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|The increase of advance technology over the years is resonating around us, students.
5 - Firstly,introduction is too long,you need to write it in 40-50 words. Secondly,u add one of the idea in the...
Writing Feedbacklovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015
|Radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose
6 - I think you should rewrite the introduction since this is not so interesting and no hook for me to...
Writing Feedbackhumashamsi - May 31, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers and retail companies.
2 - - It is believed that colour is an effective way to attract thea number of customers. - Interestingly,...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Freedom to work and live anywhere.
6 - Recently the freedom to work and live anywhere has become the main trend due to the development of communication...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|Do You Think The Advantages of Medical Care Development Outshine Its Disadvantages?
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 2, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 4, 2015
|Percentage of British people giving money to a charity.
2 - - At first glance, it is evident that the biggest contribution to charity saware people aged 36-50 in 1990....
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|How much do drivers spend on petrol?
2 - - The line graph provides information regarding the amount of petrol spent people spent in two different countries and...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate?
4 - Internet have been generalized in global village. Just my humble opinion, I found this sentence boring and you should...
Writing Feedbackkiwisuk - Jun 1, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015
|Information technology changes the way how people work today
2 - - In most cases, this change leads plenty of individuals to finish their works in workplace from their home...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country.
2 - - As such, people today seem to choose continuing their studies in abroad because of... - However, in...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them; GRE
3 - - In sumIn conclusion , I agree that society should provide talented children who lacks support and resources with...
Writing FeedbackDong Bradley - May 31, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|The Curse Of a Tree (deforestation)
2 - Salawieh, Your essay is written well, a little bit lengthy though, I'm not sure if you were aiming...
Writing Feedbacksalawieh - Jun 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 3, 2015
|Equal Parents Responsibility to raise their children
Writing Feedbackbisho - Jun 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2015
|The process of technology has contributed to the medical equipment and treatment; people live longer
3 - - FirstlyFirst , as the process of technology has contributed... - Moreover, current technology allows human beings' (...
Writing Feedbackpys - Jun 2, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 2, 2015
|Advanced medical treatment brings longer life of human expectancy
3 - Hi Iqbal. I read your essay, and in terms of grammar and syntax, justivy has taken care of that....
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 2, 2015 / lightfox - Jun 2, 2015
|Students learn just because of good marks.
3 - Your essay is only one paragraph. It should have an intro, and two or three body paragraphs which each...
Writing Feedbackvangue cloud - May 25, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 2, 2015
|A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher.
5 - First of all your structure needs correcting! To begin with, include your reasons in the intro. Its too short!...
Writing FeedbackNaph - May 21, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 2, 2015
|The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours
NEW - The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per...
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|IELTS. Scientific research. Companies or government?
Writing FeedbackMarceline - Jun 1, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Jun 2, 2015
|'globalization risk' - visitors to a country follow local customs and behavior?
3 - Here, I would like to suggest possible ideas for your essay. Tourists play an important role in tourism...
Writing Feedbackcherrysong - Mar 1, 2011 / IqbalThemi - Jun 2, 2015
|ADAPTING OTHER CULTURES IN THE FLAT WORLD TIME
5 - Firstly, it is necessary to distinguish what are the good or bad values of each culture are. ...
Writing Feedbacknguyenvannam - Jun 1, 2015 / niesaysi - Jun 2, 2015
|Trends in childrens early formal education
3 - First of all, no one can avoid that early ages isare golden ages to knowgather more knowledge. Please constrain...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 1, 2015 / Riyasat - Jun 1, 2015
|Should Formal Education be Given for Children in The Age of Four or Seven Year Old?
3 - you have some tense and grammar problems. For example "Brain development is arguably become maximal at the young...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 1, 2015 / Riyasat - Jun 1, 2015
|The two diagrams provide a breakdown of producing frozen fish pies
3 - - Overall, what stands out from the diagrams revealsreveal that microwaveable container contains four mixed ingredients. - Afterwards,...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - Jun 1, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 1, 2015
|Important topics in the transgender community
2 - I reviewed your 2nd paragraph. Unisex bathrooms are (is) an option that can be used; but these bathrooms are...
Writing FeedbackBraileyStahl - May 31, 2015 / Marceline - Jun 1, 2015
|The frozen fish pies - details about the manufacturing presented in the diagrams.
2 - your vocabulary is good. however, i see some grammar mistakes,like "According to the diagrams,it is reveals that there are...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 1, 2015 / Marceline - Jun 1, 2015
|Choice between competition and cooperation in the student's learning.
2 - Needs work. Grammar issues abound, but I'll suggest a more clear and coherent messaging. #1 Students learn in...
Writing FeedbackHana_Nguyen - May 31, 2015 / Mustafa1991 - Jun 1, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : Sholud the media spend more time for reporting ordinary people lives
3 - I think your intro is too complicate although your idea is good supporting. viewers can be tired from the...
Writing Feedbackalif - May 27, 2015 / kiwisuk - Jun 1, 2015
|Hang it up - technological devices considered as learning tools may cause major distraction in class
Writing Feedbackchakikaki - May 30, 2015 / chakikaki - May 31, 2015
|Differences between Buses and Subways
3 - Hi @inicons93 Let me try to correct your writing Transportation has progressed in leaps and bounds...
Writing Feedbackinicons93 - May 30, 2015 / thutyedaniel - May 31, 2015
|The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity.
3 - let me try to rewrite my essay based on your useful advice. These days, overpopulation is indeed a...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 28, 2015 / siddiqumar - May 31, 2015
|Past feminist movements have boosted gender equality in the society also including universities
Writing FeedbackXexon - May 30, 2015 / Xexon - May 30, 2015
|Information crime rates in Newport city center in 2003 and 2010
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 30, 2015 / eddies - May 30, 2015
|When choosing a career, financial gain should be the most important consideration.
Writing Feedbackenzymhemmung - May 30, 2015 / enzymhemmung - May 30, 2015
|Now students have opportunities to enroll a foreign universities - enter into global competition
2 - -....to study in their own nationcountry since this made them easy towill help them achieve a high score. ...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 30, 2015 / justivy03 - May 30, 2015
|Colour is a great instrument which influence more and more consumers
3 - Hopefully, you have had some time to make some changes. I am going to be providing some more feedback....
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 30, 2015
|Love and money. Which one do you think is more important in life? Explain your choice.
Writing FeedbackHana_Nguyen - May 29, 2015 / Hana_Nguyen - May 30, 2015
|American Politics Essay--Republican Rand Paul
Writing FeedbackTsukushino - May 29, 2015 / Tsukushino - May 29, 2015
|Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure
3 - Your introduction here seems going around in the circle. Please you can read more your intro. How the meaning...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|Two totally different opinions about how we can prepare our kids to be good community members
7 - I suggest you to rewrite your introduction here. Let me try: Some people think that parents should...
Writing Feedbackromasalah - May 26, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|The Benefits of Information Technology for Working Outshine Its Disadvantages
3 - I think your introduction need to rewrite. Please, pay attention to your question and make introduction which is...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 29, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|Staying or Moving? A viable solution to escape from boredoms and low productivity.
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 29, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 29, 2015
|The greater number of the criminal cases which are perpetrated by young people below 18 year old
2 - Trias, your essay does not fully address the main question/ issue. When it comes to the real exam, the...
Writing FeedbackTrias - May 27, 2015 / eddies - May 29, 2015
|Parents should describe healthy diet food and support their children to take exercises
3 - Hi, Asep Let me give you some suggestions In modern life, children unhealthy lifestyle is considerable an...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - May 27, 2015 / faarasyad - May 29, 2015
|The high cost on keeping pets. It's a controveversial issue since some people are poor and starving.
Writing Feedbackalexanjou - May 26, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - May 29, 2015
|Not every child needs to learn about music, art and drama - these are sheer hobbies, not subjects
Writing FeedbackJake Do - May 27, 2015 / Jake Do - May 29, 2015
|Age discrimination occurs when a decision is made on the basis of a person's age.
Writing FeedbackHelp4essaY - May 28, 2015 / Help4essaY - May 29, 2015
|A Noticeable Changing in Stokeford Town Between 1930 and 2010
2 - A few points; Para 1: As two maps have been showed concern about the proposed changes in one area,...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 28, 2015 / eddies - May 28, 2015
|What other rewards for good work, apart from salary, are effective in encouraging further good work?
2 - Your essay is organized well, with an intro, two examples, then a conclusion. I think you should add another...
Writing FeedbackIraj33 - May 28, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 28, 2015
|Information about changes in the developement of the Stokeford village during 80 years (1930-2010)
2 - Hello Mr. Iqbal, here I give some corrections on your writing. Meanwhile, in a particular location some building...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 28, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - May 28, 2015
|Essay University of Les Roches Hotel management School, Characteristics of an efficient Manager.
3 - You ended your essay with a quote in lieu of a paragraph, and you have only two paragraphs in...
Writing Feedbacksylvia2626 - Apr 28, 2015 / EF_Carol - May 28, 2015
|Question: some people think that it is best for extended families to live together
2 - Although I was raisedgrown up in an extended family I know the advantages and disadvantages of extended family ,...
Writing FeedbackIraj33 - May 28, 2015 / siddiqumar - May 28, 2015
|Two types of employees: long-serving employees and job-hoppers. Both have merits and demerits.
NEW - Q. Some companies prefer to hire employees who have stayed in one company for a long time. Others, on...
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|Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Writing Feedbackstevepham707 - May 27, 2015 / aseprudi - May 27, 2015
|Material on the internet should be censored or controlled to protect the public.
Writing Feedbackenzymhemmung - May 27, 2015 / enzymhemmung - May 27, 2015
|There are four main features of the wind turbine - Task 1
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - May 23, 2015 / Adhisti - May 27, 2015
|The table shows the number of students living in the UK gaining teacher training qualification
2 - This table is very difficult to see. However, I will do my best to help suggest some changes. ...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - May 27, 2015
|Proportion between man and woman on getting teacher qualifications
3 - Hi,siddiqumar I found a consistent problem while reading. For each "male", "female", "man" and "woman" i was surprised...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 27, 2015 / romasalah - May 27, 2015
|Enjoyable Job vs Good Salary - it's crutial that a work suit someone's passion
3 - Broadly speaking, your essay is good. However, I have a few comment. First of all, I think you need...
Writing FeedbackTrias - May 26, 2015 / IqbalThemi - May 27, 2015
|The power of personal characteristics and its influence on our development
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