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|IELTS TASK 2:Some people argue that the purpose of zoos is only to entertain people.
7 - great advice congchop! :) Your conclusion too needs to be aligned with your prompt. So you need...
Writing Feedbackraulfanc - Aug 15, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|Ielts- The internet and change of lives
Writing Feedbacktmtrang91 - Aug 15, 2013 / tmtrang91 - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS:Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime type
6 - Hi Talwinder, I feel that the first two paragraphs look similar and it better to make it one ....
Writing Feedbacktalwinder - Jul 24, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS Task2: Technological developments in the past few decades. Positive ?
4 - Hi Dumi / Pahan, Thanks for your time in correcting my essay. I have noted your points and will...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 15, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 16, 2013
|Studying in a group has a lot of advantages that can promote learning process
4 - ... give more focus to your reason; First, group study provides the opportunity to benefit from each others'...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|Describe what responsibilty you think you will face as a GP in other country?
Writing Feedbackhili - Jul 30, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|'the life itself'; PARENTS Vs TEACHERS ; Reasons & Examples
5 - .... this is an incomplete sentence. This is alright for your speaking task, but in writing you need...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|GRE ; Advancing our understanding of the world
2 - Accepted Wisdom is correct in mosesome cases and can be exper imented. overall, your writing is good...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 16, 2013
|What are some other reasons than money, that people work?
Writing FeedbackRpuiii - Aug 15, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|WHO HAVE BETTER INFLUENCE ON STUDENTS - TEACHERS OR PEERS?
4 - make your intro a little more captivating, hook the audience/reader. And like Dumi said, express your view lucidly, it...
Writing Feedbacktpo112358 - Aug 15, 2013 / Ivykid96 - Aug 16, 2013
|Popular events like the Football World Cup release patriotic emotions.
6 - no problem :) I tell the guys who post in wrong forums with the intention of correcting the usage...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|Equal Oppurtunity And Parity in Pay. GRE Analyze an issue
3 - Thanks for the grammar and spell check. Would you like to say anything about the content of the essay...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 13, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013
|Happiness is considered very important in life. 'Defining depends on the ages'
6 - ... Great hook....very impressive :) Most people have the tendency to link happiness with wealth or...
Writing Feedbackjustinjustinlee - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|FOOD STANDS Vs EATING AT HOME ; I support the latter!
Writing Feedbacknedkaangelova - Aug 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 15, 2013
|'Climate change'; Some believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity
3 - ... Why do you narrow the scope of your prompt to one particular type of natural disaster? Your...
Writing Feedbackmaidh91 - Aug 1, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS_should government pay for people's education and health care?
2 - .... Let see how it sounds when the order is changed slightly; First of all, education and medical...
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 11, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|Think of the most interesting class you have ever taken. Why did you enjoy this class
5 - .... both these sentences mean the same. Therefore one makes the other redundant. Combine both and form one...
Writing FeedbackLaw - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1 - line graph on usage of cars in the UK
Writing FeedbackHA254 - Aug 15, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|The Internet is becoming more and more central to our lives
Writing Feedbackvantang1199 - Aug 12, 2013 / vantang1199 - Aug 15, 2013
|Which source is more important? experience or books? TOEFL iBT
2 - One source of knowledge is not enough anymore in our rapid changing world.(end) andThe majority of the universities and...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 14, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS Essay : effects of advertisement on daily life
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|GRE Analytical writing task - scientific discoveries help in understanding the world.
Writing Feedbackprepbuddy - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|[IELTS] - Fatherhood implies environment provided by father to his children for their growth
8 - Well... I think you need to improve the essay structure. Below is what I generally recommend. You can follow...
Writing FeedbackBivek3 - Aug 13, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS: Public Libraries and computer technology
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|TOEFL topic: STUDYING ABROAD - LIKES AND DISLIKES
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 14, 2013 / tarbiat - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS essay topic: Sharing of private information by the media?
3 - First, please open your threads meant for IELTS essays in the Writing Feedback forum. That helps you earn more...
Writing Feedbackmee_na_mee0913 - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|Epilepsy versus Seizures
Writing FeedbackSmartypants101 - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|SCIENTIFIC MYSTERIES; Vaccines and autism
Writing FeedbackHannahbananaess - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|Rising level of congestion and air pollution Vs Usage of private cars
2 - Include the purpose of your essay (e.g. IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.) so that others would provide you with more...
Writing Feedbackvahidia - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Student's loss interest in teaching profession
8 - Ahmad had been very thoughtful when he provided feedbacks to others. He always displayed his genuine interest in helping...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Aug 13, 2013 / dumi - Aug 15, 2013
|[TOEFL] The car use will definitely decrease in twenty years
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 12, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 14, 2013
|DOES THE INTERNET PROMOTE DEEP READING & CRITICAL ENGAGEMENT; "The Shallows"
Writing Feedbackmubaracus - Aug 5, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 14, 2013
|American students should be required to learn a second language; CLEP exam
4 - Well, learning a second language helps a student to broaden his perspectives and that has a great value...
Writing Feedbackallikath - Aug 6, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 14, 2013
|'knowing own culture' - Should all students study the same curriculum?
5 - Consider a country like in india where in the state decides the curriculum untilup to the 12th standard. ...
Writing Feedbackjinx - Aug 8, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 14, 2013
|'avoiding sorrow' Happiness is considered very important in life.
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 12, 2013 / king jane - Aug 14, 2013
|TOEFL:It is important for students to participate in school's leisure activities？
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 10, 2013 / fuqiangang - Aug 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] Parents can help their children's life by asking them to take a job or not
7 - Maybe you can revise "We live in a world where controversial issues are often simply taken it for...
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 8, 2013 / fuqiangang - Aug 13, 2013
|HARD TIMES; My little son's surgery
3 - Dear dumi, tanks for notify me those points. What do you think about coherence and cohesion in my story?...
Writing Feedbackmitu63 - Aug 13, 2013 / mitu63 - Aug 13, 2013
|Should sports and art be removed from curriculum?
Writing Feedbackhunghung1234 - Aug 9, 2013 / givemebrave - Aug 13, 2013
|Critical Question Essay on Harrison Bergeron by Karl Vonnegut
Writing FeedbackWK95 - Aug 5, 2013 / vantang1199 - Aug 13, 2013
|IELTS: 'fish and chips' - Consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers
3 - The given chart illustrates the consumption of pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers of Australian adolescents from 1975...
Writing Feedbackmrabbas - Aug 13, 2013 / MisterWandering - Aug 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] The characteristics of NEIGHBORS - Specific details and examples
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 10, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 13, 2013
|writing task 1 IELTS: writing a letter to your friend about a movie
4 - Hi Pooneh, To say the least, you made me smile while reading your letter..:) So about your letter,...
Writing Feedbackpooneh - Aug 11, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 12, 2013
|TOEFL _ Should high school students be made wear uniform or not?
5 - .... this has grammar issues; ....prevent them from wasting their time on discussing over what they wear. prevent...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|Toefl:Should parents accompany their children to play games?
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 11, 2013 / moonname - Aug 12, 2013
|The problem of mass migration of workers to urban areas
Writing Feedbackngopolly2002 - Jul 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS: CLIMATE CHANGE ISSUE - Not enough political action!
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 9, 2013 / jflo - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS:Development of transportation has enabled people to travel conveniently
Writing Feedbacksilknguyen - Aug 7, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS ; Some people are born with talents while others are not!
4 - While there is some truth in saying that talents can be trained, certain fields such as music and...
Writing Feedbackashupatel67 - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 12, 2013
|[TOEFL] Environmental protection V.S Economic developments
3 - They are both important because they are vital to human'sour future and welfare. However, since resources are...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|Nowadays, technology rules the world - How does it affect relationships?
4 - ... I feel you should improve the link between this line and the hook; As such, human interactions...
Writing Feedbackshimshel - Jul 31, 2013 / dumi - Aug 12, 2013
|What role the money plays on health, education and respect.
Writing Feedbackmitra es - Aug 11, 2013 / mitra es - Aug 12, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1- A letter to a friend about a movie that I am planning to watch
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Aug 10, 2013 / ah_zafari - Aug 11, 2013
|Claim & Reason: Surest indicator of great nation is wellfare of people
Writing FeedbackSdas - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS Task 2-Some people think that travel helps gaining knowledge
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Aug 9, 2013 / MisterWandering - Aug 11, 2013
|Fast food Vs Home-Cooked Food; 'mode of preparation and natural ways of cooking'
6 - Thanks so much @gmad06...yes i am for IELTS, thanks for your contribution...i am hoping to improve too. my...
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 9, 2013 / posdream - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS; Gender Vs Career - Why some jobs are done by men and others by women/
5 - ...try to align this more with your topic; From the past to now, we have witnessed the differences...
Writing Feedbackntdang92 - Aug 8, 2013 / dumi - Aug 11, 2013
|IELTS - Too much noise in public places; Causes and Measures
5 - ...Education institutes...we say "educational institutes. Also you can not look down upon behaviour...you can "shun" it. ...Teach d...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Aug 8, 2013 / posdream - Aug 10, 2013
|TOEFL; Some people treat their pets as members of their family. Is it good or not?
4 - .... Well.... this is certainly true for some people but not for everybody because there are people who...
Writing Feedbackholylua - Aug 8, 2013 / dumi - Aug 10, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 - The pie charts below give information about world population ....
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