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|TOEFL WRITING: Why going to university or college
5 - Homescholling In this set of materials, the reading passage describes several disadvantages of homeschooling. The listening passage challenges it...
Writing Feedbackcandy2571 - Apr 5, 2013 / ahmadpashaei - Apr 8, 2013
|Sports professionals Vs Other important Professionals; Who should earn more?
Writing FeedbackMahdavian - Mar 30, 2013 / Mahdavian - Apr 8, 2013
|What is the major benefit of an international cooperation? Correct my essay
4 - Well, you could start off by creating a thesis. Like instead of going too broad, you use four different...
Writing Feedbackkirin - Apr 17, 2009 / ryoga - Apr 7, 2013
|Skills from work placement essay; Section of a logbook
3 - can someone help me write these sentences more fluently When I first started placement last month, I feel...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|Young adults should learn to become financially responsibleSECU
4 - High speed transactions and extremely easy/efficient mediums of transaction are acceptable and available everywhere nowadays high speed transactions...
Writing FeedbackLarryHoover - Apr 3, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|Persuasive Essay; Aboriginal children adopted into non-Aboriginal home
Writing FeedbackKateybaby - Apr 5, 2013 / Kateybaby - Apr 7, 2013
|'bigger market'; Live in small town or live in a big city? ; IELTS
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 6, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 7, 2013
|IELTS: Why people go to college? Reasons and examples
13 - I think some people go to college or university b/cuz they want to get a job that requires a...
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 1, 2013 / Kateybaby - Apr 7, 2013
|We are rational individuals and our lives should be driven rather by reason than immediate instincts
8 - Hi, Denis, good essay, and I think you already have a pretty good writing skill, you can write 260...
Writing Feedbackdenis_as - Mar 28, 2013 / christyzhongs - Apr 7, 2013
|Saving the endangered plant of Torreya; Intergrated Writing/ TOEFL
4 - Dumi and chessman567, Thank you for your explicit explanation and recommendation for my essay. I'll try to stick...
Writing Feedbackg2080800 - Mar 28, 2013 / g2080800 - Apr 7, 2013
|Discuss the question of death penalty in general- IETLS
7 - I always search new phrasal Verb or Noun on Oxfordictionary site. And i came across the explaination of...
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Apr 3, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 7, 2013
|What are the main threats to public health?
2 - First, it's good to include your prompt in the post. I guess your prompt is what the subject mentions....
Writing Feedbackalisayfoo - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|Event Management work experience essay/ Skills I have developed and learned
2 - On my first day in work placement, I attended the meeting which briefed us about the upcoming event...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|The Traffic Jam In Egypt; Rubbish and Traffic issues
Writing FeedbackMohamed8898 - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|Fathers influence BOYs and Mothers influence GIRLs ; IELTS
3 - ...."affect" is not the most appropriate word here. As per your topic, the ideal word to use here...
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|I love and admire my parents ; Essay on MYSELF
Writing Feedbackenkhsuren - Mar 29, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|TOEFL:(Dis/agree) Most difficult experiences will become valuable lessons
3 - Hi able Person, hi Dumi. I also have some suggestions Firstly, hardships make us understand profoundly many...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Apr 6, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 6, 2013
|IELTS; Why do people work? Reasons/ Examples
Writing Feedbacknorza - Apr 5, 2013 / norza - Apr 6, 2013
|TOEFL: If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire?
3 - Thank you, dumi, for helping me complete my introductory part! I must carelessly delete some part of my first...
Writing Feedbackable_Person - Apr 5, 2013 / able_Person - Apr 6, 2013
|Many cities have become less pleasant place to live/ Problem & my suggestions
2 - ... this sentence sounds meaningless... what do you really mean? Your idea is not conveyed properly ...
Writing FeedbackMadina S - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 6, 2013
|Encouraging students to take part in more unpaid community services is always an excellent idea
5 - Hi hungvud, some minor grammatical corrections from my side. " Needless to say, one cannot do these types...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Apr 1, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 5, 2013
|What should children do during their leisure time?
3 - Dear Xiaokai, thank you for your feedback. I agree that my last paragraph should have been more profound. thanks...
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 4, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 5, 2013
|IELTS 2 "Are drug companies obliged to sponsor poor countries to reduce death rates"
Writing Feedbackmhss - Apr 1, 2013 / mhss - Apr 5, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/Agree) Establish a research center for agriculture in your country or not
2 - Good introduction. Only this line, I find needing a bit of improvement; ... you have repetitions there;...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Apr 4, 2013 / dumi - Apr 4, 2013
|IELTS:Government should pay for the medical care
2 - Hi there After reviewing your essay, i like to advise you that, while you are writing agree or...
Writing Feedbackdoris_bobo - Apr 4, 2013 / davesh82 - Apr 4, 2013
|The impact of overpopulation; Pros & Cons
4 - Thanks for your comments. You're right I made several mistakes. But I typed the words in phone.Some of my...
Writing Feedbackshohruhbek - Mar 23, 2013 / shohruhbek - Apr 4, 2013
|Businesses need to give more opportunities to diverse workers
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Apr 1, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - Apr 4, 2013
|Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support
Writing Feedbacksntchaitu - Apr 3, 2013 / davesh82 - Apr 3, 2013
|Focusing on sports facilities is a very narrow approach and would not achieve the desired results.
4 - mhss Hi Mhss, Thanks for your comment... Regarding to your concern, as the type of question 'Discuss...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Apr 3, 2013 / hungvud - Apr 3, 2013
|We look for the help by borrowing money from their friends to overcome the difficulties
Writing Feedbackningo - Mar 26, 2013 / jlion234 - Apr 3, 2013
|Media has a significant influence on our lives; IELTS
Writing Feedbacklunaa55 - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|"The Importance of Others in Understanding Ourselves"; essay written from SAT prompt
Writing FeedbackDshingler1 - Apr 2, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|IELTS- My opinion on having children engaged in paid work
Writing FeedbackAnnateee - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|Writing IELTS : In some countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places
Writing Feedbackakbarrrr5 - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|TOEFL: We will face a beautiful and peaceful life if we treated each other politely
2 - .... good start :) There is a saying in Arabic, "Good manners mean everything about people. If they...
Writing Feedbackmuhannadmatahen - Apr 3, 2013 / dumi - Apr 3, 2013
|Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to exchange of information
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|IELTS Travel enhances a healthy communication and outweigh any misunderstandings
Writing FeedbackMuhamedUz - Apr 2, 2013 / MuhamedUz - Apr 2, 2013
|IELTS: These days many students are doing a part time job.
Writing Feedbacksachin0312 - Apr 1, 2013 / dumi - Apr 2, 2013
|I prefer to study in group than studying individually because of perfect atmosphere.
Writing Feedbackdungpham0809 - Apr 1, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 2, 2013
|IELTS - Technology and traditions are incompatible
4 - This whole para sounds out of topic. You need to align your writing with the topic which talks...
Writing FeedbackAlexChow - Mar 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 2, 2013
|Who enjoy life more? Young or Old?
Writing Feedbackh_paniz - Apr 1, 2013 / abcdefgh - Apr 1, 2013
|When did the future switch from being a promise to being a threat?
Writing FeedbackAnia0703 - Apr 1, 2013 / abcdefgh - Apr 1, 2013
|TOEFL;Teachers should avoid expressing their political and social views in classrooms
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Mar 28, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - Mar 31, 2013
|"I would go off and watch Law and Order"; William and Mary "Continued Interest Essay"
2 - Hello, Sending this would be a waste of time(Unless your intended major was suppose to be creative writing)....
Writing Feedbackkarmalove - Mar 29, 2013 / admission2012 - Mar 31, 2013
|The 20th century has given us inventions that have changed our lives in many ways.
5 - The inventions of the 20th century, be them in medicine, engineering, commerce, art or any other important field,...
Writing Feedbackrhj - Mar 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 31, 2013
|Aim High; Soar High / Essay for writing competition
8 - uhhm thats great maybe I could talk about Justin Bieber right? his dream came true and so on......
Writing Feedbacknutybieber - Mar 30, 2013 / nutybieber - Mar 31, 2013
|IELTS essay, topic: Students from rural areas should get a subsidized university educ
3 - In this essay, I attempt to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of the proposal in hope of evaluating...
Writing FeedbackRajeshpaul - Mar 31, 2013 / dumi - Mar 31, 2013
|It is important for travellers and business people to understand the cultures
6 - Well.... micro means very small and macro means large. So you can apply these terms to anything or...
Writing Feedbackbinhpham_04 - Mar 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 31, 2013
|Happiness is very important in life; 'culture, age group, surrounding area'
2 - ... the right word is "nowadays" ... However, "happiness" played and would play a very important role in...
Writing Feedbackvipulelts - Mar 30, 2013 / dumi - Mar 30, 2013
|IELTS: Whether convenience foods can take place of traditional foods?
5 - Convenience never take place of Traditional food because traditional food depend on culture, people need....
Writing Feedbackeileenalien - Mar 28, 2013 / vipulelts - Mar 30, 2013
|TOEFL; 'A man 's manner is a mirror that reflects his virtues' - people to be polite to others
4 - although I seem to understand what you want to say here, it still seems a little unclear. Today,...
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 16, 2013 / Pahan - Mar 30, 2013
|TOEFL;Should we let children manage money to make them financially responsible adults
4 - Some oppose that this behavior will have a negative effect on their personalities, especially in their adolescence. ...
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 30, 2013 / Pahan - Mar 30, 2013
|Education about diet is an essential feature of a country's health- care program
5 - Thank you dumi, I have learned alots from your opinions. Your words are academic very much. Again, i'm so...
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Mar 29, 2013 / xucoi - Mar 30, 2013
|Disadventages of the Internet ; 45 minute Essay
8 - Assalam o alakum to every one,hope so you r enjoying good health... well this is long debating topic it...
Writing Feedbackphuonglinh98f - Mar 26, 2013 / shanzyfjwu - Mar 30, 2013
|Creation of Rubbish; The main Causes and Measures
Writing Feedbackkouchengfan - Mar 26, 2013 / dumi - Mar 30, 2013
|For me meeting Lionel Messi is preferable than to come across other athletes
4 - That's correct.... you have to speak about this person more, but you need to relate all that to...
Writing FeedbackFardin - Mar 29, 2013 / dumi - Mar 29, 2013
|Summer Vacation - Persuasive Essay about Education In America
2 - I like the sound arguments you pose. Great "essay" overall! :) Grammar is below. Please like my reply. Hope...
Writing FeedbackToddM - Mar 28, 2013 / chessman567 - Mar 29, 2013
|TOEFL; I think teachers shouldn't share their personal views with students!
3 - "Usually, as people have different thinking and views about political, they will have extreme argument." Usually, as people...
Writing Feedbacktenghover - Mar 25, 2013 / ryoga - Mar 29, 2013
|An "image" to introduce Vietnam to a foreign friend - UWCs Vietnam 2013
Writing FeedbackWildgirl - Mar 29, 2013 / Wildgirl - Mar 29, 2013
|IELTS 2; Will fast foods be more prevalent and eventually replace traditional methods
3 - Excellent introduction - very well presented :) ... hmmmmmm... is "concern" the right word here???? Is...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 29, 2013 / dumi - Mar 29, 2013
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