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|The proportion alter in the rate of overseas university students in several regions in Canada
NEW - Task 1 - The percentage change in the number of Canada's international students The bar chart reveals the...
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|The Citizens Obstacle to Change Their Living in A Novel Place in Three Problems
3 - The bar chart presents the citizens obstacles when they change to live abroad in a novel place and there...
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 10, 2015 / Arundyna - Nov 11, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 : the proportion of changes in students graduated from universities in Canadian
Writing Feedbackhasdymath - Nov 11, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 11, 2015
|The number of overseas pupils graduated from universities in several Canadian provinces from 2001-6
3 - let's me give you little corrections for the first sentence An explanation regarding the percentages of scholar international...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Nov 10, 2015 / Arundyna - Nov 11, 2015
|A comparison of the proportion change in the overseas students' number in 8 Canadian provinces
2 - 1. Irham, I know that you are trying to paraphrase the words from the question. However, not all...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Nov 11, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 11, 2015
|[IELTS Task 2] Working Parents: Discussing Effects on Additional Income and Parents' Absence
2 - Hi Kandrika, I will give few suggestions about your essay. In my opinion, it is a good essay. you...
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Nov 11, 2015 / INA - Nov 11, 2015
|A comparison of different areas where some schools in UK spent their yearly budget from 1981 to 2001
2 - Overall, most of the school budgetS were spend SPENT to pay the teacher's salary in each year. In any...
Writing Feedbackiban - Nov 11, 2015 / eddies - Nov 11, 2015
|Adolescents should be taught to compete, since this brings a decision maker skills for their future
3 - Hi Hasdy In general, adolescents should be taught to compete, since this brings such as a better decision...
Writing Feedbackhasdymath - Nov 2, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 11, 2015
|IELTS TASK I : The percentage change in the number of international students graduating
2 - Hi Abraham. I would like to give some comments on your essay. Your introduction is quite good and...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Nov 10, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 11, 2015
|TASK 1. Problem for people living abroad
4 - Iam sorry for my mistaken. Actually I have tried to enclosure the picture. Evidently, the size does not allowed...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 10, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 10, 2015
|Writing Ielts task 2: advantages and disadvantages of nuclear technology
NEW - Hopefully, i can get many beneficial advice in my essay. Thank u :) Quest: Advantages and disadvantages of...
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|The trouble people have when they move to a new region in other countries - Ielts1 essay
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 10, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Nov 10, 2015
|The percentage of inconvenience people who live in other countries, categorized in troubles and ages
2 - Meliana, there are actually 2 major problems with your current report summary which can adversely affect your overall score....
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 10, 2015
|Three big problems which people who live abroad must deal with - according to their age.
2 - You need to include the pict. You know what, it takes some time to understand the report writing with...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 10, 2015 / eddies - Nov 10, 2015
|'anxious faces staring into a computer screen' - major, UC transfer application Personal Statement
Writing FeedbackAkrious7 - Nov 9, 2015 / Akrious7 - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS-TASK1 : Persons Arrested in Five Years ending 1994
5 - Hi, let me try to give you some suggestion for this writing. ... the most infractions that individuals...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 6, 2015 / broibra - Nov 10, 2015
|The Changes of Woodwards University's Map from 1985 until now
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 10, 2015 / M3L1 - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - Investor are less importance than doctors
2 - This paragraph is too short to be introduction. You need at least three sentences to show what you...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / eddies - Nov 10, 2015
|Equal responsibility of parents - what's your opinion? IELTS TASK 2
3 - i found some mistakes of your. ... fatherhood has to be responsible as same ... ... therefore...
Writing FeedbackArundyna - Nov 10, 2015 / Diqon - Nov 10, 2015
|It's just a myth that professors are the major factor to improve the quality of education
2 - Hi Vic, straight to your writing => actually your writing already good, but I have found your LAZY WORD...
Writing Feedbackvic93611 - Nov 9, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 10, 2015
|Drug and Alcohol Abuse with Teenagers
2 - The public should be informed about the effects of teens that use drugs or alcoholthe effectts of addictive drugs...
Writing Feedbackmmdaigneau - Nov 7, 2015 / lacusclyne - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 1 - the funding and spending activities of USA charity in a year
2 - Better you write the units of measurement in the introductory paragraph. Let me give a try: The pie...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of income sources and outlays by a USA charity in a year
3 - Hi akbar.. It is good essay, so it was difficult for me to give you some suggestion, huff.. Anyway,...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015 / daveandrei - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 2 : harmful junk food and education, discuss both views and give opinion.
2 - Experts believe that junk food consumption highly is bad for our body. Few people argue that education can be...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 10, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 1- People who get arrested in during five years
NEW - The two diagrams display the percentages of males and females that put in jail during five years due violations...
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|The pie charts present the amount of charity income and the way it is spent during one year in USA
NEW - TASK 1. Revenue sources and expenditures of USA Charity in One Year. The pie charts present the amount...
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|IELTS task 1 - Woodward University Map
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 5, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 9, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The Arresting Percentage of Societies in Five Years Ending 1994
3 - Fast forward to your preceding IELTS report, I' ve told you that such phrases can be categorized as...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 9, 2015 / eddies - Nov 9, 2015
|The major sources of income of the charity in the United States and their spending in various fields
NEW - IELTS-TASK1: Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in One Year. The pie chart shows the major...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|The proportion of men and women caught on breaking the law in a period of five years - IELTS 1
NEW - IELTS-TASK1: Persons Arrested in Five Years ending 1994 The pie chart illustrates the proportion of men and women...
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|IELTS Task 1 : The Presence of Pupils Which School in Secondary School in Different Three Years
3 - Hi Miss Devi, I would give you some suggestions. Hope it helps you... Firstly, I find out that...
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 8, 2015 / M3L1 - Nov 9, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991
2 - It is noticeablenoticed that the percentage of the males detained waswere more than the females ... ... and...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 9, 2015 / broibra - Nov 9, 2015
|The Silkworm Life Cycle in 76 Days
NEW - The cycle in the diagram depicts the silkworm life cycle during 76 days. It is important to note that...
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|Activity of Charity in United State for One Year is Revealed by the Pie Chart - IELTS Task 1
NEW - The pie chart has presented activity of charity in United State for one year. The chart is divided to...
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|"Inside the minds of children" - writing a presuasive essay on why it is important to stop bullying.
2 - Summer, your essay thesis is not really very clear. You have not provided an accurate explanation at the beginning...
Writing FeedbackSum2128033 - Nov 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 8, 2015
|Technology is one of substantials to spend the human life better.
2 - technology actually .Actually,it is predicted that technology will develops significantly in a decade later.the next decade. Most of...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Nov 8, 2015 / chickenpiemary - Nov 8, 2015
|Comparison of additional school attendance from 2000 to 2009 - IELTS-TASK1
2 - Hi.. Novri... I attempt to give you comments, 1. in my opinion, you are inconsistent with your thesis statement,...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 8, 2015 / fahmisadja - Nov 8, 2015
|Role of popular events in calming tensions between countries? IELTS Task 2
Writing FeedbackMR FARAH - Nov 8, 2015 / eddies - Nov 8, 2015
|Protecting wild animals or providing facilities for citizens by government
2 - - wild animals at the first glance may not seem important.( this phrase contradicts the first phrase of the...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 8, 2015
|ENG102 Essay: How Sleep deprivation can affect your health
2 - This is a really good essay, however I think that you should put some more juice in your intro....
Writing FeedbackCarmen Ramirez - Nov 8, 2015 / mnh78614 - Nov 8, 2015
|'Marx's views have shaped the world that we live in today' - Essay on Marxism
Writing Feedbackcauibn - Nov 6, 2015 / cauibn - Nov 8, 2015
|IELTS technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people
Writing Feedbackwulanaulia - Nov 7, 2015 / wulanaulia - Nov 8, 2015
|I am a medical professional today despite my low record in science in high school -GRE issue essay
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 6, 2015 / Peg - Nov 8, 2015
|Greatness of a person can be resolved by his contemporaries as well as the people who live after him
3 - Hi Sakshi, Thanks for giving your feedback on how to improve my writing. it was really helpful....
Writing FeedbackPeg - Nov 7, 2015 / Peg - Nov 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 Reading for developing imaginations and languages skills than TV.
3 - Hi @LonaRandan, I'm Luthfia. May I give you some suggestions? 1. Your words are less than 250 words 2....
Writing FeedbackLonaRandan - Nov 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Nov 8, 2015
|Company should give the employees the same benefit package. Agree or disagree
NEW - Nowaday, Bussiness needs a system quality employees to compete with other companies. In order to make this, the companies...
Writing Feedbackduckbaby271293 - Nov 8, 2015 / — -
|'Public Health is the golden path'. Personal Statement for UC's with Public Health Major!!
Writing Feedbackomarariss - Nov 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 8, 2015
|In a few decades, development of technology has changed the life of ordinary society - IELTS 2
2 - First and foremost,earlier developmentthe influx of technology has become the most influenced sector in society'severyday life. Almost every aspect...
Writing Feedbackmaryarifin - Nov 8, 2015 / eddies - Nov 8, 2015
|The map illustrates the development of Stokeford village over 80 years. IELTS TASK I
2 - Hi..., you need to include the picture. It takes time to follow what you are trying to say with...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Nov 8, 2015 / eddies - Nov 8, 2015
|BECAUSE ACTION SPEAKS LOUDER
2 - Hai Mary. I'm Luthfia. May I give you some suggestions? 1. In the first paragraph, it be better if...
Writing Feedbackmaryarifin - Nov 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Nov 8, 2015
|Government should not be biased when it comes to investment in cities - GRE issue essay.
2 - Hi, Your essay seems like it could be better organized. Your first and third paragraphs address the "reason" in...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 7, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 7, 2015
|It is often thought that currency is one of the ways to measure happiness. Ielts money topic
2 - Hi Trinh Tih Your idea is good but somehow you lack the coherence and formation of sentences along...
Writing Feedbacktrangtrang21094 - Nov 7, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS Essay task 2 -Damage of the environment is an inevitable consequence of worldwide improvements
2 - Emra, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. -Nowadays, environmental damage is - a controversial issue...
Writing FeedbackEmm23 - Nov 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 7, 2015
|Money is important but should not be considered as the end in itself - GRE argument essay
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 5, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 7, 2015
|Social Life in Apartment Buildings - IELTS Writing Task 2
6 - This is good. However, you need to show that you have very strong argument(s). To do so, presenting...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 11, 2015 / eddies - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS-TASK1 : Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in One Year.
3 - I suggest constructing your introductory paragraph with a formal tone. To tackle this issue, you need a passive...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 6, 2015 / eddies - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS 2 : Children development and the impact of society and the family
2 - Hi Nicki. The debate of nurture and VERSUS nature in the developping DEVELOPMENT process of children is ...
Writing FeedbackNickiNickiNicki - Nov 6, 2015 / maryarifin - Nov 7, 2015
|The start of a marathon - Descriptive essay
2 - Hey Kevin ! I really like the way that you wrote this essay. It is highly descriptive and only...
Writing FeedbackKevin_thomas - Nov 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2015
|The quantity of students which join in the Secondary School, in three different years
3 - Hello Meiliana enjoy your day This table displayed the quantity of students whichwho join in the Secondary School,...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 6, 2015 / wulanaulia - Nov 7, 2015
|Disadvantages of Facebook - be careful and use it 'scientifically'
3 - Hi Reece, I would like to call your attention to the way that you have structured your sentences. You...
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