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|The controversial issue - how to combine spendings for education with sport and recreation?
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Jun 26, 2015 / cookie234 - Jun 27, 2015
|Students broad spectrum of knowledge? It would be an important step to improve their personality.
Writing Feedbackanamikam_vns - Jun 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 27, 2015
|[TOEFL] Books and Internet, which one is better to use to research?
9 - I think its perfect but some correction is needed like in ur both body paragraph i find the same...
Writing Feedbackwadpk - Jun 25, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 26, 2015
|It is quite common presently for younger people to have a break from studying after graduating
3 - Jaggi, I agree with EF_Carol, your essay is written well, good job!!! However, I would like to share...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 25, 2015
|The web let us have an easy access to the latest information and let us easily bond with each other.
3 - Shuyuan, I believe your new to EssayForum, a very warm WELCOME to the EF Family... Now, I'll make...
Writing Feedbackshuyuan51039 - Jun 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 25, 2015
|Is Consumerism a major problem for societies today?
2 - Niravv, I would like to take this opportunity to WELCOME you to EssayForum. You're yet another addition to the...
Writing Feedbackniravv - Jun 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 24, 2015
|Criminal habitual relapse. Cause and suggestions
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 24, 2015
|"Time flies". So grab all the moments you can within the time. Indeed college years are the best.
6 - You wrote an excellent essay on college years! I think your basic structure is good. So is yourvocabulary and...
Writing Feedbacksally_922 - Jun 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 24, 2015
|Should government support local film makers financially?
4 - The movie industry->movie industry where these filmmakers-> where filmmakers. you have not mentions those filmmaker. Therefore, it is not...
Writing Feedbackwei0531 - Jun 22, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|"My Terrible Neighborhood" - Stating reasons and giving examples paragraph.
Writing FeedbackChamsky - Jun 23, 2015 / Chamsky - Jun 23, 2015
|Write a paragraph to give advice for beginners of the English language ( About 140 words)
3 - - It's advisable that beginners of the English language should take the four following advicecritics . - FirstlyFirst...
Writing Feedbackvtnmai - Jun 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|Making handmade stuffs is my hobby - every girl should be clever with her hands
Writing Feedbackvinvin - Jun 9, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 23, 2015
|Music and sports are not important in school
3 - There were some slight details that I wanted to assist you with changing. I organized the changes according to...
Writing Feedbackqiyunyiyu - Jun 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 23, 2015
|The students should do part-time job to look at how different the real world is.
4 - - FirstlyFirst , working would help students fill gaps in their knowledge, especially for practical knowledge which they may...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|The idea of free universities - what is your opinion? The quality is even more important question.
5 - almost universities-> most universities in this relationship-> in this mutual relationship they need to make money to fund scholarship...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 5, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|Compare/Contrast Essay - Similarities and differences between Me and my Brother
5 - Congratulations Bluebabey!!! There's no greater joy for an editor like myself than to know that I was able...
Writing FeedbackBlueBabey - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|Sending the first human to the moon - how it has affected mankind?
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 22, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|Do you think that universities should be available for all students and free?
2 - - University education is the cornerstone of development in all fields of life, medicine, engineering, sciences, and others. ...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2015
|Advertisement on USA summer camps jobs - write why you want work there.
2 - - Summer camps are regarded as significant activities to build children's skills and develop their abilities to create good...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 17, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2015
|Family closeness is not so tight nowadays as it used to be in the past. The root cause of it is...
2 - Spelling : unbelieveably = unbelievable interested in thier : their .... Most of the family members are do works...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 21, 2015 / M19O09F11 - Jun 22, 2015
|Working in a child period may make more living comfort in the future due to gaining early experience
NEW - In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid works. Some people regard this as wrong, while...
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|Should sports athletes be rewarded with high salary?
3 - Good jobs!!! But there're still some small mistakes. +Beingincapable participate in this industry => incapable of. You should be...
Writing Feedbackhan4 - Jun 21, 2015 / cookie234 - Jun 21, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - the relations between nature and training abilities
Writing Feedbackriankia - Jun 19, 2015 / riankia - Jun 21, 2015
|Should companies and individual pay to clean up the environment in proportion to their actions?
3 - Hi Marned, Thanks for your comment. I'm trying to improve my writing, and have been reading a...
Writing Feedbackhan4 - Jun 20, 2015 / han4 - Jun 21, 2015
|Distance between family members is extremely increasing nowadays.
Writing Feedbackmarned - Jun 13, 2015 / marned - Jun 21, 2015
|University education helps get a better job or give more benefits for both individuals and society
4 - Your welcome, I don't think like you. I think you can write easily by keeping writing. Write more and...
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Jun 20, 2015 / marned - Jun 21, 2015
|In my opinion, all general subjects should be all taught to students for several reasons.
3 - Thank you Eric2750230, I really appreciate it. I do not have much time now and have to review fast...
Writing Feedbackthanhnguyen279 - Jun 19, 2015 / thanhnguyen279 - Jun 20, 2015
|This topic was supposed to be for Spotlighting a person in the community!
Writing FeedbackMagic_Wizard - Jun 19, 2015 / Magic_Wizard - Jun 19, 2015
|The new Internet problems. Threat for the children and cyber crime - IELTS
3 - I also think your writing was very organized. You have good transitions. Well done! Here are some suggestions to...
Writing Feedbackgundampro - Jun 16, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 18, 2015
|Write a letter to this person for an English lesson [ielts writing]
4 - Your letter is well written, but needs some attention. You should break up the one long intro ,into three...
Writing Feedbackterrytu - May 25, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 18, 2015
|How to minimize the levels of stress in high school students?
3 - Lets talk about your conclusion! Take apart your concluding sentence, and then write a sentence, about each idea. ...
Writing FeedbackKibaco15 - May 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 18, 2015
|We can not critique Internet as good or bad. It is a multifaceted problem.
3 - Some is famous for being criticized and belittled for posting unhealthy things on the Internet experts have also showed...
Writing Feedbackphoenix99 - Jun 16, 2015 / M19O09F11 - Jun 17, 2015
|What people do with their rubbish and how a town tries to keep the area clean and attractive?
4 - Well not in the whole paragraph, just the first line. The words are not connected that well which later...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / sally_922 - Jun 16, 2015
|Public transport for health keeping, pollution reducing and environment protection.
5 - Keep in mind where u use fullstop point becuase there is lot which are wrongly used. Next,use some complex...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : THE BENEFIT OF THE INTERNET FOR COMMUNICATION AND LITERATURE
3 - Asep, As far as I am concern, we have to paraphrase the words and stucture in IELTS writing. However,...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 15, 2015
|Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. The essay of TOEFL.
Writing FeedbackImladris - Jun 14, 2015 / Imladris - Jun 15, 2015
|Health services should accessible for every person.
3 - Hey there, overall you have a good essay. However if I were you, I'd probably start my argumentative essay...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 15, 2015 / Spredde - Jun 15, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - People get into debt for buying unnecessary things
2 - peoplebecome so consumerism... CORRECTED: people become so consumeristic... You need adjective there, not a noun. You are...
Writing FeedbackHettymsk - May 24, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 14, 2015
|The main problems associated with phenomenon of common Internet usage
3 - Hallo Minh, I would render you some suggestion for this essay: Inaccurate information and hackers are the...
Writing FeedbackMinh Yen - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|IELTS: PEOPLE OBEY TO INTAKE VARIOUS GRASS-FED ANIMALS IN ORDER TO OFFER BENEFIT TO ENVIRONMENT
3 - Thank you for giving me some suggestion. I would try to re-write my article in terms of your advise....
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|Maintaining body health and saving the world as a whole with eating no meat or fish
2 - - More and more people now neglect to consume meat or fish. They argue that this benefits for either...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 13, 2015
|Task 1. Global sales of top mobile phones
3 - Hi, Bob.. I have some suggestions for your writing. The bar chart compares the number of mobile...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Jun 11, 2015 / Adhisti - Jun 13, 2015
|Some people think that it is good to keep pets at home
4 - Hallo Makrine, I would render you some suggestion : Inhabitants convince is renders beneficial effect in order...
Writing FeedbackMakrine - Jun 12, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|Globalization will lead to culture identity loss, do you agree?
3 - - Mass media and transportation todaysnowadays experience a dramatic increase. - What this happens is aWhen this phenomenon...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|The universities should keep the doors open to all and students need to get equal chance in studying
3 - - ...could be considered as an evidentevidencefor theof freedom violation in the progressive countries. - Even if we...
Writing FeedbackFar - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|My idol - a man born without arms or legs
Writing Feedbackthanhgiang - Jun 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|In addition to the money from retirement, people should get more governmental support
Writing Feedbackshawnxk - Jun 9, 2015 / shawnxk - Jun 12, 2015
|Is it better for students to work on their assignments together or alone?
Writing Feedbacknellymo - Jun 11, 2015 / nellymo - Jun 11, 2015
|Market Share of Mobile Phone between Nokia, Sony, Samsung, LG, BenQ and Motorola
3 - - The table gives information about consumer's proportion in different cellular phone brands worldwide from 2005 to 2006 in...
Writing FeedbackTrias - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|The role of universities in providing students with the proper education and consequently a good job
3 - - As a matter of fact, All university study programs has a curriculum which is restricted bywith a schedule...
Writing Feedbackromasalah - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|How much time for themselves will have people in the future? Will they be busier than we are today?
3 - - Some people believe that peoplethey ( we omit the "people" as you have used it already, avoid redundancy...
Writing Feedbackjyh2013 - Jun 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|Pretty, attractive girl with great voice - we spend a lot of time together. Best friend paragraph.
Writing Feedbacklinhdemon - Jun 9, 2015 / linhdemon - Jun 10, 2015
|The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006
2 - making speeches or presentation is(are) communication skills that is(are) not really influencing in people's job over the period....
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 10, 2015 / juanmarman - Jun 10, 2015
|Measuring quality of a nation. What is the best determinant of a wise, respectable society?
3 - Hi @hariban Para 3 : - check your spelling suchsimilay(maybe "similar") - themselvesthem . Para 4 :...
Writing FeedbackHarinban - Jun 9, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Jun 10, 2015
|The globalisation may drive people away from their cultural identity like respecting older people
4 - Hi Stacy, I am a beginner. And below are my recommendations. Paragraph 1: Communication and transporttransportation play a...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 27, 2015 / chuoi9 - Jun 10, 2015
|The effect of technology on the interaction between people
3 - - A: There is no doubt that in the recent years, technology has contributed heavily in the shaping our...
Writing Feedbackromasalah - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|Future World - Process Description Paper; Abstract
2 - Hi, diz. I'll work on the first paragraph for you: For our final project, my group has decided...
Writing Feedbackdiz013 - Jun 9, 2015 / ChristineB - Jun 9, 2015
|PEOPLE GET A JOB - it's a necessity in everyone's life
4 - aseprudi- let me express my idea regarding the first para Obtaining a recognisable job is a main aim...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 8, 2015 / Ridma - Jun 9, 2015
|Good and bad impact of having a lot of TV channels
Writing FeedbackRidma - Jun 8, 2015 / Ridma - Jun 9, 2015
|Public transportation makes that less exhausts are ejected from motorbikes and cars into the air
Writing Feedbacktangthidiepanh - Jun 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
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