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|We have to balance between learning second language and other subjects.
2 - Hi Frt247 , I would like to give several comments and suggestions for your writing. GRAMMAR ISSUES ...
Writing Feedbackfrt427 - Feb 1, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 1, 2015
|Movements to stop and prevent global warming have been getting tractions in the past few decades.
3 - Hey, thanks for commenting. The thing is, I don't have the complete prompt either. This is just what someone...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / motoja - Feb 1, 2015
|PTE Essay: A Computer can perform simple but repetitive tasks much faster than a human can
2 - The issues are well argued. However, I think the ideas should be in different paragraph to be clearer, i.e...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Linhpt - Feb 1, 2015
|Latin or Greek - should we teach dead languages?
2 - Something is missing in your prompt such as asking for your opinion and examples, but anyways here are some...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
|The only remedy for this problem, is to set up a more powerful law. Smoking and its aftermaths!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
|While there are benefits of studying, there are good reasons why doing a job is worth a try.
3 - Thank you! Shon Do, it is really helpful. Eventhough i always get high marks at my literature (My mother...
Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 31, 2015 / katherina - Feb 1, 2015
|The data suggest that, as time goes by, more individuals prefer games software and DVDs over CDs.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 30, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 31, 2015
|There are some reasons why children learn better and faster than adults.
2 - A children(A children? It must be "A child", right?) should study a foreign language in school starting in the...
Writing Feedbackwina - Jan 31, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 31, 2015
|Parents claim that although advertisement provides information, children are misled by these adverts
3 - o conclude after discussing both the views , I feel that parents argument has got strong points and are...
Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 30, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 30, 2015
|Drug is the thing that has always been prohibited in this world - Drugs and teenagers essay
NEW - People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are expertimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and...
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|Internet, automobiles, aeronautical and medical advancements - 21st Century Scientific Changes
Writing Feedbacksambhavsh - Jan 24, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 30, 2015
|Advertisement motivates us to imitate others rather than being unique according to our interest
Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 29, 2015 / vijaypj - Jan 29, 2015
|A/D: Children will have less financial problems if they are given a certain amount of money weekly
NEW - Topic: Some people think that giving their children a certain amount of money every week will help them have...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 29, 2015 / — -
|IELTS: in-home work and in-home study, a development positive or negative?
3 - Many many thanks to you for your detaied and meticulous revision. It is quite a contribution. If it could...
Writing Feedbackmoleman - Jan 29, 2015 / moleman - Jan 29, 2015
|Group or on your own! Safety is a huge issue.
2 - English is not my first language,so what i can offer are just my humble thoughts. You have made...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015 / moleman - Jan 29, 2015
|Essay writing; Parents should send children to school or not to be good members of society .
Writing FeedbackPedram - Jan 21, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 29, 2015
|Coca Cola's sales numbers - Task 1 IELTs (pie)
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015 / myngoc311 - Jan 29, 2015
|Gem cannot be polished nor man perfected
Writing Feedbackpurpleperidot - Jan 24, 2015 / purpleperidot - Jan 29, 2015
|Stunning and nail-biting special effects in today's television.
Writing Feedbackeftekharizade - Jan 28, 2015 / TJLuschen - Jan 29, 2015
|IELTS; 'our hectic schedule'; The need of music - Traditional Vs International
3 - You have some serious issues with punctuation, please revise the essay before submitting it. When it comes the content...
Writing Feedbackmariyuz - Mar 17, 2013 / Vns9x - Jan 29, 2015
|I completely disagree with the idea of making new regulations in school.
Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 28, 2015 / TJLuschen - Jan 28, 2015
|Snitching people! They are inclined to move to another country especially to the rich one.
NEW - More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like...
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|University degrees are very essential in job market and to pursue master education
3 - From the decades, the education is considered as important thing in the life . the education has been considered...
Writing Feedbackdeepachiniwal - Jan 27, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 28, 2015
|ielts: Are we becoming more independent ?
Writing Feedbackamirafahmy - Jan 26, 2015 / amirafahmy - Jan 28, 2015
|Study blindfoldedly without analyzing the assumptions made in it will certainly bring one's downfall
2 - this is not a nice approach of questioning a work. The data are not "trustable", "legitimate" or "valid"...
Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 28, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015
|The current energy sources that we use, contaminate our environment, as well as the mankind.
4 - just electricity? I suggest to change electricity to "energy" as a more general term. electricity...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 27, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
|Essay on being unique - Everybody is unique in their own way.
4 - this essay has alot of great ideas just try avoiding the part where you say because although it shows...
Writing Feedbackrone - Jan 26, 2015 / omarsamahy - Jan 27, 2015
|The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems (welfare) of the society
2 - The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems(welfare) of the society, and problems here does not...
Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 27, 2015 / confusee123 - Jan 27, 2015
|Media should be allowed to publish information about the private life: Discuss two different views
2 - Okay, first up, you were being asked to only discuss 2 opinions in this essay, the pro and the...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2015
|If the students study the same nation curriculum then they can equally perform in all the field
3 - I would change more things, however beyond your scripture and grammatical errors, you used India and GRE to develop...
Writing Feedbackkumawatakki - Sep 19, 2014 / Elith - Jan 27, 2015
|Ielts: People watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this?
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
|Piano, my source of motivation - Umich/ Extracurricular CommonApp Essay
2 - Yes, you should make applause italics in the middle of the paragraph. It signifies that the action is not...
Writing Feedbackf3bruar7z - Jan 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2015
|Weddings in Vietnam and America - two different ways to celebrate it
2 - Lin, I am not sure where you got your ideas about how the American wedding is celebrated but there...
Writing Feedbacklinhchi - Jan 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2015
|Spending for space Project is Justify, other consider to be useless.
3 - To conclude, spending government money on the space exploration is not wisely a wise decision On balance, my...
Writing Feedbackfarazshamsi - Jan 24, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 26, 2015
|Experiences will aid you in various ways, but are no more sufficient for this contemporary world
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 26, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|Ielts - "successful in an egalitarian society or Capitalistic"
2 - First, the essay contains only 248 words, less than 250. Be careful, no matter how well you can write,...
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|Women should stay at home and raise children: Do you agree or disagree
4 - OK Luisa, I rewrote the essay, can you please have look at this version? For centuries the patriarchy...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|The different floor plan design; sharing space, bedroom, toilet, tatami room, balcony, kitchen
2 - Overall flow is good. There are some grammatical errors like : It very convenience if we have toilet...
Writing Feedbackkonbon - Jan 24, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|Animals vs human needs; we should know how to protect the animals and suppress our avarice
2 - It has always been aquite contentious sincethere is an abundance of people who consider that , it ...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 25, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|IELTS - Paying for clothes, haircuts and beauty products - just to enhance own appearence?
Writing FeedbackShankargouda - Jan 25, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|English usage is increasing day by day, therefore various local languages are becoming extinct IELTS
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 25, 2015 / myngoc311 - Jan 25, 2015
|Modern technology has more negative effects than positive ones: Agree or disagree?
5 - Thank you very much Luisa. I'm happy this time the argument was not lacking any part of the prompt....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015
|Children don't think too much while acting. They have all freedom to do anything what they want.
Writing Feedbackrohitkhadse - Jan 23, 2015 / rohitkhadse - Jan 25, 2015
|Have you ever had the feeling of leaving your own country behind for an exciting adventure overseas?
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 24, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015
|A cornerstone for a person to get successful in life is planning. TOEFL activities Essay
3 - Sorry to inform you but this essay needs lots of works. Glaringly, you could have introduced your ideas in...
Writing Feedbackblackcat - Jan 23, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 24, 2015
|TOEFL: People always debate on whether or not children should follow their parents' career paths.
6 - Albeit, it is quite a salient and interesting essay to read. Notwithstanding, i want to point out some of...
Writing Feedbacksimonexi - Jan 23, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 24, 2015
|While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenses. Share your opinion.
3 - Thank you for guiding me .. It was a big mistake and I even didn't notice!! Will correct soon...
Writing FeedbackPayaldx - Jan 24, 2015 / Payaldx - Jan 24, 2015
|Online Shopping increase in our daily life
2 - Faraz, kindly review your essay for capitalization errors and problems. The country is called the United States and is...
Writing Feedbackfarazshamsi - Jan 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|TOEFL: The famous adage 'No pain, no gain' is by far the most logical expression I have ever heard.
4 - Yes, it is not only a deviation from the topic but it is also out of place. Your relationship...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Do you think that arts need to take a large part of the school timetable? Agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Students need to learn practical skills: Agree or disagree?
8 - Honestly, the essay is fine. The only problem like I previously mentioned, is that you use examples that require...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Making noise as much as you can!! Discuss two viewpoints :)
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|TOEFL: The best way to relax and reduce stress is by spending some time alone.
4 - Kim, while your second paragraph does present a negative light of the way group relaxation may not be the...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|SAT: "If you tell the truth, you don't have to remember anything"
2 - I believe you meant to say "harmless" in the last sentence of the third paragraph when you said harmful....
Writing FeedbackBurki - Jan 22, 2015 / AndrewB - Jan 23, 2015
|Every single man and woman has the freedom to believe what they wish to believe. TOEFL
5 - Your diction was impressive! Your word choice was on point at all times. At the beginning of the...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 22, 2015 / abgalpal101 - Jan 22, 2015
|TOEFL: Is it better to watch serious movies that are designed to make you think than just to watch?
5 - I agree... The time for a TOEFL writing in cruel... a full 4-5 paragraph essay in 30 minutes... It...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 22, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|"Dad, I am hungry!!" | "Hi hungry, I am dad!" - Change Leads to Growth
2 - The language and grammar that you use in this essay is casual yet respectful. It is reflectively written and...
Writing Feedbackoctober12 - Jan 22, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 22, 2015
|A/D It is important for families to regularly eat their meals together.
6 - Burki, Really? That's all you are going to offer? I just saw your comment on Ah_Zafari thread. You're not...
Writing Feedbackdreamcomestrue - Jan 21, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|Trying to devise an optimal way to teach has always been one of the priorities in pedagogic research
NEW - The best way to teach-whether as an educator, employer, or parent-is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones....
Writing Feedbackethenian - Jan 22, 2015 / — -
|TOEFL: Television advertising directed toward children under the age of five should not be allowed.
6 - Hmm. I understand what you are trying to say... And don't worry about not replying, I understand your situation....
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 18, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
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