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|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Private car ownership has grown, led to traffic congestion
Writing FeedbackKenNgo - Mar 6, 2014 / KenNgo - Mar 7, 2014
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree that children should not be allowed to play computer games
3 - Actually, I have edited this essay before I posted in. The original version was written within the time limitaion,...
Writing Feedbackjinhailing - Mar 5, 2014 / jinhailing - Mar 7, 2014
|Egypt and United State: Differences and Similarities
4 - As we aware ofknow, Egypt has a long history andhas beenthey believed it has been created for about 3,200...
Writing Feedbackrashad20 - Feb 24, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 7, 2014
|'find a method' - Children begin learning foreign language at primary school
NEW - Traditionally, children have begun studying foreign language at secondary school, however some educationalist recommended that it's better to introduced...
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|Should government spend money on highways or public transportation?
4 - about speaking section i m also in perplex. i could not find any suitable site to practice speaking where...
Writing FeedbackEslam8787 - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 7, 2014
|Why people go to Japan for vacation (Writing Class' assignment - English Major)
Writing Feedbackglensnicholas - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|Wealth and poorer nations; 'developing country and developed country'
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|GRE ISSUE Government should not found any scientific research whose consequences are uncle
2 - excellent writing... coherent, easy to follow, clearly expressed opinion in intro and good supporting body paragraph, your word count...
Writing FeedbackJudith Yan - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 6, 2014
|Today more people are travelling than ever before, why is this the case?
5 - Something I was told that helps with sentence fragments is to put "I realize" in front of each individual...
Writing Feedbackgramya25 - Feb 28, 2014 / Ems27 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS; TV programmes are transmitted throughout the day and night
4 - There is no denying toabout the fact that watching television can be beneficial both tofor work and entertainment. Comprehensive...
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Mar 3, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Number of students attending three courses from 2001 to 2004
3 - This is to assess your report writing skills and therefore you need to adopt a more formal tone...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 Essay: Chorleywood Village development
3 - Yes, I too agree. Overview is more important than a conclusion which is actually not necessary for this...
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|attending in university
Writing Feedbackoranji - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Public health is a big issue. Government can play an important role in improving it.
3 - Your topic suggests that you have written this fro either IELTS or TOEFL :D However, I wish you...
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems
3 - If racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems that come from...
Writing Feedbackvishal19balar - Mar 2, 2014 / vishal19balar - Mar 6, 2014
|University students should be required to attend class; 'skipping some boring'
3 - As dumi mentioned above, you need to do more work on improving your grammar. The best way is to...
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - teach every young person how to be a good parent
4 - well, your body paragraphs should contain reasons that helps you justify your opinion on the issue. Then you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 6, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you?
Writing Feedbackmahshad - Feb 28, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Extended definition essay; Enigma, intro and outline
3 - Everyone knows how it is (no comma) to encounter a situation that leaves one wondering how it happened. According...
Writing Feedbackcareswho - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS General Task 1- Letter to employer describing the problem
Writing Feedbackrairaichan60 - Mar 5, 2014 / rairaichan60 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS, LIFE WILL BE BETTER IN THE FUTURE OR NOT
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 5, 2014 / anselzhang - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - homework to students everyday - 'intersection between home and school'
Writing Feedbackmia_01 - Mar 5, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 4, 2014 / Phuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS task 2: History a fascinating subject.
3 - I feel you do not come up with strong arguments why history fascinates some people. You say it is...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|TOEFL- People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities
7 - I think you put too much information in just one sentence, which makes your writing hard to follow. I...
Writing FeedbackSunny H - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 5, 2014
|Toefl: "To err is human" - listening to the advice of family and friends
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS: Computers have made life easier Vs Complicated ??
5 - give priority to your real reason. Here the reason is that computers handle transactions much more efficiently and faster...
Writing Feedbackanshita - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Hours of leisure time per year in Someland
5 - I suggest you to take this line after introduction and present it as the overview (have a look...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of en
2 - Well, I think you need to have an overview after the introduction. Overview is an important feature in report...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Mar 4, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|TOEFL; Classroom learnng vs online education - Which is better?
5 - You need to include a specific example for every reason you use to justify your position. So, my...
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: With the help of technology student can learn more information
4 - First of all thank you for your quick and informative reply. I honestly never thought I will get response...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 4, 2014
|Some are born with talents and others not; Discuss!
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Mar 4, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing - Argument - "Is country music more important than the International Music"
5 - Hi Srkrishnan, In my personal view you have good range of vocabulary and many point with supporting examples, however...
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / Arun0506 - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Graduates should be advised to do a second degree
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|TASK 1 population in yemen and italy
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Interpreting survey data on Adult (Higher/Executive) Education.
Writing FeedbackSrkrishnan - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS, Change look is good or not?
4 - ... wrong grammar - "when compared"/ "in contrast of" Today the general attitude towards one's appearance is very...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|(IELTs) Should developing countries concentrate on industry or education?
Writing FeedbackkridUessay - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; Changing look is good or not?
6 - ... there is no problem in terms of grammar or presentation of this sentence. However, I feel it...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|Movies and television changing the way that we entertain; big influence
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Mar 3, 2014 / mariasultana - Mar 4, 2014
|University student should stay away from their parents in most country; Agree or Disagree?
3 - It is good to include your purpose (TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the title itself so that others would...
Writing FeedbackKARNIK - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|TOPic : Long distance flights use more fuel than cars & pollute the environment!
11 - Secondly reduction in number of vehicle is a remarkable way to cut average liters of petrol used by aper...
Writing FeedbackGreenstem2 - Feb 12, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|WHAT IMPORTANT SKILL A PERSON MUST HAVE TO BE SUCCESSFUL - TOEFL ESSAY EVALUTION
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Freedom of speech in a free society
5 - Very good introduction - good structure, ideas, vocabulary :) I feel this is a good suggestion....
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 1, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTs - Voluntary community service fulfils the purpose of education
3 - First, I want to request you to select the right forum when you open a new thread. For IELTS,...
Writing Feedbackvynguyen - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 4, 2014
|IELTS; Should we spend our lives doing the same things and avoiding changes?
2 - Use space after comma ( FIRST LINE) - In this electronic age, advanced technology and modernized world has imposed...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 3, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 3, 2014
|Money for space exploration? Government should spent more on space research
3 - A closer look at the intro: Space exploration has become a debatable issue:I don't think this is a...
Writing Feedbackangel8713 - Mar 1, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: WOMEN'S RIGHT TO CHOOSE PROFESSION
2 - "logical thinking" is a noun phrase while a adjective phrase is "physically stronger". those phrase are not equivalent...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 2, 2014 / Vanthai - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS, EXTREME SPORT, WHY KEEPING IT AND HOW RISK COULD BE MINIMIZED?
2 - This needs more clarity. Your opening sentence should hook your reader and therefore you should present it in...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 3, 2014 / dumi - Mar 3, 2014
|ACADEMIC WRITING Nuclear Energy: Boon or Bane?
2 - I read the essay, Critiquing it for and against needs to be done in a systematic manner. In the...
Writing Feedbackvincere - Feb 28, 2014 / jennifer2000 - Mar 3, 2014
|About Technology Effect
NEW - " Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology." " In what ways...
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|Pros or cons of mobile phone; contribution to society cannot be underestimated
Writing FeedbackMimo00 - Feb 13, 2014 / Mimo00 - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS; Rubbish created by humans today is a worldwide issue!
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Jan 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS, nowadays it is more difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school.
7 - You have had very great commentaries :) Here are a few details to work with your concluding paragraph...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS;More & more people are relying on private cars as their major means of transport
4 - You write well. However, it is nicer if you could construct the concluding paragraph with this following structure:...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 12, 2014 / eddies - Mar 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The IELTS Score In Four Different Countries
3 - It seems that you just use the same sentence structure in your two body paragraphs. Also, your ideas need...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 28, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 2, 2014
|IELTS, One year off after secondary school and before starting university.
3 - :((((((((...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 1, 2014 / agi - Mar 2, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: distance education to classroom-based education ?
4 - I totally agree with kridUessay. Your essay is very good if something are added, such as supporting ideas. ...
Writing FeedbackNinamar - Feb 28, 2014 / nightmare2k - Mar 1, 2014
|IELTS: Wealthy nations among poorer nations; 'level of export'
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 26, 2014 / xsimio - Feb 28, 2014
|International sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions
2 - i think that you should add adjective to intensify your meaning. Be more specific if you can. For...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 27, 2014 / agi - Feb 28, 2014
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