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|Many people try to look younger than they really are. What are the reasons for that?
2 - Le, while your approach to the essay is acceptable, your opening paragraph is not accurate paraphrase of the original...
Writing Feedbackgianglt98 - Aug 31, 2018 / Holt - Sep 1, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: In many countries, students attend private 'cram schools'...
2 - Good essay. Small corrections: -instead of receive receiving -learn study hard , study ... Your weakness point in...
Writing Feedbackptnlytqnho - Aug 31, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 31, 2018
|Online sexually explicit content possession and passing should be put under control.
NEW - don't lose your mind when accessing social networking Exhaustedly spending my quality time at the end of the...
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|IELTS Writing Task 1: 'waste table' essay - The table below shows the amount of waste production
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Aug 16, 2018 / TJLuschen - Aug 31, 2018
|Prevalance of supermarket leads to the death of smaller bussinesses? IELTS writing task 2
3 - prevalence these businesses in your first paragraph may refer to the small businesses, but you'd better to replace...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Aug 31, 2018 / bxddxst - Aug 31, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1: 'hospital attendances' bar chart
4 - Firstly, your opening as it is assumed as your introduction paragraphs has successfully done without any mistakes I found....
Writing FeedbackRogerscup - Aug 30, 2018 / bxddxst - Aug 31, 2018
|TASK1 : The percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation
3 - Trong, your essay will fail on GRA and C&C considerations due to your improper formatting. All of your paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackvientrongnghia - Aug 30, 2018 / Holt - Aug 31, 2018
|Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving the increasing pollution
Writing Feedbackpsidhu9 - Aug 30, 2018 / Holt - Aug 31, 2018
|Agriculture water use in Africa, South East Asia and Central Asia - Cambridge IELTS
Writing Feedbackanhinherworld - Aug 29, 2018 / Rogerscup - Aug 30, 2018
|[IELTS] A line graph of books read by both sexes in certain years. Academic one.
5 - My recommendation is that you should use past simple tense for the past event description. It's also necessary to...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Aug 28, 2018 / linhtran96 - Aug 30, 2018
|The amount of 4 different types of food that were consumed in a European nation in 25 years
3 - Thank you so much for your useful advice. Actually, this essay took me 30 mins to finish, so I...
Writing Feedbacklinhtran96 - Aug 29, 2018 / linhtran96 - Aug 30, 2018
|People should spend their money on lessons which help them to maintain in healthy condition
3 - I think the paragraph talking about health education is lean to traditional cures than it shall be, and you...
Writing FeedbackJames Ruan - Aug 29, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 30, 2018
|Birth Order and Stimulation (Argumentative Task essay)
2 - Javad, your score would most likely fall under the range of 4 for this essay. The reason that I...
Writing Feedbackjavad329 - Aug 29, 2018 / Holt - Aug 30, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - Why people do nothing to protecting the environment and how do deal with it?
7 - Well, I can see that people had pointed out that your essay doesn't focus on what it should and...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 25, 2018 / nam1022002 - Aug 29, 2018
|IELTS Cambridge 1 Practice - the Australian Bureau of Meteorology - writing report
2 - my advice: you should paraphrase more on the topic sentence. for example The diagram illustrates how the Australian Bureau...
Writing Feedbackewshingshing - Aug 27, 2018 / giatocmang - Aug 29, 2018
|IELTS - The internet allows people to communicate with one another more easily
3 - Nguyen, this is an extent essay so you cannot simply agree with the statement. This is not a yes...
Writing Feedbacknam1022002 - Aug 28, 2018 / Holt - Aug 29, 2018
|TOEFL: Physical education or art and music course: which one should be excluded first ?
2 - James, due to the totally unrelated discussion of tasks in the second paragraph, you really confused the reader. That...
Writing Feedbackjam92 - Aug 27, 2018 / Holt - Aug 28, 2018
|TOEFL: Children over the age of 15 should be allowed to vote. Do you agree or disagree ?
Writing Feedbackjam92 - Aug 27, 2018 / Holt - Aug 28, 2018
|Frog & Mouse - I wrote a story and I need to be checked
2 - Salsabeel, if this is only for English language writing practice, then I would say that you did a good...
Writing FeedbackSalsabeel - Aug 27, 2018 / Holt - Aug 28, 2018
|TASK 2: CURRENT PROBLEMS OF OVERUSED CARS AND WHETHER CARS SHOULD BE OPPOSED
3 - Linh, your possible score for this essay will be a 4. There are problems with your essay based on...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 27, 2018 / Holt - Aug 28, 2018
|Cement making process/using of concrete - IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
2 - RCH, you are taking too many liberties with your report. Remember that the assumption for the Task 1 essay...
Writing Feedbackabc1 - Aug 26, 2018 / Holt - Aug 27, 2018
|Some questions about Membership Recruitment
3 - Thank you so much for spending your time to help me check out and giving me beneficial advices! Love...
Writing Feedbackddtloan - Aug 23, 2018 / ddtloan - Aug 26, 2018
|TASK 2: Agree or disagree - female leaders make society more peaceful
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 25, 2018 / Linh Dieu - Aug 26, 2018
|A group is able to find better solutions that if they were to try to solve the problem individually
4 - Jerry, quick question, who is Teresa and why should I care about her quotation in the essay? How does...
Writing Feedbackjerryhoang1991 - Aug 25, 2018 / Holt - Aug 26, 2018
|TOEFL - Beggars money. Giving them or not. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?
5 - James, based on my experience as a TOEFL topnotcher (I got a perfect score in every aspect of the...
Writing Feedbackjam92 - Aug 24, 2018 / Holt - Aug 26, 2018
|Students should become good people by their parents or their school ? ( ielt task 2 )
3 - Dang, your opening paraphrase is still too similar to the original to be considered your own representation of the...
Writing FeedbackDang Khoa - Aug 25, 2018 / Holt - Aug 26, 2018
|Choosing an option between A and B - Task 2 writing - CELPIP test
4 - Thanks Holt. I know that that 3 problems have followed me for years but I don't really know how...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Aug 24, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Aug 25, 2018
|Too strict rules for young people? What do you think? - TOEFL IBT
4 - @Dang Khoa I really appreciate your recommendation!! Especially the "interest" Thanks for reminding me:)...
Writing Feedbackliloyeh - Aug 24, 2018 / liloyeh - Aug 25, 2018
|The economical developments are considered to be the most crucial nowadays
2 - Reza, this is a 5 paragraph essay based on the instruction of discuss both points of view and then...
Writing FeedbackMrj1479 - Aug 24, 2018 / Holt - Aug 25, 2018
|[TOEFL IBT: Task 2] Compare yourself today and yourself five years ago
4 - Nuradia, while I can sense the effort that you have placed in the writing of this essay, I am...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Aug 24, 2018 / Holt - Aug 25, 2018
|Writing task 1 in IELTS (the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010)
5 - Tran, there are a number of inconsistencies in your presentation due to lack of information. The problem started with...
Writing Feedbackbovalenca - Aug 24, 2018 / Holt - Aug 25, 2018
|Questbridge - "What are your career goals" question, and two 35-word essays. Help Requested
3 - Thank you so much for your feedback. I am in the process of revising, and possibly restarting, each of...
Writing FeedbackBlackSkyrim - Aug 23, 2018 / BlackSkyrim - Aug 24, 2018
|IELTS task 2 - Increasing tourism for inhabitants, environment and economy
3 - Dear @Tan0295, You need to post the complete prompt, so that we can comment your essay in proper...
Writing FeedbackTan0295 - Aug 20, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 24, 2018
|[GRE : Argument] Adams Realty or Fitch Realty - which from those real estates companies are better?
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Aug 21, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 24, 2018
|The honesty is the most crucial thing in a good relationship
Writing Feedbackjam92 - Aug 23, 2018 / jam92 - Aug 24, 2018
|Response for a memorandum from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants
2 - Hi Chen, your essay can possibly score a 5 with this type of writing. You clearly understood the assigned...
Writing Feedbackessay61107 - Aug 23, 2018 / Holt - Aug 24, 2018
|In order to attract good students, many universities spend a lot of money in society activities.
5 - Vate, the essay is not asking whether you believe one point of view is convincing or not. The essay...
Writing FeedbackVateye - Aug 23, 2018 / Holt - Aug 24, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - is celebration vital? Are people spend too much on it?
5 - @Holt thanks for the comments. Now I realize that I might be off topic and will receive lower mark...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 22, 2018 / smally01 - Aug 23, 2018
|IELTS: What can governments do to encourage children to eat a healthier diet?
2 - you should give examples or further explain by illustrations with each measure. and you should briefly state mentioned measures...
Writing Feedbackptnlytqnho - Aug 23, 2018 / adirnarmak - Aug 23, 2018
|CBEST: The Contribution Technology Has Made to Modern Life Has Been Positive
2 - Jane, while you are doing your practice tests, you can use a thesaurus to vary your word choices. This...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Aug 22, 2018 / Holt - Aug 23, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - Environment protection, the job for individual or the government?
2 - Believe it or not, if not for the problematic sentence structures in your essay, you actually managed to develop...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Aug 22, 2018 / Holt - Aug 23, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1-RECYCLING RATES OF SELECTED MATERIAL IN A PARTICULAR COUNTRY
2 - Remember to include commas when you are listing the names such as "paper, cardboard, and glassware" instead of "paper...
Writing Feedbackkripa5 - Aug 22, 2018 / naegajjasae - Aug 22, 2018
|Aging population is good or bad for society (Let task 2)
4 - I'm glad to see your essential feedback. I will try to use words that have accurate meaning. I'm confusing...
Writing FeedbackTracytrinh1998 - Aug 21, 2018 / Tracytrinh1998 - Aug 22, 2018
|CBEST: How Did The Rejection Affect You? Bank credit refusal.
3 - Dear @Holt, Thank you for your thoughtful feedback. I will work on the sentence structure along with the...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Aug 21, 2018 / naegajjasae - Aug 22, 2018
|Students are more likely to be successful in their life if they continue their studies - IETLS topic
5 - @jerryhoang1991 In general, your ideas is quite good. But I have a feedback for you: you should be careful...
Writing Feedbackjerryhoang1991 - Aug 21, 2018 / Tracytrinh1998 - Aug 22, 2018
|Some athletes are a good models for teenagers and children, others may not provide a proper example
Writing Feedbackalex97 - Aug 21, 2018 / Audrey01 - Aug 22, 2018
|A complain letter about poor service, problem with ordered food, steps to satisfy your needs
2 - Han, this letter does not appropriately express the situation that led to your dissatisfaction with the food service. You...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Aug 21, 2018 / Holt - Aug 22, 2018
|The importance of allocating certain percentage of high-level position in companies to women
4 - Good morning, Although I could see what is the point that you were trying to make, questions were...
Writing FeedbackBita12 - Aug 19, 2018 / naegajjasae - Aug 21, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: A lot of Buildings Are Now Being Built With An Open Plan Design
4 - @dimdim02 Hi, I have some feedback to your essay. In your introduction, it is not clear sentences because it...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Aug 9, 2018 / jerryhoang1991 - Aug 21, 2018
|To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Aug 19, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Aug 21, 2018
|CBEST Writing: The rapidly increasing prices have the biggest impact on low-paid people
3 - Jane, since you did not provide a proper prompt statement for this essay, it is impossible to assess your...
Writing Feedbacknaegajjasae - Aug 20, 2018 / Holt - Aug 21, 2018
|Computer can sometimes give some positive effects on youngsters, but more likely it brings harm
3 - Hi, Your vocabulary in this essay impressed me but your tone of debating confused me. There is a very...
Writing Feedbackngchiii - Aug 20, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Aug 21, 2018
|IELTS: How to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace?
5 - @Ptnly, how to write your essay depending on the topic instruction given rather using the same formula of writing...
Writing Feedbackptnlytqnho - Aug 19, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Aug 21, 2018
|Do you agree as computers translate quickly and accurately, learning languages is a waste of time?
4 - Hi @Soulpancake, in your essay i think that you should write the sentences longer and use more complex sentences....
Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Aug 20, 2018 / jerryhoang1991 - Aug 21, 2018
|The line graph illustrates figures for global meetings in three different capital cities 1980-2010
2 - Nguyen, I do not think that you wrote this essay under time pressure practice settings. That is because you...
Writing FeedbackHanhNguyen - Aug 20, 2018 / Holt - Aug 21, 2018
|Before entering college many young people are advised that a year working or traveling is good thing
3 - Hi, your paragraph contains lots of spelling and jumbled grammatical structures. As I see you have difficulties in typing...
Writing FeedbackHana Hutabarat - Aug 19, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Aug 20, 2018
|High school graduates are encouraged to start working or traveling rather than entering University
5 - Hi Fuad, I was given special permission to come back and respond to your questions. Your reasoning is good....
Writing Feedbackfuad hadi - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 20, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: A plan for changes to a school site over 20 years.
2 - Moon, you did a good job in discussing the changes that will be forthcoming to the school. Even your...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|MY random writing to improve writing mainly Grammar and sentence structure
2 - Sunii, as far as creative writing goes, this is a pretty decent written presentation. I can feel your heart...
Writing Feedbacksgc908 - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
|Task 2: Traditional culture with money-making purpose. Discuss both views and give opinion
2 - Linh, your opening paragraph made my head spin. It was so wordy and needlessly complicated that you ended up...
Writing FeedbackLinh Dieu - Aug 18, 2018 / Holt - Aug 19, 2018
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