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|Toefl: In the past people ate food that was better for their health than people today.
2 - fast developmentrapid development Even without these problems, the additives contained in the processed food is no good to...
Writing Feedbacklisa_severus - Jul 2, 2015 / Eric2750230 - Jul 2, 2015
|Affects of media on people lives. Danger of losing nation identity, negative influences on kids.
2 - I'd consider this essay average because it's introduction seems to be dull but was fine though. There are other...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jul 2, 2015 / Eric2750230 - Jul 2, 2015
|CREATING PELLETS - the sawdust passes three physical process and two temperature treatments
3 - Paddoo, WELCOME to EssayForum, you are yet another member of the ever- growing EF Family. Now, I'll make...
Writing Feedbackpaddoo - Jul 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 2, 2015
|It has been suggested that an educational institute is the better judge of students career
2 - - Consider with your subject, plural or singular. If you start to write with plural form, be consistent with...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Jul 1, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jul 1, 2015
|The table: India has the greatest number of cinema viewings, the smallest figure belongs to Japan.
3 - According to the figures table, India has the highest figurerate of total viewed films (24.5 million views) thenthan(Sorry I...
Writing FeedbackHeilia - Jun 30, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jul 1, 2015
|IT IS MORE IMPORTANT TO WORK AT A JOB THAT YOU ENJOY THAN IT IS TO EARN A LOT OF MONEY.
4 - @paddoo: thank you so much. it definitely helped me. @junisha111: I really liked your version. Its better then what...
Writing Feedbacksally_922 - Jun 30, 2015 / sally_922 - Jul 1, 2015
|Proper measures must be taken to stop obesity and encourage people to physical activity
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jul 1, 2015 / Junisha111p - Jul 1, 2015
|To understand the primary characteristics of a society, it is important to learn the village areas.
3 - Hi Heilia, thanks for the feedback. Could you please, highlight the paragraph where you are finding difficulties?...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Jun 30, 2015 / Junisha111p - Jul 1, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Internet excellence for communicating people and finding information
7 - Hello Adhisti, let me continue your body paragraph with regard to the Internet communication. Admittedly, a particular...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jun 14, 2015 / aseprudi - Jul 1, 2015
|Parents are responsible to shape their children habits and attitudes, also in regard to the money.
4 - thank you for reading my essay. your correction is so rational and I will notice all of them. I...
Writing Feedbackmarned - Jun 30, 2015 / marned - Jul 1, 2015
|The government should take control of education and healthcare - IELTS TASK
2 - This sentence did not bring any value, since it sounds too generic. You need to mention briefly what...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 30, 2015 / eddies - Jul 1, 2015
|Criminal record has actually increased in recent years
4 - Although you have successfully created the solid thesis, the outline did not form a line one another. What...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Jun 30, 2015 / eddies - Jun 30, 2015
|youth unemployment. Consequences? suggestion?
4 - I have only one suggestion: 'never in mankind history have we experienced such decline in youth unemployment ' =>...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 29, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 30, 2015
|Life now and furtherback - living in recent years is better than 100 years ago. IELTS TASK 2.
3 - I can help assist you with improving your writing. I will focus on just a few paragraphs. Here are...
Writing Feedbackpaddoo - Jun 30, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 30, 2015
|Are alternative energy resources too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas?
2 - I can help you again with this essay. I think you are really improving with your writing. I am...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 30, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 30, 2015
|The governments have a responsibility to provide welfare services
3 - - The governments have a responsibility to provide welfare services such as healthcare and education for all theirit's citizens....
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Jun 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2015
|RE: Regents Scholarship Appeal Statement
3 - - However, I would ask that you re- consider the following points, and especially note my strong recovery this...
Writing Feedbackscholarappeals - Jun 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2015
|Could alternative energy sources replace fossil-fuel energy?
2 - I can help you with some of your writing. First, I would like to know the meaning behind this...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 30, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 30, 2015
|Increasing crime rate can be solved by a government role.
2 - I want to focus on some minor issues to help you with your essay. There are many good transition...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 30, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 30, 2015
|Criminal activity performs a crucial impact in societies. What can be do to minimize this phenomenon
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 30, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 30, 2015
|People benefits more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries.
6 - Hallo marned, I would render some suggestion in order to improve your writing. Here is my suggestion...
Writing Feedbackmarned - Jun 21, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 30, 2015
|Overweight now is becoming a serious health threat globally
2 - - Then, another an important factor for weight loss is exercising efficiently andwith high-intensity. - Again, this pattern...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 30, 2015
|Technology is not an obstacle for a human being in thinking, and doesn't reduce intellectual skills
Writing FeedbackKUP - Jun 29, 2015 / alif - Jun 30, 2015
|IS EATING NO MEAT AND FISH REALLY SO BENEFICIAL?
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 14, 2015 / alif - Jun 30, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Students choose to study English independently
2 - If I am asked to write the introductory statement for this essay, then I'd start constructing my paragraph...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Jun 29, 2015 / eddies - Jun 29, 2015
|The cause and measurement in solving the rise of crime rate
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 29, 2015
|Financial penalties in traffic. Should fines be mainly applied rather than some other policies?
6 - As far as I am concerned, more scholars, who focus on formal writing, will write the first paragraph with...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Jun 29, 2015
|Why is sport is important at school?
4 - Hello M19, I read your essay. I think you have got sufficient description about your grammar and style...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 28, 2015 / Junisha111p - Jun 29, 2015
|Having more than one job. Possible causes and suggestions for future working.
3 - Firstly, due to the demand of having more exciting working environments, workers today are no longer expecting to spend...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / Adhisti - Jun 29, 2015
|Should we save and restore some languages?
2 - I would be happy to assist you with this essay. I have suggested some changes in grammar and meaning....
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 29, 2015
|Although we cannot emit automobiles from our world, they work destructive for our quality of life
4 - This is an informative essay about cars! What you need though is better form. For example, you need separate...
Writing FeedbackNaph - May 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 29, 2015
|Nature and nurture on human's intelligence - innate inheritance and personal experiences influence
2 - - In my opinion, neither of these two factors alone is enough for individuals'one's development. - SecondlyNow ,...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2015
|Do movies or TV influence people's behaviour? Use specific reasons and examples in your answer.
Writing Feedbackalinatsoy12 - Jun 29, 2015 / alinatsoy12 - Jun 29, 2015
|Responsibility of problems - People or Governments
3 - Eric27, WELCOME to the EssayForum Family, it's a pleasure to have yet another member of the ever-growing EF...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Jun 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2015
|Should all education and healthcare be funded by the government and free for everyone?
2 - There should be 'services' instead of 'cervices' in the last paragraph. You should also give more arguments about:...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 28, 2015 / Rich Monte - Jun 28, 2015
|Childhood life is the most important period
2 - I have some small suggestions: ' Consequence , It reflects on their health in future' => Subsequently, it reflects...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 25, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|Are testing and examinations justified? The current system needs some improvements.
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 28, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|The appreciation for positive actions is the best way to teach
5 - Well, this opening sentence is not in conjunction with the prompt given. You need to replace it, e.g...
Writing Feedbackanamikam_vns - Jun 25, 2015 / eddies - Jun 28, 2015
|GRE ISSUE - evaluation of the most effective teaching methods.
7 - Thank you very much for your help and useful instructions. I will follow the same. I will keep writing...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Jun 28, 2015 / Junisha111p - Jun 28, 2015
|Are examinations good selectors off the classrooms?
3 - Tuananh, WELCOME to EssayForum Family, we're growing and we're thrilled to have you as part of the family. ...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2015
|Insecure feelings in people. Causes and suggestions.
3 - - There is a large number of number(make sure to proof read) of people who experience the sense of...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2015
|The intrinsic value of doing homework. Is it necessary for students?
2 - Kuroneko, WELCOME to EssayForum, we're an ever - growing family and we're happy to have you!!! Now, I...
Writing FeedbackKuroNeko - Jun 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2015
|What should be taught in universities?
3 - I have only one suggestion: 'the primary culprit' instead of ' the main culprit' Anyway, your essay is great!...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|Traditional library vs internet - what should be more supported?
3 - Your essay is really great but I still think that your introduction is quite long and also, I think...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 26, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|Traffic problems - a headache issue that we have to solve right now for the society development
8 - you must be taking the university entrance exam in Vietnam? MOD comment:The only allowed comments are those regarding...
Writing FeedbackEddie16 - Jun 26, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 27, 2015
|Why it is correct that you take the BUOP's grant? Because I am "Progressive"
6 - Hi lcturn87. I wanna say big thank you because i got this grant yesterday after short interview. it was...
Writing FeedbackGuest - Jun 19, 2015 / Guest - Jun 27, 2015
|The controversial issue - how to combine spendings for education with sport and recreation?
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Jun 26, 2015 / cookie234 - Jun 27, 2015
|Students broad spectrum of knowledge? It would be an important step to improve their personality.
Writing Feedbackanamikam_vns - Jun 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 27, 2015
|[TOEFL] Books and Internet, which one is better to use to research?
9 - I think its perfect but some correction is needed like in ur both body paragraph i find the same...
Writing Feedbackwadpk - Jun 25, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 26, 2015
|It is quite common presently for younger people to have a break from studying after graduating
3 - Jaggi, I agree with EF_Carol, your essay is written well, good job!!! However, I would like to share...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 25, 2015
|The web let us have an easy access to the latest information and let us easily bond with each other.
3 - Shuyuan, I believe your new to EssayForum, a very warm WELCOME to the EF Family... Now, I'll make...
Writing Feedbackshuyuan51039 - Jun 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 25, 2015
|Is Consumerism a major problem for societies today?
2 - Niravv, I would like to take this opportunity to WELCOME you to EssayForum. You're yet another addition to the...
Writing Feedbackniravv - Jun 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 24, 2015
|Criminal habitual relapse. Cause and suggestions
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 24, 2015
|"Time flies". So grab all the moments you can within the time. Indeed college years are the best.
6 - You wrote an excellent essay on college years! I think your basic structure is good. So is yourvocabulary and...
Writing Feedbacksally_922 - Jun 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 24, 2015
|Should government support local film makers financially?
4 - The movie industry->movie industry where these filmmakers-> where filmmakers. you have not mentions those filmmaker. Therefore, it is not...
Writing Feedbackwei0531 - Jun 22, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|"My Terrible Neighborhood" - Stating reasons and giving examples paragraph.
Writing FeedbackChamsky - Jun 23, 2015 / Chamsky - Jun 23, 2015
|Write a paragraph to give advice for beginners of the English language ( About 140 words)
3 - - It's advisable that beginners of the English language should take the four following advicecritics . - FirstlyFirst...
Writing Feedbackvtnmai - Jun 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|Making handmade stuffs is my hobby - every girl should be clever with her hands
Writing Feedbackvinvin - Jun 9, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 23, 2015
|Music and sports are not important in school
3 - There were some slight details that I wanted to assist you with changing. I organized the changes according to...
Writing Feedbackqiyunyiyu - Jun 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 23, 2015
|The students should do part-time job to look at how different the real world is.
4 - - FirstlyFirst , working would help students fill gaps in their knowledge, especially for practical knowledge which they may...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
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