval Overall, the school area had been expanded immensely. The area of the school block had...
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