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|The appropriate punishment of children to teach right and wrong
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Sep 22, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 5, 2015
|The picture describes the process of cycles how the rainwater can be recycled and reused
2 - Irfan, were you in a hurry or distracted when you wrote this practice essay? It sounds nothing like you....
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Talented Shows on TV, Are They Good Method or Just Entertainment?
3 - Hi aniani, overall, it's a good writing. However, you should focus on your pattern. For example, in the second...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 5, 2015 / Clark Kent - Oct 5, 2015
|Task 1 - The number of citizen who use rail mode transportation.
3 - ya i really need more practice, i am still on processing how to use correct grammar. By the way,...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 5, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 5, 2015
|Task 1 - The initial teacher training Program over following a two-year period.
3 - Thank you very much for all of your suggestions @ vangiespen. This is the valuable corrections for me....
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 5, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 5, 2015
|Raising awareness among tourists about the serious consequences of their reckless actions
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 5, 2015 / Diqon - Oct 5, 2015
|There are three treatments to purify water: dam, waste and storm water
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 5, 2015 / aniani - Oct 5, 2015
|Singing talent show program in television - IELTS TASK 2
4 - hello Jida let me try to give some suggestions on your passage. This essay will discuss both point of...
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 5, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 5, 2015
|Opinions of televised talent shows - these programs are not just for consolation
3 - hello pramudita, let me try to give some suggestions on your passage. Some argue that these programs are brilliant...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 5, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 5, 2015
|World Wide Web and TV lead to immense influence of people lives then parliamentarians
3 - Each time you emulate what I show you in the corrections, you show a talent for improving your writing...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : The Effects of Tourism and How to Reduce Negative Impacts of It
2 - hi ...aniani.. I think the tourism will bring more positive effects impacts than negative impacts. The predominant...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 5, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 5, 2015
|The rain water is sending for purification to a treatment plant, then goes to houses for drinking
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 5, 2015 / irhame - Oct 5, 2015
|Essay on how the young adults live after finishing their schools
Writing Feedbacksarasajedi - Oct 4, 2015 / sarasajedi - Oct 5, 2015
|How talent shows find a legend
2 - However, there is essential benefit where this reallywhich is the way to find an idol, someone who has unique...
Writing FeedbackEjepe - Oct 5, 2015 / JIDA - Oct 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Talent search program on television.
2 - Muflih, I like the way that you responded to the essay. You displayed an understanding of pop culture and...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2015
|The schema of reusing rain water in day-to-day activities (IELTS TASK 1)
3 - Yes @vangiespen, i will loves to read every comments that you write (refer to your question) :-) right,...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 5, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 5, 2015
|It's Not All About Entertainment
2 - Muhajid, I would like to call your attention to the prompt provided. It is of the utmost importance that...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2015
|'fertilisation in a wastewater treatment plant' - How the rainwater is reused.
5 - Aditya, I took note of the fact that you applied most of the corrections that I suggested to you....
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Oct 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2015
|Globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of culture identity, is it true?
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 4, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 4, 2015
|Initial teacher training qualifications of students who living in the UK between 2005/6 and 2006/7
3 - Hasbi, I try to re-written your introduction : The table illustrates the proportion of initial teacher training...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 4, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 4, 2015
|Task 1 - Two different processes of manufacturing tea.
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 4, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 4, 2015
|Ielts Task 2: Even though globalization affects the world's economics in a very positive way,...
2 - Hi, Pdeep,., What the topic your essay,.,? this is my suggestion, first, you should understand the question....
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 4, 2015 / hasbi - Oct 4, 2015
|Diagram process creates a black tea - a four-step process (IELTS TASK 1)
4 - Bayu, sorry about that. I am always inspired to help the students whom I see are really trying hard...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2015
|Cleaning up the environment essay - I WRITE it again give me your opinion and score IELTS
Writing Feedbacksarasajedi - Oct 3, 2015 / sarasajedi - Oct 4, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Little leisure time and pressure to work hard on studies
2 - Hello bayu, let me to try give some suggestion on your passage. It will lead the pupil to has...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 4, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 4, 2015
|research of ITT qualifications in 2-year period
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 1, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 4, 2015
|The diagram illustrates the manufacturing processes for producing good black tea
2 - Your overview of the report is acceptable. Although, it can stand to use a little improvement. Let me show...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2015
|The school systems cause children have little leisure time and study in under pressure
2 - Irham, you are showing an improvement with each essay that you write. I can see the effort you are...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2015
|Thanh tu Student - evaluated nail salon
2 - Thanh, the essay that you wrote is alright for a beginners essay. The thoughts are clear and have an...
Writing Feedbackpie apple - Oct 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2015
|Is smoking bad? Nicotine Addiction essay.
2 - Put the staement frst- In scnd paragraph HEALTH not healthy People using to tobacco have higher gravity cancer than...
Writing Feedbacktpkhai - Oct 3, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Oct 3, 2015
|Do we become used to bad news? Information in the world today.
3 - Thank you very much for you helpful and constructive comments. I'd really appreciate, and I try to implement your...
Writing Feedbackmoman_1031 - Oct 3, 2015 / moman_1031 - Oct 3, 2015
|Unethical methods of advertising - unacceptable in a society
5 - Not bad Jag. By using some personal knowledge in supporting your claims, you actually strengthened your point of view...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Oct 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2015
|In this era, the media have held the prominent thing in almost all aspects
4 - For both of your advantages and disadvantages , you should provide more points and supporting evidence to support your...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 28, 2015 / CPlayer - Oct 3, 2015
|CAMS Grade 9 Narrative about Stepdad "Never Had I Seen Him like This"
2 - Hi Dominic :-) I am wondering if you cannot better improve the beginning of your essay. It just seems...
Writing Feedbackdsuntay - Oct 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2015
|The short story on Abraham Lincoln -- An Attempt
Writing FeedbackApprentice - Oct 3, 2015 / Apprentice - Oct 3, 2015
|"Moving to a New World" - (from Pakistan to the United States) - Personal Statement for college
2 - Tayyaba, you wrote a good response to the essay. However, I don't really think that starting the response out...
Writing FeedbackTayyaba786 - Oct 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2015
|Can we lose our cultural identity because of the mass communications and transport? IELTS TASK 2
4 - Some changes from the intro: - Globalization is entirely avoidable - The influx of cutting-edge technologies in both communication...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Oct 1, 2015 / eddies - Oct 1, 2015
|The sale numbers of known cellular brands in the middle of the first decade of the 21st century
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 30, 2015 / eddies - Oct 1, 2015
|A lot of folks argue that the level of violence action between teenagers have increased
3 - To conclude, although criminal actions of people under 18 age group isare less attention about social and emotion learning...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Sep 30, 2015 / irhame - Oct 1, 2015
|Farming start: 11,000y ago. Was the Neolithic Revolution a positive or negative impact on humanity?
2 - Overall, people were better off after the Neolithic Revolution than they were before it. - Taras, complete your introductory...
Writing Feedbackbasil664 - Sep 30, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2015
|People in America vs Asian and European dwellers - Rail transport table usage in four countries
3 - Thank you @Vangiespen for your valuable inputs I am sorry, if i still creates a lot of grammar...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 29, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Oct 1, 2015
|IELTS: Reason for fathers stay at home while mothers go out to work. Is it positive or negative?
2 - Isabelle, try to expand your introduction to the prompt. It falls short at 2 sentences. If you can bring...
Writing Feedbackdb723 - Oct 1, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2015
|The deficiency of social value leads to the global loss of cultural identity
2 - Irham, I absolutely love that you were able to cite a reliable source for your percentage data. If you...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Oct 1, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2015
|International exchange program - is it advantageous for the secondary level students?
4 - Tnx vangie- I see I have problem in singular or plural. Later I will update more essay and try...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Oct 1, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Oct 1, 2015
|The programs as a charity or helping neighbourhood have a lot of advantages for students
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Sep 21, 2015 / db723 - Oct 1, 2015
|The youngsters do crime not only because of their elders but also of other severe circumstances
3 - Firstly in the introduction it's wrong to say HALF OF THE PEOPLE, and another thing that I noted u...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 30, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Oct 1, 2015
|Nokia had the biggest market share among the cell phone brands between 2005 and 2006
2 - Hasbi, you need to clarify your introduction. Indicate that the figures are based upon the factory output from 2005-2006....
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Sep 30, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 30, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Big Influence of media-rich society
5 - hello bayu,,let me try to give some suggestion on your passage. based on your question, you need to describe...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 29, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 30, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - High crime rate in youngster is parents and teachers responsibility
2 - ok bayu, let me give some suggestions on your passage I definitely agree with that psychologist statement it...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 30, 2015
|Market share of the well-known mobile phone brands between 2005 and 2006
3 - Hi...bayuwibowo.. your overview is very good, but, you must consider about comparison or thesis statements about the data. and...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015 / hasbi - Sep 30, 2015
|Global Mobile Phone Sales in a 2-year period
2 - The chart illustrates the global market share of mobile phone cell phone sales in a 2-year period for manufactures...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Sep 30, 2015 / hasbi - Sep 30, 2015
|Worldwide Mobile Phone Sales ( % share of market)
2 - In 2005, the biggest proportion of hand-phone market was Nokia, representing at 32.5%.A lthough it was popular, byin 2006,...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Sep 30, 2015 / irhame - Sep 30, 2015
|Violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18
NEW - Question : Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists...
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|The chart gives information about the proportion of rail transport in four different states in 2007
Writing FeedbackSuhel92 - Sep 29, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015
|Basic factor of the violent crime increase among teens is less learning from parents and teachers
3 - hello irhame.. let me try to rewrite your introduction In this day and age, the huge violent crime...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Sep 30, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 30, 2015
|TED talk regarding nuclear power - the nuclear fusion reactor is built.
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Sep 30, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 30, 2015
|TASK II : difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives
5 - Hallo Abraham, I am so sorry, the phrase of "In conclusion" is same as "the aforementioned evidence"...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 28, 2015 / aseprudi - Sep 30, 2015
|Essay on George Hewes from the American Revolution
2 - For George Hewes, who was forced into the occupation of being a shoemaker, life did not treat him well....
Writing Feedbackalexarae713 - Sep 28, 2015 / LaneH - Sep 29, 2015
|The table chart describes the use of trail, categorized by how many people use it
6 - That is a nice question. Both words mean to describe the distance traveled. If you look up the meaning...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 29, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 29, 2015
|The table about Rail transport in five different countries
2 - Hello carrot.. let me try to helps you although my tips not always right.. Overall, it can be...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Sep 29, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 29, 2015
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