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|Whether working or going on further study after graduation? Discuss both views.
2 - To obtain obtaining a job ... brings to people much has numerous advantages in some ways. Due to ...
Writing Feedbackhuyennguyen203 - Jun 6, 2018 / roxana_0610 - Jun 6, 2018
|Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow them to do whatever they want
3 - Tran, I like the way that you presented your ideas in this essay. You should have expanded upon your...
Writing Feedbackhieuttbk - Jun 5, 2018 / Holt - Jun 6, 2018
|[TOEFL]Keeping their rooms tidy and organized, students have a chance to get closer to success
2 - some words are not used appropriately like... Different kind of books have their positions accordingly and the...
Writing FeedbackClara_cyy - Jun 5, 2018 / Chuni lal - Jun 5, 2018
|The advantages and disadvantages in using bicycles - a popular way of commuting or transportation
NEW - Some people believe bicycles have a lot of advantages, whereas others believe bicycles have more disadvantages. Discuss both views...
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|Unhealthy activities that most people do and how to change them.
4 - @zajacfury Thank you very much for giving me ideas. Your sentences do sound better. Hope to see you around...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 3, 2018 / jalp - Jun 5, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1- chart of frequency of eating at fast food restaurants
2 - Joey, this is a very weak analytical report based on the chart you were provided. Several presentation problems occurred...
Writing Feedbackjoeychk - Jun 4, 2018 / Holt - Jun 5, 2018
|Protect From Cyber Attackers
2 - Jong, your first paragraph makes absolutely no sense because of the lack of proper connecting words, transitional words, and...
Writing Feedbackkekebuke - Jun 4, 2018 / Holt - Jun 5, 2018
|Human activities has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world.
3 - @Holt, Thank you so much, unexpected details description, I am really glad to hear from you. thank you once...
Writing FeedbackBHATVISHAL - Jun 3, 2018 / BHATVISHAL - Jun 4, 2018
|Writing on working skills standard
Writing FeedbackWorkRelated - Jun 3, 2018 / Holt - Jun 4, 2018
|We don't have a close relationship with neighbors nowadays. Why and how can we improve this contact?
2 - S0341039 , this is a direct question essay. Therefore, you cannot close the thesis statement paragraph with a question....
Writing FeedbackS0341039 - Jun 3, 2018 / Holt - Jun 4, 2018
|Life of people in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views give your opinion
3 - Nguyen, your total approach to this essay would be considered only partially correct in an actual test setting. this...
Writing Feedbackduyphuc - Jun 3, 2018 / Holt - Jun 4, 2018
|IELTS writing task 1 : the population changes in four countries during 1990-2000 and its projection
NEW - Any comments and advice are deeply appreciated. If it is possible, can you tell me the estimated band score...
Writing Feedbackravatrav - Jun 4, 2018 / — -
|Is it essential for new residents to adopt the traditions and customs of local community?
4 - @anhtu96 I think the contributor means that you have to specify instead of using 'people', since you are...
Writing Feedbackanhtu96 - May 29, 2018 / jalp - Jun 3, 2018
|The shares of six age groups of both sexes who did exercises frequently in 2010 in Australia
3 - Kelsie, your summary overview is incomplete. This is always presented in at least a 3 sentence format. You only...
Writing Feedbackkelsieee - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 2, 2018
|The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? impact?
2 - Tuan, this is a direct reasoning essay. It is not a comparison essay based upon the original prompt instructions....
Writing Feedbacktuanydbg - Jun 1, 2018 / Holt - Jun 2, 2018
|The two maps show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information.
2 - Tuan, several errors are present in your analytical report. There is a lack of comparison discussion for certain aspects,...
Writing Feedbacktuanydbg - Jun 1, 2018 / Holt - Jun 2, 2018
|Sharing information in scientific research, business and academic field for free or not
2 - @uou3456 There is a lack of clarity in your presentation. The prompt for this essay requires 3 points of...
Writing Feedbackuou3456 - Jun 1, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|The question whether the children should read stories themselves or with a help from parents
Writing Feedbackbeobeo281 - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|It is argued that besides making the profit, companies also have responsibilities toward society
2 - Nguyen, your essay has a throw away, meaning, an irrelevant discussion in the second paragraph. You used that paragraph...
Writing Feedbackhuyen smile - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|Children whose both working parents should be taken care of by grandparents or childcare center
3 - Lyralei, the biggest problem with your essay is that you did not properly outline the discussion in order to...
Writing Feedbacklyralei - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|How Well Do You Think Standardized Tests Measure Student's Abilities?
Writing FeedbackKim Truong - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|What is the most effective method of dealing with the rising crime rate, prison? Ielts task2
3 - Minh, post the complete prompt next time in order to receive more accurate reviews of your work. At this...
Writing Feedbackliliaxa - May 31, 2018 / Holt - Jun 1, 2018
|Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. Causes and solutions??
3 - There is a fact ... >> ... more criminals repeat offend after releasing from prison, which is a complicated...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao810 - May 29, 2018 / liliaxa - May 31, 2018
|IELTS1 - pie chart marking the retail sections of the online sales in Canada during 2005 and 2010
3 - This report writing is well put, but some improvements are needed. Let me start with the opening paragraph. In...
Writing Feedbackemilyyellowleade - May 29, 2018 / eddies - May 31, 2018
|An increasing number of transport revolutions. Which are considered as the most remarkable?
3 - Thanks. I highly appreciate your comment. I'll consider all what you said to write better essays....
Writing Feedbacklecongdoo3 - May 21, 2018 / lecongdoo3 - May 30, 2018
|To what extent do you agree that letter writing is disappearing? IELTS 2.
4 - Thank you very much for the criticisms. I actuallu didn't think of editing my second essay because I thought...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 25, 2018 / jalp - May 30, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2 - eating local food or food from other regions
4 - Because I am a reading, not a professional writer so I just comment on my point-of-view. Your thesis statement...
Writing Feedbackhqcxx1516 - May 28, 2018 / Kim Truong - May 29, 2018
|Is it possible to become a truly successful person without a natural strong talent?
3 - Huy, since you did not provide the correct prompt for the topic in your essay, I will be unable...
Writing Feedbackghuylee - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|Do we need to require sport in school curriculum?
3 - Kim, since you failed to provide the complete prompt instructions for us to consider your writing on, I will...
Writing FeedbackKim Truong - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|'Religion and Global Perspective' - Semester at Sea Application Essay
2 - Truth be told the first 2 paragraphs of your essay is all fluff. Lots of words, beautiful words, but...
Writing Feedbackkatemanning - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|How technology affect our relationships? Has this been a positive or negative development
2 - @aitruong This is not a comparison essay. This is a single opinion essay that should have focused on one...
Writing Feedbackaitruong - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2 : One could learn about another country from TV
3 - Nguyen, your essay is taking a totally different approach to the given discussion for several reasons. For starters, you...
Writing Feedbackjasonnguyen - May 27, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|IELTS2: Some people believe that graduation from university is the key to a fulfilling career
3 - Duc, while your opening paraphrase was excellent, your body of paragraphs were lacking in the proper representation of the...
Writing FeedbackDucgiangbin - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|Many people keep dogs and cats as companion , Do the advantages outweigh the disadvatages?
2 - Aural, your essay suffers from severe punctuation errors. You are using comma's throughout the essay instead of placing periods...
Writing Feedbackauralfat - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 27, 2018
|Who should be in charge of activities related to scientific research?
Writing Feedbacklinhlinhlinh - May 25, 2018 / linhlinhlinh - May 26, 2018
|Human being actions are leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity
Writing Feedbackkmc - May 25, 2018 / kmc - May 26, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 (People argue about children's decision)
6 - i think : the fifth line : the structure of the sentence is wrong because instead of : children...
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - May 23, 2018 / mailoc - May 26, 2018
|There's a question whether school teachers should incorporate homework into the teaching scheme
2 - Grey, unfortunately, your approach tot he whole discussion is incorrect. You have turned a compare and contrast with personal...
Writing Feedbackgreynd - May 25, 2018 / Holt - May 26, 2018
|The way of communication between people has been changed due to the modern technology; IELTS2
3 - Bimal, you have written a focused essay that speaks of only one point of view. Excellent work. That is...
Writing Feedbackbimalp - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 25, 2018
|Violence and disaters images in the media, what are the causes and our solutions
3 - Vu, since you did not post the complete prompt with this essay, I cannot really tell what your required...
Writing Feedbackvu1111 - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 25, 2018
|Multiple short school-free days or one long vacation for children?
3 - Ahh, thank you very much for the review of my essay. I am slowly learning from my mistakes, nonetheless,...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 13, 2018 / jalp - May 25, 2018
|Increasing the prices of fuels are the only way to reduce its consumption and pressure on the world
2 - Hi, make sure to always include the complete prompt so we can determine if you have addressed it in...
Writing Feedbacklamtuyen0610 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|The given diagram illustrates the process of brick making [Writing task 1]
4 - Yes, treating is not the same as handling. Think of a water treatment plant, where water is filtered and...
Writing Feedbackphongdang04 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|People have different views about what young individuals should do when they leave high school.
Writing Feedbackthaoduyen - May 18, 2018 / thaoduyen - May 23, 2018
|Effect of technology. Do the advantages of the online business meetings outweigh the disadvantages ?
2 - Mai, the issue is not about online tools. It is about online business meetings. Your reference to business tools...
Writing Feedbackmailoc - May 20, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|IELTS GT Essay - The use of cellular phones has negatively impacted person to person communication
2 - Neha, opinion discussions in the opening statement is only acceptable in the direct question essay. Unfortunately, this essay that...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|Unequality in this world; Ielts topic: The gap between the rich and the poor. Problems and solutions
2 - Hi, it is important that you include the complete prompt along with your essay. That is the only way...
Writing Feedbackjenniferngo - May 20, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 23, 2018
|With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper-books-What are the advantages and disadvantages
2 - Hi, I think you did a pretty good job of addressing the prompt until your final paragraph. The prompt...
Writing Feedbackwoemam - May 20, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 22, 2018
|Solution for traffic - providing free public transport 24 hours per day, and seven days a week
3 - Nguyen, the essay that you wrote is not going to get a passing score because your whole approach to...
Writing Feedbackphuonglinhng23 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|Teaching a foundation of logical reasoning gives more to a moral society that teaching morality
2 - Mohit, this is a seriously flawed GRE essay that cannot gain any score higher than a 2 for the...
Writing Feedbackmvarma - May 21, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT A SOCIETY MUST PUT IT'S OVERALL SUCCESS BEFORE PEOPLE.
3 - Hi, firstly, thank so much for a detailed review. On going into the details of the mistakes , what...
Writing Feedbackjaimatadi90 - May 19, 2018 / jaimatadi90 - May 22, 2018
|Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss Advantages, Disadvantages & opinion.
4 - @Holt, thank you for providing detailed feedback. I do not have a tutor, but I follow an online blog...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 10, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 22, 2018
|Passengers on London Underground per hour, from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. - IELTS Task 1
3 - Again many thanks for your useful suggestion.@Holt The first, is that Your opening and closing paragraphs are run...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 12, 2018 / forsil - May 21, 2018
|Gift giving should not be encouraged because of waste. What extent do you agree or disagree with it?
2 - Hello! You have some good ideas for the content, but the structural framework of most sentences are incorrect...
Writing FeedbackPemo Hoang - May 18, 2018 / DoctorWho - May 21, 2018
|The free information, available on the internet, is double-edged sword. It can be helpful or harmful
3 - Wasel, I hope that you are just writing this essay as an English writing practice activity because if you...
Writing Feedbackwasel - May 17, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|An uncharged service as a part of high school programs
2 - Wendy, the first mistake that you made in the writing of this essay is that your opening presentation did...
Writing Feedbackwendy900327 - May 14, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|Could taxation decrease fast food consumption? - IELTS - Writing Task 2
3 - Sil, you totally misunderstood the essay discussion instruction. Your lack of comprehension of the required discussion topic is such...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|Young people causing trouble often. The reason/solution of juvenile delinquency
Writing FeedbackCong19082001 - May 21, 2018 / chidau - May 21, 2018
|Computer is being used more and more popular in every field, especially in education
2 - Truc, the minimum word requirement for the Task 2 IELTS essay is 250 words delivered in a 5 paragraph...
Writing Feedbackbaotruc - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Fast Food is Killing America One Combo Meal at a Time
2 - @bultmlisaj when you write an academic research paper, do the writing from the third person point of view. You...
Writing Feedbackbultmlisaj - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
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