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|IELTS task 1 - the funding and spending activities of USA charity in a year
2 - Better you write the units of measurement in the introductory paragraph. Let me give a try: The pie...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / shintacandrade - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of income sources and outlays by a USA charity in a year
3 - Hi akbar.. It is good essay, so it was difficult for me to give you some suggestion, huff.. Anyway,...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015 / daveandrei - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 2 : harmful junk food and education, discuss both views and give opinion.
2 - Experts believe that junk food consumption highly is bad for our body. Few people argue that education can be...
Writing Feedbacknsahmad - Nov 10, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 10, 2015
|IELTS task 1- People who get arrested in during five years
NEW - The two diagrams display the percentages of males and females that put in jail during five years due violations...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|The pie charts present the amount of charity income and the way it is spent during one year in USA
NEW - TASK 1. Revenue sources and expenditures of USA Charity in One Year. The pie charts present the amount...
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|IELTS task 1 - Woodward University Map
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 5, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 9, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The Arresting Percentage of Societies in Five Years Ending 1994
3 - Fast forward to your preceding IELTS report, I' ve told you that such phrases can be categorized as...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 9, 2015 / eddies - Nov 9, 2015
|The major sources of income of the charity in the United States and their spending in various fields
NEW - IELTS-TASK1: Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in One Year. The pie chart shows the major...
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|The proportion of men and women caught on breaking the law in a period of five years - IELTS 1
NEW - IELTS-TASK1: Persons Arrested in Five Years ending 1994 The pie chart illustrates the proportion of men and women...
Writing Feedbackbroibra - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|IELTS Task 1 : The Presence of Pupils Which School in Secondary School in Different Three Years
3 - Hi Miss Devi, I would give you some suggestions. Hope it helps you... Firstly, I find out that...
Writing Feedbackdaveandrei - Nov 8, 2015 / M3L1 - Nov 9, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991
2 - It is noticeablenoticed that the percentage of the males detained waswere more than the females ... ... and...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 9, 2015 / broibra - Nov 9, 2015
|The Silkworm Life Cycle in 76 Days
NEW - The cycle in the diagram depicts the silkworm life cycle during 76 days. It is important to note that...
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|Activity of Charity in United State for One Year is Revealed by the Pie Chart - IELTS Task 1
NEW - The pie chart has presented activity of charity in United State for one year. The chart is divided to...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 9, 2015 / — -
|"Inside the minds of children" - writing a presuasive essay on why it is important to stop bullying.
2 - Summer, your essay thesis is not really very clear. You have not provided an accurate explanation at the beginning...
Writing FeedbackSum2128033 - Nov 8, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 8, 2015
|Technology is one of substantials to spend the human life better.
2 - technology actually .Actually,it is predicted that technology will develops significantly in a decade later.the next decade. Most of...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Nov 8, 2015 / chickenpiemary - Nov 8, 2015
|Comparison of additional school attendance from 2000 to 2009 - IELTS-TASK1
2 - Hi.. Novri... I attempt to give you comments, 1. in my opinion, you are inconsistent with your thesis statement,...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 8, 2015 / fahmisadja - Nov 8, 2015
|Role of popular events in calming tensions between countries? IELTS Task 2
Writing FeedbackMR FARAH - Nov 8, 2015 / eddies - Nov 8, 2015
|Protecting wild animals or providing facilities for citizens by government
2 - - wild animals at the first glance may not seem important.( this phrase contradicts the first phrase of the...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 8, 2015
|'Marx's views have shaped the world that we live in today' - Essay on Marxism
Writing Feedbackcauibn - Nov 6, 2015 / cauibn - Nov 8, 2015
|IELTS technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people
Writing Feedbackwulanaulia - Nov 7, 2015 / wulanaulia - Nov 8, 2015
|I am a medical professional today despite my low record in science in high school -GRE issue essay
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 6, 2015 / Peg - Nov 8, 2015
|Greatness of a person can be resolved by his contemporaries as well as the people who live after him
3 - Hi Sakshi, Thanks for giving your feedback on how to improve my writing. it was really helpful....
Writing FeedbackPeg - Nov 7, 2015 / Peg - Nov 8, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 Reading for developing imaginations and languages skills than TV.
3 - Hi @LonaRandan, I'm Luthfia. May I give you some suggestions? 1. Your words are less than 250 words 2....
Writing FeedbackLonaRandan - Nov 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Nov 8, 2015
|Company should give the employees the same benefit package. Agree or disagree
NEW - Nowaday, Bussiness needs a system quality employees to compete with other companies. In order to make this, the companies...
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|'Public Health is the golden path'. Personal Statement for UC's with Public Health Major!!
Writing Feedbackomarariss - Nov 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 8, 2015
|In a few decades, development of technology has changed the life of ordinary society - IELTS 2
2 - First and foremost,earlier developmentthe influx of technology has become the most influenced sector in society'severyday life. Almost every aspect...
Writing Feedbackmaryarifin - Nov 8, 2015 / eddies - Nov 8, 2015
|The map illustrates the development of Stokeford village over 80 years. IELTS TASK I
2 - Hi..., you need to include the picture. It takes time to follow what you are trying to say with...
Writing Feedbackainirere - Nov 8, 2015 / eddies - Nov 8, 2015
|BECAUSE ACTION SPEAKS LOUDER
2 - Hai Mary. I'm Luthfia. May I give you some suggestions? 1. In the first paragraph, it be better if...
Writing Feedbackmaryarifin - Nov 8, 2015 / Luthfia Dewi - Nov 8, 2015
|Government should not be biased when it comes to investment in cities - GRE issue essay.
2 - Hi, Your essay seems like it could be better organized. Your first and third paragraphs address the "reason" in...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 7, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 7, 2015
|It is often thought that currency is one of the ways to measure happiness. Ielts money topic
2 - Hi Trinh Tih Your idea is good but somehow you lack the coherence and formation of sentences along...
Writing Feedbacktrangtrang21094 - Nov 7, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS Essay task 2 -Damage of the environment is an inevitable consequence of worldwide improvements
2 - Emra, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. -Nowadays, environmental damage is - a controversial issue...
Writing FeedbackEmm23 - Nov 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 7, 2015
|Money is important but should not be considered as the end in itself - GRE argument essay
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 5, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 7, 2015
|Social Life in Apartment Buildings - IELTS Writing Task 2
6 - This is good. However, you need to show that you have very strong argument(s). To do so, presenting...
Writing Feedbackochio - Oct 11, 2015 / eddies - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS-TASK1 : Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in One Year.
3 - I suggest constructing your introductory paragraph with a formal tone. To tackle this issue, you need a passive...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 6, 2015 / eddies - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS 2 : Children development and the impact of society and the family
2 - Hi Nicki. The debate of nurture and VERSUS nature in the developping DEVELOPMENT process of children is ...
Writing FeedbackNickiNickiNicki - Nov 6, 2015 / maryarifin - Nov 7, 2015
|The start of a marathon - Descriptive essay
2 - Hey Kevin ! I really like the way that you wrote this essay. It is highly descriptive and only...
Writing FeedbackKevin_thomas - Nov 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2015
|The quantity of students which join in the Secondary School, in three different years
3 - Hello Meiliana enjoy your day This table displayed the quantity of students whichwho join in the Secondary School,...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 6, 2015 / wulanaulia - Nov 7, 2015
|Disadvantages of Facebook - be careful and use it 'scientifically'
3 - Hi Reece, I would like to call your attention to the way that you have structured your sentences. You...
Writing FeedbackReece - Nov 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 7, 2015
|IELTS task 2 - People can be happy if they have an enjoyment job
5 - ... some people believe that they have toavoid Ehave to) in writing IELTS, use (better) do something they like...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 5, 2015 / wulanaulia - Nov 7, 2015
|[IELTS Task 2] Expressing Ideas by Creative Artists: Freedom and The Role of Government
2 - Hi Kadrika.. I read closely your writing.. I will give few suggestions... In On the other hand, some...
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Nov 6, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015
|A breakdown regarding the Attendance of student in four Senior High School between 2000 and 2009
4 - Excuse me... Hi Mr. Fadhly, I will give few suggestions.. It is evidence that, Community Schools just showed...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 6, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015
|Comparison between Adams Realty and Fitch Realty estate firms - GRE argument essay
2 - I think your arguments are valid but my one comment would be that you introduce your arguments in your...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 5, 2015 / liliesandivory - Nov 6, 2015
|"Bali Island" - the famous place in Indonesia. Descriptive or Expository Essay?
Writing Feedbacksharahma - Oct 22, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 6, 2015
|Typing content and click the "send" - Advantages and Disadvantages of using e-mail
NEW - Thanks to e-mail, we now easily contact with other people all over the world just by typing content and...
Writing Feedbackpnvthinh - Nov 6, 2015 / — -
|People often live in different, sometimes distant areas from the place where they were born - IELTS
4 - Hi Norman, let me give you some correntions so as to improve your writing. Dispate that, some miss spelling...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 5, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 6, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The High School Attendance was Revealed by the Table in Three Periods
2 - Masdar, when you wrote the summary overview mentioned that there were 4 school classifications included in the report. However,...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 6, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The presence of senior high school
NEW - The table describes a presence of senior high school in a country between 2000 and 2009. Overall, it is...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015 / — -
|larger library, rooms reconstruction, road... - Task 1: Layout of Woodwards University Over 30 Years
4 - Hi Mr. Fahmy... Your writing is good.. I will give few suggestions to your writing.. Moreover, road and...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 5, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015
|Sophisticated constructions in the city center is not merely give worth-looking for the society.
4 - Let me straightly go the point of the task responses. Your work already answer the prompt, but this is...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 5, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 6, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 : The changes in the layout of the Woodwards University
3 - Hy Novri, I will give suggestion. I hope that this can help you to improve your grammar. You must...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 5, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 6, 2015
|The graph illustrates the Silkworm's life cycle as long as about 328 days from spawning to moth
NEW - The diagram illustrates the Silkworm's life cycle as long as about 328 days from spawning to moth. There is...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 6, 2015 / — -
|The diagram portrays the natural process of Silkworm metamorphose into a moth.
NEW - The diagram portrays how the Silkworm metamorphose becoming new one. Overall, it can be seen that the process involving...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 6, 2015 / — -
|The silkworm has the four phases during change which lasts minimal 57 days before became the moth.
3 - The diagram reveals the life cycle of silkworm before became turning into a moth. The silkworm has the undergoes...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015 / chandnimaishery - Nov 5, 2015
|TASK 1. The changes in the layout of the Woodwards University.
2 - Ramat, your detailed report analysis of the map proves that you not only paid attention to the details in...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|TOEFL Independent Essay - "To change or not to change"
3 - TJLuschen, Nofrinorman and vangiespen, thank you very very much for your kind feedback. It is very useful! I thought...
Writing Feedbackluiza_rv - Nov 5, 2015 / luiza_rv - Nov 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: The Internet is Probably the Most Significant Invention of the Last 30 Years
3 - Masdar, when you discuss an essay that asks you agree or disagree to a certain extent, one way that...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|Task 2: Learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films
2 - Akbar, this would have been a well rounded and developed essay if only you had used the correct English...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|The Destruction of Our Own- I wrote an essay for my second year of college English class.
2 - Hi Selby, your essay is already good, but you get problem with S+V and also how to distinguish singular/plural....
Writing Feedbackshelbydenai - Nov 4, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 5, 2015
|The Detrimental Effect of Modern Communication to Social Live brings also some positive values IELTS
4 - Hello miss... I will give few suggestion about your writing. ... it makes people's life more simple ....
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 4, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015
|The advertising world has an immense effect on the society - IELTS task 2
4 - Hello Bayu, let me try to give few suggestions on your passage. In this passage, you wrote less 250...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Nov 3, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015
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