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|What people do with their rubbish and how a town tries to keep the area clean and attractive?
3 - Well not in the whole paragraph, just the first line. The words are not connected that well which later...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / sally_922 - Jun 16, 2015
|Public transport for health keeping, pollution reducing and environment protection.
3 - Keep in mind where u use fullstop point becuase there is lot which are wrongly used. Next,use some complex...
Writing FeedbackM19O09F11 - Jun 14, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 16, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2 : THE BENEFIT OF THE INTERNET FOR COMMUNICATION AND LITERATURE
3 - Asep, As far as I am concern, we have to paraphrase the words and stucture in IELTS writing. However,...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 15, 2015
|Describe a book that you believe is the most useful to you. The essay of TOEFL.
Writing FeedbackImladris - Jun 14, 2015 / Imladris - Jun 15, 2015
|Health services should accessible for every person.
3 - Hey there, overall you have a good essay. However if I were you, I'd probably start my argumentative essay...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 15, 2015 / Spredde - Jun 15, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - People get into debt for buying unnecessary things
2 - peoplebecome so consumerism... CORRECTED: people become so consumeristic... You need adjective there, not a noun. You are...
Writing FeedbackHettymsk - May 24, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 14, 2015
|The main problems associated with phenomenon of common Internet usage
3 - Hallo Minh, I would render you some suggestion for this essay: Inaccurate information and hackers are the...
Writing FeedbackMinh Yen - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|IELTS: PEOPLE OBEY TO INTAKE VARIOUS GRASS-FED ANIMALS IN ORDER TO OFFER BENEFIT TO ENVIRONMENT
3 - Thank you for giving me some suggestion. I would try to re-write my article in terms of your advise....
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 13, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|Maintaining body health and saving the world as a whole with eating no meat or fish
2 - - More and more people now neglect to consume meat or fish. They argue that this benefits for either...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 13, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 13, 2015
|Task 1. Global sales of top mobile phones
3 - Hi, Bob.. I have some suggestions for your writing. The bar chart compares the number of mobile...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Jun 11, 2015 / Adhisti - Jun 13, 2015
|Some people think that it is good to keep pets at home
4 - Hallo Makrine, I would render you some suggestion : Inhabitants convince is renders beneficial effect in order...
Writing FeedbackMakrine - Jun 12, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 13, 2015
|Globalization will lead to culture identity loss, do you agree?
3 - - Mass media and transportation todaysnowadays experience a dramatic increase. - What this happens is aWhen this phenomenon...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|The universities should keep the doors open to all and students need to get equal chance in studying
3 - - ...could be considered as an evidentevidencefor theof freedom violation in the progressive countries. - Even if we...
Writing FeedbackFar - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|My idol - a man born without arms or legs
Writing Feedbackthanhgiang - Jun 11, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 12, 2015
|In addition to the money from retirement, people should get more governmental support
Writing Feedbackshawnxk - Jun 9, 2015 / shawnxk - Jun 12, 2015
|Is it better for students to work on their assignments together or alone?
Writing Feedbacknellymo - Jun 11, 2015 / nellymo - Jun 11, 2015
|Market Share of Mobile Phone between Nokia, Sony, Samsung, LG, BenQ and Motorola
3 - - The table gives information about consumer's proportion in different cellular phone brands worldwide from 2005 to 2006 in...
Writing FeedbackTrias - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|The role of universities in providing students with the proper education and consequently a good job
3 - - As a matter of fact, All university study programs has a curriculum which is restricted bywith a schedule...
Writing Feedbackromasalah - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|How much time for themselves will have people in the future? Will they be busier than we are today?
3 - - Some people believe that peoplethey ( we omit the "people" as you have used it already, avoid redundancy...
Writing Feedbackjyh2013 - Jun 10, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|Pretty, attractive girl with great voice - we spend a lot of time together. Best friend paragraph.
Writing Feedbacklinhdemon - Jun 9, 2015 / linhdemon - Jun 10, 2015
|The table below gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006
2 - making speeches or presentation is(are) communication skills that is(are) not really influencing in people's job over the period....
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Jun 10, 2015 / juanmarman - Jun 10, 2015
|Measuring quality of a nation. What is the best determinant of a wise, respectable society?
3 - Hi @hariban Para 3 : - check your spelling suchsimilay(maybe "similar") - themselvesthem . Para 4 :...
Writing FeedbackHarinban - Jun 9, 2015 / thutyedaniel - Jun 10, 2015
|The globalisation may drive people away from their cultural identity like respecting older people
4 - Hi Stacy, I am a beginner. And below are my recommendations. Paragraph 1: Communication and transporttransportation play a...
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - May 27, 2015 / chuoi9 - Jun 10, 2015
|The effect of technology on the interaction between people
3 - - A: There is no doubt that in the recent years, technology has contributed heavily in the shaping our...
Writing Feedbackromasalah - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 10, 2015
|Future World - Process Description Paper; Abstract
2 - Hi, diz. I'll work on the first paragraph for you: For our final project, my group has decided...
Writing Feedbackdiz013 - Jun 9, 2015 / ChristineB - Jun 9, 2015
|PEOPLE GET A JOB - it's a necessity in everyone's life
4 - aseprudi- let me express my idea regarding the first para Obtaining a recognisable job is a main aim...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 8, 2015 / Ridma - Jun 9, 2015
|Good and bad impact of having a lot of TV channels
Writing FeedbackRidma - Jun 8, 2015 / Ridma - Jun 9, 2015
|Public transportation makes that less exhausts are ejected from motorbikes and cars into the air
Writing Feedbacktangthidiepanh - Jun 9, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
|'Unwanted pregnancy' - essay about abortion.
Writing FeedbackCountMaxMore - May 27, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
|TECHNOLOGICAL TOOLS - sophisticated technology in order to prevent crimes among societies
2 - - In the mean time,(It is very unlikely that you start your essay with "In the meantime", due to...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - Jun 7, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 9, 2015
|Living in A Media-Rich Society; media should contribute more for humanity in the future
3 - I have provided some changes for you to consider. Everything is well organized, but there are some slight changes...
Writing FeedbackTrias - Jun 9, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 9, 2015
|Celebrities get invited to international aid events.
3 - Hi @Jaggi7921, kindly find my feedback below: Pay attention to your spelling and sentence structure. Moreover, you...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 8, 2015 / Trias - Jun 9, 2015
|About gender roles in society - chances for a job among men and women; who have more opportunities?
3 - Hi @katty_nhung, kindly find my suggestion on your first paragraph below. Feminism has changed virtually every aspects in...
Writing Feedbackkatty_nhung - Jun 8, 2015 / Trias - Jun 9, 2015
|Government spendings during an economic crisis - Health caring and supporting unemployed is crucial
Writing Feedbackjohnterry886 - Jun 8, 2015 / xuandieu - Jun 8, 2015
|Automobiles, bicycles, airplanes - which transport form has changed people's lives the most?
Writing Feedbackxuandieu - Jun 8, 2015 / xuandieu - Jun 8, 2015
|The famous people should also contribute to the social causes in our country.
5 - Thank you for your feedback lcturn87. It was of great help. I will make the suggested changes in my...
Writing Feedbackshetty13 - Jun 8, 2015 / shetty13 - Jun 8, 2015
|Decisions makers should not based their choice on emotions
3 - Hello, I saw quite a few grammatical errors, so I hope that my feedback can be helpful to you!...
Writing Feedbacks61001234 - Jun 6, 2015 / BlueBabey - Jun 8, 2015
|Charity organizations should offer help to everyone in need.
3 - A very incitefull essay. You really did a good job analyzing the two sides of the issue.0which would further...
Writing FeedbackMarceline - May 30, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 8, 2015
|Assignment: Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority?
3 - I wanted to provide you with as much detail as possible to make your essay better. Everything seems to...
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Jun 8, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 8, 2015
|Can an ideal job can be acquired with accomplishing study in university? IELTS
3 - Your intro >> Plenty of people think that ideal job can be acquired with accomplishing study in university...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 8, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 8, 2015
|IELTS WT 2 - A university degree gain higher chance to get a well-paid job than school graduates
3 - The thing that u much needed is reduce the explanation. In the second paragraph the second example is too...
Writing FeedbackHettymsk - Jun 8, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 8, 2015
|Higher Education for Work and Perspectives - IELTS
Writing FeedbackTrias - Jun 8, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 8, 2015
|Reducing the walking distance.
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 5, 2015 / alif - Jun 8, 2015
|Air leaks and heat loss in houses
3 - You use 'which' after a comma. Change 'which' to 'that' for a direct emphasis. //entire of air into...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Jun 7, 2015 / vincenm - Jun 7, 2015
|CCTV and Body Scanners to improve humans safety and keep them from frauds
3 - I have suggested more changes to help you with meaning for your essay. I hope these changes will make...
Writing Feedbackalif - Jun 7, 2015 / lcturn87 - Jun 7, 2015
|Competition improve students achievements - show research in Indonesia
4 - hi muhammad, you essay is excellent. but i have suggestion for your introduction. you need to explain...
Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Jun 4, 2015 / alif - Jun 7, 2015
|Seeking perfect work for one or different communities
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / alif - Jun 7, 2015
|Four different subjects which are attended by secondary school students from 2000 to 2009
3 - Thank you for your suggestion, It really help me for improving my writing skills. i will change and follow...
Writing Feedbackaseprudi - May 27, 2015 / aseprudi - Jun 7, 2015
|Do the benefits of workplace mobility are bigger than the demerits of those possibilities?
2 - - For instance, people seem to do their works at home because they think that it is more efficient...
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|Wealthier modern artist than others lead government to solve the gap of both
3 - - On theAs a whole, the majority of individuals who have career in the art industry are likely easily...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|People are not satisfied with their lives any more - #TOEFL my reasoning logic and language usage?
3 - - When people are doing their burdensomecomplicated jobs, they also suffer from financial pressure. - This makeresults to...
Writing FeedbackYihuan - Jun 5, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 6, 2015
|Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things.
3 - I don't think you should end your essay with one line. The conclusion should be at least three to...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhaai - Jun 3, 2015 / EF_Carol - Jun 5, 2015
|The increase of advance technology over the years is resonating around us, students.
5 - Firstly,introduction is too long,you need to write it in 40-50 words. Secondly,u add one of the idea in the...
Writing Feedbacklovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015 / Jaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015
|Radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose
6 - I think you should rewrite the introduction since this is not so interesting and no hook for me to...
Writing Feedbackhumashamsi - May 31, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers and retail companies.
2 - - It is believed that colour is an effective way to attract thea number of customers. - Interestingly,...
Writing Feedbacksiddiqumar - May 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Freedom to work and live anywhere.
6 - Recently the freedom to work and live anywhere has become the main trend due to the development of communication...
Writing FeedbackJaggi7921 - Jun 4, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 4, 2015
|Do You Think The Advantages of Medical Care Development Outshine Its Disadvantages?
Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Jun 2, 2015 / shintacandrade - Jun 4, 2015
|Percentage of British people giving money to a charity.
2 - - At first glance, it is evident that the biggest contribution to charity saware people aged 36-50 in 1990....
Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - May 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|How much do drivers spend on petrol?
2 - - The line graph provides information regarding the amount of petrol spent people spent in two different countries and...
Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Jun 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Jun 4, 2015
|Do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate?
4 - Internet have been generalized in global village. Just my humble opinion, I found this sentence boring and you should...
Writing Feedbackkiwisuk - Jun 1, 2015 / lovejapanjapan - Jun 3, 2015
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