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|IELTS;Education should be given priority over recreational and sports activities
4 - There is no doubt that education substantially contributes to the country's progress in every field. .......
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 31, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 31, 2013
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Watching television is bad
6 - Ok, here the reason you give is that TV makes people unsociable. Then you should tell them how...
Writing Feedbackumanga - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 31, 2013
|Maintaining status quo can cause personal and professional stagnation of a person's development
5 - Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackAnnaAnna - Oct 26, 2013 / AnnaAnna - Oct 31, 2013
|Write a rough draft that examines a particular relationship and its significance; explain
Writing Feedbackwilliamp - Oct 29, 2013 / Sarath Kumar - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS; GRAPH - evolving trend of population aged 65 and over
3 - Hi, I suggest you to change a little bit the organization of your details paragraphs. Try to make one...
Writing Feedbacklanlinhcc - Oct 30, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 31, 2013
|Ielts essay, The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades
3 - more and more people finds internet essential => it should be " find " because "more and more people"...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Oct 31, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013
|Music brings joy and emotion to our soul, traditional music should be preserved
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS, Even though developing countries receive financial help, poverty is still an issue
2 - Developed countries are supporting developing countries to fight poor conditionspoverty mainly through financial aid but perceived improvement is not...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|GRE Argument Essay - Smith Corporation/ Youngtown Wildlife Preserve
NEW - The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife...
Writing Feedbackritikatiwari - Oct 31, 2013 / — -
|Despite having few harmful consequences, Internet has a positive effect on the society.
4 - English_Learner I think it is better to bring the negative part to the second paragraph so that you...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 10, 2013 / phuoc - Oct 31, 2013
3 - Good editing by Pahan. .... too many spelling mistakes in this sentence. Pay attention to your spellings....
Writing Feedbackoum - Oct 30, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|Diamonds are unflinchingly hard; Students and Stress
2 - Inside the brick walls, around the lines of lockers, between the rows of desks and within the minds of...
Writing Feedbackestumph - Oct 28, 2013 / Kalena54 - Oct 30, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want.
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Oct 29, 2013 / JethroJosh - Oct 30, 2013
|"The Nearer the Church Farther from God".
3 - danbikim Thanks dear you are right. i should have used like "This proverb is not solely applicable to the...
Writing FeedbackQurban Ali - Oct 30, 2013 / Qurban Ali - Oct 30, 2013
|Education is only accessible to privileged members of our society ? MUIS SCHOLARSHIP
2 - The study of commerce has always been my preferred choice of study and my strong transcripts only reinforces my...
Writing Feedbackyuzeee2 - Oct 27, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 30, 2013
|People are both alike and different in many ways; COMPARE & CONTRAST - two friends
Writing FeedbackBasketballg - Oct 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 30, 2013
|IELTS essay : people prefer to live in a house OR to live in an apartment
NEW - Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an...
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Oct 29, 2013 / — -
|IELTS: Should government hold all the responsibility of society or even people are respon.
Writing FeedbackShaan123 - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 29, 2013
|INTEGRITY IS A PRINCIPLE ONE SHOULD HAVE ALL TIMES; What does integrity mean to you?
Writing Feedbackdwhsm1989 - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 29, 2013
|[GRE] USAGE OF MOPEDS IN BALMER ISLAND - Response
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Oct 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 29, 2013
|IELTS; Popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising;To what extent you agree?
NEW - Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of the advertising and not the real needs...
Writing FeedbackKjerry - Oct 29, 2013 / — -
|"Why people attend college?" To fulfill their dreams!
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Oct 25, 2013 / sky2586 - Oct 28, 2013
|IELTS: Ads result in high sales of well-received consumer goods. Agree or disagree?
7 - Well, I was intended to quote some English expressions...But it is very kind of you to remind me...
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 21, 2013 / stream_xu - Oct 28, 2013
|IELTS; Is money the main motivator for employees ? To what extent you agree with that?
3 - Good advice from Pahan :) This is not a typical agree/disagree topic. However, you can still use this format...
Writing FeedbackAllii - Oct 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Socialization by parents of their children into gender roles
Writing FeedbackSalewaa - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Young People Are Much More Aware of and Concerned About Issues Like the Environment, Pover
4 - Overall, your essay needs lots of improvement with regard to clarity of your sentences. They don't convey the idea...
Writing Feedbackyas 2013 - Oct 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|[TOEFL] agree or disagree the purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Why study?; 'improve understanding, practical knowledge and career planning'
Writing Feedbackphuongdunglotus - Oct 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 27, 2013
|[TOEFL] : Governments should spend money on space exploration or for basic needs of people
5 - Your second sentence in the introduction is more meaningful and depict the same meaning. I feel that the...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 26, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 27, 2013
|Love and friendship - the best things in life are free.
3 - "each people" is wrong. People means a collection of men/women and therefore it is a plural word. So...
Writing Feedbackcarmspinto - Oct 25, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|IELTS:Who should be responsible for cleaning pollution? Private Individuals or Government?
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|TOEFL: Best ways of reducing stress: listening to music, exercise, meditation
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|TOEFL; The internet provides a lot of valuable information. However,others disagree
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 27, 2013
|[toefl task] Is the purpose of television to educate, not to entertain?
5 - After 8-hour working or study, people are so exhausted that they may be reluctant to spend time on...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 27, 2013
|Agree/ Disagree -Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program
4 - I sincerely thank you! MisterWandering ! you must have seen thoroughly for giving me comments. thank to your assistance,...
Writing FeedbackTHUSINHTITANA - Oct 20, 2013 / THUSINHTITANA - Oct 27, 2013
|"I believe in our universe, everything we see and believe, is nothing more than a dream"
2 - I believe our universe , everything in the universe, we see and believe , is nothing more thanbut a...
Writing FeedbackDelainaMichelle - Oct 21, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 26, 2013
|"Cartesian Duality";Term Paper for Core Humanities
2 - Mary Shelley believes humans are naturally innocent at birth and also are born as a blank slate or as...
Writing FeedbackFranky 1994 - Oct 20, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 26, 2013
|Recalling an Experience; NARRATIVE ESSAY
3 - First, I have a request; You need to provide a more meaningful topic for your thread which is a...
Writing FeedbackPICHIRO - Oct 25, 2013 / dumi - Oct 26, 2013
|IELTS:Motorized flight is the greatest invention in the modern world; Agree or Disagree?
3 - First of all, the frequent air travels have detrimental effects on the environment due to the emission of the...
Writing Feedbacklslt - Oct 24, 2013 / dumi - Oct 26, 2013
|'depends on the age'; should teachers assign homework for students every day?
7 - establish a rule proposing that teachers should not assign homework for their pupils students need...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 24, 2013
|'broaden horizons'; it is better to begin learning foreign language early
5 - I think this is the best way to practice because these tasks you need to finish within the allocated...
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 24, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|"Driven by idea of the 'common good'" ; Constitution of May 3
2 - Using sentence structure/ writing accurately - Varied and sophisticated sentence structures used to impressive effect - Uses a...
Writing Feedbackleslav - Oct 17, 2013 / 98_IIG - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS; Some prefer changes in life while others refuse to change
2 - Some people think change in their lives is unnecessary, because they would like to keepmaintain a regular lifestyleslifestyle. ...
Writing FeedbackJerry0123 - Oct 24, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS -Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think
12 - Dear Dumi, Thank you for your all explanation and I just now read in Oxford dictionary that make...
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 23, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 24, 2013
|GRE AWA Issue Analysis ; Studying major cities helps understand their society
Writing FeedbackFatimaK - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS:In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries th
5 - I thinks your introduction to the essay is somehow too long. your examples should be mentioned in the body,...
Writing Feedbacksoheylvahabzade - Oct 21, 2013 / vmtct - Oct 24, 2013
|The gap between the rich and the poor; Introduction to essay on socio-economic inequality
Writing FeedbackJane321 - Oct 24, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|The Rise of the Indus River Valley Civilizations essay
5 - Egypt and Mesopotamian civilizations possess lots of written evidence. However, in case of the Indus River valley not...
Writing Feedbacksheddy - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|compare-contrast b/w mother and father;Really need some help;20% part of grade
3 - There are several ideas crowded in this one line sentence. Better re-organize them; One needs money to provide...
Writing FeedbackBisasa - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|"Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone"
4 - Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandySandy sitting alone. He walkswalked up to her and very nervously asked...
Writing FeedbackAnelis123 - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Murder, bloodshed, carnage; why exactly is it wrong?
4 - From the beginning of times, murder hashad been viewed as the ultimate crime deprived of life ...
Writing FeedbackBipabrena - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS : IN MANY COUNTRIES TODAY INSUFFICIENT RESPECT GIVEN TO OLD PEOPLE >...
Writing FeedbackShaan123 - Oct 21, 2013 / Shaan123 - Oct 24, 2013
|TOEFL;universities require students to studymany subjects or specialize in one subject
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Some people think that private schools should be banned.
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Argumentative Essay : Living on campus
8 - .... good point, but when you talk about competition among them, it kind of disturbs your idea :(...
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 23, 2013
|Have you ever been in a crowded and dirty place? ;descriptive essay
4 - That is my introduction so i tried not to be specific in that paragraph. My teacher told me to...
Writing Feedbackboy3005 - Oct 23, 2013 / boy3005 - Oct 23, 2013
|Some teachers and parents suggest that rivalry between children should exist, while others don't
8 - In your body paragraphs, you should justify your opinion by giving reasons. And then you should support them...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|BABYSITTING; Narration of process essay
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 19, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Perhaps food satisfies both the taste buds and the heart
Writing Feedbackthisistram - Oct 23, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Man's Best Friend and Medicine; ESSAY ON ANIMAL THERAPY
4 - ... this sentence is too long and contain too many ideas. Therefore, it does not clearly deliver the...
Writing Feedbackczlets12 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
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