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|Topic: A family has a great influence on children's development..
2 - This can could be written as: ... developed nowadays, so the kids access ... From the beginning of...
Writing FeedbackFanger2002 - Oct 2, 2018 / Teebest - Oct 2, 2018
|DISCUSS ABOUT DRAWBACKS OF FAST FOOD - it is a potential menace to our bodies
2 - Hello Nguyễn, There is a disconnect between your opening paragraph and the next one. In the first, you...
Writing Feedbackthanhhieu23 - Oct 2, 2018 / btoguntade - Oct 2, 2018
|The best way to reduce crime among young people is to teach parents good parenting skills - IELTS 2
3 - Dear @AsgardSheol Iam impressed with your good control of English. However, I have a few advise to your...
Writing FeedbackAsgardSheol - Sep 27, 2018 / nuradiapuspa - Oct 1, 2018
|IELTs Task1: The bar chart shows University subjects chosen
5 - @Dang Khoa I don't think "seem" is unusable in IELTS writing. - "seem" is an informal word: I suspect...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 29, 2018 / windmooc - Sep 30, 2018
|Nowadays, obesity is becoming a global disease, which cause many serious complications
2 - Thong, how much time did you spend researching your response to the given prompt? Your writing comes across as...
Writing Feedbackgodzlotus - Sep 29, 2018 / Holt - Sep 30, 2018
|A CASUAL GLANCE FROM MY LOVE (Cambridge Ordinary Level examinations of English)
4 - I am really grateful over your critical analysis over my piece of writing. i really needed this and i...
Writing FeedbackPeachy_Hag - Sep 20, 2018 / Peachy_Hag - Sep 29, 2018
|Some think that students should study mainly science and math in order to prepare them to job market
Writing FeedbackRana Alhawbani - Sep 15, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|Ielts task 2. Sense of competion or teamwork? Which one is better?
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Sep 20, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|There is a myriad of people who believe that physically harmful sports ought to be forbid - IELTS 2
Writing FeedbackDang Khoa - Sep 24, 2018 / Dang Khoa - Sep 29, 2018
|Essay writing about the benefits when people want to participate in team sports or individual sports
Writing FeedbackHongkhanh - Sep 28, 2018 / Hongkhanh - Sep 28, 2018
|Write an email to community picnic organizer
3 - Here some comment may help you: would like to form my appreciation Say to express in which no...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 18, 2018 / Rana Alhawbani - Sep 28, 2018
|The Birth Rates changes in two developed countries - US and China over the period of 1920-2000
3 - Tran, your analysis is a bit confusing to read. You need to focus on the clarity of the information...
Writing FeedbackTran Hung - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|Youngsters demanded to do social works in their leisure time in order to help the poor and disabled
2 - Nguyen, you have discussed a totally different topic from the one provided in the original discussion. You have created...
Writing Feedbackvanduc - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: How the greenhouse effect on the temperature of the earth
3 - Hang, word count wise, you have more than enough words to pass the word criteria but format and presentation...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years.
3 - thank you so much for your suggestion. Vocabulary is the big problem for me now. I will try as...
Writing FeedbackBui Chu Uyen - Sep 26, 2018 / Bui Chu Uyen - Sep 27, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade labelled coffee and bananas
Writing Feedbackfaluda - Sep 26, 2018 / faluda - Sep 27, 2018
|The map compares the structure of university sports center at the present and after the innovation
2 - Le, this 4 paragraph essay should have been presented in the following manner: 1. Summary overview with trending...
Writing FeedbackJohnlee94 - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018
|Describe your favorite form of transportation - bus has many benefits
3 - Tran, when writing an essay that has several topics for discussion, it is best for you to offer each...
Writing FeedbackTranduyen - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018
|Fashion is highly valued in people's choice of clothes. Why? Agree?
2 - @HuyenHung "the impact that fashion has on their life" [line 1] "clothes make contribution to increasing ..." I am...
Writing FeedbackHuyenHung - Sep 26, 2018 / terminal28 - Sep 26, 2018
|IELTS academic writing task 2 Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible
2 - Phoebe, while your opening paraphrase should be commended for its interesting prompt restatement and reproduction of the discussion instructions,...
Writing Feedbackhamie0218 - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 26, 2018
|Have you ever had this question in your mind: "Are you a saver or a spender?"
2 - Tran, is this for an English writing class? It reads like a routine writing exercise to me. One of...
Writing Feedbacktrancucphuong311 - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 26, 2018
|IELTS Essay Task 2 Public spending on arts is a waste of money, agree or not?
3 - Catherine, there are four ways to approach an extent essay: 1. I completely agree 2. I completely disagree 3....
Writing FeedbackCatherine88 - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 26, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: Pie charts about Oscar winners by genre in 2003 and 2008
2 - Hang, the first problem with this essay is the number of words that you have written. During the actual...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 25, 2018 / Holt - Sep 25, 2018
|The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time - TASK 1
2 - Mai, while you wrote over the minimum required words, your essay shows a lack of analysis and proper summary...
Writing Feedbacktrung3110 - Sep 24, 2018 / Holt - Sep 25, 2018
|It is an argue whether businesses have to be responsible for their effect on society or not
4 - Nguyen, your essay will fail due to several formatting problems. The first is that you have a redundant opening...
Writing FeedbackSEN2403 - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|Solving environmental problems: international organization or local government ?
2 - @TrangDiem11 Your essay has a good coherence, but I would like to suggest that you can include a few...
Writing FeedbackTrangDiem11 - Sep 24, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 24, 2018
|(IELTS) Purchasing unnecessary - pricey goods by people
NEW - Some people get into debt by buying things they do not need and cannot afford. What are the reason...
Writing Feedbacksznnis25 - Sep 24, 2018 / — -
|[IELTS] Children are better off to spend the time on other activities than reading story books.
2 - Suggestions too much times winder topics "Children will have various topics to share" becomes repetitive finding process-learning process, this...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Sep 23, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018
|The differences of Education in Vietnam
3 - Phuong, your essay is very confusing to read. It feels like you are just picking up the discussion points...
Writing Feedbackpphanhh - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018
|Music cannot be prioritized by its importance - each genre has its own purpose
3 - Daniella, although you were given a detailed review of your work above, the person who gave you the advice...
Writing FeedbackDanila312 - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018
|Young people admire sports stars though they do not set a good example. This is negative or positive
5 - You mentioned only the drawback of athletes which is unfair. Secondly, in your last paragraph you have written "a...
Writing Feedbackvybeo23 - Sep 19, 2018 / anakosola - Sep 22, 2018
|The human have a negative effect on our planet. By harming Earth, we put our lives in danger.
4 - Ana, regardless of the information and review that you received above, your essay will still get a failing score...
Writing Feedbackanakosola - Sep 21, 2018 / Holt - Sep 22, 2018
|[Writing task 2] The decline of face-to-face communication due to the rise of technology
4 - proper uses cogently you mean coherently? Also, you've written too long which exceed 250 words a lot for...
Writing FeedbackOkabe_Rin - Sep 19, 2018 / sillyman2000 - Sep 21, 2018
|Describe a favorite class you had in school. What made it your favorite class. (250-350 words)
2 - Kushboo, one particular activity in this class is not enough to make it a favorite class. Memorable? Yes. Favorite?...
Writing FeedbackKhushbooVohra - Sep 19, 2018 / Holt - Sep 20, 2018
|IELTS PART 1:...how selected age groups bought concert, cinema and theatre tickets online
2 - Ly, the first thing you have to remember is that there is a big difference in writing the Task...
Writing FeedbackLy Huyen Tran - Sep 18, 2018 / Holt - Sep 19, 2018
|It is more advantageous for children to start learning a foreign language at a primary school
2 - Hi Uyen, I think your discussion is quite good and clear. However, I have some feedback for your essay:...
Writing Feedbacktuuyen - Sep 18, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 18, 2018
|IELTS Task 1: Occupied and available types of living accomodation in London
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Sep 17, 2018 / Legecy - Sep 18, 2018
|Is My Life Worth Saving Someone Else Working in Law Enforcement?
2 - Nechee, this is a very timely piece of writing here. Your personal insight into the life of a police...
Writing Feedbacknecheecraig - Sep 16, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|Essay about whether government should be responsible for education and healthcare
2 - Zeng, you are using too many memorized phrases in this essay for it to be considered a piece of...
Writing Feedbackzengzhiz - Sep 16, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1 Multiple Charts
NEW - The table illustrates quantity of tourists to Ashdown Museum in the year before and after it was refurbished while...
Writing Feedbacklequangtan - Sep 17, 2018 / — -
|Building a large gym facility on the company's premises, or to pay employees to sign up elsewhere?
5 - Han, this is still an opinion essay. That means you need to take only one stand and defend it....
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018 / Holt - Sep 17, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2, topic is about technology and the relationship between people
2 - which automatically impacts through in many distinct ways The technology innovations have significant influences were it not for...
Writing FeedbackThuyKieu - Sep 17, 2018 / cao1km - Sep 17, 2018
|Although more and more people read news online, newspapers remain the most important source of news
Writing FeedbackTranTuan - Sep 9, 2018 / TranTuan - Sep 17, 2018
|[Writing task2] Punishment to recognize the right/wrong distinction by kids
Writing FeedbackMinh Luong - Sep 14, 2018 / Minh Luong - Sep 16, 2018
|Immigration: An Analysis of its Impact on the American Economy
2 - Hi Kacee, You did a nice job with your essay. Good intro, solid conclusion, and you had plenty...
Writing Feedbackkap444 - Sep 16, 2018 / Razumikhin2018 - Sep 16, 2018
|Task 2:Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject or not
3 - Nguyen, you have a TA response problem in your prompt paraphrase. The question is not whether the university should...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Sep 15, 2018 / Holt - Sep 16, 2018
|Taking a gap year before entering university is the choice of many high school graduates
3 - Hi Khanh, I think your essay is good when you presented a full structure of a paragraph. However, I...
Writing FeedbackKhanh2901 - Sep 12, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018
|Contribution to societies through taxes or by there should be other responsibilities
2 - Hi there, I think your essay is quite good with an organized structure. However, It seems that there are...
Writing FeedbackMTALY - Sep 14, 2018 / HanNguyen0510 - Sep 15, 2018
|Task 2: Opinion about video games - more problems than benefits
7 - For your conclusion, it needs to be a paragraph not just a one sentence. Also, you may need to...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Sep 13, 2018 / MTALY - Sep 14, 2018
|Tourists visiting rough condition places ( IELTS task 2)
4 - Hi @amal_yaddy, I agree completely with what @Holt has said. In my honest opinion, I believe your level...
Writing Feedbackamal_yaddy - Sep 13, 2018 / MTALY - Sep 14, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - Discussion on giving financial or practical aid to developing countries
3 - I think you should give your opinion in the opening like : While people think.... I personally believe.... Remember...
Writing Feedbackstacy422 - Sep 13, 2018 / Nhat Px - Sep 14, 2018
|What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet and what solutions can you suggest?
2 - Lee, your presentation is way off base when considering the required discussion presentation. You did an introduction to the...
Writing FeedbackJameslee - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 14, 2018
|My topic is choosing subjects to study university, subjects what they like or related to future job.
2 - Some of your sentence makes me confused as: Choosing fields suitable for each ... ( I think it should...
Writing Feedbacknhumai1307 - Sep 13, 2018 / Nhat Px - Sep 13, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2-Discuss Main Aim For University Educaiton
3 - Ryan, I'm also preparing IELTS test. I also made the mistake of not discussing both views in this kind...
Writing FeedbackRyan C - Sep 11, 2018 / stacy422 - Sep 13, 2018
|ART VS SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY - How can art make a difference in our society?
Writing Feedbackjalp - Sep 10, 2018 / kalyn - Sep 13, 2018
|Governments should focus its budget more on environmental protection than on economic developments
2 - Carol, when you are asked to respond to a question, you must do so within the first paragraph of...
Writing Feedbackgilgameshauo - Sep 12, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|The bar chart reveals the change of the proportion of USA citizens (all ages) living alone
2 - Ngo, while you did write 180 plus words in this essay, the analysis and presentation of facts for your...
Writing Feedbacknhatlamielts - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|I don't believe that students can acquire more knowledge from schools than during online education
2 - Zhou, you have automatically failed this essay test due to your misunderstanding of the topic for discussion and how...
Writing FeedbackKaren_Karen - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|Does a free society requires having freedom of speech and express their word? IELTS
2 - Noura, rather than presenting question after question in this essay, which creates redundancies, you should instead be responding directly...
Writing Feedbacknoura1993 - Sep 11, 2018 / Holt - Sep 12, 2018
|You left a bag of equipment at the gym last night. Write a letter to the manager - task 1
4 - Hi Han, although you did cover the prompt requirement in this letter, there are mistakes that would cause you...
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Sep 10, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Sep 11, 2018
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