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|What cause of people life longer ? is that positive of negative development? (IELTS Task 2)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 9, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 10, 2015
|With the proliferation of high-tech media, internet, several issues always confront young people
NEW - Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the internet creates many problems. To what extend do you...
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|Start to develop the electric cars or solve the problem of transportation system?
3 - Hi, I thought your writing was pretty good, but your essay was not that convincing to me. I would...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Feb 9, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 9, 2015
|Spend Money for City's Development - quality and a quantity of public service facilities
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 9, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 9, 2015
|Elements and proper locations for the installation of wind turbine (IELTS Task 1)
NEW - The diagram illustrates the construction of a wind turbine which is consist of 4 crucial elements while the second...
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|I still hear my grandmother yelling at me asking me to stop playing on the streets
4 - Personally you should add some specific details. You also should check the grammatical error after finishing your essay. For...
Writing Feedbackvidhyamouli - Feb 6, 2015 / Tillie - Feb 9, 2015
|IELTS-Writing Task2: Renewable Energy and Public Transportation as one of responsible to environment
3 - If you want to use an abbreviation, you have to write an explanation in the beginning then use it...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Feb 9, 2015 / akhfan - Feb 9, 2015
|Help to only our own community or nation, as it is not possible to help each and every one?
3 - Appreciate your feedback myngoc311. :) I liked the way you transformed the second paragraph and also the tips which...
Writing Feedbackabracadabra - Feb 2, 2015 / abracadabra - Feb 9, 2015
|In India, as in worldwide, the most famous organisation is 'Athithi Dev Bavo'
4 - Yes, it can be used. Multiple of examples for exact phrase "Crime is soaring" and of course "day...
Writing FeedbackSabby multani - Feb 8, 2015 / Opuntia - Feb 9, 2015
|Alternative energy cars become recent technology invention today.
2 - -'Pollution are the biggest contribute in global warming which are caused by private cars on the roads '...
Writing Feedbackymahanani - Feb 9, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 9, 2015
|Directing people away from desire to have own vehicle will reduce the pollution; A/D?
NEW - The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems...
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|A toddler have the cognitive capacity to learn approximately 20 new words each month.
4 - it will effect on children are notcompletely understand their mother tongue. from my perspective you can change the...
Writing Feedbacktphy - Jan 31, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Feb 9, 2015
|Learning foreign language from the earliest grades - Javanese example
3 - Hai su_ja, I think when you use adverb clause showing your reason, you better put "because" in the middle...
Writing Feedbacksu_ja27 - Feb 2, 2015 / Liliy - Feb 8, 2015
|Foreign Language Foster Student's Abilities
3 - I think you better use first language than mother language. Moreover, it is possible to use mother tongue too....
Writing Feedbackymahanani - Jan 30, 2015 / tphy - Feb 8, 2015
|Body Scanner and CCTV have significantly enhanced our safety and security
3 - Governments play a pivotal role [in enhancing the] to enhance safety and security of their citizens[, w]hich is why...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 8, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 8, 2015
|Professional jobs are undervalued, whilst actors or company bosses are paid huge money
3 - 1. Needs an article here 2. Write: People with different ... 3/5. This is called sentence fragments. You...
Writing FeedbackCuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015 / eddies - Feb 8, 2015
|Tax is aiding to creep the authority revenue by directly or indirectly way from public.
Writing FeedbackSabby multani - Feb 5, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Players and supporters in particular, should be supportive and responsible for the sporting events
3 - "In recent years, lots of international sporting events have been organised by international organisation in order to raise patriotic...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 8, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2015
|It is extremely arduous for globalization to completely eliminate our precious culture.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 8, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Parents show us how to recognize the rights and the wrongs
Writing FeedbackTillie - Feb 8, 2015 / Tillie - Feb 8, 2015
|The present way of preparing food has helped consumers to save time, effort and money.
Writing Feedbackajreyes - Feb 8, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Books have always been read by many individuals since they can provide you with abundant knowledge
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 6, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Overall, transportation, housing, and food were the underlying utilities of all four countries.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 7, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Influences that can be caused by computers!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 7, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|IELTS-Task 1- The Share of International Student in Canada
4 - Aligned what eddies suggest in your further post. Overall, the percentage of international graduates among universities...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 7, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 8, 2015
|Both transportation stakeholders and commuters should participate in solving traffic problem
2 - You have very good points and examples indicated in your essay. For me what you need to improve is...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 7, 2015 / ajreyes - Feb 8, 2015
|Why people study? Three common reasons: for experience, to improve knowledge and to get a good job.
2 - You can replace your statement as below as I think it would be more appropriate First of all,...
Writing FeedbackTillie - Feb 7, 2015 / Jenya1970 - Feb 7, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 - A Wind Turbine for Harnessing Renewable Energy
Writing Feedbackmidorimido - Feb 4, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 7, 2015
|Energy sources shortage and negative impact on the global climate - 21st century has begun
NEW - The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details...
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|The line graph provides a breakdown information in terms of quadrillion units of energies
2 - Hi, you addressed the graph correctly, but parts of your report were pretty hard to follow. Talking about "the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 6, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 7, 2015
|People are unaware of their original culture and it can damage a number of identities in the world
4 - dear replikatika, I have checked the long man dictionary and cambridge dictionary more than twice to know how to...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 7, 2015
|Some people say that job satisfaction is more important than money when it comes to selecting career
2 - It would be meaningful if you provided a full prompt for us. Anyways, the reasons of why you consent...
Writing Feedbackden31006 - Feb 7, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 7, 2015
|Art is a product of human expression and for this case government should promote it
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / replikatika - Feb 7, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: The average age at which workers retire appears to vary widely around the world.
2 - Honestly, the introduction is hard to understand. -'More attention should be paid ' needs a noun, I think....
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 7, 2015
|The production will receive assistance to provide perfect products - manufacturing stages
2 - -'the production planning which production planning will accept packaging ' should be 'the production planning which will accept...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Feb 6, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 7, 2015
|When possible, parents should sometimes have a trip to natural park on holiday with their children.
4 - -'children should visit some spectacular scenery over the world directly' is main sentence. -as means 'because', the sentence...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 6, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 7, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: An international language is the language of problem solving.
3 - Tia, this is an impresive writing depicting a strong discussion between the benefits and drawbacks learning foreign language in...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 6, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 7, 2015
|The wind turbine installation method and the optimum choice location of the tower
NEW - Question: The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location. Summarize the information by...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 7, 2015 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2: teaching method with a teacher and students in a classroom will not exist
2 - tends to create an informal learning process. is to incline the quality .is incline the quality. this sentence is...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 6, 2015
|Tourists in England who visited four different attractions in Brighton - IElTS
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 6, 2015
|Leave alone history, any scientific invention or discoveries can be proved only by facts.
Writing Feedbackvidhyamouli - Feb 5, 2015 / vidhyamouli - Feb 6, 2015
|Too early learning other countries' language would lead children confusing and wasting time
3 - Let me try to rewrite this introduction. More attention should be paid on education for young learners...
Writing Feedbackcakradonya - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 6, 2015
|Iran and Israel were in war period, but they released their problems and want to part in World Cup
2 - Hi Cuynomellen, you have a good writing and it is well organized although I have found some grammatical errors...
Writing FeedbackCuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Internet is a wonderful tool for making new friends
3 - Hi Mann_Ms, I have several comments for your writing, I hope it will be useful. GRAMMATICAL ISSUES...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Feb 6, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|Three possible locations of the wind turbine; under the sea, on top of a hill or near a local house.
2 - Hy akhfan... that's nice essay. you success to construct your essay in order to be easy to read.. however,...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Feb 6, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|Wind Turbine Generates Energy Power for Harnessing [IELTS - TASK 1]
3 - Hai.. Allow me to give you some suggestion for your essay.. This is a nice essay.. However, I found...
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Feb 4, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|'nouveaux riche' - Technology increases or reduces the rich poor gap?
3 - Please, arranging your body with general to specific. This is my suggestion for your body; Admittedly, technology will...
Writing FeedbackLinhpt - Feb 4, 2015 / Cuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015
|International education; most significant current project to process humanizing mankind to the point
6 - hi Midoremido, thank you very much for your comment. It presumably will be useful if you give reasons for...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 4, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|Every subject may apply in a practical field which impact us and gives a positive effect on our life
3 - Halo, Talibaquil.. Let me give you some suggestion in your essay.. I found that you have to manage your...
Writing Feedbacktalibaquil - Feb 4, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|Sports facility is a big factor of improving public health but it is not enough
Writing FeedbackSHabib - Feb 3, 2015 / SHabib - Feb 5, 2015
|You don't have to work hard to be successful, just be lucky.
2 - Even though you were not given a format for your paper, you should have used the default MLA formatting...
Writing Feedback561_devin - Feb 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 5, 2015
|Mainstream America Should be More Open- Minded to the Use of Medical Marijuana
2 - Your enthusiasm about the argument makes this a great paper. I'm so impressed, this is really some excellent...
Writing Feedbackorthochick37 - Feb 3, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2015
|Trees are utilized in making paper and wood products, water is source of energy - natural resources
2 - Hi! Very good points, but I think you should also add some observation. Since we still can't substitute all...
Writing Feedbackajreyes - Feb 5, 2015 / Elith - Feb 5, 2015
|IELTS - Media Attention to Report Celebrities' Life Instead of The Ordinaries
2 - Hello replikatika, The form of media is the immense source of information. While the media shots...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 5, 2015 / tiaDS - Feb 5, 2015
|"Your generation will be the one that changes everything" - ENG101
3 - Hi wassupwoodsie, If you want to compare your live with your parents, I suggest you to separate different...
Writing Feedbackwassupwoodsie - Feb 5, 2015 / midorimido - Feb 5, 2015
|Is it a good idea to compete for the right to host international sport events?
2 - You need to lengthen this discussion when it comes to the part about your personal opinion on the matter....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 5, 2015
|Running own business like Bill Gates or working at a company?
2 - Hi Shintachandrade, I have several comments, questions, and suggestions for your writing, I hope these can increase your...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 4, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 4, 2015
|Should employees be allowed to do some work from home?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 3, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015
|Should we choose a job to earn more money or to have a contribution to the society?
2 - I absolutely love the personal opinion that you present in this essay. By showing that there is actually a...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 4, 2015
|Wind Turbine Design and process of electricity production. IELTS Writing Task 1.
3 - In my own opinion, you should mention every information which is provided by the figure, especially in describing a...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 3, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 4, 2015
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