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|TASK 1. The changes in the layout of the Woodwards University.
2 - Ramat, your detailed report analysis of the map proves that you not only paid attention to the details in...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|TOEFL Independent Essay - "To change or not to change"
3 - TJLuschen, Nofrinorman and vangiespen, thank you very very much for your kind feedback. It is very useful! I thought...
Writing Feedbackluiza_rv - Nov 5, 2015 / luiza_rv - Nov 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: The Internet is Probably the Most Significant Invention of the Last 30 Years
3 - Masdar, when you discuss an essay that asks you agree or disagree to a certain extent, one way that...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|Task 2: Learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films
2 - Akbar, this would have been a well rounded and developed essay if only you had used the correct English...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|The Destruction of Our Own- I wrote an essay for my second year of college English class.
2 - Hi Selby, your essay is already good, but you get problem with S+V and also how to distinguish singular/plural....
Writing Feedbackshelbydenai - Nov 4, 2015 / Ra_fhli - Nov 5, 2015
|The Detrimental Effect of Modern Communication to Social Live brings also some positive values IELTS
4 - Hello miss... I will give few suggestion about your writing. ... it makes people's life more simple ....
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 4, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015
|The advertising world has an immense effect on the society - IELTS task 2
4 - Hello Bayu, let me try to give few suggestions on your passage. In this passage, you wrote less 250...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Nov 3, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: The blueprint of Woodwards University from 1995 to 2015
NEW - The map describes changes which occurred in the blueprint of Woodwards University from 1995 to 2015. The most drastically...
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|'Moth is an insect which has a close relation to butterflies' - silkworm life cycle (IELTS task)
2 - Meliana, you have written the best version of this chart report so far. While the language needs to be...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: The Greatest Challenge for Parents Who Had a lot of Children
5 - Hello Mr. Fahmy, I will give a suggestion. You should be carefully to use "Have/Has/Had", you must differentiate "Have...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 4, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: The Negative Effects of Tourism's Countries.
3 - Hy novri, I read closely your writing. You should check your words spelling and use varied words such as...
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 3, 2015 / akbarmappiare - Nov 5, 2015
|The internet gave big impact to human life. Today life would be totally different without it. IELTS2
2 - Muhammad, while you are right to indicate a discussion about how important the internet is or has become over...
Writing FeedbackRAJ57 - Nov 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|Silkworms experience their life in five stages and spend about 10 weeks from eggs to become moths
3 - This is good. Yet, the sentences presented are too short. You need at least three sentences in a...
Writing Feedbackfahmisadja - Nov 5, 2015 / eddies - Nov 5, 2015
|The silkworm during the cycle of life becomes a new moth. IELTS TASK 1
2 - Muhammad, try to divide your introduction into 3 parts in order to meet the 3 sentence minimum requirement for...
Writing FeedbackRAJ57 - Nov 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 5, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Human being sometimes spend lifetime in one place and live nomad.
3 - Okay radja allow me to try correct your writing... There are have some benefit and disadvantages of bothThese...
Writing FeedbackRAJ57 - Nov 3, 2015 / Nofrinorman - Nov 5, 2015
|Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to.
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 4, 2015 / RAJ57 - Nov 5, 2015
|Schools should focus on the subjects which support of student's goals in the future
5 - The pP eople's goals depend on what they are offered today. Most of the people think thatIt is argued...
Writing Feedbackhasbi - Nov 2, 2015 / eddies - Nov 4, 2015
|I consider it as a natural behaviour that the human beings rely more often nowadays on one another
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Nov 4, 2015 / eddies - Nov 4, 2015
|Cars Ownership and Traffic Jam: Examples and Measures - [IELTS TASK 2]
2 - Kandrika, while you really offered a high level of understanding the prompt and you offered a possible solution to...
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Nov 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 4, 2015
|[IELTS Task 1] Analysing Map of School from 1950 until 2010
4 - Kandrika, it is important that you learn how to divide the portions of information that can help the essay...
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Nov 3, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 4, 2015
|GRE Issue Essay: To obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws.
4 - i think you should not take china for an example because it is a principle that we are advised...
Writing FeedbackTakeiteasy - Oct 18, 2015 / hoahongdo94 - Nov 4, 2015
|Task 2 - A pet bring best, helpful and happiness
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Nov 3, 2015 / irfan727 - Nov 4, 2015
|Television station always have way to entertain its audience (IELTS Task 2)
2 - Hi Akbar I find easily in reading this essay. Maybe others have more capabilities to assess the grammar...
Writing Feedbackakbarmappiare - Nov 4, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 4, 2015
|Televised Talent Shows Have Become Popular In Many Societies.
3 - The greatest path to [...] ... satisfaction like moral support. As I read, this is very good attempt. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackRa_fhli - Nov 3, 2015 / eddies - Nov 4, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: technology has affected communication, positive or negative?
Writing Feedbackdb723 - Nov 4, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 4, 2015
|GREAT BUILDINGS OR PUBLIC SERVICE CONSTRUCTIONS? Residents basic life developing must be a priority.
Writing FeedbackNofrinorman - Nov 4, 2015 / fahmisadja - Nov 4, 2015
|The automobile improvement causes some serious problems
2 - Body I suggestion : A paraphrase of improving life in your first body would be strengthen your claim on...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Nov 3, 2015 / SHanafi - Nov 4, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 1 the reasons for studying according to student's age
2 - Hi, I will give comments about your writing First, for introduction, I think it's better to use one...
Writing FeedbackDiqon - Nov 3, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 3, 2015
|Internet based courses are popular alternative university-based courses for students
2 - Caroot, when you develop your opening statement, remember to accomplish 3 tasks within it. Those 3 tasks are :...
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 3, 2015
|The Percentage of Pupils Appearance in Secondary School (IELTS Task 1)
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 31, 2015 / fadh93 - Nov 3, 2015
|The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars)
2 - Hi Aditya, your report is really good. It is analytical and informative. It delivers the important facts and figures...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Nov 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 3, 2015
|Writing Task 2 : The advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community
2 - To conclude, despite the fact said that there are adequately negativedire effects, I believe there are somethe advantages to...
Writing FeedbackM3L1 - Nov 3, 2015 / irhame - Nov 3, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Country Allocates Budget to Develop Public Facilities
NEW - Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be...
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|IELTS task 2 - Experiences have the major influences of people characteristic
2 - hi Bayuwibowo, Here is my advice on your writing. it is agreed that longlong-term experiences will affect...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Nov 2, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 3, 2015
|The New Year importance among Russians. If you're afraid of reading a lot, don't correct it. =)
NEW - Holidays are a part of our life; the residents of every country define themselves how to celebrate one or...
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|self-employment vs. employment - own business seems to be increasingly popular among individuals
4 - Your essay is very good, with detailed examples that support your argument, but I agree with akiraaa. You are...
Writing Feedbacksaba_beatrice - Oct 30, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 2, 2015
|Author's argument on non-Palean woven baskets does not seems to make a cogent case. GRE argument
3 - Hi, yes this seems much more convincing, plus I think it is better organized, with each paragraph having a...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 29, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 2, 2015
|Children being addicted to these high-tech entertainments are often failing in exams. Education
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Nov 2, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 2, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 & 2008
NEW - The breakdown of the proportion of patterns' household spending in UK and New Zealand from 1980 to 2008, a...
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|Task 1 - The amount of waste production in six countries.
3 - A breakdown of the rate of waste production in different regions over following (need a comma here) a twenty-year...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Nov 2, 2015 / hasdymath - Nov 2, 2015
|The number both sexes joining the evening courses and the proportion of ages following these courses
NEW - A breakdown of the number of both sexes attending several evening courses in adult education center in 2009 and...
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|IELTS TASK 1 - Sales of Fairtrade labelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004
NEW - The tables illustrate the amount of fair-trade branded bananas and coffee in UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden from...
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|Money plays a core role, however it doesn't always ensure the better life for human
2 - hello Abraham, let me try to give some recommendations on your passage. in that case, i guess...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Nov 2, 2015 / irfan727 - Nov 2, 2015
|Task 2 - A foreign language and adopting the traditions
3 - a great deal of invasions comeS to a country "comes" refer to a great deal, a singular subject. ...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Nov 2, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Nov 2, 2015
|Study of RHESUS MONKEYS- birth order affecting stimulation level of individual: GRE argument essay
2 - In summary, I would state to solidify this argument the author should present a far more far-detailed study relating...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 1, 2015 / irhame - Nov 2, 2015
|Social and economic indicators: developed countries Vs undeveloped countries - IELTS writing task 1
2 - ... better economic and social state than the other two countries. In any case, Zaire has the worst education...
Writing Feedbackochio - Nov 1, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Nov 2, 2015
|The wind turbine design and the proper position to locate it in order to generate more energy
3 - Hello, let me try to give some recommendations on your passage please try to use a two-sentence...
Writing Feedbackochio - Nov 1, 2015 / irfan727 - Nov 2, 2015
|Working at workplace has merits which can't be achieved in a solitary environment of home
3 - On the other hand, working in workplace is veryhighly important. People have toshould go to workplaces to do...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 1, 2015 / anggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015
|People today are more likely to be selfish - their wish is just to fulfill their daily needs
NEW - People in the past used to be more dependent on one another, whereas nowadays they lead a more dependent...
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|I'm having an essay about 2001: A Space Odyssey (1968). Check if I made any grammar mistakes.
2 - In summary, notnor ostentatious noror much explanation. In 2001 as the viewer experience the film as a whole block....
Writing Feedbacklongnguyen312 - Oct 30, 2015 / irhame - Nov 2, 2015
|Diversity of household activities based on sex in the United Kingdom
2 - Halloo... Let me help you to give some advices :) The chart gives information about diversity of household...
Writing Feedbackochio - Nov 1, 2015 / anggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : The intention of students for schooling.
2 - In Specialist Schools, it remained stable over the period Itwhose percentage stood at 12% in the beginning year, and...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Nov 1, 2015 / lacusclyne - Nov 1, 2015
|The Air Exchange: Discards Steam and How Heat Dissappears (IELTS Task 1)
2 - - In the first floor, the house experienceshas dryer vent and crawl spacein the first floo r, thenwhile in...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Nov 1, 2015 / ochio - Nov 1, 2015
|The wind turbines for electricity.
2 - Hi Clark Just few suggestions from my side : ... consists of five simplysimple materials.... ...affect...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Nov 1, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 1, 2015
|People are able to communicate easier than in the past decade since internet has been developed
3 - Hi again Luthfia dewi, let me try give you some corrections. 1. if you use one sentence connector, that...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Oct 31, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|Discuss both of perspectives about do talents come from parents or not?
4 - Hi Luthfia dewi, let me try to give you some suggestions. first, pay more attention to give an...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Oct 25, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|The charity in USA - there are six different ways which Americans can use to give their contribution
NEW - The pie charts show the percentage of sources of income and expenses of a social foundation in USA during...
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|Increase in number of skateboard users in Central Plaza leading to descent of business-GRE argument
2 - in the first sentence of the third paragraph, you have three verbs but just one sentence connector, you should...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 31, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|Teenagers who commit major crimes should be received adult punishment.
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Oct 27, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|The Result of Social Economic Index: A Measurement in Several Represent Regions (IELTS Task 1)
2 - Hi Mujahid, these are my suggestion.. Firstly, there are many parentheses used. secondly, correction for your last paragraph.. ...
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