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|Writing Task 2 : Paying attention to children's future should be one priority!
2 - ... done by school as the greatest values for pupils' ? in their development time ... ... can be...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 12, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 12, 2015
|Proportions of travelers to England who visited art gallery, pavilion, pier or festival in Brighton
2 - The line graph illustrateschanges--> double verb the number of travelers to England for visiting four different attractions in Brighton...
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 12, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 12, 2015
|Subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government
NEW - Nowadays, subjects and lesson contents are decided by the authorities or central government. Many people suggest that teachers should...
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|IELTS TASK 2: General Approaching versus Vocational Systems in Secondary Education
2 - Hi windachan .. actually point to point and flow sentence of your introduction here is too wordiness,...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 12, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 12, 2015
|The amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams - the line graph
4 - The line graph illustrates the consumption of Spreads, including Margarine and Butter from 1981 to 2007. The quantity is...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 11, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 12, 2015
|IELTS Task 01 - Numbers of employed persons by job type and sex
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 6, 2012 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|Why English is an international language and why people want to study in English?
2 - It is true that millions of students (passed out - ??? OR YOU MEAN "graduated") from (HIGH) school or...
Writing Feedbacksumanta11feb - Mar 29, 2013 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|' the happiness we experience' - we experience special days in our life easier
2 - Hey Neo, Kindly find my help below; people(PEOPLE) may come up with different ideas about this subject...
Writing Feedbackneo1989 - Aug 11, 2012 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2015
|Many kinds of integration problems for people living abroad (%)
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2015
|Information device help people to work outside
NEW - Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their work place (eg. At home, when travelling, etc.)...
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|Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
2 - overall, i like your ideas^^.. i just write some corrections here, hope it helps^^ Some universities do not...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 10, 2015 / ririchwang - Apr 11, 2015
|Some persons claim, modern buildings ruin cities, others argue that they add interest. Discuss both!
2 - Recently, the development of the cities is valued mostly by its eye-catching architecture. Some people think that high-rise new...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 7, 2015 / ah_zafari - Apr 11, 2015
|Effects of balanced numbers of male and female students in universities
3 - In recent years, having higher education is becoming a mainly purposeof some people. Many universities are opening wider possibility...
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 10, 2015 / sblack - Apr 10, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task 2: Accepting an equal proportion of degree students is looked at by the gender
2 - These days, some people believe that universities have accepted the proportion of student looking at their gender particularly between...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 10, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 10, 2015
|Proportional number of gender in education system
2 - Final comments: You only present one argument against gender equality mandates in the classroom, that it will force students...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015 / sblack - Apr 10, 2015
|Some personal data about me, my family and plans for the future - Introducing myself
Writing FeedbackSeven_Daly - Apr 6, 2015 / Seven_Daly - Apr 10, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task - work for unemployed individuals outbalances the lack of jobs
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 9, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 10, 2015
|Is watching television better for learning about another countries? Is there another way?
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 7, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015
|In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move
4 - some suggestion and discussion for your writing : Taking elderly people who lived in countryside as an example......
Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 7, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015
|Smoking law that was inflicted on Quebec, use examples in relation to Jeremy Bentham
2 - Hi Geoff, Kindly find my help below; Many people were satisfied(;- DELETE PUNCTUATION) however, there were many...
Writing FeedbackGeoff - May 28, 2009 / justivy03 - Apr 9, 2015
|Journal essay (welfare state)
Writing FeedbackGeoff - May 28, 2009 / justivy03 - Apr 9, 2015
|Giving work to unemployed people is a good idea for better life in society.
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 9, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 9, 2015
|As the media are growing, their influence are becoming more widely
2 - Hi, Kindly find my help below; As the media are(IS) growing, their influence are(IS) becoming (more- DELETE)...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 9, 2015
|Cheap Labour - allowing unemployed to work is a good way to help them to pass their poverty line
2 - 1) Strong 1st paragraph. Your position is clear. 2) 2nd paragraph- Make sure you change is to are, because...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 9, 2015
|IELTS: Should unemployed people be made to work for their benefit payments?
2 - Some suggestion for your writing : 1. First, unemployed people will be productive. They will produce money to...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 9, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015
|Evaluation of today's urbanization. Are modern buildings ruin our cities or towns?
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 7, 2015 / Stacy Handayani - Apr 9, 2015
|People should learn other country culture from their own experience, rather than just by watching TV
4 - as to have a high-rated achievement there is no verb there is still sort of things they cannot...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 8, 2015 / irhame - Apr 9, 2015
|In the past, people lived in the same places since they just born until died.
5 - On the other hand, people today always move to other places for living. This is the best way for...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 7, 2015 / irhame - Apr 9, 2015
|Evaluation of sample introductions for some essay questions.
Writing FeedbackFaisal_Aceh - Apr 7, 2015 / irhame - Apr 9, 2015
|Lower crime rate and bigger nation's income are the main benefits of employment non working people.
2 - Hi, Imho .. i am tremendously enthusiastic about your essay here, nevertheless let me give you a few correction...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 9, 2015 / Liliy - Apr 9, 2015
|Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay
4 - Individual should not refuse to pay tax [...] would lead to collapse of the system. --put the result of...
Writing Feedbackstriker - Apr 8, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 9, 2015
|Should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them?
2 - Firstly,The first reason of this point is how types of jobs nowadays are available in Take Agustinus Wibowo, one...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Apr 9, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 9, 2015
|Source of information choice - Learning by Watching or Learning by Visiting?
2 - Here are some points; Television programmes and films are the greatest source of information for people (I like the...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 7, 2015 / eddies - Apr 9, 2015
|There are many ways to know about other countries - neither only by watching TV programmes nor films
5 - Some suggestions for your writing : 1. The main benefit of learning about other nations by watching television...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 7, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015
|Remnants of another culture that still linger on.
2 - Hi, your writing has given me knowledge about Indian's culture change.. well, i noticed a little error in articles...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Apr 9, 2015 / ririchwang - Apr 9, 2015
|I like to cook myself - homemade food are healthy, low cost, and it's just my hobby!
2 - Hallo, Ladansh. Your writing essay is good, but i think it is too general. I'll recommend you to write...
Writing Feedbackladansh - Apr 8, 2015 / Firda Umairoh - Apr 9, 2015
|Learning about foreign countries by watching and travelling
3 - Well IqbalThemi, There's a huge difference with just watching movies so you learn about a country to going...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Apr 9, 2015
|Young people have a right to choose suitable profession due to their own will
3 - Thank you very much for your suggestion, it is very beneficial for me to improve my writing skill...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015 / MuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015
|Around the world in 101 days with Semester at Sea!!
NEW - Hello everyone, below is my application essay for Semester at Sea's Spring of 2016 voyage. For those of you...
Writing Feedbackhyphen2013 - Apr 8, 2015 / — -
|Young people know best their natural skills and it is better when a future job is selected by them
3 - Thank you Ms. ES_Jasmine. That's all nice corrections for me. It is beneficial to improve my writing skills....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 8, 2015 / Windachan - Apr 8, 2015
|In different parts of the world kids are involved in some paid jobs, but it is harmful to them.
Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 8, 2015 / cldales - Apr 8, 2015
|Children, in accordance with their passion, understand better what jobs are more suitable for them.
2 - A better future for children has proved elusive. As such, young people should be driven to make important...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 8, 2015 / eddies - Apr 8, 2015
|Risks and Benefits of Single-Sex Class
2 - Paragraph 1: The first sentence I would just change to "will be deprived of learning" and "they will have...
Writing Feedbackashleyvaldez - Apr 6, 2015 / lcturn87 - Apr 8, 2015
|Choosing profession for a young people - IELTS-Writing task 2
NEW - In your opinion, should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose choose for them. Some...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 8, 2015 / — -
|In order to avoid confusion of difference behaviour, many companies have developed a guideline
2 - International business activities are where people from different cultural background exchanges goods and services in a timeless world. Here,...
Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 8, 2015 / eddies - Apr 8, 2015
|Staying in one location has benefits, but it will not outshine the merits of living in many areas
6 - Therefore, I would argue that even though living in one location gives benefitbenefits , it will not outshine the...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 7, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 8, 2015
|Merits and Demerits of Nomadic Lifestyle
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 7, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 8, 2015
|Ethic and doing business internationally
2 - Japanese business executive rarely says "no", they tend to take a long discussion until their colleagues realize that the...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015 / mohjawahir - Apr 8, 2015
|Staying in one place and living in different area.
4 - Basically, people want to live in the most comfortable zone.This beginning is somehow bizarre. Remember the more informative your...
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 8, 2015 / Vns9x - Apr 8, 2015
|Once people grew up in one place, now it is changing. Staying in one place or moving around oftenly?
3 - Hi cwang, your writing is excellent, but I have some suggest for your writing. ... staying in the...
Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 7, 2015 / IqbalThemi - Apr 8, 2015
|Should children be educated during their free time?
2 - Hii, Auntum_waltz, I have several discussion and suggestion for your writing, I hope these can help you. ...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Apr 8, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Apr 8, 2015
|Parents should control children's behaviour at their early stage. To what extent do you agree or not
2 - Hi Wenlai, your essay is brilliant but I found several grammatical errors and some repetition words. I think you...
Writing Feedbackwenlai - Apr 8, 2015 / intiaiqbal92 - Apr 8, 2015
|How to behave in doing business internationally? An example - saying "No" in different cultures.
NEW - Many internationally business ethics discussions going on that believe how to behave in doing business are the central point....
Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 8, 2015 / — -
|Nowadays, advanced buildings adorn many places in a country.
3 - Because of this, some people believe that these towering buildings have special attractions for cities and towns as those...
Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 7, 2015 / ririchwang - Apr 7, 2015
|People's lives are more preferable nowadays than a century ago?
4 - Please note that studies related to 'global warming' have recently changed so if you quote a source from 2012...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Apr 7, 2015 / EF_Stacey - Apr 7, 2015
|There are more opportunities today to buy a book. We can get each one even without leaving our home.
3 - Thank you very much for the advice and assistance.I will deploy and make it better. Thank you again....
Writing FeedbackKwang - Apr 7, 2015 / Kwang - Apr 7, 2015
|Nowadays the big cities are endeavoring to provide their inhabitants with more magnificent buildings
3 - You need to explain why/how different kinds of buildings would be environment friendly/unfriendly....
Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 7, 2015 / Rich Monte - Apr 7, 2015
|Observing children copy the watched parents - IELTS Sample Essay
3 - It should be stressed that parents, not adults, are responsible for their children. Humans are not a herd of...
Writing FeedbackmMaftuna - Apr 7, 2015 / Rich Monte - Apr 7, 2015
|Ielts: mix of both - competition and cooperation should be taught to the student
Writing Feedbackzeref - Apr 7, 2015 / zeref - Apr 7, 2015
|Over-grazing of agricultural land was the main cause of its degradation in the nineteen nineties.
Writing FeedbackBambusaMX - Apr 7, 2015 / ransom2092 - Apr 7, 2015
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