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|Friendship essay; As a human being, one can hardly do without a friend
4 - What's the definition of friends? As a human being, one can hardly do without a friend, In addition, friends...
Writing Feedbackjenny0103 - Apr 1, 2015 / EF_Carol - Apr 2, 2015
|Improving skills to get into an undergraduate program.
3 - And last but not less important, ( Third) they talk abou the composition of the bones, where ... (This...
Writing Feedbackmonisol - Mar 30, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 1, 2015
|Mobile Phone's Market Share; BenQ fell significantly from 4.9% in 2005 to 2.4% in 2006
2 - Corrections have been marked in bold, Additions in italics and Omissions in strike. The table gives information about...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Apr 1, 2015 / abhayarathore - Apr 1, 2015
|Persuasive essay on the negatives of excessive technology use
2 - The first sentence is an uninteresting statement of the obvious, so the reader might stop paying attention. It might...
Writing Feedbacknatashanicola - Mar 30, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2015
|Medical Side of Bud - "Can marijuana become medical?"
2 - As many states begin to accept marijuana for recreational use, others are noticing the power it has in healing....
Writing Feedbackjackie828 - Mar 28, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Apr 1, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences
2 - Hi Anfalia, These are several suggestions for your writing, Crime is an issue that deserves public attention....
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Apr 1, 2015 / mumtazdinar - Apr 1, 2015
|Some learners need a structured course from high qualified teacher to know materials in a depth.
2 - One's success(Success in what?) determines on how(what do you mean by how?.) people are studying. For this reason(this sentence...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 31, 2015 / ah_zafari - Mar 31, 2015
|To look after the elderly - responsibility of families or the government?
3 - There is a lot of discussion on how to look after elderly people. While some people suggest that the...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 27, 2015 / ah_zafari - Mar 31, 2015
|Once people experience puberty they are potentially be able to produce children.
2 - Once people experience puberty they are potentially be able to produce children However, the body condition that allows...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Mar 27, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 31, 2015
|One of the most intensely debated topics in education is the types of subjects need to be studied
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Mar 27, 2015 / ah_zafari - Mar 30, 2015
|The question is if countries should cooperate with other countries instead of isolating themselves
Writing Feedbacksandrinka - Mar 28, 2015 / sandrinka - Mar 30, 2015
|A fear of censure in Indian society; our conversation often turns to criticizing what we see lacking
2 - Hi Rajiv.. I'd want to simplify this part: ... that we should have taken instead from their, that...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 28, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2015
|'the history, tradition and way of life will vanish as well' - An essay on language extinction
Writing FeedbackYanxu - Mar 26, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 27, 2015
|Students from the age of 16 should be encouraged to have a part time job
2 - Hello! My edits and suggestions are below, Financial issues are most of the time the reasons why...
Writing FeedbackIkrame - Mar 26, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 26, 2015
|Advertisements lead people to spend money lavishly without further thinking. Ads effects on people.
3 - Hi Tia, thank you for you correction on my writing. I have proofread my writing several times but I...
Writing FeedbackMarsya_EF - Mar 25, 2015 / Marsya_EF - Mar 26, 2015
|Computers have made the world a better place to live. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
6 - Are you going to go against the statement? If not I suggest that you talk about how children and...
Writing FeedbackAbIk - Mar 20, 2015 / rettabby - Mar 25, 2015
|Happiness has different meanings for different people, but everyone wants to be happy.
2 - In my opinion, You should know how to paraphrase the topic before you write, for example, "There is no...
Writing FeedbackRafiq25 - Mar 25, 2015 / vanduongnv - Mar 25, 2015
|Develop countries have created many environmental problems in the world; global warming (IELTS)
2 - Environmental problems would always be a unique topic in this world. For this reason, global warming is estimated to...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 25, 2015 / nazmarta - Mar 25, 2015
|"Two head is better than one head" - studying with other people provide an extra ideas or knowledge
3 - overall you explain everything and give examples. however you need to fix some grammar issues. and you can also...
Writing Feedbackantun - Mar 25, 2015 / nazmarta - Mar 25, 2015
|Fear and Loathing in Society - respond to an article
3 - Thank you... I guess it makes a little more sense when you read the actual article I was given...
Writing Feedbackrxcc - Mar 24, 2015 / rxcc - Mar 24, 2015
|Nowadays people get married and have children after the age 30. Is it good or bad?
3 - Today it has become popular among people to make a family and have kids after the age 30. This...
Writing FeedbackAbIk - Mar 24, 2015 / Vns9x - Mar 24, 2015
|It's easy to turn into a dictator but it's difficult to preserve as a good leader - leadership essay
2 - Hello, First, you need to organize your paper better. Your first topic is what makes a good leader good....
Writing FeedbackYoss - Mar 24, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 24, 2015
|People can eat different types of food effortlessly without any difficulties in preparing it.
3 - Nowadays, food becomes easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people life? YES/NO. These days, preparing...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 19, 2015 / EF_Carol - Mar 24, 2015
|Television destroys the family living and communication; Agree or Disagree?
3 - I applaud your conclusion, that T.V. is not alone in destroying family communication. You did point out some other...
Writing FeedbackTrai Do Van - Oct 25, 2012 / EF_Carol - Mar 24, 2015
|"What would you do if I died?" Questbridge Prep Scholarship Personal Statement
2 - Happiness and safety are but an afterthought when bills need to be paid but no one is able to....
Writing FeedbackRunsForCookies - Mar 22, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 24, 2015
|Heirs to ancient knowledge; consensus is possible, but the issues must be put to test.
NEW - In a world connected as we are consensus is possible. But to arrive there the issues must be put...
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|My beloved mother! Good housewife and cook.
3 - hello, good start. I have made some grammatical corrections below About my beloved mother,- her name is Duc,...
Writing FeedbackPinkii - Mar 22, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 23, 2015
|Family - a root of happiness in human life; children and their parents seem to be less close nowaday
2 - Hello, Your English grammar needs improvement. I have made some suggestions, but please read over your essay again and...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 23, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 23, 2015
|On a changing social order in India -- a perception
2 - This is interesting as an introduction. Some people might criticize it because it's not clear. Some things indeed...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 23, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Mar 23, 2015
|Adults education and the reasons why grown-up people continue studying - IELTS
5 - in introduction, you have to mention about what the graph stands out? and it should be clear. also,...
Writing Feedbackminhloc - Mar 21, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 23, 2015
|Kids who are not born with some sort of abilities and skills can be as successful as talented one
4 - Believing(it is true using gerund here, but it could be better that do not put verb as a noun...
Writing Feedbackmaryla - Mar 22, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 23, 2015
|I remember my father's existence in our house since I was born. Describe a person essay.
4 - Thank you very much for your corrections and notifications. These are making me better. Thank you so much....
Writing Feedbacktrivial28 - Mar 21, 2015 / trivial28 - Mar 22, 2015
|Flow in The Necessity of Affirmative Action - reasons and concessions.
3 - Ok, I am actually working with that. But do you have any suggestions on the problem I posted about?...
Writing FeedbackennedroC - Mar 21, 2015 / ennedroC - Mar 21, 2015
|Damage of the environment in terms of improving human living standard
2 - It is argued that the development of human living standard(s) will certainly damage the environment. ... is the most...
Writing FeedbackMinhNguyen1996 - Mar 21, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 21, 2015
|More parents start concerning about the possible negative effects of the computers on their children
3 - Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 20, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 20, 2015
|Philosopher Immanuel Kant urged people to throw off the yolk of tutelage and of idle life; SAT Essay
Writing Feedbackjohanydubon - Mar 20, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 20, 2015
|I wish... I knew Goa Gala-Gala. My narrative essay about a secret place.
7 - Thanks Iynzee for the question and much help. In that case, I tried to make a stimulation to reader...
Writing FeedbackKomank Sukarma - Mar 18, 2015 / Komank Sukarma - Mar 19, 2015
|Comparison of the changes of three main exports in Southland - IELTS
4 - A few suggestions for improvement below. Exports of International tourism and dairy products experience a rise in 2015...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Mar 4, 2015 / andi_83 - Mar 19, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : Taxes burden citizens in some countries.
6 - While this reason can be understandable for some reasons, I utterly believe that paying taxes brings some tangible benefits...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Mar 11, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 19, 2015
|Chalk and Cheese. Not all siblings have the same personality, some are as different as polars.
Writing FeedbackTala1999 - Mar 18, 2015 / Tala1999 - Mar 19, 2015
|Happiness is a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment. For this reason people see money as its source.
2 - Happiness is a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment . For this reason, the majority of people see money as...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 17, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|Today, there are a lot of kitchen utensils available in the market, which people can buy. Quick food
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 18, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|why people work? mainly for pride, honor, fame, respect, enjoyment
2 - Hello, please see my edits below. Work isan important part of everyone's life. They feel pride in...
Writing Feedbackadi sharma - Dec 22, 2012 / lynzee22 - Mar 18, 2015
|People's life would be completely different without Internet; IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 18, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|Reaching at the pinnacle of success requires dedication and determination
3 - I find this statement absolutely accurate as it is in consonance to the famous saying "hard work is the...
Writing Feedbacksamrooney - Jun 25, 2013 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|"Describe a person that inspires you in your career path". Write approximately 150 words.
2 - hello... I enjoyed read your descriptive text above. I just realized that you wrote 166 words as well. Good...
Writing Feedbackbrooch_stone - Mar 18, 2015 / Komank Sukarma - Mar 18, 2015
|More attention should be paid on how people live - the society, people migrates from place to place
2 - In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their lives. These days, people move more around. They...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 18, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 18, 2015
|It's an argument essay in which finding of Dr. Field observation is challenged by Dr. Khap approach.
2 - Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how...
Writing Feedbackankushrastogi03 - Mar 18, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 18, 2015
|Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test other products
5 - Animal experiments should be banned because every year 1,4 mln animals die due to harsh experiments. 1 evidence: animals...
Writing FeedbackAbIk - Mar 18, 2015 / ruslan321 - Mar 18, 2015
|People's activities have been changed as the way of serving food becomes an instant.
3 - In my opinion, your task is quite good but you maybe need to care some small things, such as:...
Writing FeedbackNiddumakhi - Mar 18, 2015 / brooch_stone - Mar 18, 2015
|The child care centres can provide more prefessional care than ordinary family.
Writing FeedbackZHANGYUNAN - Mar 18, 2015 / ZHANGYUNAN - Mar 18, 2015
|"Grades" - immense educational pressure put on the little children in our South Asian societies
5 - Hey Jasmine, You've really pointed out some great points. I also felt that I was making the story confusing...
Writing FeedbackRiyasat - Mar 17, 2015 / Riyasat - Mar 18, 2015
|Initial steps have always been the most difficult and important in achieving something worthwhile.
3 - Mister Wandering, thanks a lot for your valuable rectifications. it was for my toefl! have you ever taken a...
Writing FeedbackSardor_lion - Mar 10, 2015 / Sardor_lion - Mar 18, 2015
|IELTS TASK2: there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 17, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 17, 2015
|Columbia and Yamhill - population in the state of Oregon by Country - IELTS writing
3 - Overall, it is immediately apparent that Washington was the most country in term of population sincehad the highest population...
Writing Feedbacktikyu - Mar 15, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 17, 2015
|The components of a thermos flask to maintain hot liquid (IELTS 1)
4 - Hello, I have done some edits below. I hope this helps. Please be careful with wording. You add some...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 13, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 17, 2015
|Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace
4 - Your conclusion counters everything you said in the paper. In the essay you said that working at home is...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 7, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 17, 2015
|The line graph compares and contrast data on the different percentage of unemployed women
Writing Feedbackilma - Mar 13, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 17, 2015
|Modern lifestyles are increasingly stressful, therefore people in this world are faced by stress.
NEW - Stress is now major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern...
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|IELTS TASK 2 : It is important to keep the circuses exhibition, without using rare animals.
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