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|SAT Essay: Every day we live under some circumstances of choice - we rely on our own decisions
3 - I don't have much to say considering the requirements of a SAT essay, I think you'll have a 10...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 12, 2015 / thuuyen - Sep 12, 2015
|These days, in this technology era, it is easier than before to maintain a healthy lifestyle
4 - - I suggest shortening the first paragraph. Here is my sample; Modern lifestyles lead a sedentary life. As such,...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 11, 2015 / eddies - Sep 12, 2015
|Advantages of the music in secondary school - brain development and obtaining some necessary skills
3 - Hello Hayaalqasem. Thank you for your suggestion. But it is the saying of Calahan as I mentioned the previous...
Writing Feedbackthanhlong - Sep 11, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 12, 2015
|Early technological developments VS recent technological developments -- task 2 IELTS
Writing Feedbackwruiwr86 - Sep 9, 2015 / wruiwr86 - Sep 11, 2015
|books and experience essay - reflections on the importance of knowledge sources
4 - This is my opinion. Your ideas are quite good. Nevertheless, it has some mistakes. _BesideBesides , getting experience is...
Writing FeedbackDrew K - Sep 10, 2015 / thanhlong - Sep 11, 2015
|The bar chart compares the percentage of Bulgarians categorized three sorts of education backgrounds
3 - As I have the information you mean, I upload the correct picture here. Furthermore, my suggestion is that...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015 / shintacandrade - Sep 11, 2015
|The proportion of Bulgarian residents who chosen to live abroad at the level of 8 percent - IELTS
4 - Hello Mr Irfan With regards 100% Bulgarians i assume this is unnecessary data for your paragraph. The proportion...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Sep 10, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015
|Bulgarians showed not much intention to travel or stay abroad during 2001-2006
Writing FeedbackMuhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 11, 2015
|Smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this will restrict some people's freedom
2 - Ok. I'm Irfan Ardian. this is my recommendations on your grammar. Which is more crucial freedom of individual or...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Sep 8, 2015 / irfan727 - Sep 11, 2015
|Culture shock (two years in Delhi, India)
Writing Feedbacksalonijain - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|TOEFL Independent TASK_Family or Friends teach people more important lessons
Writing Feedbackfhmashayekhi - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|The Average Cost of Housing in rural, suburban and urban areas - chart
2 - I advise you to use synonyms instead of repeating yourself. through 10 years = in span of 10 years...
Writing Feedbackhm407 - Sep 10, 2015 / vika1234 - Sep 10, 2015
|The Chart of Bulgaria people who wants to go abroad - IELTS TASK 1
2 - Hello, I can help you with your summary. Since this chart shows years in the past, your verbs...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|Learn subjects useful VS learn subjects that we like.
2 - I can help you with your essay. In the introduction you should have more information to begin your essay....
Writing FeedbackANNA_ff - Sep 10, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 10, 2015
|The willingness of Bulgarians to move oversea based on their educational level (IELTS Task I)
3 - This need more improvement on the overview. It is always good to write a 2-sentence overview. Here is the...
Writing Feedbackbroerjuang - Sep 10, 2015 / eddies - Sep 10, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 - The Chart of Emigration Intentions in Bulgaria
2 - inhabitants who do not have any planning to go abroad is the highest percentage among all. Be carefull...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015 / Muhammadyusuf - Sep 10, 2015
|Is health education the answer to the consumption of junk food? IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackanh2903 - Sep 7, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015
|Some people think that genetically modified (GM) crops are a positive development - IELTS task 2
6 - Introduction is too short, i give some explanation. Genetically modified (GM) is the new inventions which is carried...
Writing Feedbackvika1234 - Sep 7, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 10, 2015
|Just laws and unjust laws : GRE Issue task
2 - we should backward strictly seek a reflection on how just and unjust law can be determined We should look...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Sep 8, 2015 / collegebound28 - Sep 9, 2015
|School uniforms, agree or disagree? They 'save us alot of time in the morning'.
2 - I can help you with your essay. I think you should begin your essay by discussing that there are...
Writing FeedbackL33n4 - Sep 9, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 9, 2015
|Human Trafficking - An Underlying Issue in Today's Society
2 - Human trafficking is a modern form of slavery involving the illegal trade of people for exploitation or commercial gain....
Writing FeedbackXYZ1356 - Sep 8, 2015 / rozha - Sep 9, 2015
|Parent should give smartphone to their school kids.
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Sep 8, 2015 / profes - Sep 9, 2015
|spending on health education and preventative measures (prevention is better than cure)
NEW - In wealthy countries,the focus of clinical care is changing from cure to prevention,to anticipate future diseases in currently healthy...
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|TOEFL_ The most important characteristic of successful politicians or leaders is communication skill
2 - hi Yayaku Very good writing!! Maybe you also can post the Topic in your writing area. This is...
Writing FeedbackYayaku - Sep 5, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 7, 2015
|TOEFL Independent Essay - to attract tourists: improve safety or improve buildings?
2 - Hi Mashup.. However, In my opinion for the sake of increasing tourists, government will look stupid if it...
Writing Feedbackmashup - Sep 6, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 7, 2015
|The argument on a memo from a company head management should be more accurate
Writing Feedbackvanooshe - Sep 6, 2015 / naitry - Sep 7, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Living in high-rise apartment less community spirit
3 - Some people say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it's advantageous...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 5, 2015 / ChamiJaya - Sep 6, 2015
|Discovering oneself does not happen in a day; in fact, for many finding themselves takes a lifetime
3 - Introduction is too lengthy for me. Unexpected events happen in lifetimes help people to discover their strengths and...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 5, 2015 / ChamiJaya - Sep 6, 2015
|SAT: We learn more from mistakes than our success - I have experienced it myself in the real life
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|The work we have impact our way of living. If it brings joy then we are happy.
Writing Feedbacksummerflora - Sep 4, 2015 / summerflora - Sep 5, 2015
|How does the media coverage on police shootings affect how the people view law enforcement?
Writing FeedbackAshlee2eez - Sep 1, 2015 / Ashlee2eez - Sep 4, 2015
|Today's life is less satisfied and less happy than in the past
3 - Thanks, In the second paragraph I can say that Medicine evolve in the last 30 years and medicines are...
Writing FeedbackVitor Barros - Sep 3, 2015 / Vitor Barros - Sep 4, 2015
|Men to share housework with women - topic idea
Writing FeedbackWendy White - Sep 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 4, 2015
|TOEFL IndependentEssay - Tips how should governments encourage energy savings?
3 - I suppose that you should also extend your conclusion. the concluding paragraph can restate your thesis, summarize your point,...
Writing Feedbackmashup - Sep 1, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 3, 2015
|Foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Advantage outweight disadavantages
3 - I think the sentence "This reason is that they learn ..." in paragraph two, should be "The reason is...
Writing Feedbackdanielwong - Aug 31, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 3, 2015
|The bar chart shows that males enjoyed more leisure time than females throughout the period shown
4 - Hi guys, thank you very much for your comment, its so usefule. I am aiming to my official test...
Writing Feedbackbillyabbot - Sep 1, 2015 / billyabbot - Sep 3, 2015
|High school students should voluntarily participate in payable community services
3 - I think it is better to paraphrase " in the opinion of some people" by "some people opinion is...
Writing Feedbackdanielwong - Sep 2, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 3, 2015
|One person can't know everything so a group work is more effective than an individual work
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|Story about a sick person getting recovered from his cancer throughout my help.
2 - Greetings! At first, i want to congratulate you about your humanity. I found your writing interesting but i...
Writing Feedbackamandarailey - Sep 2, 2015 / Zahra ahmad - Sep 2, 2015
|Youth is wasted on the young
Writing Feedbackfhmashayekhi - Sep 2, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 2, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : The problem of over using internet
Writing Feedbackgo0905 - Aug 26, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 2, 2015
|The comparison of world inhabitants divided by each continents between 1900 and 2000
3 - As seen, you have very good attempt. Yet, you failed to introduce what's in the overview. An overview...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015 / eddies - Sep 2, 2015
|Educating children is more difficult today
Writing FeedbackConfusionstatio - Sep 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 1, 2015
|SAT Essay: Should we trust and accept common sense, or be skeptical of it?
3 - I would like to give you some feedback. You have been practicing for quite some time. Your writing...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 1, 2015
|No unnecessary experiments on animals! Public should show responsibility. IELTS.
Writing FeedbackChamiJaya - Sep 1, 2015 / ChamiJaya - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Children are engaged in some kind of paid work
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015 / eddies - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS: Building new sports facilities is the best way for public health??
3 - Hello tk0308, maybe you can rewrite your introduction and conclusion. For introduction you can use paraphrase from the...
Writing Feedbacktk0308 - Aug 31, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015
|Violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. IELTS
3 - Hi Hung, let me rewrite the introduction In this contemporary era, the media such as television and video...
Writing FeedbackHung - Aug 22, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS task 1: The population of fishers and exported fish in the world
4 - - In 1970 , the highest number of world fishermen was living in Asia witnessed rose significantly , from...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 3, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|A breakdown of the process of water cycle. IELTS Task 1
4 - Hello, let me give the feedback for your improvement. - Please, you can use other sentence conectors such...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 4, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|Teachers are more influent than friends
3 - For introductory paragraph, you better put the thesis statement in the end. Let me give a try: It...
Writing FeedbackBangbang - Aug 31, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 31, 2015
|Zoo has no useful purpose. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbacknil - Aug 31, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Aug 31, 2015
|Without parents assistance children can easily be affected by bad habits, lifestyle and cultures
6 - This essay is well done. You have an intro conclusion and three body paragraphs. final tests, However... ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 31, 2015
|IELTS essay: Age limit for retirement is 50 in some countires and 65 to 70 in others
Writing FeedbackBalajiskb - Aug 25, 2015 / tk0308 - Aug 31, 2015
|Why should children learn a foreign language so early?
NEW - Original Question: Some experts believe that it is better for children to being learning a foreign language at primary...
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|Essay: Travelling & Tourism - if you don't afraid to take the risk then go ahead
2 - I can help you with your essay. 1st paragraph: Some people may see the positive side of travelling...
Writing FeedbackNamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 30, 2015
|A remote village brings the kind people, inexpensive, healthy food can be consumed in a countryside
2 - hi,here are some advice for you. In the first sentence,if you use the word"bygone",which indicates things happening a very...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Aug 30, 2015 / ANNA_ff - Aug 30, 2015
|Relationship should be for eternity - nothing else in this world can last forever
Writing Feedbackseasee - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|Transport by a train, airplane, underground, coach, bicycle, motorcycle, etc. should be encouraged
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|It is better if advertisements would not be allowed directed toward children
2 - errors comments typo errors Raising a child is achallengedchallenging task in all ages but at ages of 2 betweenbetween...
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