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|Just laws and unjust laws : GRE Issue task
2 - we should backward strictly seek a reflection on how just and unjust law can be determined We should look...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Sep 8, 2015 / collegebound28 - Sep 9, 2015
|School uniforms, agree or disagree? They 'save us alot of time in the morning'.
2 - I can help you with your essay. I think you should begin your essay by discussing that there are...
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|Human Trafficking - An Underlying Issue in Today's Society
2 - Human trafficking is a modern form of slavery involving the illegal trade of people for exploitation or commercial gain....
Writing FeedbackXYZ1356 - Sep 8, 2015 / rozha - Sep 9, 2015
|Parent should give smartphone to their school kids.
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Sep 8, 2015 / profes - Sep 9, 2015
|spending on health education and preventative measures (prevention is better than cure)
NEW - In wealthy countries,the focus of clinical care is changing from cure to prevention,to anticipate future diseases in currently healthy...
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|TOEFL_ The most important characteristic of successful politicians or leaders is communication skill
2 - hi Yayaku Very good writing!! Maybe you also can post the Topic in your writing area. This is...
Writing FeedbackYayaku - Sep 5, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 7, 2015
|TOEFL Independent Essay - to attract tourists: improve safety or improve buildings?
2 - Hi Mashup.. However, In my opinion for the sake of increasing tourists, government will look stupid if it...
Writing Feedbackmashup - Sep 6, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 7, 2015
|The argument on a memo from a company head management should be more accurate
Writing Feedbackvanooshe - Sep 6, 2015 / naitry - Sep 7, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Living in high-rise apartment less community spirit
3 - Some people say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it's advantageous...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 5, 2015 / ChamiJaya - Sep 6, 2015
|Discovering oneself does not happen in a day; in fact, for many finding themselves takes a lifetime
3 - Introduction is too lengthy for me. Unexpected events happen in lifetimes help people to discover their strengths and...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 5, 2015 / ChamiJaya - Sep 6, 2015
|SAT: We learn more from mistakes than our success - I have experienced it myself in the real life
Writing FeedbackMingzeLi - Sep 4, 2015 / MingzeLi - Sep 5, 2015
|The work we have impact our way of living. If it brings joy then we are happy.
Writing Feedbacksummerflora - Sep 4, 2015 / summerflora - Sep 5, 2015
|How does the media coverage on police shootings affect how the people view law enforcement?
Writing FeedbackAshlee2eez - Sep 1, 2015 / Ashlee2eez - Sep 4, 2015
|Today's life is less satisfied and less happy than in the past
3 - Thanks, In the second paragraph I can say that Medicine evolve in the last 30 years and medicines are...
Writing FeedbackVitor Barros - Sep 3, 2015 / Vitor Barros - Sep 4, 2015
|Men to share housework with women - topic idea
Writing FeedbackWendy White - Sep 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Sep 4, 2015
|TOEFL IndependentEssay - Tips how should governments encourage energy savings?
3 - I suppose that you should also extend your conclusion. the concluding paragraph can restate your thesis, summarize your point,...
Writing Feedbackmashup - Sep 1, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 3, 2015
|Foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Advantage outweight disadavantages
3 - I think the sentence "This reason is that they learn ..." in paragraph two, should be "The reason is...
Writing Feedbackdanielwong - Aug 31, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 3, 2015
|The bar chart shows that males enjoyed more leisure time than females throughout the period shown
4 - Hi guys, thank you very much for your comment, its so usefule. I am aiming to my official test...
Writing Feedbackbillyabbot - Sep 1, 2015 / billyabbot - Sep 3, 2015
|High school students should voluntarily participate in payable community services
3 - I think it is better to paraphrase " in the opinion of some people" by "some people opinion is...
Writing Feedbackdanielwong - Sep 2, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 3, 2015
|One person can't know everything so a group work is more effective than an individual work
Writing FeedbackThemselves2 - Sep 2, 2015 / Themselves2 - Sep 3, 2015
|Story about a sick person getting recovered from his cancer throughout my help.
2 - Greetings! At first, i want to congratulate you about your humanity. I found your writing interesting but i...
Writing Feedbackamandarailey - Sep 2, 2015 / Zahra ahmad - Sep 2, 2015
|Youth is wasted on the young
Writing Feedbackfhmashayekhi - Sep 2, 2015 / fhmashayekhi - Sep 2, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : The problem of over using internet
Writing Feedbackgo0905 - Aug 26, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 2, 2015
|The comparison of world inhabitants divided by each continents between 1900 and 2000
3 - As seen, you have very good attempt. Yet, you failed to introduce what's in the overview. An overview...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015 / eddies - Sep 2, 2015
|Educating children is more difficult today
Writing FeedbackConfusionstatio - Sep 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 1, 2015
|SAT Essay: Should we trust and accept common sense, or be skeptical of it?
3 - I would like to give you some feedback. You have been practicing for quite some time. Your writing...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Sep 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - Sep 1, 2015
|No unnecessary experiments on animals! Public should show responsibility. IELTS.
Writing FeedbackChamiJaya - Sep 1, 2015 / ChamiJaya - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 - Children are engaged in some kind of paid work
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015 / eddies - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS: Building new sports facilities is the best way for public health??
3 - Hello tk0308, maybe you can rewrite your introduction and conclusion. For introduction you can use paraphrase from the...
Writing Feedbacktk0308 - Aug 31, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015
|Violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. IELTS
3 - Hi Hung, let me rewrite the introduction In this contemporary era, the media such as television and video...
Writing FeedbackHung - Aug 22, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Sep 1, 2015
|IELTS task 1: The population of fishers and exported fish in the world
4 - - In 1970 , the highest number of world fishermen was living in Asia witnessed rose significantly , from...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 3, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|A breakdown of the process of water cycle. IELTS Task 1
4 - Hello, let me give the feedback for your improvement. - Please, you can use other sentence conectors such...
Writing Feedbackveaenia - Aug 4, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Aug 31, 2015
|Teachers are more influent than friends
3 - For introductory paragraph, you better put the thesis statement in the end. Let me give a try: It...
Writing FeedbackBangbang - Aug 31, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 31, 2015
|Zoo has no useful purpose. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbacknil - Aug 31, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Aug 31, 2015
|Without parents assistance children can easily be affected by bad habits, lifestyle and cultures
6 - This essay is well done. You have an intro conclusion and three body paragraphs. final tests, However... ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 31, 2015
|IELTS essay: Age limit for retirement is 50 in some countires and 65 to 70 in others
Writing FeedbackBalajiskb - Aug 25, 2015 / tk0308 - Aug 31, 2015
|Why should children learn a foreign language so early?
NEW - Original Question: Some experts believe that it is better for children to being learning a foreign language at primary...
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|Essay: Travelling & Tourism - if you don't afraid to take the risk then go ahead
2 - I can help you with your essay. 1st paragraph: Some people may see the positive side of travelling...
Writing FeedbackNamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 30, 2015
|A remote village brings the kind people, inexpensive, healthy food can be consumed in a countryside
2 - hi,here are some advice for you. In the first sentence,if you use the word"bygone",which indicates things happening a very...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Aug 30, 2015 / ANNA_ff - Aug 30, 2015
|Relationship should be for eternity - nothing else in this world can last forever
Writing Feedbackseasee - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|Transport by a train, airplane, underground, coach, bicycle, motorcycle, etc. should be encouraged
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|It is better if advertisements would not be allowed directed toward children
2 - errors comments typo errors Raising a child is achallengedchallenging task in all ages but at ages of 2 betweenbetween...
Writing Feedbackoblivionfire - Aug 28, 2015 / NamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015
|Agree or disagree: Educations nowadays is more difficult than in the past
2 - Here are my suggestions: As usual, whether or notDetermining whether educationeducations nowadays is more difficult now than...
Writing Feedbackvahid5570 - Aug 28, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 28, 2015
|Living up to the accustomed standard -Cbest writing practice essay
Writing Feedbackreddlegg99 - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 28, 2015
|Do you agree or disagree that advertising serves no purpose for the society and should be banned?
Writing Feedbacksinanju - Aug 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 28, 2015
|An example of my leadership TTU scholarship
2 - 1st paragraph: I think you should be more specific when you begin your essay. Here is a suggestion: "Throughout...
Writing FeedbackAubreythefruit - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|SAT Essay: good decisions vs. bad decisions
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|Is better to travel in their own country than in foreign countries
2 - "Most of people love traveling to other countries and even with in their own country, and it . Travelling...
Writing Feedbackminutespele - Aug 27, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 27, 2015
|Universe exploration projects - these are a waste of money and all the funds should be spent better
2 - Your writing is well done, but needs some help! secondly,, funds... You should call this a new...
Writing Feedbackorbital188 - Aug 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 27, 2015
|Why a company which build a large factory near my community gets my support? TOEFL essay
2 - - ...esspeciallyspecially ( be careful with your spelling, turn on spell checker) in hometowns. - This certainly has adverse...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 27, 2015
|GRE essay. Art is not meaningless and the governments should support it
2 - For long time,→ For a long time, I claim that, the government's support... → I claim that the government's...
Writing Feedbackey1011 - Aug 26, 2015 / orbital188 - Aug 27, 2015
|Hard work keeps us determined towards our destiny, the luck alone is not enough to succeed.
2 - in your second paragraph, "determined" doesn't feel like the right word. " It prevents us from being an...
Writing Feedbackmakr - Aug 26, 2015 / Aubreythefruit - Aug 26, 2015
|[Toefl] extended family continue importance
2 - Besides that, today face-to-face meeting was is affordable because airplane trips were are cheaper....
Writing Feedbacktakerisk - Aug 26, 2015 / makr - Aug 26, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are people defined by their occupations?
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 26, 2015
|Successful people are willing to examine new things and take risks - they can't accept routine
Writing Feedbackmsaleh - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 26, 2015
|[TOEFL] Internet provides a lot of information and it is positive
4 - Your 1st reason says internet make search easier and cheaper. But you didnt explain how cheaper?...
Writing Feedbackjoao_carlos - Aug 19, 2015 / makr - Aug 26, 2015
|Toefl Essays; Students can get some specific jobs only if they study science and mathematics
Writing Feedbackmakr - Aug 25, 2015 / joao_carlos - Aug 26, 2015
|The internet has transformed, but is still causing newer and newer problems
Writing Feedbackbany1020 - Aug 25, 2015 / bany1020 - Aug 26, 2015
|SAT Essay: Do people view things from the same perspective?
5 - Your ideas are concise , however, I would try to correct some of the grammar mistakes that are located...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 24, 2015 / Henr247 - Aug 25, 2015
|TOEFL: Building a new cinema in the neighborhood is beneficial.
NEW - It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support...
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