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|IELTS task 2: production of consumer goods vs environment
3 - To, the task 2 essay should always have 5 paragraphs presented in it. The 5 paragraph presentation helps you...
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Apr 7, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1- The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public
3 - Hai, the only problem that exists in this otherwise well developed essay is the sentence structuring. You have a...
Writing Feedbackhaiilinhh7396 - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|TOEFL Task 2 - Television ads targeted at young children - what is their influence on youngsters?
3 - Louvy, the above advice doesn't really apply to your work if one considers the prompt requirements which does call...
Writing FeedbackLouvy - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|TOEFL-it is my friends in college that made up my most important memories of the more grown-up stage
5 - @Holt Thank you for your constructive criticism. I've completely rewritten this essay and hope you can give more comments....
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 3, 2018 / Asphodel - Apr 10, 2018
|What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?
2 - Hu, unless otherwise requested specifically in the essay prompt, do not include information such as a personal point of...
Writing FeedbackSeila - Apr 5, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|The variety genres of music - which kind is more important for us?
3 - Alifa, I believe you are self studying for the IELTS test which is my you ended up making every...
Writing Feedbackalifafaza - Apr 5, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|DISCUSS ABOUT PLAYING VIDEO GAMES.
2 - Sarah, it is difficult for me to review your work because you failed to provide me with the original...
Writing FeedbackSarah Phan - Apr 4, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|IELTS Task2 Topic-The positive or negative effects of Internet
3 - Annie, what is the actual prompt you are responding to? Your prompt presentation and your actual discussion are going...
Writing FeedbackAnnieh - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 topic: individuals to provide environmental problems solution
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Apr 3, 2018 / lanvt2811 - Apr 9, 2018
|TOEFL task 2, advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
3 - Mehdi, avoid exaggerations in your presentation. Examiners frown upon examinees who sensationalize the topics given when there is no...
Writing Feedbackmehmoh - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|CBEST defeated by rejection - a situation that has a powerful impact on my personality
2 - Aida, please remember that we always need to have the original prompt instructions posted in the text box before...
Writing FeedbackAid1 - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|IELTS Essay: Professional like doctors and teachers should be paid higher than other professionals
3 - Faisal, you need to always present a 5 paragraph essay in the task 2 test. That means, the presentation...
Writing Feedbackfaisal_husein - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|IELTS the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployment or homelees
3 - Victoria, your discussion poses a prompt deviation which will result in the failure of this essay in an actual...
Writing Feedbackvict0ria - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing games teaches us about life.
3 - Ryan, you seem to be discussing at least 2 different essay types in this presentation, without really hitting a...
Writing FeedbackRyan66 - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 5, 2018
|Effect of celebrity' coverage on media on children
2 - Hoàng, there is a clear lack of prompt instruction understanding your presentation. This has led to only a partial...
Writing FeedbackRachel Morre - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 5, 2018
|Success is a matter of luck - Essay
3 - Abdallah, this is a very convincing essay. Your opinions are based on enough personal observations and popular references for...
Writing Feedbackanajjar - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 4, 2018
|"One More Chance" ...on topic flow, shifting topic to topic, what to discuss in closing?
3 - Thank you for the feedback. It will be extremely helpful in editing my rough draft and move me in...
Writing Feedbacklin2053457 - Apr 1, 2018 / lin2053457 - Apr 3, 2018
|IELTS ONE - The percentage of Australian's citizen did some activities
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - Apr 2, 2018 / abang yoga - Apr 3, 2018
|The only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
Writing Feedbackshirley82113 - Apr 1, 2018 / shirley82113 - Apr 3, 2018
|IELTS: taking gap year has become one of the growing trends among students
2 - Basically your writing is ok. But I suggest you have topic sentence at the beginning of the two body...
Writing Feedbackwandelion - Apr 1, 2018 / lanvt2811 - Apr 3, 2018
|Review on NYT argumentative article "Kids, Would You Pleas*e Start Fighting?" by Adam Grant
NEW - Why Fighting Is Good In many occasions where we see siblings arguing in public, parents will go between...
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|Some people assume that spending money on maintaining public libaries is not necessary
Writing Feedbacklinhdan1198 - Mar 15, 2018 / linhdan1198 - Apr 2, 2018
|When you live in a major city you can learn many features of the whole society
3 - I check this essay by following you advice. I found that there are many thing I can do better....
Writing FeedbackShsiao - Mar 31, 2018 / Shsiao - Apr 2, 2018
|The diagram about how to get energy from geothermal power plants
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - Mar 29, 2018 / abang yoga - Apr 2, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: sales figures - export performance between 2003 and 2008
2 - Chau, congratulations on writing a little more than the minimum required number of words for this essay. You did...
Writing Feedbackchauvy2002 - Mar 31, 2018 / Holt - Apr 1, 2018
|To share information to the public or not
4 - @abang yoga Thank for your helping on reviewing my essay. I will improve on those grammar errors on my...
Writing Feedbackmt000000 - Mar 27, 2018 / mt000000 - Apr 1, 2018
|IELTS task one: the locations choice of the new supermarket
2 - Kiki, this essay will get an automatic failing score because you did not present the minimum 150 word requirement,...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 30, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS task two: young people tend to take a gap year before they study in universities
2 - Kiki, remember that there is a 5 sentence maximum per paragraph presentation. For the task 2 test, you should...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 30, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Purchasing the same goods in every part of the world - a good or bad trend?
3 - Vu, there are two problem points that I want you to concentrate on fixing in your upcoming essays. First,...
Writing Feedbackvhlinh96 - Mar 29, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Charge for admission in museum? Evaluate this policy - IELTS
3 - Vua, this is a single opinion essay as presented by the question "Do you think the advantages of charging...
Writing Feedbackvhlinh96 - Mar 29, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Ratification of a Skilled Labour Declaration
2 - Ulfah, this is a very well developed outline presentation for your paper. Everything about it is strong, informative, and...
Writing Feedbackulfahfadhila - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Should the government control the salaries and limit money people earn.
3 - Anh, the score for this essay will be a 4. You only responded to the personal opinion side. There...
Writing Feedbackaley anhnguyen - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS ESSAY: REWARD STUDENTS WHO SHOW THE BEST RESULTS OR THOSE WHO SHOW IMPROVEMENTS
3 - Bao, this essay will gain you a final score of 4 due to the tangential discussion that you provided...
Writing FeedbackBaoanh - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|CBEST ESSAY Television helps in learning agree or disagree
2 - Lakshmi, since you are not being scored on an individual basis for this essay but rather, on the whole...
Writing Feedbacklaksri23 - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Should scientific research, business and the academic information be shared freely or not?
2 - Michelle, it will be useless for me to point out the scoring errors that you made in this essay...
Writing Feedbackemrysharding - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS test one - why students study and how much support do they get
6 - Kiki, your first statement is insufficient. It must be a proper representation of the information included in the original...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Essay Some people think that having a set retirement age (65 years) for everybody is unfair
Writing Feedbacknanc90 - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|People have a tendency to think that Art and music are too trivial compared to others subjects
Writing Feedbackyuletide - Mar 30, 2018 / yuletide - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Writing Test - Does the coverage of sport on television discourage teenagers from exercise?
3 - This corrections might be useful ; This is suggestions ; discouragement from / to young adults the pressure...
Writing FeedbackNancy Huang - Mar 30, 2018 / abang yoga - Mar 31, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing - a better life with an undergraduate degree or a master degree?
2 - Hi, I think your writing is not too bad, but your essay needs a better introduction and conclusion. You...
Writing Feedbackanchitang0321 - Mar 27, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 29, 2018
|IELTS: pollution and traffic growth - higher gas price as the obvious solution?
4 - Hi Amalia Hanifah, it is glad to see your writing here. So, you will get a number of feedbacks...
Writing Feedbackamalianhanifah - Mar 26, 2018 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 27, 2018
|Colleges and universities have to enroll the same numbers of students in both genders in all subject
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 24, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 27, 2018
|Sharing information in a variety of fields freely
3 - Thank you so much for your reply!! I think maybe I misunderstood the topic. I will rewrite it...
Writing Feedbackyakoe - Mar 26, 2018 / yakoe - Mar 27, 2018
|Space travel vs environment problems? which one is important? PTE
2 - Hey! You have a good essay. Nice use of vocabulary and your ideas are put well together. There...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Mar 26, 2018 / DoctorWho - Mar 26, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2: In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation...
Writing FeedbackNKNam123 - Mar 25, 2018 / NKNam123 - Mar 26, 2018
|The average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000
Writing Feedbackhuonggiza - Mar 21, 2018 / huonggiza - Mar 26, 2018
|Technological advances significantly change the way we live, which includes communication
5 - at the beginning I was not very sure whether this instruction "In what ways has technology affected the...
Writing FeedbackPhucnguyen - Mar 22, 2018 / Phucnguyen - Mar 26, 2018
|Higher taxes should be collected from industries causing higher industrial pollution?
3 - Anh, your opening statement is not a paraphrase of the original prompt, this means a failing score in the...
Writing Feedbackanhtho1412 - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Do the disadvantages of using e-mail surpass the advantages?
4 - Kavan, your response is inaccurate. This is a comparison of opinion discussion. Since you are being asked to weigh...
Writing Feedbackquocviet - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|It is only a matter of time before teachers are replaced by technology in the classroom.
3 - Hoang, while you wrote a pretty good essay here. I am not going to applaud your work for accuracy...
Writing Feedbackharryhoangvn - Mar 22, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Which type of accomodation is best? Advantages of apartment living overweight house's disadvantages.
3 - spacious any hobby (any + singular) houses are considered as to be more advantageous In conclusion/To conclude, it...
Writing FeedbackSTA - Mar 23, 2018 / sumomoakiko - Mar 25, 2018
|Sharing confidential information for free and for everyone?
3 - this is good introduction paragraph for beginning however it is important to make an interesting introductory paragraph so...
Writing Feedbackdimasnrw - Mar 24, 2018 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 25, 2018
|Telling the truth is the first thing I would like develop in a good relationship
3 - Thank you so much!!! This is my first exercise. I very appreciate that you help me improve my structure...
Writing FeedbackJessicaLiao - Mar 18, 2018 / JessicaLiao - Mar 24, 2018
|[Ielts task 2] Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness.
2 - ... because we cannot live without money in the modern world. - I afraid "survive" implying biological living. We...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Mar 24, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 24, 2018
|Teleworking should be adopted ?!?
4 - Hello thanh, Normally in the introduction (ielts) we have two part: paraphrase sentence, answer and introduction to your...
Writing FeedbackBui Thanh - Mar 21, 2018 / happyfunny - Mar 23, 2018
|IELTS writing part 1 - percentage of people aged 65 and over (line graph)
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 21, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 22, 2018
|Circus Entertainment - IELTS writing task 2 correction
Writing FeedbackNKNam123 - Mar 20, 2018 / NKNam123 - Mar 21, 2018
|Government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects
2 - Hoa, you opening paraphrase is not an accurate restatement of the original prompt. Your discussion instruction line is also...
Writing FeedbackHoa Tran - Mar 20, 2018 / Holt - Mar 21, 2018
|China-Russia Market research
3 - @Holt Hi Thank you for your response, I am writing this article for marketing research purpose. I am trying...
Writing Feedbackbaqixiaohei - Mar 20, 2018 / baqixiaohei - Mar 20, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing: How does the increasing availability of information influence life?
3 - Li, your essay was going pretty well until you decided to discuss the US elections. Don't delve on discussing...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
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