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|"better things that are learned are contained in experiences" - experience vs books knowledge
2 - Your essay has a number of flaws that I will be addressing below. Please consider other ways of presenting...
Writing Feedbackshigaogui - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Make decision by myself or by parents.
Writing FeedbackYuuukily - Oct 6, 2014 / Yuuukily - Oct 7, 2014
|As the essential resource for people's lives, easier prepared food means easier to improve our lives
3 - Thanks for your reply, I find it's better for my essay. But I have a question about that. "the...
Writing FeedbackLittleCa - Oct 6, 2014 / LittleCa - Oct 7, 2014
|How is energy wasted in school?
2 - is a necessity and essential to modern life - I believe this has a slight grammatical problem- either you...
Writing FeedbackEst2k - Oct 6, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Wheat exports
2 - , from 1985 to 1990,andwhich It is noticeable that the total of wheat exports in the three countries fluctuated...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 6, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 6, 2014
|[IELTS] Cheap flights should not be discouraged
4 - - zjxhz, that is exactly what I was pointing out to you. You must always present a clear point...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|Marijuana - what it is to you? Rough Draft Compare and Contrast
3 - Greetings! Yes, it is a lot of information. However, it is imperative that it is this long so that...
Writing FeedbackBrandonBritts - Oct 4, 2014 / BrandonBritts - Oct 6, 2014
|Sports facilities should be adopted parallel with sports contests and health events
2 - Kyrsten,excellent introduction even though you forgot to present your point of view. As you know the essay asks...
Writing FeedbackKrysten Mai - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS: the advertisement aimed at children should be restricted or even banned
3 - Well, overall, not bad. However, do not straightforwardly point on children out. Attempt to write in this way. Advertising...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 6, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS- Should foreign visitors pay more than local visitors for tourist sites?
2 - Sam, I will revise and review your essay by showing you how the content can be improved. My comments...
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS - Education should be considered as the most important factor in a country's success
10 - I think your argument here is weak. It seems that you are talking about people, rather than the success...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Sep 4, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS; having purpose of life and being helpful as the main factors to achieve happiness
4 - Hello ritairianti, Let me try to write an introductory paragraph which is in three aspects; an attention-grabbing...
Writing Feedbackritairianti - Oct 5, 2014 / tiaDS - Oct 6, 2014
|Drugs, alcohol and messy sex lives - Celebrities news has negative impacts on children; [IELTS]
7 - Thanks for your comment. Yes recently I have realized that maybe it is better to develop one idea further,...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Sep 15, 2014 / zjxhz - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS-Task 2: children should take formal training to become good parents
Writing Feedbacklourance - Oct 5, 2014 / lourance - Oct 6, 2014
|Kobe vs Lebron? Lebron James is still the King of this basketball planet; Contrast essay
Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Oct 4, 2014 / Gilchrist2014 - Oct 5, 2014
|As a student I always prepared my own food - it is a considerably more expedient choice
4 - Gbekil, the only advice I can give you is to keep reading English materials and watching English films...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2014
|Naturtint vs. Tom's of Maine - Compare and Contrast 2 advertisements
Writing Feedbackbehendrix - Oct 2, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2014
|There are no such things as freedom and security without independence - importance in your life
2 - There are no such things as freedom and security without independence. It is simply impossible. You cannot live freely...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 5, 2014
|Our rights as people define who we are as individuals - SAT ESSAY; CENSORSHIP
2 - Our rights as people define who are we are as individuals. Our individual rights in society allow us to...
Writing Feedbackboston1002 - Oct 5, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 5, 2014
|Do you want do everything by your own hand without expecting to rely on somebody? Work on your own!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 5, 2014
|Watching television together makes communication among friends and family stronger
5 - i will give you some patern : 1. introduction you should paraphrasing this issue, and write clearly with two...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 3, 2014 / ritairianti - Oct 5, 2014
|All schools have got an aim to prepare their students to be a professional individual of the society
Writing FeedbackFuadAzeri - Oct 5, 2014 / FuadAzeri - Oct 5, 2014
|There are three main things that matter to me: God, family, and country. Stanford Essay
3 - Patriot, while you do present very good examples of things that matter to you, there is a big problem...
Writing Feedbackpatriot1776 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|Security vs freedom - living freely is much more important than security.
2 - Vns, while you offer a very good argument in support of your stand, you have failed to recognize the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|I think, no one can't live these days without a mobile phone and a computer.
Writing Feedbackrokajo5 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|I was only thirteen at the time but old enough to understand that Leukemia was cancerous; UC essay
4 - Wow! Can I just say that your introduction was so unexpected? I loved your essay. It really pulled me...
Writing FeedbackTeeddy - Oct 3, 2014 / eldubb - Oct 4, 2014
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of traveling by air?
Writing FeedbackKristy Nguyen - Oct 3, 2014 / Kristy Nguyen - Oct 4, 2014
|TOEFL: Pets not only can be our best and helpful friends but they also bring happiness for us.
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 4, 2014
|"Norouz" - it would be a beautiful celebration for all nations in the world; TOEFL essay
2 - Hamed, sorry I missed this essay. Is it too late for me to give my review and suggestions? I'll...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|My Castle - it all started from one brick. This is the place I feel comfortable in.
Writing FeedbackKM97 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|Mahatma Gandhi, is the most important spiritual guide in contemporary world; important world leader
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 4, 2014
|'For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony'; GRE
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Oct 3, 2014 / peyman_np - Oct 4, 2014
|motives of people applying for work / forms of transport used for journey - IELTS Task 1
4 - Thanks you bros! I think that before writing two detailed paragraphs, I have mentioned an overall trend as an...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014
|Too much attention on small things!
4 - Vns, you can add more to this introduction so that you can strengthen your opinion on the matter....
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2014
|Response to an article "Struggle for perfection"
Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014
|The first and foremost consideration is to be able obtain a stable job, satisfaction would be next..
2 - - William, you forgot to introduce the topic statement prior to entering your full discussion. Without the topic...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2014
|Zoos may not act as the best interest of animals since they are profit earning entities.
3 - Thank you for your correction. I agree with your other comments but I think "whose" is used to...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 2, 2014 / william731 - Oct 3, 2014
|The content of the Internet controlled by a single powerful global agency?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Oct 2, 2014 / chucnt - Oct 3, 2014
|'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine
8 - Do not commence your essay with those words such as i agree or disagree, save it for the conclusion...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 23, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 2, 2014
|Modern Technology is creating a single world culture?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 1, 2014 / hamedmas - Oct 2, 2014
|IELTS writing task 2: Opinions about a four-year high school education proposal
5 - Oh, that really surprised me that my essay is high assessed like that. Thanks you very much guys!!! I...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 1, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Oct 2, 2014
|"How have you contributed to your school" - HELP, Writer's block
2 - Daltos, when you are writing an essay geared towards a scholarship application, it is best to familiarize yourself with...
Writing FeedbackDaltos - Oct 2, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2014
|what is the true maker of success? provide evidence and citation
2 - This is a pretty powerful sentence and make me realize what you think is the most important factor...
Writing FeedbackTbontb - Oct 1, 2014 / Adamtong - Oct 2, 2014
|I BELIEVE IN PICTURES - they have power of repairing unrepairable hearts
6 - Redy, please allow me to edit your essay whenever possible to keep it short but interesting ok? Thanks :-)...
Writing Feedbackredy - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2014
|IELTS: improving sports facilities can increase public health but other factors are also important
2 - Hi, fadlan 1. Avoid using "there" in your starting. It effects nothing to catch your examiner's attention....
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Oct 1, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS: It is unrealistic for a school to provide so called parenting training for its students
7 - Hamed, never take a quote from the person advising the original poster who had quoted the original work in...
Writing Feedbackmark xia - Sep 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Angel from Heaven (Memoir)
2 - This is a very well thought out and developed essay. However the part about your taking the first Math...
Writing Feedbackhihi2000 - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Internet is the most considerable invention due to its simplicity of gaining new knowledge.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Thankfully my obstacle was a shared one and I had the support of my family to help me get through it
2 - Your introduction must be a little bit more vague! save some of your experiences and stories later for your...
Writing Feedbackrachgreene - Oct 1, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 1, 2014
|Separating Male and female ! Gender Segregation in Schools
3 - #By way of an illustration, I can envision a male who does not communicate any single female at school.Here...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Sep 30, 2014 / redy - Oct 1, 2014
|TOEFL: excellent knowledge is better than ability to adopt oneself.
4 - Well, the structure of your essay is quite interesting . However, try to paraphrase ,,excellent knowledge'';D and do not...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Causes and solutions student less leisure
6 - your position is given indisputable and is aware inspiring i would like to able in terms of writing like...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Sep 24, 2014 / Timberlake - Oct 1, 2014
|Discuss your academic goals and how American University would help you achieve them??
3 - Your essay is good, but there are a few things I'd recommend you revise; "It is what drives my...
Writing Feedbackrestinpizza - Sep 30, 2014 / hpharsh5 - Oct 1, 2014
|Exposure to foreign language at primary school should be encouraged as much as possible - IELTS
11 - hail everyone! This essay, in fact, impressed me,because idea of your was given very clearly and sparkly in terms...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Sep 27, 2014 / Timberlake - Oct 1, 2014
|Who am I? 'do my best and let my God do the rest' - homework task
Writing FeedbackIscha - Sep 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS: The chief factor of someone to prosper is the goal of that person; talent isn't a must
Writing Feedbackhsamadii - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Educational Inequality Essay - UT Austin Essay E
4 - You sound like you are trying to lecture the admission officer rather than offering him or her an insight...
Writing Feedbacktexasbreed13 - Sep 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Public health and related measurements.
6 - I think you should not put your opinion in body paragraphs it is better to write it in conclusion...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Sep 29, 2014 / hsamadii - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS: Tests and examinations still present major problems, which can produce unrealistic results.
Writing Feedbackcloverie - Sep 30, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Sep 30, 2014
|IELTS: Young people are not fit for key roles until they are well-trained and mature enough
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