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|Advertising - (write a thesis statement).
2 - Hi, there. I would rewrite your statement as below: There are different methods of advertisement are utilized in...
Writing FeedbackTramiuh - Oct 24, 2019 / roswita116 - Oct 25, 2019
|toefl essay: A large manufacturing plant in the neighbourhood
Writing Feedbackku3r - Oct 11, 2019 / ku3r - Oct 25, 2019
|Social and tech - I have a homework to write a paragraph about technology influence on kids
2 - Hello, I'd like to give you my opinions about your essay. You have to check your essay carefully....
Writing Feedbacktuduong - Oct 24, 2019 / Krystal318 - Oct 24, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - The closure of small local shops
2 - @Lallity Welcome to the forum! I hope that this feedback becomes beneficial for your writing. Hopefully, this will enhance...
Writing FeedbackLallity - Oct 23, 2019 / Maria - Oct 24, 2019
|Teamwork Theory Just discuss several theories of teamwork
2 - @Irenekiki Welcome to the forum. Hopefully, this feedback is helpful for you. Please do come again if you have...
Writing FeedbackIrenekiki - Oct 23, 2019 / Maria - Oct 24, 2019
|IELTS Cambridge 11 Task1 - CO2 emissions/person in the UK, Italy, Sweden and Portugal in 40 years
2 - @DAN770320 Hello! Welcome here. We appreciate new people coming in all the time. Next time, however, it would be...
Writing FeedbackDAN770320 - Oct 23, 2019 / Maria - Oct 24, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Part 1] Making coffee at industrial level - all the process described
2 - @chibib0 Hi there! We're glad you found the forum too. For now, I'll provide you with an extensive feedback...
Writing Feedbackchibib0 - Oct 22, 2019 / Maria - Oct 24, 2019
|The chart bellow shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables
2 - @amanda shao Your second paragraph must be well punctuated to give clear understanding of the vital information you are...
Writing Feedbackamanda shao - Oct 22, 2019 / Quizzy - Oct 23, 2019
|Essay about the importance of computers over the last hundred years.
2 - @Volpe99 In your second paragraph, ad should rather be and Just think that many universities offer degree courses online!...
Writing FeedbackVolpe99 - Oct 23, 2019 / Quizzy - Oct 23, 2019
|New stories on TV and newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures
2 - @jagadish Nice write up...Kindly take notice of these few corrections pictures before going deep into ... role in ??case...
Writing Feedbackjagadish - Oct 20, 2019 / Quizzy - Oct 22, 2019
|IELTS Writing task 2: In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the Earth.
5 - @Nancy Vu Great ideas you have there. I will want to make these few corrections. In your second paragraph,...
Writing FeedbackNancy Vu - Oct 15, 2019 / Quizzy - Oct 22, 2019
|What is best method to reflect a student's performance formal examinations or continuous assessment?
2 - Hi @ngonhutanhmn80, Your essay is well written and considering it takes a balanced view, a couple of additional...
Writing Feedbackngonhutanhmn80 - Oct 20, 2019 / k_dsgrad_2020 - Oct 22, 2019
|What makes an advertisement effective ?
Writing FeedbackLinh769 - Oct 20, 2019 / prmchpra7 - Oct 22, 2019
|How to reword my essay on the delayed retirement so that it can be more fluent?
2 - @Romani Hello there. Welcome here. Hopefully, this feedback will help you then with your competition! I appreciate the...
Writing FeedbackRomani - Oct 19, 2019 / Maria - Oct 21, 2019
|Should children be allowed to make their choices on everyday matters?
2 - Now, democracy is quite important. I think children should be respected when they give their opinions. However, their parents...
Writing FeedbackQuynhNga - Oct 19, 2019 / Estelle133 - Oct 20, 2019
|IELTS - Many people are now spending more and more time travelling to work or school
2 - I think we should look at the angle of each individual' s situation. There are poor people, they need...
Writing Feedbackdiemhalenguyen - Oct 19, 2019 / Estelle133 - Oct 20, 2019
|Money from parents to encourage their children to become more passionate about study
3 - @aysoo Hello. Welcome to the forum. I'm here to give you feedback on your writing. Hopefully, you will be...
Writing Feedbackaysoo - Oct 18, 2019 / Maria - Oct 19, 2019
|Information about water use worldwide and water consumption in Brazil / Congo - twentieth century
3 - @nightowlirene Hello. Welcome here. Hopefully, this feedback will help you in your writing endeavors. If it does, do not...
Writing Feedbacknightowlirene - Oct 17, 2019 / Maria - Oct 19, 2019
|Dwellers of residences - percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation
3 - @chloeyyy123 Hello. Thanks for being consistent in the forum. I'm here to give you a comprehensive feedback on this...
Writing Feedbackchloeyyy123 - Oct 17, 2019 / Maria - Oct 19, 2019
|Applicants' personal data are valuable to the employers to figure out certain requirements and goals
2 - @jagadish Welcome to the forum. I hope that this feedback serves you well in your writing endeavors! If it...
Writing Feedbackjagadish - Oct 18, 2019 / Maria - Oct 19, 2019
|The line graph compares the amount of waste output by three companies from 2000 to 2005.
Writing Feedbackphanthilien - Oct 17, 2019 / phanthilien - Oct 19, 2019
|Music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. A or D?
2 - @lehuuhoaloc Hi! Welcome to the forum. I'm here to give you feedback on your writing. Hopefully, this will somehow...
Writing Feedbacklehuuhoaloc - Oct 17, 2019 / Maria - Oct 18, 2019
|Should travellers obey local customs and behaviors when they visit other countries or not?
2 - @roswita116 people utterly disagree with that I would add a "with" here. local policy as and ... I...
Writing Feedbackroswita116 - Oct 15, 2019 / ng864 - Oct 17, 2019
|Utilizing gap year period through working or travelling (WRITING TASK 2)
2 - @Ali20 Utilizing a gap year You should use "a" in the first sentence. take much of budgets You...
Writing FeedbackAli20 - Oct 15, 2019 / ng864 - Oct 16, 2019
|Forcing the Unpaid Community Service in High Schools (TASK 2)
2 - @Ali20 do unpaid social ... This part is confusing. Do you mean that "unpaid social service is supported by...
Writing FeedbackAli20 - Oct 16, 2019 / ng864 - Oct 16, 2019
|Future job choice - university students should study whatever they like?
4 - Hello @arhaz! these my comments; *majors efficient, countries development ( adj + N), efficient majors.developing/developed countries...
Writing Feedbackarhaz - Oct 14, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 16, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - Railways versus Roads - where tax payers money should go?
2 - Hello @nali1 These my comments that my improve your score. I appreciate your way to deliver paraphrase...
Writing Feedbacknali1 - Oct 15, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 16, 2019
|Employers sometimes ask people for applying for jobs for personal information
2 - Hello @Sharmistha ! First, i would say that your first paragraph is so excessive and don't give clear...
Writing FeedbackSharmistha - Oct 14, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 15, 2019
|Choosing between learning in a group or by yourself
3 - @pmhdaflowerboy Hello! I'd like to share some ideas after reading your essay. Firstly, I like the way you...
Writing Feedbackpmhdaflowerboy - Oct 7, 2019 / Konkhmer12345 - Oct 15, 2019
|Preferable essay: Should learn from books or experience?
Writing Feedbackiuerk19 - Oct 12, 2019 / iuerk19 - Oct 15, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - a difference in assigning some particular professions for men and women
NEW - Is it right to exclude men and women from certain professions? Nowadays, men and women are basically equal...
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|Shopping malls are considered to be good places to go with friends and families to enjoy a free time
2 - @fach1910 Hello! Welcome to the forum! Hopefully, you like what you have been reading around here. I'm going to...
Writing Feedbackfach1910 - Oct 12, 2019 / Maria - Oct 14, 2019
|Summarise the information in the graph about the consumption of four kinds of food in Europe
2 - @thanhden96 Hello. Welcome to the forum. I hope this feedback serves you well. Before mentioning anything, it would...
Writing Feedbackthanhden96 - Oct 11, 2019 / Maria - Oct 14, 2019
|It is often argued that punishment should be imposed according to the crime type
2 - @Ali20 Hello. Thank you for your consistent appearance on the forum. We hope that you have been learning throughout...
Writing FeedbackAli20 - Oct 11, 2019 / Maria - Oct 14, 2019
|Part-Time job interview. Beginner level
2 - @syeekk Hello, welcome here! I hope that this small feedback will somewhat enlighten you with your writing. Firstly,...
Writing Feedbacksyeekk - Oct 10, 2019 / Maria - Oct 14, 2019
|Employees's appearance - Writing 
2 - @Raymond_Tran Welcome to the forum! It's great to see you here, Dang. I will be providing you with feedback...
Writing FeedbackRaymond_Tran - Oct 10, 2019 / Maria - Oct 14, 2019
|Twelve different nations and the number of medals that they have achieved in Olympic events
2 - @trinhyennhi Welcome to the forum. It's always nice to see new people dropping by here. I hope that you...
Writing Feedbacktrinhyennhi - Oct 10, 2019 / Maria - Oct 14, 2019
|Shopping malls are great places to spend more leisure time and meet other. Do you agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackjane4455 - Oct 10, 2019 / jane4455 - Oct 11, 2019
|Should companies spend more time listening to their own employees, rather than some consultants?
3 - @techmicro Hi Techmicro, There are few things I'd like to comments on your essay. First, I've noticed the...
Writing Feedbacktechmicro - Oct 3, 2019 / Konkhmer12345 - Oct 11, 2019
|Prognosis - The proportion of US energy being produced and consumed from 1950 to 2000
2 - @athachng2002 Thanks for being here once more. I'm here again to give you feedback on your writing. I'm hope...
Writing Feedbackathachng2002 - Oct 9, 2019 / Maria - Oct 11, 2019
|TOEFL Independent Essay - Nowadays people spend too much time on personal entertainment
2 - @danisepari Welcome here. I'm here to provide you with feedback. Hopefully, this would make sense and help you in...
Writing Feedbackdanisepari - Oct 8, 2019 / Maria - Oct 11, 2019
|Essay about whether the natural talent is important or not
2 - @futasodi Hi. Good luck with your IELTS! I hope that receiving this feedback would help motivate you as well...
Writing Feedbackfutasodi - Oct 8, 2019 / Maria - Oct 11, 2019
|Better gain a tertiary education or equip with soft skills to achieve great success in working?
2 - @tranglv80 Seeing as you're new here, welcome. I'm here to give you feedback on this essay. Firstly, the...
Writing Feedbacktranglv80 - Oct 8, 2019 / Maria - Oct 11, 2019
|Several people argue that a part of secondary school programs should be a social job for free
Writing FeedbackMasrurotin - Oct 8, 2019 / Masrurotin - Oct 10, 2019
|Who have the pivotal role for teaching pupils to become the responsible society members?
2 - @Ali20 Hi! Thanks for being here once more. I hope this feedback is helpful for your learning endeavors. If...
Writing FeedbackAli20 - Oct 8, 2019 / Maria - Oct 9, 2019
|Teaching International Language at Primary School (IELTS Task 2)
2 - @Ali20 Hi. Thanks for being back again. I hope this one will give you insight on your writing. ...
Writing FeedbackAli20 - Oct 8, 2019 / Maria - Oct 9, 2019
|IELTS 1 - the statistics between marriages and divorces rate and marital status of adult Americans
2 - @roswita116 Hello! Thanks for being consistent in the forum. I hope this feedback somehow helps you with your upcoming...
Writing Feedbackroswita116 - Oct 7, 2019 / Maria - Oct 9, 2019
|Investigations of the committed crimes and the right to view on offenders' past convictions
2 - @athachng2002 Hello. Thanks for being back again! I'm here to give feedback on your writing. Firstly, well-done on...
Writing Feedbackathachng2002 - Oct 7, 2019 / Maria - Oct 9, 2019
|Student Living in schools - it bring real benefits
2 - Hi @noname12, Basically, I think you should work more on grammar and vocabulary. There are many repeated words...
Writing Feedbacknoname12 - Oct 8, 2019 / athachng2002 - Oct 9, 2019
|IELTS Task - Essay about "Environmental problems... who should take care of it?"
Writing Feedbackjacgomes - Sep 17, 2019 / jacgomes - Oct 8, 2019
|Televisions and movies can affect us either in a bad way or in a good way
5 - @anhngocngoc11 human's lives,life (n) televisions also makes make, cause it plural. "the main idea of watching TV of...
Writing Feedbackanhngocngoc11 - Oct 6, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 8, 2019
|Waste Recycling and the necessary legal measures - Writing Task 2 - Help me to get Band 9
2 - @rakasuraka Hello bro, these my comments which it may improve your writing quality 1. for getting band score...
Writing Feedbackrakasuraka - Oct 8, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 8, 2019
|Australians who attended to muscle building exercises - by gender and age - IELTS1
4 - @Tony999 Hello, these my comments! 1.The given graph depicted data on ... depicts. 2. Your writing is monotonous....
Writing FeedbackTony999 - Oct 1, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 8, 2019
|IELTS1- the forecast increase in world oil production
3 - @s410377088 Hello, these are my comments which perhaps offer improvement for your writing. 1. Your overview is overload because...
Writing Feedbacks410377088 - Oct 6, 2019 / Ali20 - Oct 8, 2019
|IELTS - the amounts of waste produced by three corporations from 2000 to 2015
3 - @vancandoit Hi, there. I would like to give you some advice about your introduction and overall. 😁 1....
Writing Feedbackvancandoit - Oct 2, 2019 / roswita116 - Oct 7, 2019
|Should schools be entertaining or educating?
4 - Hi renzito, I think there're some aspects you need to work on more to make your essay better. ...
Writing Feedbackrenzito - Oct 2, 2019 / athachng2002 - Oct 7, 2019
|"media have a greater influence over people's lives than politician" What is greater influence
3 - Hi~ I think your opinion is quite clear from your first and last paragraph, but I just feel it's...
Writing Feedbackanne127 - Sep 28, 2019 / Asphodel - Oct 7, 2019
|Tendency to replace old products with the new ones. Why?
3 - Hi Maria, Thank you for your feedback. It has certainly boosted my confidence and proved that I am...
Writing Feedbackloveya - Oct 5, 2019 / loveya - Oct 7, 2019
|Will the children benefit from the additional income? Or will they lack support from their parents?
2 - Okay, first things first, I will like you to correct some grammatical errors in your write up. For example...
Writing Feedbacktheamazingshao - Oct 6, 2019 / Xphire99 - Oct 6, 2019
|The bar - the percentage of Australian working out
3 - 1. The bar graph "depicts" the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular exercises in 2010. -->your first...
Writing Feedbackbagongcamen - Oct 5, 2019 / s410377088 - Oct 6, 2019
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