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|IELTS GT: whether cultural traditions should be used as a money-machine?
2 - Carol, this is an excellent first try at an IELTS GT. You were ble to properly develop opinions in...
Writing Feedbacksoulseeker - Jan 17, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2016
|Should only staff who have worked in a company for a long time be promoted to a higher position?
3 - Mai, when you are asked to directly discuss your opinion on a given topic, always make sure to take...
Writing Feedbackjaemi228 - Jan 16, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2016
|Early education for young children to help them to hone their intellectual and social skills - TOEFL
3 - Nour in an actual test, your essay will most likely not get a passing score because you did not...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Jan 15, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 16, 2016
|A comparison in the level of the readers at the Burnaby library from 2011 to 2014 based on gender
3 - The chart illustrates the comparison of the total books read by males and females at Burnaby Public Library...
Writing Feedbackyogi07 - Jan 14, 2016 / eddies - Jan 15, 2016
|The lines for Pavilion show a significant growth. Tourists in Brighton during the years of 1980-2010
3 - This paragraph needs a slight improvement, since some sentences lack clarity. Let me give a try; A comparison...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk31 - Jan 14, 2016 / eddies - Jan 15, 2016
|Task 1 - Outokumpu Stock Price in euros between 2006 and 2010
3 - The line chart presents some alterations to Outokumpu's share price between 2006 and 2010, a period of 4...
Writing Feedbackwahyutri13 - Jan 14, 2016 / eddies - Jan 15, 2016
|TOEFL Independent essay- owning smart phones by young children
4 - Hey @Nournour, Below you may find some suggestions regarding your essay. Hope this helps. Smart phonesisare one...
Writing FeedbackNourNour - Dec 25, 2015 / brayan1996 - Jan 15, 2016
|Toefl Writing: Governments have done enough to educate people the importance of healthy eating.
3 - My remarks are about the format of your essay. You have to make sure that every body paragraph should...
Writing FeedbackOlivia33 - Jan 5, 2016 / NourNour - Jan 15, 2016
|TASK 1 - The Share Price of Outokumpu Companies from January 2006 to December 2010
Writing Feedbackichanpants89 - Jan 14, 2016 / eddies - Jan 15, 2016
|I would like to know how much band score can I get in IELTS?
2 - Band Score: 5 Sandy,the most important part of any exam essay is the introduction. That is the launching...
Writing Feedbackhannasan - Jan 15, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2016
|Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
2 - Bijal, the opening statement is fine. The main problem that I see in it is that you addressed the...
Writing Feedbackbijal - Jan 15, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2016
|Task 1: Amount of books purchased in Germany, France, Italy and Austria during 1995 to 2005
3 - hi, the graph illustrate the much (more) money spent .... US dollar was the currency used for the...
Writing Feedbackfariz10 - Jan 14, 2016 / bijal - Jan 15, 2016
|GRE Argument Essay: Should dog adoption program be initiated ?
Writing Feedbackjvishal - Jan 14, 2016 / jvishal - Jan 15, 2016
|The rate of books read at Burnaby Public Library in a period of four year between 2011 and 2014
3 - Your first two paragraphs lack the mandatory three sentence minimum requirement for essay paragraphs in formal tests. You need...
Writing FeedbackPey28 - Jan 14, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2016
|Task 1 Precentage of Tourist to England who Visited Brighton Attractions
2 - You have shown a clear understanding of the chart. The way that you presented the information was complete and...
Writing Feedbackerin24 - Jan 14, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2016
|IELTS - an essay discussed about who should take the responsibility for education
6 - It is really much better than before! I will learn from this and make more practice! Thanks for your...
Writing Feedbackdaniel_chen - Jan 12, 2016 / daniel_chen - Jan 14, 2016
|TASK 1 - MONEY SPENT ON BOOKS IN FOUR EUROPEAN COUNTRIES
2 - Muhammad, your report overview is incomplete. You need to divide your information into 3 sentences otherwise your introduction will...
Writing Feedbackfijarakbar25 - Jan 14, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 14, 2016
|Electric-based media affect negatively on interpersonal relationships if not used wisely
2 - .. relationships towards each other turn TEND to get worse since they STARTED use USING those media. ... see...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Jan 6, 2016 / jvishal - Jan 14, 2016
|TOEFL Independent-Technology lessens children's creativity. Do you agree or disagree?
6 - Thank you very much. I thought writing about the opposite side of the issue may reduce my grade since...
Writing FeedbackSaharnaz - Jan 13, 2016 / Saharnaz - Jan 14, 2016
|There is a general increase in anti-social behaviors and lack of respect for others - IELTS
2 - Thanh, even though your essay is a grammatical mess at this point, you will be pleased to know that...
Writing FeedbackThanh Hoang - Jan 14, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 14, 2016
|Fossil fuels are not going to last forever and nuclear power is the cheapest alternative - IELTS
8 - Hi vangiespen,I like your comments, they are very beneficial to me. Could you check my other essay if you...
Writing FeedbackOZLEM1988 - Jan 11, 2016 / OZLEM1988 - Jan 13, 2016
|Parents encourage their children to have a job or travel for a year after finishing high school
NEW - In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and...
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|The Most creative Literature Value Contents Of The Most Beautiful Dreams Of Both The USA And The UN
Writing Feedbackjusgerr - Jan 10, 2016 / jusgerr - Jan 13, 2016
|'fast, convenient and flexible approaching' - IELTS Task 2 - Discuss the aspects of online shopping.
2 - I am impressed with your wide range of vocabulary. It's a crucial factor that helps you score high in...
Writing Feedbacklanphungaoi - Jan 6, 2016 / Juniedang - Jan 12, 2016
|IELTS / Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change
Writing FeedbackOZLEM1988 - Jan 12, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 12, 2016
|Don't judge something from the cover - the most important indication (writing task II)
4 - Don't judge something from the cover, (...) picking out some clothes to wear. Read this sample intro: Clothing is...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 9, 2016 / eddies - Jan 12, 2016
|The more population a country have, the more amount of water will be used. Cambridge IELTS 6 Test 1
Writing Feedbackahk - Jan 12, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 12, 2016
|[IELTS] Causes and solutions for increasing average weight in some countries
2 - Junie, the score for this type of writing, as far as I am concerned, should be somewhere around the...
Writing FeedbackJuniedang - Jan 12, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 12, 2016
|Discuss different views and show what do you think about fix punishment
Writing Feedbacktantan - Jan 12, 2016 / tantan - Jan 12, 2016
|Suggestion for adolescents to take a job for a gap year between school and third-level education
3 - Every person needs a job to be well-roundedJob experience shapes people's characters . Whilst A SUCH, some people render...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 8, 2016 / eddies - Jan 12, 2016
|The graph provide an information on the fish and different kind of meat consumption among Europeans.
3 - thank you so much Vangiespen, Could you give me some mistakes of this essay? topic: Some people believe that...
Writing Feedbacktantan - Jan 12, 2016 / tantan - Jan 12, 2016
|Vegetarian is a new way of life, many people used to apply it. But is it good for them?
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Jan 10, 2016 / febiyani - Jan 11, 2016
|It has become a common pattern that successful sports professionals are paid a fortune
Writing FeedbackJuniedang - Jan 10, 2016 / Juniedang - Jan 11, 2016
|IELTS: Some people argue that the sole purpose of business is to make a profit - the more the better
4 - Since globalization era, it is much more easily for people to enter business world. While some people argue that...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Jan 9, 2016 / Juniedang - Jan 11, 2016
|BRINGING UP CHILDREN BY GRANDPARENTS IS GOOD OR NOT?
3 - Hi, This essay needs depth, the entire essay is essentially a list of reasons for or against with no...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Jan 11, 2016 / jon4659 - Jan 11, 2016
|Men have much more leisure time than women. Cambridge IELTS 2 Test 2 Writing Task 1
4 - Generally speaking, it can be seen clearly from the data that men spend much more leisure time than women....
Writing Feedbackahk - Jan 11, 2016 / tigeryip510 - Jan 11, 2016
|'A shrill cry echoed in the mist' - Descriptive piece inspired by gothic horror
2 - Marleen, I was actually immersed in the story as you told it. I found myself wanting to read on...
Writing Feedbackmarleeeeenx - Jan 11, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 11, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 : BAR CHART ABOUT VEHICLE HYBRID-TECH SALES IN JAPAN, US, AND OTHER COUNTRIES
3 - ... commerce of hybrid transports during a 3-year period, from 2006 to 2009, in Japan, US, and other countries....
Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Jan 8, 2016 / annahatef - Jan 11, 2016
|Pablo Picasso once said "the purpose of art is washing the dust of daily life off your souls".
2 - You did excellent work in creating an opening statement that lays a solid foundation for your topic thesis. The...
Writing FeedbackThea101 - Jan 10, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 10, 2016
|IELTS Task 1: A Breakdown of Weather in Two Brazilian Cities
NEW - A breakdown of weather in two Brazilian cities which consist of sunshine absorption hours, thunder days, and temperature measurement...
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|IELTS TASK 2: Clothes become an indicator in people's characteristics
3 - ... clothes are extremely important accessories in PARTS OF someone's physical appearance. ... Yet, the opponents OTHERS argue that...
Writing Feedbackpikul - Jan 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Electronic media may bring dire effects on people's relationships and everyone should be aware of it
3 - Pikul, first, I'd like to suggest on keeping just 2 paragraphs, merge the paragraphs in order to make it....
Writing Feedbackpikul - Jan 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 9, 2016
|Why People Choose Vegetarian Lifestyle? | IELTS Task 2
3 - I would argue that this IS UTTERLY unacceptable method because would affect immune system. you forgot to put be...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Jan 9, 2016 / pikul - Jan 9, 2016
|Mass media focus too much on gossips, disseminating celebrities' issues even though it is not worthy
2 - The media playS a pivotal role in providing valuable accessible information lifestyles and relationships of IN CONNECTION WITH...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 8, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Do clothes and styles people wear can define their characters?
2 - Therefore, it is believed that fashion can tell describe someone's personality. ... As for me AS FAR AS I...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Jan 8, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Current era influences people to live in a sedentary lifestyle - it is not healthy (writing task II)
3 - Current THE TECHNOLOGICAL era WE LIVE IN influences people to live in a sedentary lifestyle. Some people claim such...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 9, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Investors hold more important role in communal equipment improvement (investments) than doctors
3 - Riska, you have just failed this test. The reason that you failed? You misunderstood the prompt. You interchanged the...
Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Jan 8, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Should business executives focus on making money? - IELTS WRITING TASK 2
2 - Halo @dynaranjani. Let give me some suggestion to your essay. - Try to make your paragraph follow the...
Writing Feedbackdynaranjani - Jan 9, 2016 / mujahid_fadli - Jan 9, 2016
|The Tendency of Rainfall and Temperature in Brasilia and Recife | IELTS Task 1
2 - A breakdown of the number of precipitation amount of precipitation which is judged based on the factors ofinclude hours...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Jan 9, 2016 / pratik0406 - Jan 9, 2016
|IELTS TASK 1 - BAR CHARTS INFORMATION ON THE GLOBAL SALE HYBRID VEHICLES BEETWEN 2006 AND 2009.
3 - Hi, Mr. andika. Obviously, your essay is really 'simple', and this what we call 'shopping list'. Since you just...
Writing Feedbackandika06 - Jan 8, 2016 / Clark Kent - Jan 9, 2016
|An electronic communication gives a rise to a poor relation between citizens with others.
2 - Firstly, they claim personsPERSON ALWAYS SINGULAR YOU CAN PUT S IN THE END OF THE WORD, YOU SHOULD USE...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 9, 2016 / pikul - Jan 9, 2016
|Aims and Objectives of a Business - is it the funds only?
2 - LateLETS takes Google's company as a sample, 25 % fromOF their annual income will use up for charity. Therefore,...
Writing FeedbackSaputra Putra - Jan 9, 2016 / pikul - Jan 9, 2016
|IELTS Task 2, Do the students pay the tuition fee by themselves, agree or disagree ?
5 - Hi vangiespen, I highly appreciate your time and helps. I will get in deeper those issues. Many...
Writing Feedbackwatanabe - Jan 5, 2016 / watanabe - Jan 9, 2016
|MERITS AND DEMERITS OF REFRIGERATOR AND WASHING MACHINE
2 - There are many disadvantages that the use of customer goods like as This essay iswill explain both of these...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Jan 8, 2016 / tigeryip510 - Jan 9, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - Clothes as a significant sign of the tendency what people are like
2 - Clothes help to protect [i]our bodies[/i] A 2015 recent study by Renata Rim asa psychologist ...who have...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 8, 2016 / tigeryip510 - Jan 9, 2016
|Having an own car is more convenient than using public transport so vehicles number will rise. TOEFL
NEW - Do you agree or disagree In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today....
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|IELTS: The only field of activity for businesses is just to make money?
2 - another aspect that should be A consideration for the betterment of businesses. Apparently all businesses in the world...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 8, 2016 / Bayan - Jan 9, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - What is the proper dress code at work?
2 - First impression is essential in at workplace. ... worn by employees since it gives rise to boosts company's...
Writing Feedbacksharfina - Jan 8, 2016 / hypersis - Jan 8, 2016
|TOEFL Task: See a movie in a cinema with other people or in an appartment? Better, cheaper at home.
2 - Kinds ofmanytypesgenres of movies are provided made for people to see , such as romantics, drama, action, etc. Part...
Writing Feedbackliuzhengxian - Jan 8, 2016 / hypersis - Jan 8, 2016
|IELTS 2 - doctors or inventors are more important? Inventors also have a big role in human live.
2 - Technology has developedis developing rapidly these days because plenty ofmany scientists work enthusiastically in order to find new inventionsinvent...
Writing Feedbacknaura88 - Jan 8, 2016 / hypersis - Jan 8, 2016
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