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|[IELTS] Task 2 : Competitive Sports are an important part of school curriculum!
Writing FeedbackDiamond Vu - Mar 4, 2013 / AlexChow - Mar 11, 2013
|Advertisement isn't the main reason which makes comsumers buy products unneccessarily
Writing Feedbackjaymeehuynh - Mar 10, 2013 / AlexChow - Mar 11, 2013
|IELTS task2 - job they love or job with high salary
5 - Yes... you need to have minimum 250 words for this task and this essay is slightly below that. However,...
Writing Feedbackyaya411156 - Mar 7, 2013 / dumi - Mar 11, 2013
|TOEFL: eating more vegetables, less junk food and sweet, improve your health
Writing FeedbackOcean Weng - Mar 11, 2013 / Qingye - Mar 11, 2013
|We knew that we wanted to be together
3 - Ever since I was a child, I dreamed of becoming a lawyer.[Maybe whoever's writing this can explain why?]Then I...
Writing Feedbackstephaniearella - Mar 11, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Mar 11, 2013
|IELTS T- 2 Mixing children from different social back grounds & various abilities
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 5, 2013 / mhss - Mar 11, 2013
|Uniform? What's the need in it? Does it help our education? No; Persuasive Essay
2 - For example, netted tights, a pretty pink cardigan and even some Doc Martens, well explain our passion...
Writing Feedbackmelissamagee - Mar 10, 2013 / dumi - Mar 11, 2013
|News Editors decide what to broadcast but they can't use their power in an efficient way
Writing FeedbackAshmara - Mar 2, 2013 / Ashmara - Mar 10, 2013
|My mom passed away; Sad emotional experience
4 - I know what you want to express. But you should more focus on your mother's death and how that...
Writing Feedbackbmaquise - Mar 5, 2013 / KYOAAA - Mar 10, 2013
|Classes and libraries always deserves much more financial support - two key elements for the quality
3 - Your introduction follows the right structure, but you need to pay attention to grammar and vocabulary. Try to...
Writing FeedbackAseaDai - Mar 10, 2013 / dumi - Mar 10, 2013
|Achilles in the Trojan War; Three character traits of Achilles of MOVIE TROY
Writing Feedbackalyssa0123 - Feb 24, 2013 / AseaDai - Mar 10, 2013
|GRE; Reliance on technology destroys the problem solving skills of people?
2 - hour is not toooo long for this... and you will certainly improve over time you essay was pretty...
Writing FeedbackWolff88 - Mar 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 10, 2013
|IELTS ; I believe that capital punishment is important to arrest the level of crimes
Writing Feedbacknazguul17 - Mar 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 10, 2013
|IELTS, Shopping as hobby positive or negative development. Explain with reasons
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 9, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|"Heal the world"; Many meaning songs make us more proud of our country
2 - In my opinion, whether it is traditional or international, music is very important because it brings many...
Writing Feedbacktaihm - Mar 1, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|IELTS; Home schooling Vs Learning at schools - Which is better?
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Mar 7, 2013 / malhamed - Mar 9, 2013
|Cheap Air travel gives ordinary people a chance, but adds to environmental problems
Writing Feedbackwendylo78 - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|To find a better job the T2 qualified people are moving to more wealthy countries - IELTS
6 - This is a well written essay. Never crossed the world limit. Strong points and connecting words and punctuation. Well...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 1, 2013 / banjo - Mar 9, 2013
|TOEFL; I would purchase a house instead of a business if I have enough money!
2 - In this task, they expect you to introduce your topic in the introduction. So, don't answer to the...
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Mar 1, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|"keep your hands to yourself"; SAT ( keep things private?)
2 - .... this comparison is somewhat confusing... first part talks of young children and the second part does not...
Writing Feedbackemily54 - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|toefl - independence from parents, or living with family?
Writing Feedbackshack555 - Mar 5, 2013 / shack555 - Mar 8, 2013
|I suppose that parents are really best teachers!
4 - First, parents are the first teachers in our lives. ... now give examples; They are the people who...
Writing Feedbacktranthucbkv - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Overpopulation of urban areas has lead to numerous problems.
2 - ... I suggest; The main reason is that every individual adds trash to the environment through his...
Writing FeedbackLilu Nguyen - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|A cultural experience that has given me the greatest satisfaction
Writing FeedbackRaghvi - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|TOEFL; We must admit young people in the past were more innocent
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 7, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Civilized behavior is one of the most valuable traditions of ancient Chinese good moral
5 - yes dumi, I am preparing for the Toefl test. THank you so much for suggestions and proofreading. I also...
Writing FeedbackAseaDai - Mar 6, 2013 / AseaDai - Mar 8, 2013
|In university, we can augment our knowledge; why go to university?
4 - Alright... Good to know that.... When you post your TOEFL essays mention that and also include your prompt. That...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Mar 6, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Vaule of Money & Hardwork: work experience
Writing Feedbackstinna11 - Feb 26, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|Teachers' performance should be evaluated by students; 'biased judgment'
7 - Thank you so much for your useful tips. I will revise it and post the 2nd edition, hopefully I...
Writing FeedbackFaroe - Mar 6, 2013 / Faroe - Mar 7, 2013
|IELTS, Should government pay for looking after old aged people
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 7, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|IELTS; Alternate solution for energy crisis - Nuclear energy?
4 - Hi toant. You should split your essay into paragraphs. Follow this style Introduction --A background sentence --A...
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 5, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|Growing traffic and pollution issues; 'formulation of proper road traffic'
8 - Excellent essay mate. I can suggest a minor correction. Also reduce the word count to maximum of...
Writing Feedback123raja - Mar 5, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|public services should be invested by the government; why invest in arts
Writing FeedbackReya - Mar 6, 2013 / christyj - Mar 6, 2013
|Essay about the direction of financing of government for culture (Issue Task GRE)
Writing FeedbackVolkstuintje - Feb 9, 2013 / Volkstuintje - Mar 6, 2013
|IELTS, Doctor nurses and teachers should be paid more than celebrities
7 - I think it is compulsory to give your view in the conclusion. It's ok if you want to summarize...
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 5, 2013 / toantva509 - Mar 5, 2013
|TOEFL; Television & Movies influence our lives both negatively and positively
Writing Feedbacktsungu - Mar 5, 2013 / tsungu - Mar 5, 2013
|The disadvantages of small towns; Social life, educational opportuinities
3 - Well... this looks like a writing for IELTS or TOEFL speaking task. If it is so, then it's ok....
Writing Feedbackhope_HD - Mar 5, 2013 / dumi - Mar 5, 2013
|technology raise awareness; Young people are more aware of issues..
Writing Feedbacktieuthanhlong - Mar 4, 2013 / tieuthanhlong - Mar 5, 2013
|IELTS; Effects of Technology on traditional role of classroom teacher
7 - This is a very serious question. I have asked it another thread also. As far as I understand there...
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 3, 2013 / banjo - Mar 5, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 2: Choose a job that you love,rather than the one with high salary
5 - @Pahan: Thanks for your advice,I was kind of stuck when I wrote the second paragraph. I'll absorb these idea...
Writing Feedbackpj0607tw - Mar 4, 2013 / pj0607tw - Mar 5, 2013
|Raising petrol price must be the last solution for controlling traffic and pollution
2 - Hi, Your range of grammar and vocabulary are really impressive. Make a note on this You will lose marks...
Writing Feedbackphantan252 - Mar 4, 2013 / mhss - Mar 5, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1 Average GDP in globalizers & non-globalizers (GRAPH)
4 - Hi Dumi, Graph did not appear due to a technical problem. Your comment are always inspiring me to write...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 4, 2013 / mhss - Mar 4, 2013
|People have become overly dependent on technology. What's your opinion?
6 - Hi, Try to make a balance in your supporting and opposing views. Though you conclude that "people are overly...
Writing Feedbackhalyphananh - Mar 1, 2013 / mhss - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS A 2 "Are violent games responsible for the increased violence in major cities"
7 - Don't specifically direct personality disorders to teenagers; instead, generalize it and specify a the disorders, such as parent separation...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 3, 2013 / halhante - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2 Brought up in a village or a city
3 - Many people believe that raising children in cities help them meet their educational requirements better while others prefer...
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 3, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|Had classroom teacher become less important with the increase use of internet?
Writing Feedbackkiran_gr8 - Feb 17, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS essay 2 Achieving good health and fitness through physically demanding sports
Writing Feedbackmhss - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|TOEFL; Knowledge without Experience is not fruitful!
4 - "get" is not something you use with knowledge. Try However, acquiring knowledge without any experience does not lead...
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Feb 26, 2013 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2013
|Students having part-time jobs during their study in college has many negatives!
4 - I'm really thankful for your replies. In fact, my teacher asked me to write an introduction and paragraph for...
Writing Feedbackningo - Feb 25, 2013 / ningo - Mar 4, 2013
|(ielts graph) Different modes of transport in one of the European city
2 - After forty years from 1960, in 2000 there were a remarkable difference (differences) between the percentages of commuters in...
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Mar 4, 2013 / orkhan - Mar 4, 2013
|'Children learn at home the basic values of life such as love, respect, honesty'
Writing FeedbackChandni Kumari - Mar 4, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|Group Study promotes sharing ideas and knowledge, correcting faults, learning communication skills
4 - What's the purpose of this writing? IELTS or TOEFL? In any case, I think your introduction is not powerful....
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Mar 2, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS: Germany and Italy spend between 150 to 158 thousand pound sterling in all categories
2 - Hi, Your analysis is wonderful so as writing. Hear are some few points. In Britain expanse on...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Mar 3, 2013 / mhss - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph)Yearly percentage of home schooling in Some country during six years
2 - Hi, 1. The introduction can be altered as, The given bar chart describes the percentage of home schooling...
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Mar 3, 2013 / mhss - Mar 3, 2013
|Old men live with young people or in the clubs? discuss.
3 - Thank for your feedback. My writing is for IELTS, but I actually follow your structure you suggested....
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 1, 2013 / toantva509 - Mar 3, 2013
|(ielts graph) leisure time in a typical week spend by male and female
4 - Hai Dumi, Wu and Desilva.. thanks for your great corrections.. it was really valuable about the grammar corrections....)....
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Feb 27, 2013 / christyj - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph) Death rates and Medical funds for Someland in 1990
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Feb 24, 2013 / christyj - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph)The average hours of unpaid work per week
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 22, 2013 / joythblessy - Mar 3, 2013
|IELTS; SPACE VS MALNUTRITION- Which is more important?
5 - Thanks Dumi....
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 1, 2013 / mhss - Mar 3, 2013
|IELTS: The factors that contribute for happiness
4 - Hai Han.. Your essay is good. But the ideas in it is confusing. i personally believe that the...
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Mar 2, 2013 / joythblessy - Mar 3, 2013
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