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|Fundamental stage for the future - Two main reasons for study in college or university
Writing Feedbackadad1120 - Dec 3, 2014 / adad1120 - Dec 9, 2014
|Allah always gives the perfect and most suitable things for us, so we must trust Him and do our best
Writing Feedbacknermeen_s3d - Dec 8, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 8, 2014
|TOEFL: Films are so popular today mainly due to the benefits they bring to human beings
2 - Mariana, you have gotten quite creative with your essay writing. This essay in particular shows that you have spent...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Dec 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 8, 2014
|Social involvement is a good way for students to develop their skills, necessary in further life
3 - Try to avoid describing two separate ideas within one passage. For instance, in this paragraph you are writing about...
Writing Feedbackthanhtam_tma - Dec 7, 2014 / MarianaS - Dec 8, 2014
|Pick your favorite artist or designer. Write about a day that you would spend with her/him...
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|ESSAY: RELATED TO COMPUTERS vs EDUCATION
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|Both parents should have the same impact on raising their own children - IELTS
4 - Hi patrick Jarguz, however Tam Le has been corrected your essay in relation to missed spelling, allow me to...
Writing FeedbackDaelen - Dec 7, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 8, 2014
|Ebola prevention research paper
2 - Savannah, your paper would be better if you provided a clear thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. That would...
Writing Feedbacksavannacrosser - Dec 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 8, 2014
|[essays] is it appropriate for magazine or newspaper to give private information about people?
2 - There is a side to the argument that you have failed to present as a counter argument to your...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Dec 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 7, 2014
|Tall and loving it - I reached the height of six-foot-two when I was done growing
Writing Feedbacksweetpea123 - Dec 7, 2014 / sweetpea123 - Dec 7, 2014
|Democracy does flourish best in societies with high socio-economic development. Aristotle
2 - Reza, your SOP is highly academic in nature and not technical. A proper SOP requires you to present your...
Writing Feedbackrezajoon - Dec 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Ability to read and write - today, those basic skills make society more comfort for living.
Writing FeedbackZoriana - Dec 6, 2014 / thanhtam_tma - Dec 7, 2014
|IELTS: Modern children's game
Writing Feedbackthanhtam_tma - Dec 6, 2014 / thanhtam_tma - Dec 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Should land be developed or left in natural condition?
3 - Definitely an improved mode of writing Mariana. Your writing shows a clear understanding of the prompt and you have...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Dec 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 6, 2014
|Television: a Microcosm of the Political Culture and Economy of China - Pomona College essay
2 - You have presented quite an interesting topic for the study. The fact that very little is known about Chinese...
Writing Feedbackfpu97 - Dec 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 6, 2014
|IELTS - Young or old employees? Which are more valuable for the company?
2 - Every manager's goal is to select the best personnel. What kind of stuff they must choose (don't use stuff,...
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Dec 5, 2014 / orian2014 - Dec 5, 2014
|Various issues will have to be faced by the government throughout its tenure - GRE Issue Essay
2 - I think, in the first paragraph you must say which do you accept : to solve the immediate problems...
Writing Feedbackmac1994 - Dec 4, 2014 / el_lee88 - Dec 5, 2014
|Would it be better if more good news was reported? - IELTS
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Dec 4, 2014 / el_lee88 - Dec 5, 2014
|Nowadays people are valued by their social rank or materialistic activity - IELTS essay
4 - perhaps, you should hide several words such as and there are inappropriate for academic writing....
Writing Feedbackbang - Nov 26, 2014 / rhino - Dec 5, 2014
|Dance is very important for the popularity of the country.
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Dec 4, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Dec 5, 2014
|Children are misled, while promoters consider advertising as a source of useful information
NEW - There are many advertisements directed at children. Parents argue that children are misled, while advertisers consider advertising a source...
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|IELTS: The changes in share price of Outokumpu enterprises - Writing task 1, Line graph
Writing Feedbackbongbang - Dec 4, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 5, 2014
|What do accountants do? What characteristics make a good accountant?
Writing Feedbackjjk1346 - Dec 3, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 4, 2014
|TOEFL: writing integrate question about "Productivity and Rewards"
2 - May be you can smootly add the topics in one sentence to your introduction. It might be more effective....
Writing Feedbackatousa64 - Dec 4, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Dec 4, 2014
|Traditional skills; keep them alive or let them die out ?
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|Assisted Suicide Should be a Persons Final Civil Right
Writing Feedbacktryn2hard2 - Dec 3, 2014 / tryn2hard2 - Dec 4, 2014
|Everywhere people spent more on food, drinks and tobacco; consumer spending - table
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|IETLS W1 poverty rates by age and gender (bar chart) and family composition of women in poverty...
3 - Thanks to Dumi, our moderator and contributor here, the first and foremost lesson I learn from her is that...
Writing FeedbackLFAle - Dec 3, 2014 / eddies - Dec 3, 2014
|Dream, the only harmless drug in the world - gap year explanation
Writing Feedbackgia - Nov 19, 2014 / gia - Dec 3, 2014
|IEITS-It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they are not happy.
7 - It is not bad as a first attempt.. Try to rewrite the third paragraph,it is not clear enough....
Writing FeedbackWilsonank - Nov 30, 2014 / Shaimaa - Dec 3, 2014
|Many Vietnamese students are not good at the local history. What are the cause of this problem?
3 - Thanks for your help. May I ask you what bout my mistakes such as grammar or vocabularies? Is it...
Writing FeedbackMisstuyet94 - Nov 30, 2014 / Misstuyet94 - Dec 3, 2014
|Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations?
2 - Hi chomphunut , here are some problems of you: 1. NExt time you should include the type of essay...
Writing Feedbackchomphunut - Dec 2, 2014 / SalMon - Dec 3, 2014
|Detailed Crimes in the media should be controlled
Writing Feedbackrcpjj - Dec 2, 2014 / el_lee88 - Dec 3, 2014
|Due to influence of world-wide media, the gap between cultures is narrowing.
2 - "But opponent of global culture believes, this idea has introduce with powers who have special tools for advertising and...
Writing Feedbackali27 - Dec 2, 2014 / vlinh1991 - Dec 2, 2014
|Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity.
Writing Feedbackvlinh1991 - Nov 30, 2014 / vlinh1991 - Dec 2, 2014
|The Importance of Physical and Social Hobbies In Today's Electronic World
2 - Very informative- I think you did an excellent job with your topic! I do believe that you could add...
Writing Feedbackurgirl1 - Dec 1, 2014 / andreak1022 - Dec 2, 2014
|Are nuclear weapons global peacemakers or killing devices?
NEW - Nuclear Weapons are puissant and can kill gargantuan amount of people in very short span of time by the...
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|There are different learning abilities of children in the class to accept same educational ways.
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Dec 2, 2014 / ali27 - Dec 2, 2014
|Managing university's budgets effectively requires carefully consider. Money to sports activities!
3 - Ohhh I see... Thank you so much. Next time, I do make sure that I understand what the question...
Writing FeedbackThe beginner - Nov 27, 2014 / The beginner - Dec 2, 2014
|Being underrated gives you the advantage of a no-pressure situation
3 - Thank you so much eddies. Can you please tell me how to rewrite the last paragraph. I also wanted...
Writing FeedbackMasroor 25 - Dec 1, 2014 / Masroor 25 - Dec 2, 2014
|The effects of cheaper flights - IELTS Essay
7 - immense advances = I am afraid it is inappropriate if you using "immense" to "advances" Businessman = business...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Nov 6, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 2, 2014
|IELTS: What is the most happy age between teenage and adult. Discuss both views.
5 - It is always struggle among people which period of life is the best. In childhood period, children think...
Writing Feedbackzigolf - Nov 6, 2014 / ali27 - Dec 2, 2014
|To get them ready for the adult life, should teenage children be encouraged to take a part-time job?
3 - Thanks for your compliment Mahmoud. Actually I agree with the topic statement that parents should encourage their kids to...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 30, 2014 / rongmui - Dec 2, 2014
|Every individual has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws
Writing Feedbackraynus - Nov 30, 2014 / raynus - Dec 1, 2014
|It is difficult for mothers and fathers to understand their children because of generation gap
3 - 212 words. This is not suitable to your essay development, as you are asking to write 250 words and...
Writing Feedbackdtthuydang259 - Dec 1, 2014 / eddies - Dec 1, 2014
|IELTS essay. Deforestation caused by human activity.
Writing FeedbackMarceline - Nov 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Nov 30, 2014
|Would you prefer Indoor or Outdoor for your leisure activities.
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Nov 30, 2014
|Introductory Paragraph about causes of HIV in children
6 - Hi vangiespen, thanks for your input and support. I have now posted my completed essay, maybe you can take...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 23, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 30, 2014
|'The solid state; crystalline and amorphous solids' - learning scientific writing
Writing FeedbackSwiny - Nov 28, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 30, 2014
|I was like every child in my community
16 - Vangiespen, you're amazing. Thanks for your help, more data to your devices, in surfing EF. Yes, British English. Please...
Writing FeedbackModewap - Nov 23, 2014 / Modewap - Nov 30, 2014
|Who has the most enormous impact among people around the world?
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 23, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 30, 2014
|If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor, the way of celebration
4 - Like I said, you need to learn to divide your essay into specific topic paragraphs. Right now you have...
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 30, 2014
|Tragic decrease in the life quality in many major cities; Causes, solutions for poor living standard
2 - Hi Van. You need to focus your writing frame. In the introduction restate the question and tell the readers...
Writing FeedbackVan Anh Nguyen - Nov 28, 2014 / Rogerb - Nov 29, 2014
|Should people be treated by what they have achieved or what they are capable of?; SAT essay
Writing Feedbacksmartfeet - Nov 28, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014
|'A students needs to fill his free time with enjoyable hobbies' - Sports or libraries?
Writing Feedbackmashf - Nov 26, 2014 / mashf - Nov 29, 2014
|Some people are very excited to go to live venue of a sporting event - watching home or at stadium?
NEW - Q) Some people like to go to a live sporting event, while others prefer to stay at home and...
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|The green spaces are source of knowledge that can provide significant profit for human
2 - I see some keywords/terms to use in the essay, so you can get full credit: economic gain, views on...
Writing Feedbacktagoyaki - Nov 27, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2014
|In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly
3 - Thanks eddies for your suggested introduction. Followed is my revised statement for the 2nd paragraph. Is it better? ...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 26, 2014 / rongmui - Nov 27, 2014
|In fields such as business, politics, etc, its leaders should be renewed every five years.
3 - Thank you for your recommendation man! It's still hard for me to organize everything and write in down...
Writing Feedbacktagoyaki - Nov 24, 2014 / tagoyaki - Nov 27, 2014
|An intelligent audience watching TV acquire positive sides from it - the perception is important
2 - "They say, population relationships was more strengther than today, because they had more recreation customs which needs presence...
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