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|Advertisements lead people to spend money lavishly without further thinking. Ads effects on people.
3 - Hi Tia, thank you for you correction on my writing. I have proofread my writing several times but I...
Writing FeedbackMarsya_EF - Mar 25, 2015 / Marsya_EF - Mar 26, 2015
|Computers have made the world a better place to live. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
6 - Are you going to go against the statement? If not I suggest that you talk about how children and...
Writing FeedbackAbIk - Mar 20, 2015 / rettabby - Mar 25, 2015
|Happiness has different meanings for different people, but everyone wants to be happy.
2 - In my opinion, You should know how to paraphrase the topic before you write, for example, "There is no...
Writing FeedbackRafiq25 - Mar 25, 2015 / vanduongnv - Mar 25, 2015
|Develop countries have created many environmental problems in the world; global warming (IELTS)
2 - Environmental problems would always be a unique topic in this world. For this reason, global warming is estimated to...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 25, 2015 / nazmarta - Mar 25, 2015
|"Two head is better than one head" - studying with other people provide an extra ideas or knowledge
3 - overall you explain everything and give examples. however you need to fix some grammar issues. and you can also...
Writing Feedbackantun - Mar 25, 2015 / nazmarta - Mar 25, 2015
|Fear and Loathing in Society - respond to an article
3 - Thank you... I guess it makes a little more sense when you read the actual article I was given...
Writing Feedbackrxcc - Mar 24, 2015 / rxcc - Mar 24, 2015
|Nowadays people get married and have children after the age 30. Is it good or bad?
3 - Today it has become popular among people to make a family and have kids after the age 30. This...
Writing FeedbackAbIk - Mar 24, 2015 / Vns9x - Mar 24, 2015
|It's easy to turn into a dictator but it's difficult to preserve as a good leader - leadership essay
2 - Hello, First, you need to organize your paper better. Your first topic is what makes a good leader good....
Writing FeedbackYoss - Mar 24, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 24, 2015
|People can eat different types of food effortlessly without any difficulties in preparing it.
3 - Nowadays, food becomes easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people life? YES/NO. These days, preparing...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 19, 2015 / EF_Carol - Mar 24, 2015
|Television destroys the family living and communication; Agree or Disagree?
3 - I applaud your conclusion, that T.V. is not alone in destroying family communication. You did point out some other...
Writing FeedbackTrai Do Van - Oct 25, 2012 / EF_Carol - Mar 24, 2015
|"What would you do if I died?" Questbridge Prep Scholarship Personal Statement
2 - Happiness and safety are but an afterthought when bills need to be paid but no one is able to....
Writing FeedbackRunsForCookies - Mar 22, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 24, 2015
|Heirs to ancient knowledge; consensus is possible, but the issues must be put to test.
NEW - In a world connected as we are consensus is possible. But to arrive there the issues must be put...
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|My beloved mother! Good housewife and cook.
3 - hello, good start. I have made some grammatical corrections below About my beloved mother,- her name is Duc,...
Writing FeedbackPinkii - Mar 22, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 23, 2015
|Family - a root of happiness in human life; children and their parents seem to be less close nowaday
2 - Hello, Your English grammar needs improvement. I have made some suggestions, but please read over your essay again and...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 23, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 23, 2015
|On a changing social order in India -- a perception
2 - This is interesting as an introduction. Some people might criticize it because it's not clear. Some things indeed...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 23, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Mar 23, 2015
|Adults education and the reasons why grown-up people continue studying - IELTS
5 - in introduction, you have to mention about what the graph stands out? and it should be clear. also,...
Writing Feedbackminhloc - Mar 21, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 23, 2015
|Kids who are not born with some sort of abilities and skills can be as successful as talented one
4 - Believing(it is true using gerund here, but it could be better that do not put verb as a noun...
Writing Feedbackmaryla - Mar 22, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 23, 2015
|I remember my father's existence in our house since I was born. Describe a person essay.
4 - Thank you very much for your corrections and notifications. These are making me better. Thank you so much....
Writing Feedbacktrivial28 - Mar 21, 2015 / trivial28 - Mar 22, 2015
|Flow in The Necessity of Affirmative Action - reasons and concessions.
3 - Ok, I am actually working with that. But do you have any suggestions on the problem I posted about?...
Writing FeedbackennedroC - Mar 21, 2015 / ennedroC - Mar 21, 2015
|Damage of the environment in terms of improving human living standard
2 - It is argued that the development of human living standard(s) will certainly damage the environment. ... is the most...
Writing FeedbackMinhNguyen1996 - Mar 21, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 21, 2015
|More parents start concerning about the possible negative effects of the computers on their children
3 - Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 20, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 20, 2015
|Philosopher Immanuel Kant urged people to throw off the yolk of tutelage and of idle life; SAT Essay
Writing Feedbackjohanydubon - Mar 20, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 20, 2015
|I wish... I knew Goa Gala-Gala. My narrative essay about a secret place.
7 - Thanks Iynzee for the question and much help. In that case, I tried to make a stimulation to reader...
Writing FeedbackKomank Sukarma - Mar 18, 2015 / Komank Sukarma - Mar 19, 2015
|Comparison of the changes of three main exports in Southland - IELTS
4 - A few suggestions for improvement below. Exports of International tourism and dairy products experience a rise in 2015...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Mar 4, 2015 / andi_83 - Mar 19, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : Taxes burden citizens in some countries.
6 - While this reason can be understandable for some reasons, I utterly believe that paying taxes brings some tangible benefits...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Mar 11, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 19, 2015
|Chalk and Cheese. Not all siblings have the same personality, some are as different as polars.
Writing FeedbackTala1999 - Mar 18, 2015 / Tala1999 - Mar 19, 2015
|Happiness is a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment. For this reason people see money as its source.
2 - Happiness is a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment . For this reason, the majority of people see money as...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 17, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|Today, there are a lot of kitchen utensils available in the market, which people can buy. Quick food
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 18, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|why people work? mainly for pride, honor, fame, respect, enjoyment
2 - Hello, please see my edits below. Work isan important part of everyone's life. They feel pride in...
Writing Feedbackadi sharma - Dec 22, 2012 / lynzee22 - Mar 18, 2015
|People's life would be completely different without Internet; IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 18, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|Reaching at the pinnacle of success requires dedication and determination
3 - I find this statement absolutely accurate as it is in consonance to the famous saying "hard work is the...
Writing Feedbacksamrooney - Jun 25, 2013 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2015
|"Describe a person that inspires you in your career path". Write approximately 150 words.
2 - hello... I enjoyed read your descriptive text above. I just realized that you wrote 166 words as well. Good...
Writing Feedbackbrooch_stone - Mar 18, 2015 / Komank Sukarma - Mar 18, 2015
|More attention should be paid on how people live - the society, people migrates from place to place
2 - In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their lives. These days, people move more around. They...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 18, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 18, 2015
|It's an argument essay in which finding of Dr. Field observation is challenged by Dr. Khap approach.
2 - Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how...
Writing Feedbackankushrastogi03 - Mar 18, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 18, 2015
|Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test other products
5 - Animal experiments should be banned because every year 1,4 mln animals die due to harsh experiments. 1 evidence: animals...
Writing FeedbackAbIk - Mar 18, 2015 / ruslan321 - Mar 18, 2015
|People's activities have been changed as the way of serving food becomes an instant.
3 - In my opinion, your task is quite good but you maybe need to care some small things, such as:...
Writing FeedbackNiddumakhi - Mar 18, 2015 / brooch_stone - Mar 18, 2015
|The child care centres can provide more prefessional care than ordinary family.
Writing FeedbackZHANGYUNAN - Mar 18, 2015 / ZHANGYUNAN - Mar 18, 2015
|Initial steps have always been the most difficult and important in achieving something worthwhile.
3 - Mister Wandering, thanks a lot for your valuable rectifications. it was for my toefl! have you ever taken a...
Writing FeedbackSardor_lion - Mar 10, 2015 / Sardor_lion - Mar 18, 2015
|"Grades" - immense educational pressure put on the little children in our South Asian societies
Writing FeedbackRiyasat - Mar 17, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 17, 2015
|IELTS TASK2: there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 17, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 17, 2015
|Columbia and Yamhill - population in the state of Oregon by Country - IELTS writing
3 - Overall, it is immediately apparent that Washington was the most country in term of population sincehad the highest population...
Writing Feedbacktikyu - Mar 15, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 17, 2015
|The components of a thermos flask to maintain hot liquid (IELTS 1)
4 - Hello, I have done some edits below. I hope this helps. Please be careful with wording. You add some...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 13, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 17, 2015
|Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace
4 - Your conclusion counters everything you said in the paper. In the essay you said that working at home is...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 7, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 17, 2015
|The line graph compares and contrast data on the different percentage of unemployed women
Writing Feedbackilma - Mar 13, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 17, 2015
|Modern lifestyles are increasingly stressful, therefore people in this world are faced by stress.
NEW - Stress is now major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern...
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|IELTS TASK 2 : It is important to keep the circuses exhibition, without using rare animals.
Writing FeedbackNiddumakhi - Mar 17, 2015 / eddies - Mar 17, 2015
|These days everyone seems to have more and more possessions (e.g. computers, cars, mobile phones, et
2 - Hello, I am a students studying writing in English. Could you read my essay and fix if there are...
Writing FeedbackSunnydayyy - Mar 15, 2015 / btrfly7 - Mar 15, 2015
|'fresh ideas of creating new successful starts-up' - should we follow customs of a visited country?
Writing FeedbackIoda_Julia - Mar 15, 2015 / Ioda_Julia - Mar 15, 2015
|Australian boys and girls of age 5-14 leisure activities
4 - -gauravwalia1988 Thank you for the feedback. Mostly i still used simple words and sentences in my writing, will try...
Writing Feedbacktiawulansari - Mar 15, 2015 / tiawulansari - Mar 15, 2015
|Whether to voice our opinions or not? Listening to your heart is of vital importance.
Writing FeedbackDoggy - Mar 12, 2015 / Doggy - Mar 15, 2015
|Opening scenes of God Father 1 & 2 ; NCEA Level 3 English Film Study Essay
3 - I made a lot of punctuation changes, mostly breaking up, lengthy sentences, and clarifying them, with new word choices...
Writing FeedbackNoble - Sep 4, 2013 / EF_Carol - Mar 15, 2015
|Firstly, when the rain falls, the dam is full for a period of time. How the rainwater is reused.
5 - Overall, this is good. I just have a few improvements in grammatical points of view This sentence...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 7, 2015 / eddies - Mar 14, 2015
|My Thrilling Birth Day Surprise in Royal Boutique - simple narrative essay
2 - My Thrilling Birth Day Birthday Surprise My unforgettable experience happened in my birth day surprise several months ago...
Writing FeedbackKomank Sukarma - Mar 13, 2015 / gauravwalia1988 - Mar 14, 2015
|The number of population in the U.S. of Oregon - gradual rise in three different counties
3 - Adhisti: a leading countie be careful with your spelling, it should be "continue" Thank you for your...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Mar 14, 2015 / Adhisti - Mar 14, 2015
|The process of pencil making from graphite and wood
3 - The first paragraph makes a brief statement about the information contained the diagram, plus the overview. Also, the following...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 13, 2015 / eddies - Mar 14, 2015
|'my grandfather has diabetes' Young people enjoy more than older people?
Writing FeedbackVinusha - May 7, 2013 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 13, 2015
|The carbon cycle in our life - from fossil fuels to photosynthesis
4 - The diagram illustrates the way in which the how carbon is recycled in the daily life. It can be...
Writing FeedbackZihni92 - Mar 13, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 13, 2015
|The process of the greenhouse effect in the earth' surface - too much gases accumulated
3 - The diagram illustrates the process of the greenhouse ... I like the way in which you presented this...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 13, 2015 / eddies - Mar 13, 2015
|In developed countries like America, France and Germany nearly everyone seems to own a car.
Writing FeedbackCE317 - Mar 11, 2015 / CE317 - Mar 13, 2015
|Critique practice GRE "Analyze an Argument"(head of household)
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