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|IELTS: Building new sports facilities is the best way for public health??
3 - Hello tk0308, maybe you can rewrite your introduction and conclusion. For introduction you can use paraphrase from the...
Writing Feedbacktk0308 - Aug 31, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015
|Violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. IELTS
3 - Hi Hung, let me rewrite the introduction In this contemporary era, the media such as television and video...
Writing FeedbackHung - Aug 22, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS task 1: The population of fishers and exported fish in the world
4 - - In 1970 , the highest number of world fishermen was living in Asia witnessed rose significantly , from...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 3, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|A breakdown of the process of water cycle. IELTS Task 1
4 - Hello, let me give the feedback for your improvement. - Please, you can use other sentence conectors such...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 4, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|Teachers are more influent than friends
3 - For introductory paragraph, you better put the thesis statement in the end. Let me give a try: It...
Writing FeedbackBangbang - Aug 31, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 31, 2015
|Zoo has no useful purpose. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbacknil - Aug 31, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Aug 31, 2015
|Without parents assistance children can easily be affected by bad habits, lifestyle and cultures
6 - This essay is well done. You have an intro conclusion and three body paragraphs. final tests, However... ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 31, 2015
|IELTS essay: Age limit for retirement is 50 in some countires and 65 to 70 in others
Writing FeedbackBalajiskb - Aug 25, 2015 / tk0308 - Aug 31, 2015
|Why should children learn a foreign language so early?
NEW - Original Question: Some experts believe that it is better for children to being learning a foreign language at primary...
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|Essay: Travelling & Tourism - if you don't afraid to take the risk then go ahead
2 - I can help you with your essay. 1st paragraph: Some people may see the positive side of travelling...
Writing FeedbackNamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 30, 2015
|A remote village brings the kind people, inexpensive, healthy food can be consumed in a countryside
2 - hi,here are some advice for you. In the first sentence,if you use the word"bygone",which indicates things happening a very...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Aug 30, 2015 / ANNA_ff - Aug 30, 2015
|Relationship should be for eternity - nothing else in this world can last forever
Writing Feedbackseasee - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|Transport by a train, airplane, underground, coach, bicycle, motorcycle, etc. should be encouraged
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|It is better if advertisements would not be allowed directed toward children
2 - errors comments typo errors Raising a child is achallengedchallenging task in all ages but at ages of 2 betweenbetween...
Writing Feedbackoblivionfire - Aug 28, 2015 / NamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015
|Agree or disagree: Educations nowadays is more difficult than in the past
2 - Here are my suggestions: As usual, whether or notDetermining whether educationeducations nowadays is more difficult now than...
Writing Feedbackvahid5570 - Aug 28, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 28, 2015
|Living up to the accustomed standard -Cbest writing practice essay
Writing Feedbackreddlegg99 - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 28, 2015
|Do you agree or disagree that advertising serves no purpose for the society and should be banned?
Writing Feedbacksinanju - Aug 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 28, 2015
|An example of my leadership TTU scholarship
2 - 1st paragraph: I think you should be more specific when you begin your essay. Here is a suggestion: "Throughout...
Writing FeedbackAubreythefruit - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|SAT Essay: good decisions vs. bad decisions
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|Is better to travel in their own country than in foreign countries
2 - "Most of people love traveling to other countries and even with in their own country, and it . Travelling...
Writing Feedbackminutespele - Aug 27, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 27, 2015
|Universe exploration projects - these are a waste of money and all the funds should be spent better
2 - Your writing is well done, but needs some help! secondly,, funds... You should call this a new...
Writing Feedbackorbital188 - Aug 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 27, 2015
|Why a company which build a large factory near my community gets my support? TOEFL essay
2 - - ...esspeciallyspecially ( be careful with your spelling, turn on spell checker) in hometowns. - This certainly has adverse...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|GRE essay. Art is not meaningless and the governments should support it
2 - For long time,→ For a long time, I claim that, the government's support... → I claim that the government's...
Writing Feedbackey1011 - Aug 26, 2015 / orbital188 - Aug 27, 2015
|Hard work keeps us determined towards our destiny, the luck alone is not enough to succeed.
2 - in your second paragraph, "determined" doesn't feel like the right word. " It prevents us from being an...
Writing Feedbackmakr - Aug 26, 2015 / Aubreythefruit - Aug 26, 2015
|[Toefl] extended family continue importance
2 - Besides that, today face-to-face meeting was is affordable because airplane trips were are cheaper....
Writing Feedbacktakerisk - Aug 26, 2015 / makr - Aug 26, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are people defined by their occupations?
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 26, 2015
|Successful people are willing to examine new things and take risks - they can't accept routine
Writing Feedbackmsaleh - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 26, 2015
|[TOEFL] Internet provides a lot of information and it is positive
4 - Your 1st reason says internet make search easier and cheaper. But you didnt explain how cheaper?...
Writing Feedbackjoao_carlos - Aug 19, 2015 / makr - Aug 26, 2015
|Toefl Essays; Students can get some specific jobs only if they study science and mathematics
Writing Feedbackmakr - Aug 25, 2015 / joao_carlos - Aug 26, 2015
|The internet has transformed, but is still causing newer and newer problems
Writing Feedbackbany1020 - Aug 25, 2015 / bany1020 - Aug 26, 2015
|SAT Essay: Do people view things from the same perspective?
5 - Your ideas are concise , however, I would try to correct some of the grammar mistakes that are located...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 24, 2015 / Henr247 - Aug 25, 2015
|TOEFL: Building a new cinema in the neighborhood is beneficial.
NEW - It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support...
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|[Toefl] Games are good to improve cognitive abilities.
4 - Its a well writteen essay, you need some more practice in order to achieve desired results!!!...
Writing Feedbackosvaldo_o - Aug 21, 2015 / fahad_a11 - Aug 25, 2015
|'People should give up their cars to save the earth.' Do you agree or disagree?
2 - I would like to help you further with some paragraphs you have written. 2nd paragraph: This sentence you...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Aug 24, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 24, 2015
|Family and society must regulate and manage children's computers usage to avoid negative impact.
4 - This introduction needs a slight improvement. Here it is: Computer plays a pivotal role in children's lives these...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 22, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 24, 2015
|Computer game destroys traditional game
3 - Your introduction is quite good, but it needs a slight improvement. As such, allow me to rewrite this part:...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Aug 23, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 23, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are heroes those who speak up when others lack the courage?
3 - I think your essay has a strong intro and conclusion. You seem to answer the question well! when...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 23, 2015
|[TOEFL] Online Games, Good or Bad?
3 - Hi! Here is my corrections for you. The past decade has witnessed the rapid progress of online games....
Writing FeedbackWeed - Aug 22, 2015 / eegii012 - Aug 23, 2015
|What other skill(s) should schools focus on to prepare students for the workplace?
3 - Hi Greenw4y2, I think another skill that schools should be focused on preparing students for the workplace is...
Writing Feedbackgreenw4y2 - Aug 19, 2015 / faarasyad - Aug 22, 2015
|She is strict but lovely. MY FAVOURITE TEACHER
2 - Hi Shancklm, I suggest you to write the question completely so that the readers can give meaningful feedback...
Writing Feedbackshancklm - Aug 22, 2015 / faarasyad - Aug 22, 2015
|TOEFL - 'colleges and universities provide the best conditions for students to gain knowledge'
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 21, 2015 / nguyenthiet1993 - Aug 22, 2015
|Children are less creative than 10 years ago due to technology
4 - Thanks Aubreythefruit. Your comments were really useful to me. By the way, my native language is portuguese, which derivate...
Writing FeedbackLuxemburgo_T - Aug 21, 2015 / Luxemburgo_T - Aug 22, 2015
|Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. A/D
Writing Feedbackraman123 - Aug 21, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 22, 2015
|[GRE] Essay on true leadership - demands alone do not create true leaders.
Writing Feedbackrosejh88 - Aug 21, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Aug 22, 2015
|More experts migrate from developing to developed countries for better vacancies in technical fields
2 - Hi Hung I think the introduction need some improvements I will try to do that Majority of qualified and...
Writing FeedbackHung - Aug 22, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Aug 22, 2015
|Why is physical education important? Should physical education classes be required or optional?
4 - Thank you so much for giving me such valuable advises and i am not familiar with the academic writing...
Writing Feedbackgroundzero1997 - Aug 19, 2015 / groundzero1997 - Aug 21, 2015
|It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
2 - People work in the room and innovate such a good invention which change the life of people and give...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Aug 21, 2015 / beckybob2009 - Aug 21, 2015
|TOEFL: Car usage in 20 years later
2 - Hello. Your writing doesn't convey enough information about the topic. You wrote "first of all" at the beginning of...
Writing Feedbackeegii012 - Aug 21, 2015 / minoosaba - Aug 21, 2015
|Students need enough time for adaptation in a new environment abroad
5 - As the word is changing, option for study, even high school, are changing. Most of them are want...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Aug 20, 2015 / Junisha111p - Aug 21, 2015
|'a perfect balance' - Country must invest equally of art and military.
2 - Here are my suggestions: The militaryMilitary and the artsart are the two different but most vital partcomponents...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Aug 19, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 20, 2015
|Fatherless Families: The Negative Effect on Children
3 - When you begin the 4th paragraph, you should describe why fathers are the most untouched resource. This statement can...
Writing Feedbacksimonedonae - Aug 19, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 19, 2015
|The Olympic Games still play a vital role in today's modern time - IELTS
2 - I am not really sure that if my suggestions below are correct, but in China teachers always tell students...
Writing Feedbackjaypatel - Aug 19, 2015 / RYAN KNIGHT - Aug 19, 2015
|Books are more significant than experience, but we can't live apart from it.
4 - Your essay is well written, but could benefit from some development. the most important source... Your intro...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 15, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 19, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are creativity and originality necessary for success?
3 - Of course, we need both creativity as well as originality while doing every work. Essay is good, but...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 17, 2015 / ednashirley - Aug 19, 2015
|Parents should care about their children's education - challenging point
4 - Hi Vahid, I like your question as well as essay. Parents should care about their children. not only...
Writing Feedbackvahid5570 - Aug 18, 2015 / ednashirley - Aug 19, 2015
|"Can acting in one's own self interest make the world a better place?" SAT Essay
2 - I would like to help you with your essay. When I read the introduction, I thought there were few...
Writing FeedbackSunset7 - Aug 17, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 17, 2015
|TOEFL:The longer one lives with parents, the better the one will be.
2 - As the opening sentence, this phrase is too long. Therefore, it is always good to write no more...
Writing Feedbackeegii012 - Aug 17, 2015 / eddies - Aug 17, 2015
|People should not get their knowledge from unlimited resources to gain necessary information
NEW - Human being is a living memory of history, the focus of all the wealth of knowledge, abilities, and wisdom...
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|The rate of using internet between urban/suburban regions tended to increase rapidly over time.
3 - - ..the rate of using internet between two regions tended to increase.. - After that, the rate has more...
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 6, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|SAT Essay: Should we weigh opinions equally or put more weight on informed opinions?
3 - - The upshot is scores of Americans rushing - ...started once the excitements fades. - The Ignorance from this...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
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