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|Exotic people's tendency to doing individual sports rather than a team sports - TOEFL
2 - This intro is good. Still, sentences are too long and contain bulky ideas. When it comes to introduction, your...
Writing Feedbackzeperte - Aug 7, 2015 / eddies - Aug 9, 2015
|Prefer changes or doing the same thing (academic essay for IELTS exam)
NEW - some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.others however think that change is...
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|Food; some parts of the world are suffering from lack of it, other complain about its quality
3 - Hi Samilijah. I would recommend only using an exclamation mark when you really want to make an important point....
Writing FeedbackSamilijah - Aug 8, 2015 / lea - Aug 8, 2015
|A gap year might bring both benefits and severe detrimental effect to students - IELTS essay
3 - The highlight sentence shows a generic phrase. This is not good for your performance when it comes to...
Writing FeedbackBao Tran - Aug 6, 2015 / eddies - Aug 7, 2015
|Having an enjoyable job or good salary to a better life? IELTS Task 2
3 - People have different opinions to define a better life. For some others, they argue that working with good...
Writing Feedbackginong - Aug 7, 2015 / eddies - Aug 7, 2015
|'there are more than just salary to have a better life' - Hard Work vs. Enjoyable Profession
Writing FeedbackBayu - Aug 7, 2015 / eddies - Aug 7, 2015
|Bar Chart which provide an usage of railway among different countries
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 4, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 7, 2015
|Patterns of woven baskets found in the immediate village of Palea - argument writing for Toefl
2 - Hello, I would like to help you with your writing. 1st paragraph: You begin by summarizing what you...
Writing Feedbackshwetanana - Aug 7, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 7, 2015
|Food Magazine Article; Describing the difficulties of feeding a growing world population.
Writing FeedbackSamilijah - Aug 5, 2015 / Samilijah - Aug 7, 2015
|"Memories help us maintain a grip on reality"; I need this to relate back to the death of a salesman
Writing Feedbackintelligent_c - Aug 6, 2015 / shwetanana - Aug 7, 2015
|'team exercise' - Team sports or individual sports, which one do you prefer?
NEW - Hi every body...I would appreciate it if you can help me with this writing task and tell me what...
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|'Influence: How and Why People Agree to Things' - SAT April 2006
3 - Remember that this is practice. I'm unsure about the grading. If I used a grading system with the highest...
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 6, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 6, 2015
|Schools have possibilities to support the fight against obesity
Writing Feedbackmayhar - Aug 5, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Aug 6, 2015
|Technology is very helpful in solving one's problem but one can become too dependent upon using it
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackshwetanana - Aug 5, 2015 / shwetanana - Aug 6, 2015
|"Do people have to be highly competitive in order to succeed?"SAT Essay CB Study-Guide 2004-2005
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 4, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 5, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1 : MAP, West park secondary school construction
2 - Hello, I can help you with any needed changes to your essay. 1st paragraph: The school's name should...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Aug 5, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 5, 2015
|Sometimes you should disregard many important things like physical exercises to achieve career goals
2 - - ....giving damage to your health. ( You should put a stop here, and then begin a result question)....
Writing Feedbacksavaskaptan - Aug 5, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 5, 2015
|Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark - TOEFL WRITING
2 - Allow me to give you some suggestions ^.^ - but others, in contrast , believe that paying mone...
Writing Feedbackjavad27 - Aug 4, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 5, 2015
|"one big traffic jam" - Traffic congestion drives an immense problem.
2 - For intro, simply paraphrase the prompt. Here is; The significant rise in the ownerships of private motor vehicles over...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Aug 5, 2015 / eddies - Aug 5, 2015
|Children learn language more easily if they start early in life.
Writing Feedbackhang98 - Aug 4, 2015 / hang98 - Aug 4, 2015
|Topic: When you have to solve a creative problem, do you rely more on craft or inspiration? Why?
3 - Some of my suggestions: "MeanwhileHowever , a creative problem is always solved in a creative way." "The...
Writing Feedbackgreenw4y - Aug 4, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 4, 2015
|Valuation of relations in today's world.
3 - The first sentence is a good opener, but the second clause does not work: "What we struggle for, is...
Writing FeedbackEMANN - Aug 4, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 4, 2015
|"Do people benefit from from reality shows, or are harmful?" SAT March 2011
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 1, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 4, 2015
|University education is the only way to success. Agree or disagree.
5 - I think it's Ok to put statistics as a example in the body paragraph, even it can support your...
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 1, 2015 / hang98 - Aug 4, 2015
|Choose a job basing on salary or other factors needs to be considered?
Writing Feedbackhangha - Aug 3, 2015 / hangha - Aug 4, 2015
|All students need relaxation after hours of stressful study
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Jul 31, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 3, 2015
|What measures could be taken in an attempt to intergrate lawbreakers back into society
3 - Here are a few of my suggestions: The lamentable reality that conventionally strict punishments and prison regime cannot...
Writing Feedbackhang98 - Jul 31, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 3, 2015
|'high quality academic programs' - What is the reason of studying in the boarding school? IELTS
3 - Hello, Dieu Anh! I want to give some suggestion, hope this can help I think this introduction...
Writing FeedbackDieu Anh - Jul 27, 2015 / veaenia - Aug 3, 2015
|Many people think that emigrating from homeland could bring various benefits
3 - Hello, Alan! I want to give some suggestion about your essay Your introduction is good. however, it...
Writing Feedbackalan87ra - Jul 29, 2015 / veaenia - Aug 3, 2015
|"Is it more courageous to show vulnerability than it is to show strength?" SAT January 2015
2 - I think you could add some points on people showing their own weakness and improve them . This Link...
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Aug 3, 2015 / Samilijah - Aug 3, 2015
|Homework to write an essay about newspaper and teenager
4 - - by the fast development of technology and appearingappearance - They are many teenagers was read the newspaper in...
Writing Feedbackmarwa2015 - Aug 1, 2015 / Ron Weasley - Aug 2, 2015
|Public figures should expect people interested in their privacy
2 - Hi, hayaalqasem !!! Here I make some suggestions: 1. Please write the question completely so that readers...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 1, 2015 / Dawn01 - Aug 1, 2015
|Because of getting a new job I moved to a new house next to the office
Writing Feedbacknaghmehtorabi62 - Jul 16, 2015 / naghmehtorabi62 - Aug 1, 2015
|Advantage of mass communication in the 21st century
6 - Please write your prompt completely. By doing so, I am more easily to share valuable feedback. This...
Writing Feedbackravindrasolanki - Jul 29, 2015 / eddies - Aug 1, 2015
|Negative Stereotype and its effect on our life
3 - Thank you for helping. They want from us to write a cause and effect essay in stereotypes No word...
Writing Feedbackmarwa2015 - Jul 31, 2015 / marwa2015 - Jul 31, 2015
|Contrary to Velleman's opinions, I believe that our society is not expressive enough!
4 - - Many times withinIn the novel, Holden... - psychiatric help, but has nobody to talk to, and as a...
Writing Feedbackdescrip - Jul 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 31, 2015
|SAT Essay: Do we need others to understand ourselves?
3 - - Introspection is a powerful tool for self-reflection, but even more potent in accomplishing that is the company of...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Jul 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 31, 2015
|Schools can help change obesity rates in schools through education.
Writing Feedbackmayhar - Jul 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 31, 2015
|The tobacco has a lot of poisons substances which have harmful effects on users and non-users.
2 - - Smoking tobacco is a common among many people, - All of the users inhale it regularly and... -...
Writing FeedbackAzadeh85 - Jul 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 31, 2015
|People in India believe that prolonged yoga exercise can also cure many diseases.
3 - thank a lot....
Writing Feedbackbhagyashree - Jul 28, 2015 / bhagyashree - Jul 30, 2015
|The Importance of Random Acts of Kindness
5 - - ..child marketing theirmy very own lemonade stand. -.. .happen less and less as the years go onby ....
Writing Feedbackgracoo - Jul 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 30, 2015
|Cultural adaptation is an important factor that promotes unity and social integration in a community
3 - You have written an excellent essay about cultural integration! However, you need to explore the topic a little further,...
Writing FeedbackIrving844 - Jul 29, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jul 30, 2015
|"The people in power have created an obesity epidemic" - but not only rich countries are exposed now
Writing Feedbackfi49_3 - Jul 29, 2015 / fi49_3 - Jul 30, 2015
|The cultural adaptation is crucial however people should also not forget their own customs.
3 - - ..found offensive fromto other citizens of the others. - ...some Vietnamese cultural heritages and relics. - ....people being...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Jul 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 29, 2015
|Prepare for the effects of global climate change
3 - Hi, greenw4y2 !!! I have some minor suggestions: - Second, government should appeal to everyone forencourage planting moretrees...
Writing Feedbackgreenw4y2 - Jul 29, 2015 / Dawn01 - Jul 29, 2015
|Role of educational institutions in shaping one's career. Evaluate this issue essay.
3 - - Their roles are next to that of their parents for.. - ...and exaggeratedabout their likely hood of success...
Writing Feedbackarpita91 - Jul 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 29, 2015
|Substantial increase in criminal activities is a serious concern of many countries around the world.
2 - Like your essay, but you should provide some specific examples(like news that is related to crime, government, and etc)...
Writing Feedbackrupen008 - Jul 28, 2015 / Killeener - Jul 28, 2015
|Buying beauty products is a good way of spending money. Others believe that there are betters things
Writing FeedbackFigoIELTS - Jul 17, 2015 / Dieu Anh - Jul 27, 2015
|Professional athletes have what it takes to be a role model; dedication, good hygiene, good behavior
2 - Most of professional the professional sportsmen are quite shown to public by community compare to few years ago through...
Writing Feedbackgayan1991 - Jul 27, 2015 / hanhbich - Jul 27, 2015
|Do you think a professional stager's job is interesting? Could you do it? Why or why not.
Writing Feedbackgreenw4y - Jul 27, 2015 / gayan1991 - Jul 27, 2015
|Is using humor the best way to approach difficult situations and problems? SAT October 2009
3 - Dawn, I cannot grade your essay, but I will help you with some style issues. ____________________________ Since...
Writing FeedbackDawn01 - Jul 27, 2015 / ChristineB - Jul 27, 2015
|Should newspapers and magazines protect famous people privacy?
2 - An interesting response! I think you give good reasons for your position. In my view... Not really...
Writing Feedbackgayan1991 - Jul 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jul 27, 2015
|Being great and risk means more chance for a success; GRE
4 - - Success can be defined differentdifferently by many.. - today there needsthey need to be risk and notbe careful...
Writing Feedbackjojony1 - Jul 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 27, 2015
|TOPIC: What are the benefits and the risks associated with the use of private transport?
4 - - One of the main positivespositive effects of using.. - Indeed, with private vehicles you becomehave an initiative than...
Writing FeedbackNgan - Jul 24, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 27, 2015
|The best way to reduce air pollution is for the government to raise the cost of petrol for cars.
2 - - Air pollution is one of the most threatening pollution for the environment around the world. - Of course,...
Writing FeedbackSohashakib - Jul 22, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 27, 2015
|How Does Foods that Have Gluten in Them Affects the Human Body
3 - - How Does Foods that Have Gluten enriched foodin Them Affects the Human Body? Draft Chnita, I will...
Writing Feedbackchnita sanders - Jul 25, 2015 / justivy03 - Jul 27, 2015
|IGCSE - Descriptive writing essay on narrowly escaping a storm. Any help would be marvellous.
4 - I agree that you are very descriptive in your writing. I will read it and look for any errors....
Writing FeedbackMarcus T - Jul 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jul 26, 2015
|To truly enjoy a vacation (holiday), people should leave their mobile phones at home.
2 - Hello, I can help you with some suggestions and corrects. 1st paragraph: You could replace destroyed with "ruined"....
Writing FeedbackOswinC - Jul 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jul 26, 2015
|Regarding the solution to environmental issues (people vs government)
NEW - Topic: Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to deal with. Others, however, think that...
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|Success is to achieve one's dreams and wishes but not all successful scenarios end in happiness
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