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|Writing task 2 : Encouraging young people to work or travel
3 - Begin your essay with the topic sentence. Then collect ideas about how this helps young people (adavantages) and write...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 15, 2015 / jomi - Apr 16, 2015
|The United States is continuously facing illegal immigration problems - Argumentative Essay
NEW - I had to write an argumentative paper and I chose to write about immigration. I need help developing my...
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|Are human beings by nature primarily selfish or unselfish? SAT Essay.
3 - The major principle...on order to overcome an invorn tendency --->The major principle...in order to overcome an invorn tendency ...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Apr 6, 2015 / amytsai - Apr 15, 2015
|SAT Essay - Does everyone see a thing from the same perspective?
2 - There was a impoverished man--> There was an impoverished man I think your essay is too weak, without...
Writing FeedbackFTfT - Apr 6, 2015 / amytsai - Apr 15, 2015
|Should fresh graduates continue their study to the next level?
2 - Critics to thisthe idea of postbaccalaureate program claim that young people who start their career soon after graduation may...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Apr 15, 2015 / lightfox - Apr 15, 2015
|Once people could breath in a fresh air, their life was greater than todays convenience life.
3 - Hello Stacy, I have marked some points. Here are they; Para 1: the common benefit that we found on...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015 / eddies - Apr 15, 2015
|Combine studying with playing in education children is necessary
Writing Feedbacktamnguyen - Apr 14, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 15, 2015
|The youngsters should use their opportunities to travel or work wisely - it might help to find a job
3 - I suggest stating young people throughout the essay since this is the essay question. However, you may use youngster...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 15, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 15, 2015
|The bar chart gives information regarding to the percentage of reason
2 - Farhan, your analysis is good, its detailed, just be mindful of your word usage, grammar and sentence construction such...
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2015
|IELTS TASK: Continue further education, or work?
5 - Many of them believed that it is more beneficial to take their study to the next level, rather than...
Writing Feedbackasrhkmtn - Apr 15, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015
|You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following
3 - To sum up, it seems that people lived in these days is better than one hundred years ago<------repetition (you...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 14, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 15, 2015
|Writing task 2 : Advertising leads people to purchase unnecessary products
4 - The aforementioned evidence reveals that although some advertising may become useful valuevaluable for people, people should be selective finding...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 14, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 15, 2015
|Alternative methods of the world exploring
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 7, 2015 / eddies - Apr 15, 2015
|Advertising is known as the predominant factor which influence the high sales of popular stuff
3 - Change the word stuff to goods in this essay. This will help the reader to understand that you are...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 14, 2015
|Living in a comfortable apartment is always a good choice and the same applies to univerity students
3 - Actually i don't know that students can decide if they would like to live in a dormitory or an...
Writing FeedbackRafiq24 - Apr 13, 2015 / Rafiq24 - Apr 14, 2015
|The table provides the information which city is more expensive: Riverdale or Cape Alicia
4 - You didn't discuss a 7% percent figure in healthcare in the city of Riverdale. You only state the 7%...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 14, 2015
|The Influences of High sales to the advertisement and people attracting (IELTS Task 2)
2 - First of all, I would say that a prompt in IELTS plays an important role in leading readers' understanding....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 14, 2015 / eddies - Apr 14, 2015
|Being better life by advanced technology (IELTS Task 2)
2 - With regarding to live in the past, almost people used limited facilities. For example, if young people in wanted...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 14, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015
|Life now is better than it was 100 years ago though people in the past were able to enjoy their time
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|The amount of water use in 3 sector, and 2 different countries.
2 - some suggestions for your writing : In order to make a good introduction, you should begin with one...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|Traditional cultures of countries will be lost as technology develops (agree/disagree)
2 - No one would deny that the advancement of technology havehas immensely changed the way of people's lives, including traditional...
Writing Feedbackeunkokoko - Apr 14, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 14, 2015
|The producing and developing of phones have some positive and negative features
3 - thank you so much for your feedback and yes ı had misspelled the "i".. actually, ı was going to...
Writing Feedbacktomurcuk - Apr 12, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 13, 2015
|Gaining knowledge through watching TV and reading books
2 - Reading books and watching TV are two main ways that help us achieve a wide range of knowledge. While...
Writing FeedbackLamVu - Apr 2, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 13, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: Causes of Worldwide land degradation (Pie Chart and Table)
4 - Thanks Mr.eddies.. that's nice corrections for me to improve my writing skills. I should be grateful if you would...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|How might the advantages of studying in another country outweigh the disadvantages?
3 - I think you cannot even write "However' in the first paragraph, since there is no contrast opinion. With this...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 13, 2015
|Information about the number of entries on a two new music websites
2 - The line graph gives information about the number of visitor of two new music websites include Music Choice and...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|IELTS Task - showing that learning a foreign language already at primary school is more beneficial
NEW - Topic: Some experts believe that is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than...
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|The advertisement gives influence toward the increasing number of popular consumers of the goods
3 - Without a doubt, people now live in a consumer culture(repetition) . They are influenced quickly to buy some needs(if...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 13, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 13, 2015
|There is alot of things which worries me and the scholarschip would be a key to my "golden gate"
Writing Feedbackthuyhien1801 - Apr 12, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 13, 2015
|Writing Task 2 - some university students should only study one specialist subject
3 - Answer: Over recent years specialist subject at university is becoming debatable issue in higher education ministry. Some people...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|The number of kilometers of route and passengers per year of railway system in six different cities
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 12, 2015
|Maroon and Grey - "two page descriptive essay of a place without using I"
2 - 1st paragraph: Do you have to use the words maroon and grey in this essay? Place a comma between...
Writing Feedbackjricha - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|The chart informs the number of Bulgarians moving to different countries based on level of education
5 - Overall, it can be clearly be seen that the number (...) was the highest amongst other level of education,...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 11, 2015 / Anfalia - Apr 12, 2015
|Overusing of a common language encourages people to invent a new language for communication
3 - Hallo Mohjawahir... I think your writing is a good,but your conclusion is not complete, because you did not...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 11, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015
|Knowledge about some country lifestyle and culture helps to learn a language of this area
2 - Hallo Ms. Thuty..I have some suggesstions for you.. Here we go.. In order to learn a language well,...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 12, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015
|Two charts, one result in the survey of adult education; Writing task 1
3 - The two of the charts below present for publishing a survey youngster education with the first chart (you need...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 12, 2015 / Anfalia - Apr 12, 2015
|Balanced proportion of male and female in further education should not be applied.
2 - 1st paragraph: Make term plural in the first sentence. Explain what you mean by same proportion in gender. Are...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|Expenditure and amount of consumption on fast food in Britain during twenty years (the last century)
2 - Paragraph 1 corrections: The charts illustrate the expenditure on fast food by earning level group in pence per...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015 / cldales - Apr 12, 2015
|Positive effect of being international student will not outshine the demerits of it (IELTS Task 2)
3 - ... Therefore, I would argue that although students taking study in foreign countries get the negative impacts but the...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 11, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015
|Writing Task 2 : Paying attention to children's future should be one priority!
2 - ... done by school as the greatest values for pupils' ? in their development time ... ... can be...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 12, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015
|Proportions of travelers to England who visited art gallery, pavilion, pier or festival in Brighton
2 - The line graph illustrateschanges--> double verb the number of travelers to England for visiting four different attractions in Brighton...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 12, 2015
|Subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government
NEW - Nowadays, subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government. Many people suggest that teachers should...
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|IELTS TASK 2: General Approaching versus Vocational Systems in Secondary Education
2 - Hi windachan .. actually point to point and flow sentence of your introduction here is too wordiness,...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 12, 2015
|The amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams - the line graph
4 - The line graph illustrates the consumption of Spreads, including Margarine and Butter from 1981 to 2007. The quantity is...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 11, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 12, 2015
|IELTS Task 01 - Numbers of employed persons by job type and sex
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 6, 2012 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|Why English is an international language and why people want to study in English?
2 - It is true that millions of students (passed out - ??? OR YOU MEAN "graduated") from (HIGH) school or...
Writing Feedbacksumanta11feb - Mar 29, 2013 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|' the happiness we experience' - we experience special days in our life easier
2 - Hey Neo, Kindly find my help below; people(PEOPLE) may come up with different ideas about this subject...
Writing Feedbackneo1989 - Aug 11, 2012 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2015
|Many kinds of integration problems for people living abroad (%)
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2015
|Information device help people to work outside
NEW - Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their work place (eg. At home, when travelling, etc.)...
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|Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
2 - overall, i like your ideas^^.. i just write some corrections here, hope it helps^^ Some universities do not...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 10, 2015 / ririchwang - Apr 11, 2015
|Some persons claim, modern buildings ruin cities, others argue that they add interest. Discuss both!
2 - Recently, the development of the cities is valued mostly by its eye-catching architecture. Some people think that high-rise new...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 7, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 11, 2015
|Effects of balanced numbers of male and female students in universities
3 - In recent years, having higher education is becoming a mainly purposeof some people. Many universities are opening wider possibility...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 10, 2015 / sblack - Apr 10, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task 2: Accepting an equal proportion of degree students is looked at by the gender
2 - These days, some people believe that universities have accepted the proportion of student looking at their gender particularly between...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 10, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 10, 2015
|Proportional number of gender in education system
2 - Final comments: You only present one argument against gender equality mandates in the classroom, that it will force students...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015 / sblack - Apr 10, 2015
|Some personal data about me, my family and plans for the future - Introducing myself
Writing FeedbackSeven_Daly - Apr 6, 2015 / Seven_Daly - Apr 10, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task - work for unemployed individuals outbalances the lack of jobs
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 9, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 10, 2015
|Is watching television better for learning about another countries? Is there another way?
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 7, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015
|In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move
4 - some suggestion and discussion for your writing : Taking elderly people who lived in countryside as an example......
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 7, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015
|Smoking law that was inflicted on Quebec, use examples in relation to Jeremy Bentham
2 - Hi Geoff, Kindly find my help below; Many people were satisfied(;- DELETE PUNCTUATION) however, there were many...
Writing FeedbackGeoff - May 28, 2009 / justivy03 - Apr 9, 2015
|Journal essay (welfare state)
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