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|No one understands you more than yourself, so do not waste too much time trying to be someone else
6 - Well, the TOEFL is more for American studies while the IETLS is for Canadian/British/Australian studies. So it really depends...
Writing Feedbackjackthomas - Aug 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 27, 2014
|'we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level' - GRE essay
4 - Cancellation is singular form. Since you are talking about more than one advertisement being cancelled, it goes into plural...
Writing FeedbackMysoon - Aug 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS : The examination for alternative energy sources : beneficial or harmful?
6 - Thank Dumi for correcting, your advices are always helpful to me :) can you please tell me what...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 25, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 26, 2014
|Arts and public services are both important to the community and should be invested properly - IELTS
9 - I have just found it on Appstore and installing it, It seems good as it has 4.5/5 star. Thanks...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 25, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Aug 26, 2014
|Internet will help student only if he has a desire to study
Writing Feedbackrassul - Aug 3, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|[TOEFL] Every experience always gives us something to learn and keep for life
2 - I think you need to fine tune your approach on the introduction. You should have introduced the issue to...
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Aug 2, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Ielts writing task1 - percentages of population and wealth in world
5 - Well, if this is for IELTS TASK1, you should have uploaded your graphs to enable us providing you with...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|The bar chart shows the amount of sales in silver goods in 000's of units for two companies nextyear
4 - Yes, you need to upload the image. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature in the Message Block to upload...
Writing FeedbackGulnar604 - Jul 30, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Computer skills reassure the future work-life - is it good to use computers from primary school age?
3 - In modern world, the knowledge and skills in computer science is an indispensable requirement. I think...
Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS writing part 1. Popularuty of on-line purchases in different countries.
Writing FeedbackLenaKuzn - Aug 26, 2014 / LenaKuzn - Aug 26, 2014
|toefl: multiple short breaks are good for children to do well in their school life
Writing Feedbacksayes - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS: The tax reduction of state school for parents who have children studying in private system
4 - Firstly, by paying taxes forin support of public schools, affluent people are forced toeffectively contribute to narrowing down the...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|'I'm really keen on cook since I was a little girl' - Describe a hobby
3 - I'm really keen on cooking since I was a little girl. I usually learn how to cook by searching...
Writing FeedbackJanice yang - Aug 25, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 25, 2014
|Internet and TV have a greater influence over people's lives than politicians. Do u agree?
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 25, 2014 / ruffruff999 - Aug 25, 2014
|Ielts: Modern technology has impacted the traditional cultures in both negative and positive ways.
5 - to me, your essay is overally good, your opinion is well developed with many interesting examples, just a few...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 25, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL: It is more important to use available land for farmland, housing, and industry.
4 - .... you are welcome :) First, the population of the Earth has been increasing steadily, and people need...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Aug 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 25, 2014
|'there will be more equipment and we will be dependent on them' - conveniences vs development
3 - We might say that because of new technology we have become more machine dependent and have lostdeteriorated our ability...
Writing Feedbackpinaksalvekar - Aug 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL: Some students live in their hometowns, but others in different cities - which do you like?
Writing Feedbackkathyt - Aug 17, 2014 / kathyt - Aug 25, 2014
|Contemporary life prevent people from developing into strong and independent individual - Gre Issue
Writing FeedbackNinad09 - Aug 22, 2014 / pinaksalvekar - Aug 25, 2014
|Toefl: It should be mandatory for every company to substitute their old equipment with new ones.
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 21, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|Toefl: people judge others by external appearance but is better also to consider the inner qualities
3 - Thank you Dear dumi.You helped me before a lot. I appreciate your concern. Actually I had a mistake...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 22, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL: 'joining sport team' - the best way for students to make new friends?
3 - Thanks a lot!...
Writing FeedbackPenny Chou - Aug 24, 2014 / Penny Chou - Aug 24, 2014
|"Closing My Eyes" - driving on the expressway at night - PLACE YOU FEEL CONTENT...
4 - I definitely think you should start over. I suggest that you outline the reasons you feel content in your...
Writing FeedbackIyeshaferguson - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL - people are way more disparate at the exterior contrary to what they are inside
4 - I think you need to pay more attention to the approach. Your essay does not contain a good introduction...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jul 28, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|Why study? Knowledge, experience and career are essential for today's young people to concentrate on
5 - It is clearobvious that knowledge is an important key which leads to success. Most people believe that university and...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 24, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL: new factory will enhance the quality of life and our town's image promotion
4 - Some people who disagree with the idea of building of the factory argued argue (keep it in present tense...
Writing FeedbackMckenzie - Aug 10, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|People nowadays don't spend too much time on their personal enjoyment because they can't - TPO
Writing Feedbacksircampbell - Aug 24, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|GRE - Issue task - People should undertake risky action only after they consider its consequences.
5 - Thank you D! It really helps that you clearly mention what the problem is, and I also think the...
Writing FeedbackLauren5102 - Aug 20, 2014 / Lauren5102 - Aug 24, 2014
|NUCLEAR TECHNOLOGY: The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace.
2 - Nuclear technology is a much debatedheatedissuetopic . Some people think that there are several benefits to use nuclear power...
Writing FeedbackDuong68 - Aug 13, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS: 'bring happiness to my nearest and dearest' - which salary would be better?
4 - I too agree with Pahan. You display good writing skills, good grammar, vocabulary knowledge, sentence structures etc. What you...
Writing Feedbackdiidoobiib - Aug 23, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL -advices from senior people are more valuable than from people at our age
5 - I feel you have uploaded a wrong topic for this essay .... I cannot find any relevance between...
Writing Feedbackjamie3160003 - Jul 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WOMEN AND MEN EXCLUDED FROM SPECIFIC JOBS ?
3 - Your idea is not very clearly conveyed here... I think you should rephrase this sentence to enhance its...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|'new and exciting sport should be welcomed' - IELTS: Essay on whether to ban dangerous sports
2 - Very good essay so far. Here are my grammar suggestions: "should let people do what they want yet...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanhdo10 - Aug 23, 2014 / yazoo - Aug 23, 2014
|Learn variety of cultures, traditions by engaging with local people and visiting historical places
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 22, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 23, 2014
|Bad memories leaves scars in the heart.
4 - .I agree that memories hinder one to learn past ans success in the future CORRECT IS I agree that...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 20, 2014 / sadia22 - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'opportunity to be healthier physically and mentally' - Children are given too much free time
Writing FeedbackSaadhin - Aug 19, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS - dramatic increase in the number of Japanese people travelling abroad - Bar chart, Line Graph
5 - Thank Dumi, Eddies, and Pyon9x so much. I will try to understand and fix my mistakes now. Then I...
Writing Feedbackviolethoang - Aug 21, 2014 / violethoang - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS - Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way
5 - On one hand, the purpose of community service or any form of voluntary work is a question still upopen...
Writing FeedbackBurguete - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL - Finding a good job and increasing the knowledge are the main reasons for study
4 - First of all, people want to enter to theattend university to improve their knowledge. These people want to...
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Aug 7, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|Event letter in ielts exam - "International Day"
3 - I am so pleased to hear thatabout this wonderful event "International Day" whichwillis going to be held next week....
Writing FeedbackGood2690108411 - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: The contribution of agriculture, manufacturing and business sectors to the UK economy
7 - Between the intro and the body paras, insert an Overview which gives an overall idea to the reader :)...
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jul 29, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: 'new building construction hold the right to gain more money from government'
3 - The housing shortage is drawing more and more attention nowadays. Andand the cost of accommodation keeps growing these years....
Writing FeedbackStevenKuang - Aug 2, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these sources
3 - This is a good intro, especially in terms of introducing the background of your issue topic. However, since your...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'disaster situations' - todays individuals are becoming more dependent on each other
4 - It seems that people have heavy reliance on othersone another because they have to collaborate with each other(sounds repetitive...
Writing Feedbackswfchn - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Those who are aware of where to go, customs and life are likely to experience satisfactory journey
4 - These days the number of visitors who are travel to foreign countries hashave been markedlysignificantly increased. Culture awareness lead...
Writing Feedbackali1 - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: Charity among UK people between 1990-2010 in five age groups
5 - The bar chart showpresents data about the proportion of UK people giving money to charity by age range between...
Writing Feedbacklinusyu0313 - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: It is necessary for people to choose the appropriate working mode in career growth
2 - Well, I see a difference in what you say by "permanently in the same company" and "not changing...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Studying major cities helps to understand the most important characteristics of a society -GRE Issue
3 - Thanks Binte! Now that I read again the prompt, I might have understood the statement. I should have focused...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Aug 23, 2014 / dunguyen - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in Rush Hour
4 - Started in theFrom the beginning of late eighteenth century, the industrialization and urbanization witnessed thean explosion in number of...
Writing Feedbackchenwc1 - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Bill Gates as University Professor? - TOEFL Essay
2 - Successful entrepreneurs and sport stars can inspire the lives of many people. Well, I see you are...
Writing Feedbackluongminh97 - Aug 12, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Self Introduction For UN Young Professional Programme
7 - Dear all of advisers. I try to make a revision. Particularly, the recruiter wants to know the candidate based...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 22, 2014
|TOEFL: A/D? In modern times, parents will learn more from their children
4 - This contains bad grammar. Use this pattern: While some people argue that this statement bla bla bla, some...
Writing FeedbackAichen - Aug 8, 2014 / eddies - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: some people think the government should spend more money on science than art. Do you agree ?
4 - (the) amount of is followed by uncountable noun (the) number of followed by plural noun excellent...
Writing Feedbacksky1997 - Jul 21, 2014 / eddies - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people
8 - In recent years, Majormajor cities have seen unprecedented growth (of what? you need to specify! ) and have become...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|TOEFL_inventors and science pioneers always try new things and take risks
2 - Throughout history, there have been many inventions and breakthroughs have inventedmade by brave persons. Well.... your sentences...
Writing Feedbackmasih65 - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: public transportation and more flyovers as a solution for traffic congestion
2 - It is true that traffic congestion is now an increasingly serious problem that many major cities have to face...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|Parents teach their children the most important and necessary things; they are the best teachers.
5 - His/her life begins with the first teachers, who are parents A child's life begins with his or her's first...
Writing Feedbacknasrullah - Aug 17, 2014 / jwajwa - Aug 22, 2014
|More and more people now choose to wear the fashionable clothes.
9 - The main reason of this is that wearing the fashionable garments can capture the attention of the general public,and...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 23, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: higher education or workplace? Professional knowledge is the most decisive factor.
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 19, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 21, 2014
|Experience plays an important role in our lives and teach us valuable lessons which help us succeed
5 - Get rid of the entire first paragraph " personally, I agree..." You don't have to tell the readers this,...
Writing Feedbacksaakshi - Aug 11, 2014 / jwajwa - Aug 21, 2014
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