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|Ielts2: should rich countries help poor countries?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 22, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS ; Increased prices of petrol can solve growing traffic and pollution issues
5 - Dear redtape, I highly appreciate your comment. I will save your advice. Thank you so much for...
Writing FeedbackMinions144 - Aug 21, 2013 / Minions144 - Aug 22, 2013
|TOEFL - Impact made by fast food on our lives
7 - One of those aspects is the decreasing the time given for preparing he food which made the people face...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 19, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: ZOOs are only to entertain people?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 17, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Once you are unique enough, you are already on the way to success.
3 - I didn't see any obviously grammatical problems. Beside, I do like your point of view!! Wish you good luck!...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 22, 2013 / Hsinyu - Aug 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Working at home V.S Working in a company; Which do you prefer?
4 - Hi Your essay is well organised, especially your introduction. However, I have only one note on this sentence ''Moreover,...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 21, 2013 / moutaz1978 - Aug 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Successful people try new things; Do you agree?
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 21, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 - line graph (UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN)
4 - Thank you very much guys, I will definitely keep on eye on my mistakes and learn from them :)...
Writing Feedbackteehee123 - Aug 18, 2013 / teehee123 - Aug 21, 2013
|Now many employees have the option to telecommute - why?
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 19, 2013 / nlakhots - Aug 21, 2013
|IELTS : The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men & women
2 - Bivek3 I don't know how to give a mark. The writing looks excellent, though. ...status between the years...
Writing FeedbackBivek3 - Aug 21, 2013 / EF_Kevin - Aug 21, 2013
|[IELTS] 'Developed Countries' - World literacy rates by region and by gender.
2 - The bar chart shows illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Overall, it can clearly...
Writing Feedbackbozhidar94 - Aug 21, 2013 / Bivek3 - Aug 21, 2013
|IELTS TASK1:Complain letter about an online purchase
3 - Well....complaint is something negative. Generally, we try not to start with a negtive note. So, first you introduce...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Aug 21, 2013 / dumi - Aug 21, 2013
|Reactions Upon the Gross Effects of Typhoon Maring and Monsoon
NEW - Question: Write in essay about your personal reactions why Filipinos experience the gross effects of typhoon Maring and monsoon....
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Aug 21, 2013 / — -
|IETLS General Task 1: You have taken apart time job. issue with them and its solution
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 20, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 20, 2013
|[Proficiency exams ]Argument essay arguing in favour of or against advertising..
4 - ... People include both sellers and buyers. That is to say they represent both advertisers and consumers. So,...
Writing FeedbackDeli52 - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|Installing lights to reduce accidents. GRE Analyze an argument. Feel free to comment.
5 - Hi Pahan, Sorry, the first mistake came about as a result of typing too fast and not proofreading it...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 19, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 20, 2013
|Petition to University administration/ GRE analyze
6 - ... lacking in the fact????? do you mean that author's argument lacks factual evidence? .... I...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 General training : A friend has agreed to look after your house and pets
5 - Well Arun.... by reading your prompt, I understand your friend has agreed to look after your house and pet...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 14, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS; FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR CRIMES? Or they need to be based on circumstances?
7 - In my opinion, you have taken an example of a child for the fixed punishment system where there...
Writing FeedbackDreqc - Aug 18, 2013 / Redtape - Aug 20, 2013
|'Multitasking teenagers' - ACT Essay Review
4 - ... fully agree sounds better. As dumi suggested, I too feel you need to introduce the topic before...
Writing FeedbackACTPREP - Aug 4, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|What distinguishs Art from Design?
6 - Contemporary art galleries are the greatest art works of all time.These works are done by the highly recognized and...
Writing FeedbackWangQi - Jul 27, 2013 / thomascarlson - Aug 20, 2013
|Agree/Disagree? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends
Writing Feedbackalexcripton - Aug 18, 2013 / alexcripton - Aug 20, 2013
|TOEFL - Factory near your community/ Advantages & Distadvantages
3 - ... I don't find a connection between your first and the second part of this sentence; On the...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 19, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS essay about the effects of future developments in the field of IT
5 - ... why do you cite developed countries? Even in developing countries such as India or China (which are...
Writing Feedbackmoutaz1978 - Aug 19, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS task 1 - line graph aging population
Writing Feedbackteehee123 - Aug 19, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS: Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more
4 - .... I feel you should have more weight on the reason why they believe so; The people support...
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: Nowadays, many secondary schools teach business and communication skills
Writing Feedbackgustmd09 - Aug 19, 2013 / gustmd09 - Aug 19, 2013
|Child Abuse and my Future; How I learned to become a man!
7 - Red: Really appreciate the effort, especially at what time it is! Blue: I really try to put passion,...
Writing FeedbackIvykid96 - Aug 4, 2013 / Ivykid96 - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS; Competition instills confidence into the child's mind.
5 - I request both Pahan and Dumi to use marking pen when you suggest me writing new sentence instead of...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 19, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be.
5 - ... this is an interesting simple idea which you have presented in a very complicated manner. Also, this...
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|Student behavior has became major problem in world .causes and solution .
6 - What's the purpose of this essay? Are you preparing for IELTS, TOEFL or what? It's better you mention the...
Writing FeedbackMohkam - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS : ESSAY ON DESCRIPTIVE WRITING FOR GRAPHICAL DATA
Writing FeedbackDreqc - Aug 19, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Deal with the cane toad; Integrated Writing Task
3 - ... this is not grammatically incorrect. But I wish you changed the beginning a little bit; Both the...
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: Some people think that sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
NEW - Please grade my essay by your valuable suggestions. Topic: Some people think that sense of competition in children...
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 19, 2013 / — -
|IELTS_cultural traditions will be destroyed by developing tourism. right/wrong?
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 15, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 19, 2013
|Stay in one job or change jobs frequently.Discuss both and give your own opinion.
7 - However, this does not mean you can't do better. Your ideas and essay structure are good though. So hopefully...
Writing FeedbackRealTMac - Aug 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 19, 2013
|GRE:Development of technology should improve our ability to think for ourselves
Writing Feedbackmilanbuffon - Aug 7, 2013 / milanbuffon - Aug 18, 2013
|The sense of competition and the spirit of cooperation, I believe are equally essential to children.
4 - You need to improve on grammar and organization of thoughts... I don't understand the purpose of...
Writing Feedbackking jane - Aug 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL: sometimes it is good to learn with a teacher and sometimes on my own
4 - In your conclusion, you are stating that both sides are equal so you should also present your ideas...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 18, 2013
|A person should be very careful when making a decision - think carefully before any judgement
8 - Think about how each paragraph connects to the previous one. For example, for your third paragraph, you could...
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 13, 2013 / Sybrinth - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL- UNIVERSITY STUDENTS SHOULD ATTEND CLASSES OR NOT?
6 - I think your content is good and well developed, but you'd better use the topic sentences of your paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 13, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS; GAP YEAR is helpful for students to gain experience through work or travel
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 18, 2013 / king jane - Aug 18, 2013
|Creative artists should be given the freedom to express - 'range of limitation'
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 15, 2013 / me4mbd - Aug 18, 2013
|IETLS General Task 1: You have lost your credit card. Letter to manager
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 16, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 18, 2013
|Gender equality in University Admission
6 - Thaks Dumi, sry for late reply.u r gentle,not rude at all,and the strcture really helps me a lot.and i...
Writing Feedbackking jane - Aug 14, 2013 / king jane - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK: an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18.
3 - .... Yes, I too believe this has a major hand in these recent violence happenings. However, you need...
Writing Feedbacknhonphan - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|In order to have a better future, every high school student should take at least one economic course
3 - First, since a basic economics course would be intended for providing students with a general understanding of economics,...
Writing Feedbackshiyayewu - Aug 18, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|Teachers' performance evaluation; 'People seldom agree with eachother'
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 12, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|GRE; Educational inst are responsible for guiding students in their study fields
6 - Thanks a lot for the help dumi... Yes this is not the complete essay.. I will write another essay...
Writing FeedbackAakash13 - Jul 24, 2013 / Aakash13 - Aug 18, 2013
|Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere.
6 - instead of "student's manner" you could use "Etiquette" For instance, mother/father = for instance parents to conclude...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 16, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 18, 2013
|Male & female equal in universities; Different subjects according to the gender
4 - Well... it's better you mention the purpose somewhere in your post. You find some good video clips on google...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 17, 2013 / dumi - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL-- The inernet is dangerous and unreliable
Writing FeedbackHELLOJOY11 - Aug 14, 2013 / tarbiat - Aug 17, 2013
|Toefl: Treat pets like family members or not? 'it is not a good idea'
7 - I think the biggest problem with your essay is that it is too formal. It follows the traditional essay...
Writing Feedbackeden68 - Aug 10, 2013 / Sybrinth - Aug 17, 2013
|GRE ISSUE- A public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards
3 - Read the caption below which is written on how the introduction (GRE Issue) should be constructed. Then compare what...
Writing Feedbackioancelot - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS- NECESSITY OF THIRD LEVEL EDUCATION FOR SUCCESS? AGREE OR DISAGREE?
Writing Feedbackblessy - Aug 15, 2013 / blessy - Aug 17, 2013
|Entrepreuners and Jobs - GRE Issue essay (rate and comment)
3 - External factors have always had an impact on man and history and it shows that many a great or...
Writing Feedbackishas - Aug 11, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|SAME JOB Vs CHANGING JOBS - Discuss both views
Writing Feedbackpooneh - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|"Is Legalizing the Right Choice?" - It's the right decision!
3 - Marijuana has been gaining in popularity for many years and its popularity never ceased to grow until to...
Writing FeedbackWilliamProsch - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS;Research suggests characteristics we are born with are stronger than experience
3 - ... this is a pretty simple idea, but you have presented it to sound very complicated. Be more...
Writing Feedbackgivemebrave - Aug 13, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|'Humans are bound to do mistakes' - I prefer machine made items
5 - Another reason is that machine made clothes isare less time consuming. There is lot of time wastage in...
Writing FeedbackLaw - Aug 12, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
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