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|Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities
8 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some...
Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|[Toefl] By excessive use of cars in the roads, the number of accident has increased.
7 - Thank you Dear Louisa.I understood how to use questions in my conclusion by the summery you have wrote....
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 16, 2014
|IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment
3 - When it comes to an introductory statement, you are asked to introduce the topic. Most students simply paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Students would receive a better education if attending classes for 11 month of a year
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 11, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014
|One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2
2 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Should we take action at once? 'patience have great range influence in our life'
6 - Mabel, don't worry. You will get to my level of writing through constant practice. So don't stop writing essays...
Writing FeedbackMabel Ye - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Living in country or city? Answer depends on the ages, hobbies and gender of each person.
3 - I think the answer for this question depends on the ages , hobbies , and gender of each person....
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 15, 2014 / fikri - Sep 15, 2014
|'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries
Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014 / masghar - Sep 15, 2014
|School curriculum - It should be optional for students to choose their favorite subjects to follow
3 - Related: Essay ideas - students should have more input into the school curriculum Greetings! It depends in...
Writing Feedbackboo2601 - Sep 14, 2014 / boo2601 - Sep 15, 2014
|My girlfriend says that money is everything, but we need yet have more care about public recognition
3 - nickyzhi:When I ask my girlfriend which do you prefer, money or public recognition, she shouts:" Definitely money, money is...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 15, 2014 / d96nguyen - Sep 15, 2014
|'It was at that moment I realized my mistake' - sample from my autobiography; college essay
Writing Feedbackjakobymeyers - Sep 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000
NEW - *The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.* ...
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|I'm a nice person that is always trying to help others. Self-evaluation for my teacher
5 - This is incomplete. What are you going to accomplish? Your goals? If that so, better state it clearly...
Writing Feedbackronny12 - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Cars have had a greater impact on the society than airplanes.
5 - hey vangie, you are always helpful, thank you :) I'll rewrite this essay, and so many works are...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 14, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 14, 2014
|Responsible tourists to preserve about culture and environment
5 - This is a very meticulous essay and then I suggest that you pay more attention concerning the overall arguments...
Writing Feedbacksyabring - Jan 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor
4 - I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|The law need the flexibility in each verdict of criminal behaviours
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 13, 2014
|GRE Issue: Great nations should be assessed by general welfare of its people
2 - You have a solid start for your introduction. There is a slight problem though. You were supposed to agree...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 13, 2014
|IELTS: 'Women absolutely dominate in two fields' - male and female teachers
8 - This is not clearly referred.It is also not fair while the graph shows man's worker outnumber women in...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|which one have an important role in order to success of students in school?classmate or parents?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 12, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 13, 2014
|TOEFL: to be an expert in one field is not better than to have broad knowledge of many subjects
5 - the flow interrupted while you are not explain what is the specific reasons effecting your sister...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|MONEY IS THE ROOT OF ALL EVIL
4 - I wonder that you can write the prompt and purpose of the essay. It is addressed for IELTS, TOEFL...
Writing FeedbackMariuxi - Aug 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 12, 2014
|GRE essay: Many important discoveries or creations are accidental
Writing Feedbackasdsa111 - Aug 14, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 12, 2014
|GRE; Welfare of the nation and the desire of corporations to maximize profits
3 - Personally I think you need a stronger thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. It is ambiguous which side you...
Writing Feedbacksnowcones - Oct 21, 2013 / dunguyen - Sep 12, 2014
|Consequences to Uselessly Building in Wildlife/Natural Areas
Writing Feedbackhalhante - Mar 4, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Truth is most important factor in making a romantic relationship persistent
2 - - The debate about whether telling the truth is an important factor in any kind of relationship has...
Writing Feedbackm64 - Oct 20, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|TOEFL Essay: How does advertising influence people's behaviour?
Writing FeedbackHaydi - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Sep 12, 2014
|People go to college because they need to learn more things about the world - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackinecula - Jun 13, 2013 / hamedmas - Sep 12, 2014
|TOEFL: Public health. Should government introduce a law or is it a personal issue?
5 - Without government's attention to public health, epidemic diseases could be catastrophic. Please choose the first statement of the...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 12, 2014
|[TOEFL] Parents are our teachers from the very early time in our life.
6 - Lian, I have the same problems with my essay writting as you do. Sometimes I even realize that I...
Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|[TOEFL] 'Firstly, people want to have more knowledge' - why attend to college or university?
Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 12, 2014
|TOEFL: Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility
3 - Louisa, I am very grateful for your support! Frankly, it takes me more time to write an essay than...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|Informations from books or from real life?; unexpected things happening everyday
2 - Let's not worry about your grammar problems for now. Let's get the message of the essay cleaned up first....
Writing Feedbackkordestanchi - Mar 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore - CLEP Essays
2 - Rucha, let me offer you some words of advice in order to help polish your essay. You have written...
Writing FeedbackRucha - Nov 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Toefl- Government should spend more money on improving roads or public transport?
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: the positive and negative effects of the increase in the elders
2 - Crystal, the prompt begs you to discuss the topic in the manner of a compare and contrast essay. That...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Apr 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Young people and their participation in helping their communities
3 - I agree with xatutik. While you presented a well thought out essay. There was a failure on your part...
Writing Feedbackmtkee - May 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS: "Countryside resort"; Where would you like to spend you unforgettable holidays next summer?
5 - By way of personal explanation,summer holiday is one of the best possible ways to get away from the...
Writing FeedbackLuke Cameron Jr - Sep 11, 2014 / fikri - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: It is very responsible task to create school nationwide curriculum
2 - Xatutik, while you present an immediate and effective body paragraph to the prompt, you still need to establish your...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Is homeschooling a good alternative to public education?
2 - Faith, I would advise you to please create an introductory statement that gives an overview of the topic being...
Writing FeedbackFaith318 - Mar 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Telling truth has been a debatable issue among people from the past till now
Writing Feedback600score - Nov 26, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL-ETS Some people believe that automobiles are useful and necessary.
2 - You present an interesting position on the topic provided. However, there is a lot more you can do to...
Writing FeedbackTareqkh - Jun 16, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: Scandals are really a way of information spreading, yet it often spread unwarranted information
2 - I have a few suggestions and revisions that I believe you can use to further improve the content of...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|New seafood restaurant: profit or no profit
5 - ok thank you...
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 11, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|Toefl - Replacing old buildings is important for any city but it should not affect historic houses
9 - Having taken the TOEFL in the past, I can understand your concerns. The key to passing the TOEFL lies...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL: In modern world, everyone should learn to be polite to others under any circumstance
4 - Hi, Ryan! Thank you for the constructive comments. I myself feel that my sentence is choppy too. But I...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 5, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014
|The author's conclusion about woven baskets is based on the assumptions that are not very strong
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 10, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|Opportunities to learn more about various aspects of life encourage people to watch movies
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 4, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 11, 2014
|Fashion is becoming more and more important in choosing cloths
4 - Frankly, I am not familiar with IELTS requirements, but it seems to me that your essay is too short....
Writing Feedbacknazanin5879 - Sep 10, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 11, 2014
|Ielts task II : Vegetarianism vs meat-containing diets.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 4, 2014 / eddies - Sep 11, 2014
|Do you think it is necessary to take an entrance exam to enter a college or university?
4 - I tried to revise your opinion paragraph. Please look it over. I think I was able to keep the...
Writing FeedbackLourdes - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|[GRE ISSUE] Government regulation in the economy.
Writing Feedbackalbertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014 / albertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014
|IELTS: we can not forcedly put the same numbers of males and females into every subject
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 10, 2014
|[GRE] ARGUE, changing radio station - memorandum from the manager of WWAC
Writing Feedbackalbertlee1224 - Sep 4, 2014 / albertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014
|IELTS: 'appropriate infrastructure to spur growth and prevent the damage caused to environment'
4 - it will seem more interesting if you separate it into two sentences, this is too long for only...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Sep 5, 2014 / fikri - Sep 10, 2014
|IELTS : 'We should have choice to play' - dangerous sports should be banned? I disagree.
6 - Singular and plural forms are commonly misused in this essay, for example: some other minor comments:...
Writing FeedbackerikaJP - Sep 7, 2014 / zjxhz - Sep 10, 2014
|'Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions' - GRE Argument Essay
2 - You wrote a very good argument that could refute the claims of the author. However, your arguments also lacked...
Writing Feedbackisyemky - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 10, 2014
|TOEFL: "what you should believe finally is not others, not any book, but only you" knowledge gained
Writing Feedbackyocoambush - Sep 10, 2014 / yocoambush - Sep 10, 2014
|People care more about public recognition than about money
Writing Feedbackkarenchen - Sep 9, 2014 / dumi - Sep 10, 2014
|The colours and sounds of Rain - imaginative writing
2 - Rain is not unusual weather. The prompt is asking you to write about an extreme weather experience. Most likely...
Writing FeedbackAlleo - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
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