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|IELTS Task II: The purpose of business is to make money
3 - Hi Juang, these are my little comments :) ...stick to it... For this context, stick collocates with...
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 17, 2015 / shintacandrade - Sep 20, 2015
|Task 2 IELTS - The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this
4 - Since vangiespen's feedback has helped you a lot to improve your writing, I just want to give you a...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 17, 2015 / shintacandrade - Sep 20, 2015
|It is impossible to avoid fundamental factor of business - making money
2 - Better you write using a correlative comparative for this sentence (the X-er . . . the X-er): The...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 17, 2015 / shintacandrade - Sep 20, 2015
|Woman's success or position around society has a mutual connection with a good character of children
2 - Diqon, you need to review the content of your essay very well. Your opening paragraph is a mess and...
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Sep 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2015
|alternatives of learning - help me to improve my CBEST writing essay
Writing FeedbackJuliah - Sep 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2015
|Write a story about a brother and sister who are always trying to be better than each other.
2 - Usama, the plot you chose delves on a suspense thriller / mystery. It is a workable premise that has...
Writing Feedbackenatco - Sep 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2015
|CBEST: Experimentally grouped ungraded students by the level of achievements and not by age
3 - Dear hayaalqasem thank you very much for your observation, I will have your suggestion in mind....
Writing FeedbackJuliah - Sep 18, 2015 / Juliah - Sep 19, 2015
|Many young people in the workforce today change their jobs or careers every few years.(IELTS)
3 - Hello Edward09520 The following tips are only my suggestion, maybe not all exactly right. But I still hope it...
Writing Feedbackedward09520 - Sep 19, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 19, 2015
|Some important roles of Parents improving child's lives as a good member of society
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Sep 18, 2015 / Diqon - Sep 19, 2015
|Comparison of people from various age-group in Someland and their leisure time
2 - @ximverli07 I don't have clear understanding of your figures as I don't see the tables. However, in the first...
Writing Feedbackximverli07 - Sep 18, 2015 / arahmancsd - Sep 18, 2015
|Arts government funding - GRE Issue essay. Review, grade, point out mistake or suggest improvements.
4 - Hi Riyasat, now that you have mentioned it, there are some points where the grammar can be improved or...
Writing FeedbackRiyasat - Sep 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Sep 18, 2015
|Nowadays, there remain misconceptions relating to the gender inequality.
2 - I would like to give you some assistance with your essay. 1st paragraph: I think you begin the...
Writing Feedbackdrhung - Sep 4, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 18, 2015
|Some have argued that imagination is not as important as perspiration. CBEST writing
3 - Sara, Thank you very much for your corrections. English is my second language, and I really appreciate what you...
Writing FeedbackJuliah - Sep 16, 2015 / Juliah - Sep 18, 2015
|IELTS TEST: Post-school qualifications in Australia according to gender 1999
Writing Feedbacksummer_366 - Sep 17, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 18, 2015
|'numerous plus points' - Undesirable consequences of an electronic media? (IELTS Task II)
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 15, 2015 / eddies - Sep 17, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 : The diagram describes a circulation of air leaking into and out in a house
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 17, 2015 / broerjuang - Sep 17, 2015
|The environmentally devastated planet will not revive without our thoughtful actions.
3 - hello zzzz0070 This is good essay, only small mistake on grammar. To addresstackle these problems, I believe...
Writing Feedbackzzzz0070 - Sep 13, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 17, 2015
|Young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible
NEW - Indepence comes with a lot of responsibility .People look towards elders or more experienced people while making important decisions...
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|The figure describes how the air leaks can circulate into the house and goes out
2 - - Although this is good., some flaws interrupt the flow of sentences. Here is the edit. The figure describes...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 16, 2015 / eddies - Sep 16, 2015
|Parents should control their children to avoid severity of developing technology. IELTS
3 - There are therefore have several reasons why I believe not just demerit, but merit factors as well For...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 15, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK II : The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationship
2 - Hi Abraham, I think you need to improve your understanding of the words. Psychologists .... commitments, uniquenesses,...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Sep 16, 2015 / broerjuang - Sep 16, 2015
|If I could, my first change in the hometown would be the promotion of education system; TOEFL ESSAY
2 - hello,, I'm Irfan Ardian, before i wanna say wish you luck for your test. here i'll try give some...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Sep 16, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 16, 2015
|My childhood experience helped me become a better human. CBEST 'Experience' Essay
NEW - Many childhood experiences leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience...
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|The number of spoken words and vocabulary size among children aged 1-4 and 1-3 years old
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 14, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 15, 2015
|These days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology
5 - I guess this is your thesis statement These arguments will illustrate the point of view which will show some...
Writing Feedbackieltstaker - Sep 14, 2015 / broerjuang - Sep 15, 2015
|Who should be responsible for the health of our children? IELTS TASK 2
3 - this is a well-writen. you have some small mistakes. i think you should make this more simple These...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 12, 2015 / nguyenthiet1993 - Sep 15, 2015
|IELTS - the selected communication competency needed in a working area from 1997 to 2006
3 - Initially, the proportion of people saying that the skill in listening carefully to colleagues was essential was noted...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 15, 2015
|Task 1 - two sorts of communication skills between 1997 and 2006
2 - 1. It is always good to write a 2-sentence overview. 2. the amount of knowledge of particular products or...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 15, 2015
|Good job requires great communication skills - The Survey
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 14, 2015 / eddies - Sep 15, 2015
|Rate, point out mistakes or suggest Improvement on my GRE Argument Task about Palea village
3 - I would like to give you some suggestions. The first sentence in your response has a missing word...
Writing FeedbackRiyasat - Sep 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 14, 2015
|SAT Essay: Do closed doors make us creative?
2 - I would like to help you with your thesis and some feedback. In your introductory paragraph, you could add...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 14, 2015
|The caparison of water consumption between Brazil and Congo. IELTS
3 - From the graph, it can be found that the water use in agriculture, industrial use and domestic use and...
Writing Feedbacksummer_366 - Sep 14, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015
|"It is much more comfortable to cry in a Rolls Royce than on a bicycle" money vs happiness
3 - People can earn a lot of money through corruption and other illegal deeds , but that does not make...
Writing FeedbackUnnati_99 - Sep 13, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 14, 2015
|Everybody has the right to question the widely accepted wisdom.
3 - - I think your introduction could ease into the topic a little less abruptly; perhaps using an introductory sentence...
Writing Feedbacksumeetbathiya - Sep 14, 2015 / szhang25 - Sep 14, 2015
|Characterist and physical description
3 - I can help you some errors. 1st paragraph: You should add "the" before perfect. When you discuss the...
Writing FeedbackAnnieprincess - Sep 13, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 13, 2015
|The proportion of Britanian's audiences who watch TV and listen Radio per day
2 - I can help you with your summary. 1st paragraph: There are some missing words. Here is a suggestion: "The...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 13, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 13, 2015
|Should we protect old buildings or not?
3 - I think you have written very well on the question of old houses and their uses. However, a couple...
Writing Feedbackpolina_sol - Sep 13, 2015 / EF_Carol - Sep 13, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - In the modern world very difficult to have a healthy lifestyle
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 13, 2015 / eddies - Sep 13, 2015
|Parents should cook healthy food for their kids and constantly monitor their behavior.
4 - Thank you Mr Eddy, i am trying to rewrite my introduction : Unhealthy lifestyle is becoming a common...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 13, 2015
|Friendship bond by school tradition
Writing FeedbackAhmadMohdRazali - Sep 13, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 13, 2015
|Is it better to hire outside consultants or just inquire of own people? Analysis of the issue.
Writing Feedbackmskd96 - Sep 10, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 13, 2015
|The capacity of reading and writing is more necessary nowadays than it was before
Writing Feedbackthanhlong - Sep 12, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 13, 2015
|SAT Essay: Every day we live under some circumstances of choice - we rely on our own decisions
3 - I don't have much to say considering the requirements of a SAT essay, I think you'll have a 10...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 12, 2015 / thuuyen - Sep 12, 2015
|These days, in this technology era, it is easier than before to maintain a healthy lifestyle
4 - - I suggest shortening the first paragraph. Here is my sample; Modern lifestyles lead a sedentary life. As such,...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 11, 2015 / eddies - Sep 12, 2015
|Advantages of the music in secondary school - brain development and obtaining some necessary skills
3 - Hello Hayaalqasem. Thank you for your suggestion. But it is the saying of Calahan as I mentioned the previous...
Writing Feedbackthanhlong - Sep 11, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 12, 2015
|Early technological developments VS recent technological developments -- task 2 IELTS
Writing Feedbackwruiwr86 - Sep 9, 2015 / wruiwr86 - Sep 11, 2015
|books and experience essay - reflections on the importance of knowledge sources
4 - This is my opinion. Your ideas are quite good. Nevertheless, it has some mistakes. _BesideBesides , getting experience is...
Writing FeedbackDrew K - Sep 10, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 11, 2015
|The bar chart compares the percentage of Bulgarians categorized three sorts of education backgrounds
3 - As I have the information you mean, I upload the correct picture here. Furthermore, my suggestion is that...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015 / shintacandrade - Sep 11, 2015
|The proportion of Bulgarian residents who chosen to live abroad at the level of 8 percent - IELTS
4 - Hello Mr Irfan With regards 100% Bulgarians i assume this is unnecessary data for your paragraph. The proportion...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 10, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015
|Bulgarians showed not much intention to travel or stay abroad during 2001-2006
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015
|Smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this will restrict some people's freedom
2 - Ok. I'm Irfan Ardian. this is my recommendations on your grammar. Which is more crucial freedom of individual or...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Sep 8, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 11, 2015
|Culture shock (two years in Delhi, India)
Writing Feedbacksalonijain - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|TOEFL Independent TASK_Family or Friends teach people more important lessons
Writing Feedbackfhmashayekhi - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|The Average Cost of Housing in rural, suburban and urban areas - chart
2 - I advise you to use synonyms instead of repeating yourself. through 10 years = in span of 10 years...
Writing Feedbackhm407 - Sep 10, 2015 / vika1234 - Sep 10, 2015
|The Chart of Bulgaria people who wants to go abroad - IELTS TASK 1
2 - Hello, I can help you with your summary. Since this chart shows years in the past, your verbs...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|Learn subjects useful VS learn subjects that we like.
2 - I can help you with your essay. In the introduction you should have more information to begin your essay....
Writing FeedbackANNA_ff - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|The willingness of Bulgarians to move oversea based on their educational level (IELTS Task I)
3 - This need more improvement on the overview. It is always good to write a 2-sentence overview. Here is the...
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 10, 2015 / eddies - Sep 10, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 - The Chart of Emigration Intentions in Bulgaria
2 - inhabitants who do not have any planning to go abroad is the highest percentage among all. Be carefull...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015
|Is health education the answer to the consumption of junk food? IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackanh2903 - Sep 7, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015
|Some people think that genetically modified (GM) crops are a positive development - IELTS task 2
6 - Introduction is too short, i give some explanation. Genetically modified (GM) is the new inventions which is carried...
Writing Feedbackvika1234 - Sep 7, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015
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