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|The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items
3 - Please vary your sentences above. Let me give a try; Initially, the proportion of money spent in national...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 23, 2015 / eddies - Apr 28, 2015
|What influence people's personality more - born-characteristics or their experience?
3 - Some sentences show redundancy. I try to help you write a succinct introduction. For this prompt, let me...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 26, 2015 / eddies - Apr 28, 2015
|Characteristic and experience influence on a person life
2 - Rephrasing your 1st paragraph; Every person has their own character since birth, this character is what influence their...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 27, 2015
|The economical input of three main sectors in UK: Agriculture, Manufacturing, Business and Financial
NEW - The chart provides the information about the economical input of three national sectors in UK: Agriculture, Manufacturing, Business and...
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|The sport professionals are often very overpayed and this is not fair.
2 - Hi, @helenkeller It's true that nN owadays sports stars can earn incredibly high salaries. Although, there are some...
Writing Feedbackhelen keller - Apr 26, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 26, 2015
|The diagrams reveals two stage processes of the cement production
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 25, 2015 / Firda Umairoh - Apr 26, 2015
|Should the high school curriculum introduce unpaid social work as a mandatory subject?
3 - I think you should change social work throughout this essay to community service. If you make your discussion about...
Writing FeedbackDhaliwal1 - Apr 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 25, 2015
|Increasing the petrol price as problem solving of traffic jam and pollution. Agree or disagree?
2 - Hello, I enjoyed your essay. I think you should work on your wording though. Many of your sentences are...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 25, 2015 / sujungchoi10 - Apr 25, 2015
|Writing task 2 : Traffic congestion and pollution on atmosphere
2 - HI, liliy..allow me to give suggestion for your writing. As a matter of fact, controlling the amount of...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 25, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 25, 2015
|Finding the best way to solve huge traffic and air pollution problems (without vehicles taxation)
4 - Hi Ainun .. i am tremendously enthusiastic about your writing however some suggestion should be given here to lead...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 25, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 25, 2015
|Natural talents 'available' for every person? IELTS
3 - hai lily.. i do like your introduction. but, i think you should not write this italic sentence. my opinion...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 19, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 25, 2015
|IELTS: Solving the traffic and pollution problems by increasing the petrol price - Agree/disagree?
NEW - Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent...
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|Public transport helps to protect the environment, save money and reduce traffic problems
Writing Feedbackhoas - Apr 24, 2015 / Firda Umairoh - Apr 25, 2015
|The Number of Passenger and Reached Dictance of Underground Railway Systems in Six Cities
2 - Peace be with you. some suggestions for your writing: The diagramtable shows information about the underground railway...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 24, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 25, 2015
|A government has various duties to its citizens, but limited resources. Should defence spending take
Writing Feedbacknedymin - Apr 24, 2015 / nedymin - Apr 24, 2015
|The number electricity production by fuel resource
2 - the second picture is describes that Australia had the highest of electricity unit by fuel source for Coal, the...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 24, 2015 / xuMIN520 - Apr 24, 2015
|Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems...
2 - 1st paragraph: Delete the before famous. Change fascinated to fascinating lifestyles (you discuss more than one personality so lifestyle...
Writing FeedbackDhaliwal1 - Apr 24, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 24, 2015
|Should parents bolster their children to be expert at competing and team working?
NEW - Hello Fellas, In this essay, I am dealing with Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammar. Please...
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|Human population growth can cause a severe effect to economic condition on overpopulated area
2 - Peace be with you. Some suggestions for your writing : Your introduction does not cover the essay...
Writing FeedbackKikiki - Apr 24, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 24, 2015
|Is Talent Born Naturally or Nurtured?
3 - by and large, your writing is good, but i have several suggestions for you. 1. there are many...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 23, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 24, 2015
|Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos. Discuss and give your opinion.
3 - On the other hand, keeping animals in cages may seem to be abysmal. ... animals are not obtained...
Writing Feedbackdilorom - Apr 23, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 24, 2015
|The percentage of national expenditure on five different countries
2 - Hi IqbalThemi. Here are my suggested changes for you: The table gives information regardingdisplays national spendingexpenditure on various...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 23, 2015 / ChristineB - Apr 24, 2015
|The advanced technology has given influence to the interaction way among people.
2 - Adhisti, see my comments with green, and my edits with blue Good introduction. Yet, where is your...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Apr 24, 2015 / eddies - Apr 24, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Number of private cars increased and its effects
Writing FeedbackKikiki - Apr 21, 2015 / Kikiki - Apr 24, 2015
|Why not enough students studying in science? Are there any effects on society?
2 - Hi Lorri, allow me to give suggestion to your writing.. Some students who do not choose science subjects...
Writing FeedbackLorri - Apr 23, 2015 / Adhisti - Apr 23, 2015
|Could technology help developing educational system? Kindly help me to answer this!
2 - I wouldn't use shapely. What happens when learners go in the wrong direction? Do they become distracted by technology?...
Writing Feedbackhumangun - Apr 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 23, 2015
|Is It Better to Change Job Than to Do The Same Job?
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 20, 2015 / humangun - Apr 23, 2015
|What do we need the university for?
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 23, 2015 / Dhaliwal1 - Apr 23, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: environmental influence could become the major influence to personal development
NEW - Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 23, 2015 / — -
|The table reveals information regarding the underground railways system in six big cities
2 - In the second sentence of the first paragraph, you can add a comma after table and delete the word...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 23, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 23, 2015
|The marital status of adult Americans between 1970 and 2000
3 - ... and divorces in USA from 1970 to 2000, and the marital status ... ... of adult Americans, married...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 21, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 23, 2015
|Growing personality by live experiences
NEW - Research indicates that the characteristic we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than...
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|Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed
NEW - Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 23, 2015 / — -
|The Method of Recycling Plastic Bottles for New Uses
3 - Dear Stacy Ayu Handayani I would like to give you some suggestion. Actually your writing is good, yet...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 19, 2015 / Bung Jawa - Apr 23, 2015
|Arguments with adopting honor codes in order to decrease cheating among students.
NEW - Hello, please help to evaluate my essay. If possible, please grade it on the 6-point scale. Thank you very...
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|Paragraph on making money by successful professionals - IELTS essay
2 - Since ChristineB commented on your grammars and vocabs, I just will directly jump to your content. Your approach and...
Writing Feedbackhelen keller - Apr 22, 2015 / dunguyen - Apr 22, 2015
|Discussion about people who are doing same things
4 - Changing Changes is always happened in people's life. As such, some people believe that doing different actions is spectacular...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 21, 2015 / dunguyen - Apr 22, 2015
|Got Gmo's? - my paper is about gmo being added to foods.
Writing Feedbackstudent25 - Apr 22, 2015 / mammasam - Apr 22, 2015
|Animal Captivity essay peer edited
NEW - Should animals be held in captivity? The human race have such power, sometimes we don't notice how much...
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|The number of marriages-divorces and marital status in the USA
3 - Hi Guys, let me give you some feedback. The word "generally" should be replaced with "overall" as the former...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 20, 2015 / eddies - Apr 22, 2015
|The government should spend money on public services, but investment in the arts is not unnecessary
3 - "Alternative way to say last two sentence" While I agree that the government should rather spend money on public...
Writing Feedbackjenny188 - Apr 20, 2015 / jenny188 - Apr 22, 2015
|Task: Treating animals - animals should not be exploited by people
2 - 1st paragraph: Change others to some in the beginning of the second sentence 2nd paragraph: Change what to how...
Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 21, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 21, 2015
|How to make a child good member of society? They should learn that in school and at home.
2 - Hi islam12308. I don't know what IELTS scores are, but I will try to help you with your essay...
Writing Feedbackislam12308 - Apr 21, 2015 / ChristineB - Apr 21, 2015
|SAT Practice Essay (College Board Blue Book Practice Test 1)
2 - I think your first written essay is very good, to excellent! However, I would recommend giving more than one...
Writing Feedbacksujungchoi10 - Apr 21, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 21, 2015
|IELTS essay; as long as we want to live in a free society, the freedom of speech should be respected
7 - Sorry for the spelling error, I was typing too fast. You wrote that the government should "restrict" the right...
Writing Feedbackmonikan19 - Apr 14, 2015 / sblack - Apr 20, 2015
|Social Media and Cyberbulling Today
2 - Your conclusion (and I agree with that) suggests that the real problem is unlimited and uncontrolled access of young...
Writing Feedbacksusiesc - Apr 20, 2015 / Rich Monte - Apr 20, 2015
|The priority is to minimize a high cost of people's budget when they want to go anywhere
2 - I made some edits in this to the grammar and wording, the reasoning is pretty good, but it might...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 20, 2015 / sblack - Apr 20, 2015
|IELTS Task 2 : Air travel should be controlled to save the earth.
2 - With the growth in aviation, the majority of people are more likely travellingto travel abroad to spend their leisure...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Apr 20, 2015 / amytsai - Apr 20, 2015
|The plastic from bottles is used for further manufacture of carpets and clothing
2 - The picture shows information regarding to the process of recycling plastic bottles. In general, recycling plastic bottles needs 2...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 20, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 20, 2015
|The processing steps of recycled bottles of plastics
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 20, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 20, 2015
|To what extent is the inequality good or bad for the economic development?
2 - To what extent is the inequality good or bad for the economic development? According to the research paper...
Writing FeedbackPann - Apr 19, 2015 / ChristineB - Apr 19, 2015
|What are the impacts are caused by the technology in our life.
2 - Hello, selva. Thank you for submitting your essay to Essay Forum. Here are my suggestions: What are The...
Writing Feedbackselva - Apr 19, 2015 / ChristineB - Apr 19, 2015
|The professional level of either sport players or musicians can be achieved by the hard working.
2 - Your intro needs to rework. It is really confusing. It is generally believed that some people are...
Writing Feedbackfarhan110991 - Apr 19, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 19, 2015
|Modern Life Brings Enjoyment for Children but Lead Them to Lack of Responsibility to Natural World
2 - hai stacy, i think that you got many comments about your writing in the introduction and body paragraph. Therefore,...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 19, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 19, 2015
|First stage is to gather bottles in the recycling center. The process of recycling plastic bottles
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 19, 2015 / farhan110991 - Apr 19, 2015
|Some people think that children should learn to obey and do as parents and teachers say. IELTS
3 - Hi mMaftuna, I have some suggestions for your writing. Hope it can help you. First of all, parents...
Writing FeedbackmMaftuna - Apr 16, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - Apr 19, 2015
|Continuous development in medical care is a must to provide a better help for people
4 - Hi @cldales :) In conclusion, there must be a continuous development in medical care to help people, and...
Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 18, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 19, 2015
|It is apparent that the silkworm's cocoon is where the silk cloth is derived from
3 - Hi @cldales :) I suggest you to you use connector in your first paragraph such as (firstly, to begin,...
Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 18, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Apr 19, 2015
|Changes on The Percentage of Rural and Urban Household Who Has Internet Access
2 - The bar chart shows the percentage of (THE) city and (THE) village household in European country ... Overall, it...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 19, 2015
|Developing public transportation for reducing at least protecting pollution
NEW - The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems...
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