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|IELTS-Task 1- The Share of International Student in Canada
4 - Aligned what eddies suggest in your further post. Overall, the percentage of international graduates among universities...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 7, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 8, 2015
|Both transportation stakeholders and commuters should participate in solving traffic problem
2 - You have very good points and examples indicated in your essay. For me what you need to improve is...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 7, 2015 / ajreyes - Feb 8, 2015
|Why people study? Three common reasons: for experience, to improve knowledge and to get a good job.
2 - You can replace your statement as below as I think it would be more appropriate First of all,...
Writing FeedbackTillie - Feb 7, 2015 / Jenya1970 - Feb 7, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 - A Wind Turbine for Harnessing Renewable Energy
Writing Feedbackmidorimido - Feb 4, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 7, 2015
|Energy sources shortage and negative impact on the global climate - 21st century has begun
NEW - The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details...
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|The line graph provides a breakdown information in terms of quadrillion units of energies
2 - Hi, you addressed the graph correctly, but parts of your report were pretty hard to follow. Talking about "the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 6, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 7, 2015
|People are unaware of their original culture and it can damage a number of identities in the world
4 - dear replikatika, I have checked the long man dictionary and cambridge dictionary more than twice to know how to...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 7, 2015
|Some people say that job satisfaction is more important than money when it comes to selecting career
2 - It would be meaningful if you provided a full prompt for us. Anyways, the reasons of why you consent...
Writing Feedbackden31006 - Feb 7, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 7, 2015
|Art is a product of human expression and for this case government should promote it
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / replikatika - Feb 7, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: The average age at which workers retire appears to vary widely around the world.
2 - Honestly, the introduction is hard to understand. -'More attention should be paid ' needs a noun, I think....
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 7, 2015
|The production will receive assistance to provide perfect products - manufacturing stages
2 - -'the production planning which production planning will accept packaging ' should be 'the production planning which will accept...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Feb 6, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 7, 2015
|When possible, parents should sometimes have a trip to natural park on holiday with their children.
4 - -'children should visit some spectacular scenery over the world directly' is main sentence. -as means 'because', the sentence...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 6, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 7, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: An international language is the language of problem solving.
3 - Tia, this is an impresive writing depicting a strong discussion between the benefits and drawbacks learning foreign language in...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 6, 2015 / SHanafi - Feb 7, 2015
|The wind turbine installation method and the optimum choice location of the tower
NEW - Question: The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location. Summarize the information by...
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|IELTS TASK 2: teaching method with a teacher and students in a classroom will not exist
2 - tends to create an informal learning process. is to incline the quality .is incline the quality. this sentence is...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 6, 2015
|Leave alone history, any scientific invention or discoveries can be proved only by facts.
Writing Feedbackvidhyamouli - Feb 5, 2015 / vidhyamouli - Feb 6, 2015
|Too early learning other countries' language would lead children confusing and wasting time
3 - Let me try to rewrite this introduction. More attention should be paid on education for young learners...
Writing Feedbackcakradonya - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 6, 2015
|Tourists in England who visited four different attractions in Brighton - IElTS
4 - Introduction should has the information about the type of graph, the data, the unit of measurement, and periods of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Feb 6, 2015
|Iran and Israel were in war period, but they released their problems and want to part in World Cup
2 - Hi Cuynomellen, you have a good writing and it is well organized although I have found some grammatical errors...
Writing FeedbackCuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|Three possible locations of the wind turbine; under the sea, on top of a hill or near a local house.
2 - Hy akhfan... that's nice essay. you success to construct your essay in order to be easy to read.. however,...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Feb 6, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Internet is a wonderful tool for making new friends
2 - People will maintain their relationship can still keep in touchwith their friends without meeting face-to-face. My suggestion for...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Feb 6, 2015 / Cuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015
|Wind Turbine Generates Energy Power for Harnessing [IELTS - TASK 1]
3 - Hai.. Allow me to give you some suggestion for your essay.. This is a nice essay.. However, I found...
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Feb 4, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|'nouveaux riche' - Technology increases or reduces the rich poor gap?
3 - Please, arranging your body with general to specific. This is my suggestion for your body; Admittedly, technology will...
Writing FeedbackLinhpt - Feb 4, 2015 / Cuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015
|International education; most significant current project to process humanizing mankind to the point
6 - hi Midoremido, thank you very much for your comment. It presumably will be useful if you give reasons for...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 4, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|Every subject may apply in a practical field which impact us and gives a positive effect on our life
3 - Halo, Talibaquil.. Let me give you some suggestion in your essay.. I found that you have to manage your...
Writing Feedbacktalibaquil - Feb 4, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|Sports facility is a big factor of improving public health but it is not enough
Writing FeedbackSHabib - Feb 3, 2015 / SHabib - Feb 5, 2015
|You don't have to work hard to be successful, just be lucky.
2 - Even though you were not given a format for your paper, you should have used the default MLA formatting...
Writing Feedback561_devin - Feb 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 5, 2015
|Mainstream America Should be More Open- Minded to the Use of Medical Marijuana
2 - Your enthusiasm about the argument makes this a great paper. I'm so impressed, this is really some excellent...
Writing Feedbackorthochick37 - Feb 3, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2015
|Trees are utilized in making paper and wood products, water is source of energy - natural resources
2 - Hi! Very good points, but I think you should also add some observation. Since we still can't substitute all...
Writing Feedbackajreyes - Feb 5, 2015 / Elith - Feb 5, 2015
|IELTS - Media Attention to Report Celebrities' Life Instead of The Ordinaries
2 - Hello replikatika, The form of media is the immense source of information. While the media shots...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 5, 2015 / tiaDS - Feb 5, 2015
|"Your generation will be the one that changes everything" - ENG101
3 - Hi wassupwoodsie, If you want to compare your live with your parents, I suggest you to separate different...
Writing Feedbackwassupwoodsie - Feb 5, 2015 / midorimido - Feb 5, 2015
|Is it a good idea to compete for the right to host international sport events?
2 - You need to lengthen this discussion when it comes to the part about your personal opinion on the matter....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 5, 2015
|Running own business like Bill Gates or working at a company?
2 - Hi Shintachandrade, I have several comments, questions, and suggestions for your writing, I hope these can increase your...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 4, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 4, 2015
|Should employees be allowed to do some work from home?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 3, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015
|Should we choose a job to earn more money or to have a contribution to the society?
2 - I absolutely love the personal opinion that you present in this essay. By showing that there is actually a...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 4, 2015
|Wind Turbine Design and process of electricity production. IELTS Writing Task 1.
3 - In my own opinion, you should mention every information which is provided by the figure, especially in describing a...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 3, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 4, 2015
|The turbine construction consist of two main features: a steel tower and a fiberglass or wood blades
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 4, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 4, 2015
|Because of media, Michael Jackson is not only known from his excellent voice
4 - Thankyou for your comment myngoc311.. Actually, I just want to give an example of celebitry who has been...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 2, 2015 / shintacandrade - Feb 4, 2015
|Internet has an advantage - make study, social life and work easier for people
2 - I agree internet has advantage and make the life easier for people from around the world to communicate with...
Writing Feedbackaniso osman - Feb 4, 2015 / talibaquil - Feb 4, 2015
|How could anyone hate snow? Winter is the season of welcoming - Descriptive essay
NEW - How could anyone hate snow? Winter is the season of welcoming, the warm hugs in the cold frigid air,...
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|Freedom of speech tends to have tremendous detrimental effects on a mammoth number of people
2 - your essay is very good, nonetheless, It will be better if you make your sentences shorter...and I found out...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / thiet sun - Feb 3, 2015
|The development of the Internet consists of many positive impacts.
Writing Feedbackthiet sun - Feb 1, 2015 / thiet sun - Feb 3, 2015
|Reasons for finding talented people
2 - Hi Mumtazdinar, These are several suggestions for your writing, I hope these can help you. skilled...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 2, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 3, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task 2: Celebrity show engages viewers
4 - Media are (a) source of actual information. TheIn fact, they notice profoundly(this is inappropriate verb, so I delete it)...
Writing Feedbackdyah - Feb 2, 2015 / eddies - Feb 3, 2015
|ENIGMA = is traffic congestion the resposiblility of individuals or governments?
2 - I think there are some minor grammatical errors as below: a major problem forin most cities around the...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 2, 2015 / Ehsangh - Feb 3, 2015
|IELTS: Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want- an argument-led essay
2 - Hi Ensangh, I have several comments and suggestions for you. GRAMMATICAL ERRORS it should be :...
Writing FeedbackEhsangh - Feb 2, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 2, 2015
|Today's media information is a heated issue that is faced by human beings around of the world.
2 - The prompt is missing something! but anyways, i found some of your mistakes, here we goes. s around of...
Writing Feedbackrhino - Feb 2, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|IELTS - I think that journalists are too concentrated on exposing celebrities' lives
NEW - Q: The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or...
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|The map illustrates 2 possible spots for building a new school. IELTs task 1
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 2, 2015
|British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035 - IELTS task 1
3 - Let me try to rewrite this. The bar chart gives information regarding how many population aged 65...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 2, 2015
|'we have a penchant for copying their habits' - Parents are the best teachers!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|Children are dependent on computer entertainment. Should they spend more time on outdoor activities
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 30, 2015 / rhino - Feb 2, 2015
|Does modern technology make us freer or busier? It is a phenomenon that people bring work home.
2 - To conclude, even though technologies can squander your time in aforementioned ways, notwithstanding they make a significant impact on...
Writing FeedbackLinhpt - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|Learning a new language at any age is an anormously rewarding experience in many ways
Writing FeedbackFaisal_Aceh - Feb 1, 2015 / eddies - Feb 2, 2015
|I would argue that globalization influences people to learn foreign language, English especially
5 - I like the way you write the introduction. However, such intro needs more improvements as to form a...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Jan 31, 2015 / eddies - Feb 2, 2015
|Agree or disagree: Students need one year of break after finishing high school
4 - Luisa, I became really really confused with this line of your comment. In different IELTS writing books I...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 2, 2015
|We have to balance between learning second language and other subjects.
2 - Hi Frt247 , I would like to give several comments and suggestions for your writing. GRAMMAR ISSUES ...
Writing Feedbackfrt427 - Feb 1, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 1, 2015
|Movements to stop and prevent global warming have been getting tractions in the past few decades.
3 - Hey, thanks for commenting. The thing is, I don't have the complete prompt either. This is just what someone...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / motoja - Feb 1, 2015
|PTE Essay: A Computer can perform simple but repetitive tasks much faster than a human can
2 - The issues are well argued. However, I think the ideas should be in different paragraph to be clearer, i.e...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Linhpt - Feb 1, 2015
|Latin or Greek - should we teach dead languages?
2 - Something is missing in your prompt such as asking for your opinion and examples, but anyways here are some...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
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