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|Financial penalties in traffic. Should fines be mainly applied rather than some other policies?
6 - As far as I am concerned, more scholars, who focus on formal writing, will write the first paragraph with...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Jun 29, 2015
|Why is sport is important at school?
4 - Hello M19, I read your essay. I think you have got sufficient description about your grammar and style...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 28, 2015 / Junisha111p - Jun 29, 2015
|Having more than one job. Possible causes and suggestions for future working.
3 - Firstly, due to the demand of having more exciting working environments, workers today are no longer expecting to spend...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / Adhisti - Jun 29, 2015
|Should we save and restore some languages?
2 - I would be happy to assist you with this essay. I have suggested some changes in grammar and meaning....
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 29, 2015
|Although we cannot emit automobiles from our world, they work destructive for our quality of life
4 - This is an informative essay about cars! What you need though is better form. For example, you need separate...
Writing FeedbackNaph - May 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 29, 2015
|Nature and nurture on human's intelligence - innate inheritance and personal experiences influence
2 - - In my opinion, neither of these two factors alone is enough for individuals'one's development. - SecondlyNow ,...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2015
|Do movies or TV influence people's behaviour? Use specific reasons and examples in your answer.
Writing Feedbackalinatsoy12 - Jun 29, 2015 / alinatsoy12 - Jun 29, 2015
|Responsibility of problems - People or Governments
3 - Eric27, WELCOME to the EssayForum Family, it's a pleasure to have yet another member of the ever-growing EF...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Jun 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 29, 2015
|Should all education and healthcare be funded by the government and free for everyone?
2 - There should be 'services' instead of 'cervices' in the last paragraph. You should also give more arguments about:...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 28, 2015 / Rich Monte - Jun 28, 2015
|Childhood life is the most important period
2 - I have some small suggestions: ' Consequence , It reflects on their health in future' => Subsequently, it reflects...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 25, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|Are testing and examinations justified? The current system needs some improvements.
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 28, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|The appreciation for positive actions is the best way to teach
5 - Well, this opening sentence is not in conjunction with the prompt given. You need to replace it, e.g...
Writing Feedbackanamikam_vns - Jun 25, 2015 / eddies - Jun 28, 2015
|GRE ISSUE - evaluation of the most effective teaching methods.
7 - Thank you very much for your help and useful instructions. I will follow the same. I will keep writing...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Jun 28, 2015 / Junisha111p - Jun 28, 2015
|Are examinations good selectors off the classrooms?
3 - Tuananh, WELCOME to EssayForum Family, we're growing and we're thrilled to have you as part of the family. ...
Writing Feedbacktuananh - Jun 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2015
|Insecure feelings in people. Causes and suggestions.
3 - - There is a large number of number(make sure to proof read) of people who experience the sense of...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2015
|The intrinsic value of doing homework. Is it necessary for students?
2 - Kuroneko, WELCOME to EssayForum, we're an ever - growing family and we're happy to have you!!! Now, I...
Writing FeedbackKuroNeko - Jun 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 28, 2015
|What should be taught in universities?
3 - I have only one suggestion: 'the primary culprit' instead of ' the main culprit' Anyway, your essay is great!...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|Traditional library vs internet - what should be more supported?
3 - Your essay is really great but I still think that your introduction is quite long and also, I think...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 26, 2015 / tuananh - Jun 28, 2015
|Traffic problems - a headache issue that we have to solve right now for the society development
8 - you must be taking the university entrance exam in Vietnam? MOD comment:The only allowed comments are those regarding...
Writing FeedbackEddie16 - Jun 26, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 27, 2015
|Why it is correct that you take the BUOP's grant? Because I am "Progressive"
6 - Hi lcturn87. I wanna say big thank you because i got this grant yesterday after short interview. it was...
Writing FeedbackGuest - Jun 19, 2015 / Guest - Jun 27, 2015
|The controversial issue - how to combine spendings for education with sport and recreation?
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Jun 26, 2015 / cookie234 - Jun 27, 2015
|Students broad spectrum of knowledge? It would be an important step to improve their personality.
Writing Feedbackanamikam_vns - Jun 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 27, 2015
|[TOEFL] Books and Internet, which one is better to use to research?
9 - I think its perfect but some correction is needed like in ur both body paragraph i find the same...
Writing Feedbackwadpk - Jun 25, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 26, 2015
|It is quite common presently for younger people to have a break from studying after graduating
3 - Jaggi, I agree with EF_Carol, your essay is written well, good job!!! However, I would like to share...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 25, 2015
|The web let us have an easy access to the latest information and let us easily bond with each other.
3 - Shuyuan, I believe your new to EssayForum, a very warm WELCOME to the EF Family... Now, I'll make...
Writing Feedbackshuyuan51039 - Jun 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 25, 2015
|Is Consumerism a major problem for societies today?
2 - Niravv, I would like to take this opportunity to WELCOME you to EssayForum. You're yet another addition to the...
Writing Feedbackniravv - Jun 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 24, 2015
|Criminal habitual relapse. Cause and suggestions
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 24, 2015
|"Time flies". So grab all the moments you can within the time. Indeed college years are the best.
6 - You wrote an excellent essay on college years! I think your basic structure is good. So is yourvocabulary and...
Writing Feedbacksally_922 - Jun 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 24, 2015
|Should government support local film makers financially?
4 - The movie industry->movie industry where these filmmakers-> where filmmakers. you have not mentions those filmmaker. Therefore, it is not...
Writing Feedbackwei0531 - Jun 22, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|"My Terrible Neighborhood" - Stating reasons and giving examples paragraph.
Writing FeedbackChamsky - Jun 23, 2015 / Chamsky - Jun 23, 2015
|Write a paragraph to give advice for beginners of the English language ( About 140 words)
3 - - It's advisable that beginners of the English language should take the four following advicecritics . - FirstlyFirst...
Writing Feedbackvtnmai - Jun 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|Making handmade stuffs is my hobby - every girl should be clever with her hands
Writing Feedbackvinvin - Jun 9, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 23, 2015
|Music and sports are not important in school
3 - There were some slight details that I wanted to assist you with changing. I organized the changes according to...
Writing Feedbackqiyunyiyu - Jun 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 23, 2015
|The students should do part-time job to look at how different the real world is.
4 - - FirstlyFirst , working would help students fill gaps in their knowledge, especially for practical knowledge which they may...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 21, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|The idea of free universities - what is your opinion? The quality is even more important question.
5 - almost universities-> most universities in this relationship-> in this mutual relationship they need to make money to fund scholarship...
Writing Feedbackchuoi9 - Jun 5, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|Compare/Contrast Essay - Similarities and differences between Me and my Brother
5 - Congratulations Bluebabey!!! There's no greater joy for an editor like myself than to know that I was able...
Writing FeedbackBlueBabey - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 23, 2015
|Sending the first human to the moon - how it has affected mankind?
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jun 22, 2015 / lacusclyne - Jun 23, 2015
|Do you think that universities should be available for all students and free?
2 - - University education is the cornerstone of development in all fields of life, medicine, engineering, sciences, and others. ...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 20, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2015
|Advertisement on USA summer camps jobs - write why you want work there.
2 - - Summer camps are regarded as significant activities to build children's skills and develop their abilities to create good...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 17, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 22, 2015
|Family closeness is not so tight nowadays as it used to be in the past. The root cause of it is...
2 - Spelling : unbelieveably = unbelievable interested in thier : their .... Most of the family members are do works...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 21, 2015 / M19O09F11 - Jun 22, 2015
|Working in a child period may make more living comfort in the future due to gaining early experience
NEW - In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid works. Some people regard this as wrong, while...
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|Should sports athletes be rewarded with high salary?
3 - Good jobs!!! But there're still some small mistakes. +Beingincapable participate in this industry => incapable of. You should be...
Writing Feedbackhan4 - Jun 21, 2015 / cookie234 - Jun 21, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - the relations between nature and training abilities
Writing Feedbackriankia - Jun 19, 2015 / riankia - Jun 21, 2015
|Should companies and individual pay to clean up the environment in proportion to their actions?
3 - Hi Marned, Thanks for your comment. I'm trying to improve my writing, and have been reading a...
Writing Feedbackhan4 - Jun 20, 2015 / han4 - Jun 21, 2015
|Distance between family members is extremely increasing nowadays.
Writing Feedbackmarned - Jun 13, 2015 / marned - Jun 21, 2015
|University education helps get a better job or give more benefits for both individuals and society
4 - Your welcome, I don't think like you. I think you can write easily by keeping writing. Write more and...
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Jun 20, 2015 / marned - Jun 21, 2015
|In my opinion, all general subjects should be all taught to students for several reasons.
3 - Thank you Eric2750230, I really appreciate it. I do not have much time now and have to review fast...
Writing Feedbackthanhnguyen279 - Jun 19, 2015 / thanhnguyen279 - Jun 20, 2015
|This topic was supposed to be for Spotlighting a person in the community!
Writing FeedbackMagic_Wizard - Jun 19, 2015 / Magic_Wizard - Jun 19, 2015
|The new Internet problems. Threat for the children and cyber crime - IELTS
3 - I also think your writing was very organized. You have good transitions. Well done! Here are some suggestions to...
Writing Feedbackgundampro - Jun 16, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 18, 2015
|Write a letter to this person for an English lesson [ielts writing]
4 - Your letter is well written, but needs some attention. You should break up the one long intro ,into three...
Writing Feedbackterrytu - May 25, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 18, 2015
|How to minimize the levels of stress in high school students?
3 - Lets talk about your conclusion! Take apart your concluding sentence, and then write a sentence, about each idea. ...
Writing FeedbackKibaco15 - May 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 18, 2015
|We can not critique Internet as good or bad. It is a multifaceted problem.
3 - Some is famous for being criticized and belittled for posting unhealthy things on the Internet experts have also showed...
Writing Feedbackphoenix99 - Jun 16, 2015 / M19O09F11 - Jun 17, 2015
|What people do with their rubbish and how a town tries to keep the area clean and attractive?
3 - Well not in the whole paragraph, just the first line. The words are not connected that well which later...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / sally_922 - Jun 16, 2015
|Public transport for health keeping, pollution reducing and environment protection.
3 - Keep in mind where u use fullstop point becuase there is lot which are wrongly used. Next,use some complex...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : THE BENEFIT OF THE INTERNET FOR COMMUNICATION AND LITERATURE
3 - Asep, As far as I am concern, we have to paraphrase the words and stucture in IELTS writing. However,...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 15, 2015
|Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. The essay of TOEFL.
Writing FeedbackImladris - Jun 14, 2015 / Imladris - Jun 15, 2015
|Health services should accessible for every person.
3 - Hey there, overall you have a good essay. However if I were you, I'd probably start my argumentative essay...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 15, 2015 / Spredde - Jun 15, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - People get into debt for buying unnecessary things
2 - peoplebecome so consumerism... CORRECTED: people become so consumeristic... You need adjective there, not a noun. You are...
Writing FeedbackHettymsk - May 24, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 14, 2015
|The main problems associated with phenomenon of common Internet usage
3 - Hallo Minh, I would render you some suggestion for this essay: Inaccurate information and hackers are the...
Writing FeedbackMinh Yen - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|IELTS: PEOPLE OBEY TO INTAKE VARIOUS GRASS-FED ANIMALS IN ORDER TO OFFER BENEFIT TO ENVIRONMENT
3 - Thank you for giving me some suggestion. I would try to re-write my article in terms of your advise....
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
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