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|Celebrities' glamour and wealth may lead to negative example for young people
2 - Allen, there are two problems with this essay, The first, is your response to the prompt requirement. The second,...
Writing Feedbackallen2018021 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Is it a good thing for young people to hold the important positions in the government?
2 - @cv47522 when you are asked to discuss 2 points of view plus a personal opinion, you are tasked to...
Writing Feedbackcv47522 - Nov 8, 2018 / Holt - Nov 9, 2018
|Should we replace public parks with houses and business area?
NEW - the role of public parks to human life Public parks have been considered as an indispensable aspect every...
Writing Feedbackbhminhanh - Nov 9, 2018 / — -
|How can people in your country be encouraged to live healthier lives?
2 - Dear Bich, "In the era of globalization.... Therefore...(I cannot see the link between 2 sentences) However, it is...
Writing Feedbacklhnbich - Nov 7, 2018 / HuongGiangNguyen - Nov 8, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: E-LEARNING - tendency for people to study online
Writing FeedbackHuongGiangNguyen - Nov 7, 2018 / HuongGiangNguyen - Nov 8, 2018
|The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001.
3 - Le, the presentation you are using can be really confusing to the reader because you are comparing the information...
Writing FeedbackLinhLe32 - Nov 7, 2018 / Holt - Nov 8, 2018
|Differences between human workers and robot workers
3 - Thanks a lot Your mean is that I need to use employer's instead of employers' , right? btw, Can...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Nov 6, 2018 / dynastylee0929 - Nov 7, 2018
|Water in Agricultural use - Writing task 1 - pie chart
3 - Tran, while the analytical information of the essay is acceptable, your summary overview is not. The requirements of the...
Writing Feedbacktranhien - Nov 6, 2018 / Holt - Nov 7, 2018
|College students have jobs while they are in school. Is this a good idea? I think so.
2 - @emdinh Finance is the first ... Financial situation is the one of main reasons that a college students have...
Writing Feedbackemdinh - Nov 6, 2018 / Altaa - Nov 7, 2018
|There are many types of sports, all of which bring benefits to the players
2 - Nguyen, this is a 3 reasoning essay presentation. Your prompt paraphrase and succeeding discussion changed it to a singular...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthantam - Nov 6, 2018 / Holt - Nov 7, 2018
|Task 2 : There is a growing demand for new cars and it causes many problems
2 - This phenomenon might ... I would like to change this sentence into "This phenomenon is producing some problems...
Writing Feedbackayyubjbr - Nov 6, 2018 / Altaa - Nov 7, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2:There is a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming global problem.
2 - Nadim, while your grammar is not as fluent as it should be, owing to grammatical errors, the essay itself...
Writing Feedbacknadimnurnajmi - Nov 6, 2018 / Holt - Nov 7, 2018
|Only good students should have the right to enter colleges
Writing Feedbackamerjoon - Nov 5, 2018 / Yikes - Nov 7, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Discussion about the influences of robots
2 - Hello there ronia, At first, paragraph, when you are talking about the danger of Robots in short, If...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 7, 2018 / Yikes - Nov 7, 2018
|Writing task 1 : pie charts- players of electronic games in South Korea
4 - @Holt @ayyubjbr thanks a lot i recognised i had some problems in arranging sentences and putting commas i'll try...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Nov 5, 2018 / Hammy - Nov 7, 2018
|Within 150-200 words, write a paragraph about the advantages of living in the city.
2 - Hi Chu. While your writing is rather cumbersome, you are wrong about it being incoherent. Your presentation makes sense....
Writing Feedbackchgiang04 - Nov 5, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
|The imprisonment over a period of 50 years in five different areas - diagram analysis
3 - Asih, you have written a total of 156 words. That is evidence that your essay is not complete, does...
Writing FeedbackAsih Mustikasari - Nov 4, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Should people look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched place?
3 - Stella, your essay does not properly respond to the original discussion prompt that was provided. You are actually discussing...
Writing FeedbackStella Zhang - Nov 4, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
|GRE-Governments support financially the main cities because the major cities preserve culture
3 - Th, based on the way that you wrote this essay I believe that, even with the grammatical errors, you...
Writing Feedbackjapan2016 - Nov 4, 2018 / Holt - Nov 6, 2018
|Sports professionals can earn high income more that others professions?
3 - Nella, you failed to properly address the task requirements in the opening paraphrase. This is a 3 reasoning paragraph...
Writing Feedbacknellawatyahmad26 - Nov 4, 2018 / Holt - Nov 5, 2018
|Maternity leave - women need to rest a period of time after the child-birth process
2 - Good attempt. You need to work on the sentence framing and grammar as there are a lot of ambiguous...
Writing FeedbackDbsen - Nov 5, 2018 / adhananj - Nov 5, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2: artificial intelligence - benefits and drawbacks - opinion.
3 - Hello! I think your reasonings are convincing, but your topic sentences should be more objective so your 2,3 paragraph...
Writing Feedbackthiancut - Nov 4, 2018 / ronia85516 - Nov 5, 2018
|Organized tour to remote areas and community is increasingly popular. It is a positive or negative
Writing Feedbackbaoooooo - Nov 3, 2018 / baoooooo - Nov 5, 2018
|Budgeting finance is obviously something people must know well to maintain a stable life
2 - to have the ability money from an early age Children may notice of By giving children the/an allowance...
Writing Feedbackthuctranghoang - Nov 3, 2018 / thiancut - Nov 4, 2018
|How to keep healthy in university (one para)
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Nov 3, 2018 / dynastylee0929 - Nov 4, 2018
|Crime: recidivism of criminals. Causes and solutions
2 - Thanh, in the prompt paraphrase, you should have outlined the discussion to come based on your direct response to...
Writing FeedbackThanh Hien - Nov 2, 2018 / Holt - Nov 3, 2018
|Some believes that the authorities have a paramount role to minimising bad environmental impact
3 - Do, unfortunately, I cannot give you advise regarding the content of your essay nor your discussion. The reason that...
Writing Feedbacklienlt1999 - Nov 1, 2018 / Holt - Nov 3, 2018
|The world of technology - the problems in terms of control and security of information
2 - You need to explain more in the first paragraph like in what ways the privacy invasions are happening. While...
Writing Feedbackphanhongvan - Nov 2, 2018 / adhananj - Nov 2, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Is it necessary to to learn about the world by traveling?
3 - Ronia, the essay clearly states that you have to write a 5 paragraph essay with 2 of these opinions...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Nov 1, 2018 / Holt - Nov 2, 2018
|Taking life to the extreme - risk-taking activities for TOEFL
Writing FeedbackNickNice - Nov 1, 2018 / rabbasy - Nov 1, 2018
|Information is not always free - what's your opinion about it?
3 - Thanks you so much! I misunderstood the meaning of "freely". I will read the topic carefully next time....
Writing Feedbackletitia012 - Oct 31, 2018 / letitia012 - Nov 1, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Mix: pie and table - UK students' responses regarding their finances
NEW - financially organised students The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would...
Writing FeedbackMinh Le - Oct 31, 2018 / — -
|The Maldives... jewel of Indian Ocean
3 - thank you very much I appreciate your corrections and i promise that i will develop my writing best regards...
Writing Feedbackmok - Oct 30, 2018 / mok - Oct 31, 2018
|IELTS TASK1 - Whether women prefer watching or participating in a variety of sports.
4 - Thanks for reminding, I totally forgot to add the image. Sorry about that. I put the chart here, and...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 30, 2018 / ronia85516 - Oct 31, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2 - Various types of support for the poor countries
Writing FeedbackMaherbadran - Oct 27, 2018 / Hammy - Oct 31, 2018
|Temperatures and hours of daylight - Writing task 1 : the tables
3 - Diep, your attempt at reporting the contents of the chart is admirable. You accomplished the assigned task to a...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Oct 30, 2018 / Holt - Oct 31, 2018
|Reasons for youth crimes (essay for Cambridge English Exam)
3 - HI Jiamei, there are several Cambridge English exams that a student can take. Please be specific about which one...
Writing Feedbackjiameimay - Oct 30, 2018 / Holt - Oct 31, 2018
|Children Obesity and the Government and the parents responsibility (Aim for IELTS Writing 8.0!)
Writing FeedbackClaude_debussy - Oct 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 30, 2018
|IELTS task 2 correction. The topic is about "cheap products"
Writing Feedbackthemetalfinger - Oct 21, 2018 / themetalfinger - Oct 30, 2018
|Unbiased webs search results - Independence of Cyberspace
3 - Thank you for your answer, this is not an article, but a video where the authors publicly speak. I...
Writing FeedbackAntonija - Oct 28, 2018 / Antonija - Oct 29, 2018
|The methodology of interacting with individuals have changed through time
3 - Ashis, even though this is a direct response essay, you are still expected to properly summarize and paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackAshisThapa - Oct 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 29, 2018
|You should stay healthy, Health is precious
3 - Janzpy, aside from needing to learn how to divide your presentation into topic paragraphs, you should also learr how...
Writing Feedbackmytrinh - Oct 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 29, 2018
|Writing task 1 : Proportion of male and female arrests by offence type, 2008/09
Writing FeedbackHammy - Oct 27, 2018 / Hammy - Oct 28, 2018
|Using credit card is a process that gets benefits and burdens
3 - Hi Holt, Thanks you for your review, I attempt to pass for an English writing test, which difficulty...
Writing Feedbackkasifcheng - Oct 26, 2018 / kasifcheng - Oct 28, 2018
|Analysis for painting: Post du Garde by Hubert Robert
2 - Jingwen, you may want to explain why Robert merely used the name of the bridge for his painting. There...
Writing FeedbackAnniemanjo - Oct 27, 2018 / Holt - Oct 28, 2018
|The modern life has negative impacts on children's lifestyle
3 - Nguyne, this essay just failed to get a passing score in an actual test setting. Remember, the TA score...
Writing FeedbackMaruMaru - Oct 27, 2018 / Holt - Oct 28, 2018
|The mass media have a major influence on our day-to-day life today
Writing Feedbacksaturn - Oct 27, 2018 / Red Moon - Oct 28, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Is punishment a good way to teach children good manner?
6 - It seems that you repeat many time the phrase "right and wrong", you should change it with another expression....
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 23, 2018 / MaruMaru - Oct 27, 2018
|Your opinion do you think governments or individuals can make significant changes in society.
2 - I can't get a clear message in paragraph 2, probably you can elaborate more by using examples to confirm...
Writing FeedbackEmanrageh - Oct 26, 2018 / vania - Oct 27, 2018
|Free choice of subjects to study - IELTS writing task 2 assistance
2 - Suraj, there is a lack of clarity in the essay that you presented. That is because you are not...
Writing FeedbackSurajp - Oct 26, 2018 / Holt - Oct 27, 2018
|Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or not?
4 - thank you for your valuable feedback. you really inspire me to write more. thank you so much for your...
Writing Feedbackngannguyenftu - Oct 25, 2018 / ngannguyenftu - Oct 26, 2018
|IELTS TASK2 - Should university students' study orientation
3 - Ronia, this is a discussion of 2 public points of view along with your personal point of view. You...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 26, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|Candidates' academic qualities, rather than their social skills, become the primary employers choice
2 - Can, your opinion about this being a negative development should have been given in the opening paraphrase and restated...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Oct 25, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|IELTS TASK1 - Fairtrade coffee and bananas in five countries
2 - according to my experience in IELTS preparation test, the first thing that you can do is paraphrasing the table...
Writing Feedbackronia85516 - Oct 26, 2018 / vania - Oct 26, 2018
|Writing task 1: Oil use of major consumer
3 - Tien, the main problem you will have with this essay is that your GRA score will be failing and...
Writing FeedbackTienane - Oct 25, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|Nurses, doctors and teachers do not earn enough money and they deserve more
3 - Hello, I think you can combine your 2,3 paragraph into one paragraph. And you can shorten your essay a...
Writing FeedbackAntoniaFrederica - Oct 22, 2018 / ronia85516 - Oct 26, 2018
|Ho I solve a problem - release my emotion first, then find out what is the main cause of the problem
4 - Thank you @Holt for your advice. Then, how about the examples that I use in the body paragraph? Are...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Oct 22, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 25, 2018
|Prison may be a good solution for criminals, but there are also some alternative methods
3 - I'm not sure why 260 words is the golden mark but this response is way too short. Your argument...
Writing Feedbackdaisyna2405 - Oct 24, 2018 / Underleveled - Oct 24, 2018
|Every year, more computers are used for instruction in classroom. Is this good or bad?
2 - general feedback: it will be good if you can paraphrase the question with some details about your oponion, and...
Writing Feedbackejmonstar - Oct 23, 2018 / hichamsamma - Oct 24, 2018
|In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. Positive or negative?
2 - Trinh, your essay is severely under developed in terms of proper discussion. Your prompt paraphrase is incomplete and your...
Writing Feedbacktasluco - Oct 24, 2018 / Holt - Oct 24, 2018
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