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|Learning about different languages in as early age as possible
2 - hai iqbal, there is no doubt that your writing is good. However, i have many comments that i hope...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 17, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 17, 2015
|The host country should welcome cultural differences but people have to follow the local behavior
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015 / sblack - Apr 16, 2015
|Issue with sponsoring problematic scientific researches
NEW - Hello, please help to evaluate my essay. If possible, please grade it on the 6 point scale. Thank you...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Apr 16, 2015 / — -
|Life cycle of the silkworms - how to produce the silk cloth from their cocoons?
2 - Your essay has plethora of grammatical errors, which make the essay difficult to be fathomed. I suggest that you...
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015 / dunguyen - Apr 16, 2015
|The improvement of technology, transportation, communication and infrastucture in the last 100 years
4 - You could write a good essay but take note of the following things: 1. Proofread. Always read your...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015 / Anushka - Apr 16, 2015
|Parents have an important role to choose their children profession but kids are more independent now
NEW - You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following topic:...
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|Scholar-leavers tend to be less focus on their subject - work or travel for a year between studying?
3 - In addition, traveling can improve students' language skills. As an obvious example, students who travel to foreign country can...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 15, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015
|With regard to the average of living cost in two different cities
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 14, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015
|Degrees granted of some subject in the National University during 1990 and 2010
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015
|Outers influence native culture - foreigners may face difficulties to pick local customs up.
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 16, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 16, 2015
|The figure of household internet access in different areas in a European country
2 - Please note the following: regarding = on European country = just state the country it can clearly be seen...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015 / cldales - Apr 16, 2015
|Is foreign language important for children? When to start teaching them?
2 - Hello Mr. Irham, I have some correction. Hope it will help you :) ... an obligation for whole...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 16, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - Apr 16, 2015
|People are difficult to permit their children to travel or doing work - IELTS
2 - I think that your intro need to rework, Teenagers are supported to travel to other countries before entering...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 14, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015
|Nowadays nothing is private: our culture has become too confessional and self-expressive.
Writing FeedbackAnushka - Apr 14, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 16, 2015
|I believe that host country must welcome an other behavior of foreign visitors.
NEW - Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 16, 2015 / — -
|It is important for host country to keep their culture identical (IELTS TASK 2)
NEW - I need some corrections in my essay here... Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 16, 2015 / — -
|Should students as young as fourteen be allowed to hold jobs?
2 - Hi phana .. I am tremendously enthusiastic about your writing, but let me give you some suggestion here ...
Writing Feedbackphanna - Apr 16, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 16, 2015
|Pie charts on the degrees granted at National University; computer science is the highest proportion
3 - Hi Irham..I have some suggestions for you.. Three pie charts compare levels of granted in several different subjects among...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 16, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015
|The budget of staying averages in two different towns as compared to the national cost-of-living
4 - Please include the picture of the graph, as it helps us understand what the graph is about. I have...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|'computer science is higher than other majors over the period' - National University fields degrees
2 - The pie chartsI see, there are three pie charts illustrates the information about the degrees granted ... Medicine and...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 16, 2015
|Ten-year summary on the amount of online sales for the New Zealand's retail sectors
3 - Stacy, a closer look at the slight improvement on the overview and the first topic sentence I have made....
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|Should people invent a new language?
3 - Secondly, people can improve their job prospect and it would change their life automatically. For this reason, many companies...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015
|The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities
2 - ... Health care, and Clothing are higher than other activities (sector) with the percentage at ... Then, The percentage...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 16, 2015
|Education in a better environment, great medical care and facilities - Pros of living in Big Cities
3 - Hi @member89... correction: make sure your spelling such as Furthuremore (Furthermore), studing (studying), thier (their), liesure (leisure), reccomand...
Writing Feedbackmember89 - Apr 8, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015
|Sat - Should we hold on to the old when innovations are available, or should we simply move forward?
3 - Since the dawn of civilization, men and women have been participating in an everlasting attempt to improve the life...
Writing Feedbackamytsai - Apr 15, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 16, 2015
|Cost of Living Average in Riverdale and in Cape Alicia
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015 / eddies - Apr 16, 2015
|Writing task 2 : Encouraging young people to work or travel
3 - Begin your essay with the topic sentence. Then collect ideas about how this helps young people (adavantages) and write...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 15, 2015 / jomi - Apr 16, 2015
|The United States is continuously facing illegal immigration problems - Argumentative Essay
NEW - I had to write an argumentative paper and I chose to write about immigration. I need help developing my...
Writing Feedbackvbbrianna - Apr 15, 2015 / — -
|Are human beings by nature primarily selfish or unselfish? SAT Essay.
3 - The major principle...on order to overcome an invorn tendency --->The major principle...in order to overcome an invorn tendency ...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Apr 6, 2015 / amytsai - Apr 15, 2015
|SAT Essay - Does everyone see a thing from the same perspective?
2 - There was a impoverished man--> There was an impoverished man I think your essay is too weak, without...
Writing FeedbackFTfT - Apr 6, 2015 / amytsai - Apr 15, 2015
|Should fresh graduates continue their study to the next level?
2 - Critics to thisthe idea of postbaccalaureate program claim that young people who start their career soon after graduation may...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Apr 15, 2015 / lightfox - Apr 15, 2015
|Once people could breath in a fresh air, their life was greater than todays convenience life.
3 - Hello Stacy, I have marked some points. Here are they; Para 1: the common benefit that we found on...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015 / eddies - Apr 15, 2015
|Combine studying with playing in education children is necessary
Writing Feedbacktamnguyen - Apr 14, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 15, 2015
|The youngsters should use their opportunities to travel or work wisely - it might help to find a job
3 - I suggest stating young people throughout the essay since this is the essay question. However, you may use youngster...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 15, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 15, 2015
|The bar chart gives information regarding to the percentage of reason
2 - Farhan, your analysis is good, its detailed, just be mindful of your word usage, grammar and sentence construction such...
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 15, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 15, 2015
|IELTS TASK: Continue further education, or work?
5 - Many of them believed that it is more beneficial to take their study to the next level, rather than...
Writing Feedbackasrhkmtn - Apr 15, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - Apr 15, 2015
|You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following
3 - To sum up, it seems that people lived in these days is better than one hundred years ago<------repetition (you...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 14, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 15, 2015
|Writing task 2 : Advertising leads people to purchase unnecessary products
4 - The aforementioned evidence reveals that although some advertising may become useful valuevaluable for people, people should be selective finding...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 14, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 15, 2015
|Alternative methods of the world exploring
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 7, 2015 / eddies - Apr 15, 2015
|Advertising is known as the predominant factor which influence the high sales of popular stuff
3 - Change the word stuff to goods in this essay. This will help the reader to understand that you are...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 14, 2015
|Living in a comfortable apartment is always a good choice and the same applies to univerity students
3 - Actually i don't know that students can decide if they would like to live in a dormitory or an...
Writing FeedbackRafiq24 - Apr 13, 2015 / Rafiq24 - Apr 14, 2015
|The table provides the information which city is more expensive: Riverdale or Cape Alicia
4 - You didn't discuss a 7% percent figure in healthcare in the city of Riverdale. You only state the 7%...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 14, 2015
|The Influences of High sales to the advertisement and people attracting (IELTS Task 2)
2 - First of all, I would say that a prompt in IELTS plays an important role in leading readers' understanding....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 14, 2015 / eddies - Apr 14, 2015
|Being better life by advanced technology (IELTS Task 2)
2 - With regarding to live in the past, almost people used limited facilities. For example, if young people in wanted...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 14, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015
|Life now is better than it was 100 years ago though people in the past were able to enjoy their time
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 14, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|The amount of water use in 3 sector, and 2 different countries.
2 - some suggestions for your writing : In order to make a good introduction, you should begin with one...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 14, 2015
|Traditional cultures of countries will be lost as technology develops (agree/disagree)
2 - No one would deny that the advancement of technology havehas immensely changed the way of people's lives, including traditional...
Writing Feedbackeunkokoko - Apr 14, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 14, 2015
|The producing and developing of phones have some positive and negative features
3 - thank you so much for your feedback and yes ı had misspelled the "i".. actually, ı was going to...
Writing Feedbacktomurcuk - Apr 12, 2015 / tomurcuk - Apr 13, 2015
|Gaining knowledge through watching TV and reading books
2 - Reading books and watching TV are two main ways that help us achieve a wide range of knowledge. While...
Writing FeedbackLamVu - Apr 2, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 13, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: Causes of Worldwide land degradation (Pie Chart and Table)
4 - Thanks Mr.eddies.. that's nice corrections for me to improve my writing skills. I should be grateful if you would...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|How might the advantages of studying in another country outweigh the disadvantages?
3 - I think you cannot even write "However' in the first paragraph, since there is no contrast opinion. With this...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 13, 2015
|Information about the number of entries on a two new music websites
2 - The line graph gives information about the number of visitor of two new music websites include Music Choice and...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 13, 2015
|IELTS Task - showing that learning a foreign language already at primary school is more beneficial
NEW - Topic: Some experts believe that is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than...
Writing FeedbackMainakano - Apr 13, 2015 / — -
|The advertisement gives influence toward the increasing number of popular consumers of the goods
3 - Without a doubt, people now live in a consumer culture(repetition) . They are influenced quickly to buy some needs(if...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 13, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 13, 2015
|There is alot of things which worries me and the scholarschip would be a key to my "golden gate"
Writing Feedbackthuyhien1801 - Apr 12, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 13, 2015
|Writing Task 2 - some university students should only study one specialist subject
3 - Answer: Over recent years specialist subject at university is becoming debatable issue in higher education ministry. Some people...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|The number of kilometers of route and passengers per year of railway system in six different cities
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 12, 2015 / eddies - Apr 12, 2015
|Maroon and Grey - "two page descriptive essay of a place without using I"
2 - 1st paragraph: Do you have to use the words maroon and grey in this essay? Place a comma between...
Writing Feedbackjricha - Apr 12, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 12, 2015
|The chart informs the number of Bulgarians moving to different countries based on level of education
5 - Overall, it can be clearly be seen that the number (...) was the highest amongst other level of education,...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 11, 2015 / Anfalia - Apr 12, 2015
|Overusing of a common language encourages people to invent a new language for communication
3 - Hallo Mohjawahir... I think your writing is a good,but your conclusion is not complete, because you did not...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 11, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 12, 2015
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