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|Whether parents or schools should be responsible for teaching child to become a helpful citizen
2 - Hi, I think you have addresses the requirement all parts of the question precisely but not very well. To...
Writing Feedbackpbaimar - Dec 1, 2018 / vietduccan - Dec 1, 2018
|Should families who send children to private school be required to pay taxes for state education?
NEW - taxes are benefits for everyone Families who send children to private school should not be required to pay...
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|IELTS Task 2 - Opinion - The meaning behind traditional or religious festivals
2 - Nguyen, when you write an extent essay, you need to pick a specific side to write about or, in...
Writing Feedbackfallingstar3107 - Nov 29, 2018 / Holt - Nov 30, 2018
|IELTS Writing: Should the jury get access to the defendant's past criminal record?
2 - Ngo, Let's start with the response errors that you made. For starters, you are not properly paraphrasing the given...
Writing FeedbackLanNhi - Nov 29, 2018 / Holt - Nov 30, 2018
|IELTS writing: Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.
3 - Hi, as far as I know, there are some serious mistakes in your essay. I would divide them into...
Writing FeedbackAmo - Nov 29, 2018 / vietduccan - Nov 30, 2018
|Describe one of your best artworks. How did you make the image special?
2 - Pierre, will you be allowed to present a copy of your painting with this statement? It is a bit...
Writing FeedbackPierreFralle - Nov 27, 2018 / Holt - Nov 29, 2018
|SHOULD HEALTHCARE PROVISION BE FREE OF CHARGE OR NOT?
3 - Phuong, first up, you wrote too many words. You will not be able to write these many words during...
Writing Feedbackdohongphuong1504 - Nov 27, 2018 / Holt - Nov 28, 2018
|IELTS Writing : Current trend of becoming vegetarian
3 - Lan, look out for the subject - verb agreement contradictions in your essay. The proper term to use when...
Writing Feedbackblossom4life - Nov 27, 2018 / Holt - Nov 28, 2018
|The issue: useful or passionate subjects for study?
Writing Feedbacksandholly - Nov 27, 2018 / Holt - Nov 28, 2018
|Is current academic grading helpful in performance? Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
3 - hi, here is my recommendation, .... and receives a poor grade .... Besides, the teacher ...the problems of each...
Writing Feedbackjulia1402 - Nov 22, 2018 / sandholly - Nov 27, 2018
|The issue of whether or not people should choose jobs similar to their parents'
3 - Hi, I have seen some mistakes in your essay ...... which my father is a profession in ......we can...
Writing Feedbacksaeedkhezerloo - Nov 26, 2018 / sandholly - Nov 27, 2018
|Ielts - the development of road access to a City Hospital from 2007 to 2010.
2 - Ingrid, the essay is over the minimum 150 word count but under the 4 paragraph requirement for proper scoring....
Writing Feedbackingridphan - Nov 26, 2018 / Holt - Nov 27, 2018
|Advertising encourages us to buy too many things we do not need. Agree or disagree?
6 - Also, purchases are just an important part of life. Money makes the world go round. If no one bought...
Writing Feedbackdevilphuc0304 - Nov 25, 2018 / smarquez16 - Nov 27, 2018
|The provided information about the water used in different sectors in different countries in 2003
4 - "used in different sectors in different countries in 2003" Don't use synonym wold, You can try " a variety...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Nov 25, 2018 / tranhien - Nov 26, 2018
|The issue of whether in order to be a successful person, you should be more like others or different
4 - I cannot really decide on that unless I see you write a different essay with the improvements I suggested...
Writing Feedbacksaeedkhezerloo - Nov 25, 2018 / Holt - Nov 26, 2018
|Topic: People are walking less. What are causes and solutions?
4 - The main problem that I see with this essay has to do with the clarity of the discussion. You...
Writing Feedbackhuuhung7301 - Nov 25, 2018 / Holt - Nov 26, 2018
|Discuss the merits and demerits of competitive sports in schools
4 - @Tunanut Thank you very much for your comments! By the way, do you have a Facebook account? If you...
Writing Feedbackdohongphuong1504 - Nov 16, 2018 / dohongphuong1504 - Nov 25, 2018
|CAR OWNERSHIP IN GREAT BRITAIN: IELTS WRITING TASK 1- LINE CHART
Writing Feedbacknhancau12345 - Nov 24, 2018 / Holt - Nov 25, 2018
|Giving an advice to a friend about working or studying
3 - Han, you tend to get confused in you ruse of English words because you are not familiar with the...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Nov 24, 2018 / Holt - Nov 25, 2018
|Ielts task 2 about relocating to cities from rural areas
3 - Thank you so much for your feedback. It made me see my mistakes. I will focus on these issues....
Writing Feedbackkopuk - Nov 17, 2018 / kopuk - Nov 24, 2018
|The increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Discuss
Writing Feedbacknhancau12345 - Nov 24, 2018 / Eldlrjn - Nov 24, 2018
|Writing task 2 ielts. Teenage crime issue. 'Why an how' essay.
5 - Hi sillyman2000 Here are my opinions about your essay 1/ There are a lot of spelling mistake in...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Nov 16, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Nov 24, 2018
|Many people had skills such as making their own clothes and doing repairs to things in the house
3 - John, as a professional contributor at this forum, I cannot, in good conscience, give you advice regarding the improvement...
Writing FeedbackJohnnguyen - Nov 23, 2018 / Holt - Nov 24, 2018
|Writing task 1 about the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city
2 - Ngoc, you managed to provide enough relevant information albeit in a very confusing manner in this analytical essay. You...
Writing Feedbackmai_meooooo - Nov 22, 2018 / Holt - Nov 23, 2018
|Some people think that media outlets are making violence more popular in real life
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 22, 2018 / Tunanut - Nov 23, 2018
|Animals should have protection rights instead of having the same rights as humans
2 - Tran, since you forgot to post the original prompt along with the essay response, I cannot give you any...
Writing Feedbackteddytran95 - Nov 22, 2018 / Holt - Nov 23, 2018
|More high school students have parttime jobs while parents are not able to support all their needs
3 - thank you so much for your detailed and precise feedback. it's very helpful and I will definitely work on...
Writing Feedbackccchang - Nov 21, 2018 / ccchang - Nov 23, 2018
|Competition is one of the good ways to encourage young people in developing their leadership skills
4 - Nuradia, , you are writing this essay for the GRE test. Therefore, it is not to be approached as...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Nov 22, 2018 / Holt - Nov 23, 2018
|An IELTS task 2 essay on children under pressure in modern society
2 - Dan, while you are somewhat fluent in the English language, you apparently do not know the difference between formal...
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 22, 2018 / Holt - Nov 23, 2018
|Ielts task 2: parents encourage their children to be involved in group activities rather than alone
2 - The structure is clear and well-organised, but, "I would argue that children ..." has a grammar mistake. "This is...
Writing Feedbackrockprincess - Nov 22, 2018 / panpan123 - Nov 22, 2018
|An IELTS task 2 essay on environmental laws - waste recycling
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 21, 2018 / Tunanut - Nov 22, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - topic MEN and WOMEN (fatherhood and motherhood)
3 - Thanks for your correction. It's absolutely helpful for me. And, could you let me know how many my band...
Writing Feedbacknanana01 - Nov 20, 2018 / nanana01 - Nov 21, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - Explain the need of learning a foreign language
2 - Dan, you have totally changed the prompt discussion for this essay from a comparative public point of view discussion...
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 20, 2018 / Holt - Nov 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK (BAR CHART)
2 - Shuying, the main problem with your analytical essay is not in the grammar structure nor the presentation. The problem...
Writing FeedbackShuying - Nov 20, 2018 / Holt - Nov 21, 2018
|Whether physical exercise should be a part of every school day or students should focus on study
Writing Feedbacksandholly - Nov 19, 2018 / sandholly - Nov 20, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Impact of machine work; the proliferation of the machines is a two-edged sword
2 - Hi Penny, the essay has a lot of misspelled words as well as punctuation errors such as incorrect spacing...
Writing FeedbackPenny2 - Nov 20, 2018 / bishop00 - Nov 20, 2018
|The issue whether punishments for crime should be fixed to judge each crime individually or not
2 - Dokhanh, I could not even continue reading your essay past the second paragraph because the incoherence was overpowering your...
Writing FeedbackKarenDo - Nov 18, 2018 / Holt - Nov 19, 2018
|Some people argue that history is of little and no use to us.
2 - Mai, I prefer to point out your grammar mistakes first. That way you have a better idea as to...
Writing FeedbackDaomai - Nov 18, 2018 / Holt - Nov 19, 2018
|Essay about the disadvantages and advantages of taking a gap year. (Ielts writing task 2)
Writing FeedbackSkylar - Nov 17, 2018 / Skylar - Nov 18, 2018
|IELTS essasy Task 2 Young adults seem to prefer to spend their leisure time on shopping
5 - Nguyen, an essay, such as a such direct question essay or combination public pov and personal opinion requires a...
Writing FeedbackTirelessLearner - Nov 16, 2018 / Holt - Nov 17, 2018
|An essay of IELTS task 2 about the reasons and effects of cosmetics
4 - @Holt @adhananj Thank you a lot. I will review and rewrite it in the most effective way as you...
Writing Feedbackthemetalfinger - Nov 14, 2018 / themetalfinger - Nov 17, 2018
|The reasons why some persons don't feel safe either at home or outside.
4 - Phuong, since you only wrote the opening paraphrase, I cannot say that you did a good job at it....
Writing FeedbackPhuong Peachie - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 17, 2018
|Why urban areas has led to overpopulation and which are possible solutions for these problems.
4 - Shazia, please review the rules on writing using the subject - verb agreement as this seems to be an...
Writing Feedbackshazia786 - Nov 16, 2018 / Holt - Nov 17, 2018
|An IELTS task 2 essay on noise control
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 16, 2018 / Tunanut - Nov 17, 2018
|Intrinsic and extrinsic motivation (one para)
2 - ... which is not totally true. I wouldn't use redundant words such as "totally". I would also add a...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Nov 6, 2018 / Fizzik - Nov 16, 2018
|Human activities on land and in the sea cause extinction of many animal species
2 - The A variety of for the settlement purposes the forests provide the spaces and resources lose their places the...
Writing Feedbackulfaidrus - Nov 16, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Nov 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Two-Part Question Food
2 - consuming a particular food There seems a growing mindset the higher its quality will be ... ( I am...
Writing Feedbackulfaidrus - Nov 16, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Nov 16, 2018
|Colour can affect how people feel. How true is this statement?
4 - Thanks for your advice, @Tunanut @Holt. I am really appreciate your comment about my writing. I have known my...
Writing FeedbackKen Adams - Nov 15, 2018 / Ken Adams - Nov 16, 2018
|An IELTS Task 2 about Young vs Old leaders
Writing FeedbackTunanut - Nov 15, 2018 / Tunanut - Nov 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task1_NOx emissions by vehicle type in London in 2020(%)
2 - Huang, with only 1 word written over the minimum word requirement for this essay, I cannot say that you...
Writing Feedbacksttp30526 - Nov 15, 2018 / Holt - Nov 16, 2018
|It is true that consumers could purchase goods at lower cost these days
3 - Ngyuen, this is a single opinion essay. It is not a comparison essay discussion. A comparison essay discussion always...
Writing FeedbackHang1234 - Nov 14, 2018 / Holt - Nov 16, 2018
|Memoir - writing sample (first day at school)
3 - Barbara, when you write a memoir, it is normally a hindshight look at a previous experience or set of...
Writing Feedbackbabi130294 - Nov 14, 2018 / Holt - Nov 15, 2018
|Deforestation is happening in many parts of the world, what can be done to solve this problem?
3 - Nguyen, please remember that there is a 3 sentence minimum requirement for each paragraph written in a Task 2...
Writing Feedbackntplan - Nov 14, 2018 / Holt - Nov 15, 2018
|Wealthy nations can afford to support the poor nations, in time they may be those giving the aid
NEW - generosity between nations Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of...
Writing Feedbackmohamedm - Nov 14, 2018 / — -
|IELTS TASK1 - Crimes committed in two countries
3 - I think you should combine the first two graphs together. In addition, the sentence "Besides, the amount of car...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 12, 2018 / Nkh0401 - Nov 14, 2018
|Describe and interpret the data about energy usage in Australia
2 - Firstly, I don't see any chart attached so I cannot examine how exactly you describe those charts. But I...
Writing Feedbacknguyen thi lien - Nov 13, 2018 / themetalfinger - Nov 14, 2018
|Argumentative essay on Child's obesity
NEW - I need feedback on this essay. Please state 3 strengths and 3 weaknesses If you don't mind. Our...
Writing FeedbackClipari76 - Nov 14, 2018 / — -
|Improving my writing skill to adapt to IELTs - both working parents
5 - @ronia85516 @ronia85516 Thank you for your advices @Holt Thank you for your curteous advice, i will try my...
Writing FeedbackNkh0401 - Nov 11, 2018 / Nkh0401 - Nov 13, 2018
|Choosing to live in a horizontal or vertical city has been a headache dilemma to city dwellers
2 - Nguyen, I will not continue to review your essay based on the grammatical mistakes, sentence structure errors, or even...
Writing FeedbackHanh Nguyen - Nov 12, 2018 / Holt - Nov 13, 2018
|Environmental issues have always been a controversy among the world. Who should take a charge of it?
3 - Ronia, aside from the missing ownership reference for the first reasoning paragraph, I would have to say that you...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 11, 2018 / Holt - Nov 12, 2018
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