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|I agree that young people prefer not spending time to help their communities.
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 17, 2015
|'specific atmosphere that the school creates' - BOSTON UNIVERSITY
3 - Katiyoun, I don't think that this is a very effective statement. The reasons that you look to attend Boston...
Writing FeedbackKoit - Oct 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 17, 2015
|Teaching science at the primary school - importance, consequences and controversy
5 - Anna, this is a better developed essay than the first. However, there are still grammatical errors that need to...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|'I'm Algerian Computer Engineering student' Essay on myself for business communication skills course
2 - My major is computer engineering and currently, I am an freshman student. I hope to achieve the necessary...
Writing FeedbackMRami - Oct 16, 2015 / hypersis - Oct 16, 2015
|On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item and you have no travel insurance - letter
2 - Pradeep, you need to apply yourself better when it comes to developing your letters. You should be able to...
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: Road problem near by my house.
3 - I am really happy to see your comments and suggestion, looking forward to see more. Because of your comments...
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 16, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 16, 2015
|Your school has enough funds to buy computers and books as well. Which one do you suggest?
4 - I like with the way you provide your idea. However, based on the key success of IELTS, for writing...
Writing Feedbackkphani_ra - Oct 16, 2015 / Ray_keren - Oct 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: imported food trend. Why is this? Is it positive or negative?
2 - Isabelle, this is a good essay. Your ideas on the matter are quite clear and presents an understanding of...
Writing Feedbackdb723 - Oct 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|Should the high school students be strongly involved in a free community services or not?
3 - As far as thesis statements go, this one takes the cake for being the longest single sentence of them...
Writing Feedbackat_first_it_was - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|People should be judged by employers accordind to their skills, not gender
3 - Yobin already pointed out the major problem of your essay, that of the lacking reference to your occupation in...
Writing Feedbackdoomgirl - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2015
|'he is tall, has short dark hair and dark eyes' - descriptive paragraph about my best friend
3 - Ayoub, I'll show you a sample of how to write this essay properly while also correcting the bad grammar...
Writing Feedbackayoups - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 15, 2015
|GRE Issue Essay: The Best Way for a Society to Prepare Its Young People for Leadership
3 - Thanks a lot, @vangiespen. I've always found your comments inspiring and constructive. I agree with you that my essay...
Writing FeedbackTakeiteasy - Oct 15, 2015 / Takeiteasy - Oct 15, 2015
|Name a world leader you think is important. It is a part of Toefl IBT exam.
Writing FeedbackMohannadElshawy - Oct 15, 2015 / MohannadElshawy - Oct 15, 2015
|Seizing opportunities in life is usually tantamount to risk taking
2 - Hi your essay is good but I have some notes Life is full of challenges and offers successful people...
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 15, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Oct 15, 2015
|Do Charter Schools hurt Public Schools?
2 - Of the many offerings that a Charter school makes available isare differing education models and curriculum. [one question:...
Writing Feedbackbro2143328 - Oct 13, 2015 / bonboncase - Oct 15, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The vehicles are favored by workers in Houston, Texas
3 - Private car produces the highest amount of carbon dioxide, roughly 0.32 kilograms per person while anotherother car results approximately...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 9, 2015 / db723 - Oct 15, 2015
|Should troublesome students be keeped together or educated separately ?
3 - Last but not least, in our society, good and bad people coexist. There exist 2 groups of people ,...
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Oct 15, 2015 / akiraaa - Oct 15, 2015
|Countries are becoming similar. What is an effect of this situation? IELTS TASK 2
2 - Isabelle, this is a pretty impressive piece of work. Your opinion is based upon well known facts about the...
Writing Feedbackdb723 - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 15, 2015
|Task 1: describe the towerwind and how it works
2 - Nyuyen, you need to improve your reporting skills. Your report overview in your first statement is sorely lacking in...
Writing FeedbackThuyua - Oct 15, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 15, 2015
|University should make an easier access for poor students (IELTS Writing task 2)
Writing Feedbackmargeary - Oct 12, 2015 / db723 - Oct 15, 2015
|Describe benefits of owning a home and renting. ielts task2
3 - However, for overseas students living in a house off campus, owning a home is better than renting because of...
Writing Feedbackphuong0296 - Oct 14, 2015 / db723 - Oct 14, 2015
|The Key of life is Success and a happy person have a great chance to be truely succesful
Writing FeedbackSaputra - Oct 14, 2015 / Abraham22 - Oct 14, 2015
|The table presents data related to subway systems located in six large cities - Ielts Task 1
3 - Hai Gandi, I'm Luthfia. I think you are able to use your time more effective since 26 minutes are...
Writing FeedbackGandi - Oct 13, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Oct 14, 2015
|Reflection Paper about heroes - everybody wants to be a hero
Writing FeedbackYoussri - Oct 13, 2015 / AR2100 - Oct 13, 2015
|Smoking is injurious for human health and the cause of a number of dangerous diseases
2 - It is unnecessary to say "discuss my view points in the following paragraph's, followed by a reasoned conclusion." ...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Oct 13, 2015 / js0116 - Oct 13, 2015
|Isolation from the world is not a good idea for any country "Toefl"
Writing Feedbacktaranehrezaee - Oct 9, 2015 / taranehrezaee - Oct 13, 2015
|Pathos, logos, ethos related to the article "A good man in Rwanda"
Writing FeedbackYoussri - Oct 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 12, 2015
|There are more benefits of moving around than just staying in a city throughout human life
2 - Dita, I can understand what you are trying to say in your essay. That is a good thing because...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 12, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2015
|To make extraordinary efforts to save endangered animal or plant species
3 - Thank you so much for taking your time to write such a valuable analysis, @vangiespen. I agree with you...
Writing FeedbackTakeiteasy - Oct 12, 2015 / Takeiteasy - Oct 12, 2015
|(help to review) 'The way that we dress reveals who we are.' What are your views?
Writing FeedbackLittlethoughts - Oct 12, 2015 / Littlethoughts - Oct 12, 2015
|In your letter explain why and for how long you want to take time off from work
Writing Feedbackpdeep37 - Oct 10, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 11, 2015
|The Best Eco-Friendly Form of Mode Transportation
2 - Hi Fadli, 1. 'employee' is categorized as a countable noun. Here, you have some options to write...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 11, 2015 / shintacandrade - Oct 11, 2015
|Swing basket in the river or a bucket tied with ropes connected to a pulley - collecting water
3 - Rosyidah, Your report overview is incomplete. As a summary, it should have at least 3 sentences in it. The...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 11, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Which is More Important, Building an Impressive Buildings or Improving Inhabitant's Facilities?
3 - - I think it is important to build it in a city, because the building can attract many tourists...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 5, 2015 / ochio - Oct 11, 2015
|TOEFL essay: open discussions in class vs. lectures - any way to study is okay as long as it works
2 - Not bad at all dveri. The essay is well developed and discussed. It is simple and easy to follow....
Writing Feedbackdveri - Oct 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Fiction Writing - adventure with an unexpected but happy ending
4 - Here is a sample of a simple adventure story: The hot September summer was making Sam feel like...
Writing FeedbackSamuelsam123 - Oct 11, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Tim Berners-Lee launched "WordWideWeb". The Powerful tool.
3 - The greatest discovery over the last 30 years was started [...] [...] influential invention for human beings until present....
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 6, 2015 / eddies - Oct 11, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : The Most Preferred Transportation For Workers in Houston, Texas
2 - There is something missing here. The table also shows about average age of travelers, yet you just give...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 11, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 11, 2015
|"Individualism in a society that focuses on branding in young people."
3 - Hi Michael! As I read your essay, I came to the realization that you really feel quite strongly about...
Writing Feedbackscotmi - Oct 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Ielts task 2: Purchasing a house or business, which one do you prefer?
Writing FeedbackBNTien - Oct 11, 2015 / pdeep37 - Oct 11, 2015
|Career preparation, increasing knowledge and exploring new experiences; why people attend university
5 - Tien, the last paragraph before the conclusion has improved tremendously. It really helps to wrap up the essay. The...
Writing FeedbackBNTien - Oct 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|IELTS Taks 1 : The Two Methods of Collecting Water For Irrigation
3 - This way is involved by two persons and they keepholding and pulling the basket... the fourtwo sides of...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 11, 2015 / BNTien - Oct 11, 2015
|The main causes of the inequality between poor and wealthy countries - how this gap can be reduced?
2 - Hii.. Irfan, guessing you forget to brainstorm before do writing. I am not intend to harsh, but this work...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 11, 2015 / SHanafi - Oct 11, 2015
|TOEFL essay: how access to information via the internet influences life
6 - Consider the basic format of an essay that you can develop and write within a 30 minute time frame...
Writing Feedbackdveri - Oct 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|The developments of technology, particularly in e-books, may cause abandonment of the printed media
2 - Irfan, you have presented a unique take on this discussion. Most of the prompts using this normally ask if...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 7, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Required activities for high schoolers: charity, neighbourhood improving, teaching sports to kids
4 - This kind of work need to enhance reader impression by taking space(s) among the paragraph. With this way, examiner,...
Writing FeedbackHaru - Oct 10, 2015 / SHanafi - Oct 11, 2015
|Gaining the proper education is very prominent particularly when looking for a good job
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Oct 8, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 11, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Do You Feel Lonely When You Live In An Apartment?
5 - Hello aniani, I'm Luthfia. Actually, I like your idea, it is simple but acceptable. First of all, I suggest...
Writing Feedbackaniani - Oct 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Oct 11, 2015
|In my opinion, schools and hospitals are more important than impressive buildings
2 - Dita, your introduction is quite short. As such, it does not offer a concrete overview of the discussion. The...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 11, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|GRE issue task : Nation should operate similar curriculum for its schoolchildren
2 - Sekar, I think that you should rethink your response to the essay. Specifically, I would like you to reconsider...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2015
|Two Methods of Irrigating Field (IELTS Task I)
2 - Hi Muhajid :-) Your report is quite complete and offers a complete description of the irrigation methods used by...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 10, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 10, 2015
|The ways to achieve an knowledge. Visiting is Always Better Than Watching
4 - I have read your comments, Mister. Thanks a lot for you due to taking time to proofread and give...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 8, 2015 / mujahid_fadli - Oct 10, 2015
|The Tourism Destroyed by The Tourist - Task 2 for IELTS
4 - ... much more than the benefits, especially the negative impact offor the environments and cultures . ... benefits...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 5, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 10, 2015
|Visiting another country is always better than only watching it on television
2 - Hello, Pramudita! I like that your essay has a definite structure, however there are some sentences I'd have written...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Oct 10, 2015 / dveri - Oct 10, 2015
|Simple tip for a life: Follow your passion and you'll be happy.
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 7, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 10, 2015
|I would argue that mankind can learn much about another countries when visiting them directly
2 - Hi Jida.. Nice to see you again here. Let me give some correction on your essay. Here it goes....
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 9, 2015 / aniani - Oct 10, 2015
|TASK 2: how the feeling of staying in the apartment?
Writing FeedbackJIDA - Oct 9, 2015 / aniani - Oct 10, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : The different ways of collecting water to fulfill the irrigation
2 - Overall, it can be seen that both of thisthese techniques use a different equipment but same aim. The...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Oct 9, 2015 / Pramudita - Oct 9, 2015
|The Advantages of a Computer for Student: social networking, learning media, computer skills
Writing Feedbacksharahma - Oct 9, 2015 / sharahma - Oct 9, 2015
|The main reasons and several ways to tackle the inequality between developed and developing country
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Oct 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 9, 2015
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