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|More and more burden over young people with the expectations in the modern world
Writing Feedbacktrangtrang96 - Jun 29, 2018 / trangtrang96 - Jul 2, 2018
|Efficiency of Working in Groups - TOEFL Essay
3 - Thank you very much, Holt. Your advice indicated long-term problems in my writings. I will try to change my...
Writing Feedbackfang0396 - Jun 15, 2018 / fang0396 - Jul 1, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers
3 - That is very kind of you! thank you so much! Your suggestion is extremely helpful to me. Hope that...
Writing FeedbackBuivandat - May 29, 2018 / Buivandat - Jul 1, 2018
|The proportion of parcels delivered between FEDEX and TNT between 1920 and 2000
2 - Erin, you have mentioned the most obvious information to be found in the line chart. However, the information you...
Writing Feedbackerinjuliana - Jun 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 1, 2018
|IELTS 1 Weight group comparison; the proportion of underweight, normal-weight and overweight people
2 - Hi, here are some suggestions for your answer: course --> in my opinion, I think you should use word:...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 30, 2018 / Buivandat - Jul 1, 2018
|(Table) How money was spent in 5 different countries in 2002
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 30, 2018 / hyperephania - Jul 1, 2018
|Free higher education for poor people
3 - Tien, you need to familiarize yourself with the various types of Task 2 essay question formats. These questions require...
Writing Feedbackjunny - Jun 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 1, 2018
|The question is whether or not motorized flight is the greatest invention ever
3 - thanks for your feedback sir, With all my respect, i have to explain that the detail data in my...
Writing Feedbackmelodyyyyy - Jun 30, 2018 / melodyyyyy - Jul 1, 2018
|The historical data about wheat exports over three different parts of the world
3 - Ngo, you have not delivered a complete summary overview. You only have a partial introduction to the topic when...
Writing FeedbackNgoThanhHuyen121 - Jun 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 1, 2018
|IELTS - Equal numbers of boys and girls in every course of an university?
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 27, 2018 / hyperephania - Jun 30, 2018
|The higher number of young adults in a society has more advantages
3 - Felicia, your essay is only 231 words. That is 19 words short of the minimum word count of 250....
Writing Feedbackfeliciatu - Jun 29, 2018 / Holt - Jun 30, 2018
|IELTS Task 2- Government should pay one of the parents of very young children to stay at home
4 - imchang, , in order to make sure that you stay within the advisable word count of 250-300 words in...
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jun 28, 2018 / Holt - Jun 29, 2018
|IELTS- THE VARIETY OF MUSIC IN THE WORLD TODAY
4 - @hyperephania This is very helpful for me to improve my writing. Thank you! @holt I will make sure...
Writing Feedbacknatashaebab - Jun 27, 2018 / natashaebab - Jun 28, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 - The increasing influence of the young generation
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Jun 27, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 28, 2018
|IELTS Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays.
2 - Hi there. The first problem I noticed is that the question clearly asks you to state if the development...
Writing Feedbackismigyul - Jun 27, 2018 / rubychautran - Jun 27, 2018
|Some people think that employers should not strict on their employees dress code. Agree or disagree?
3 - Felicia, your response is more appropriate for an extent essay that uses the basis of "I partially agree" as...
Writing Feedbackfeliciatu - Jun 27, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|WEALTHY NATIONS SHOULD SHARE WITH THIRD WORLD COUNTRIES
4 - Ebab, this is a direct question essay that asks you to pick one opinion in response to the question....
Writing Feedbacknatashaebab - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|(Bar charts) The weight measurements of people living in Charlestown
5 - @Holt Thanks for your comment, I am working hard on improving my writing skills and I will try my...
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 26, 2018 / hyperephania - Jun 27, 2018
|IELTS - Why do people learn a foreign language? Show the reasons.
7 - @Holt Thanks for your comments! I really appreciate your spending time interpreting my writing....
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 26, 2018 / hyperephania - Jun 27, 2018
|IELTS - large number of children play computer games - how it may affect them?
6 - Franciane, this being a 5 paragraph comparative essay needs to be better threshed out than the way that you...
Writing Feedbackfrancigd - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|Studying alone is the best way. Agree or disagree?
5 - Nghi, since the prompt thesis asked you to consider whether you agree OR disagree with the statement provided, you...
Writing Feedbacknghigia219 - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|Spending large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities
5 - Gloria, there is a 250 minimum word count for the Task 2 essay. You wrote only 244 words which...
Writing FeedbackKino18 - Jun 26, 2018 / Holt - Jun 27, 2018
|The view that businesses should have the duty with community beside their aim to make profit
2 - Tran, please keep in mind that the C&C scoring section of the task will be based on a complete...
Writing Feedbackemma_chen - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|To Make Public Education Better in S.Korea
2 - Chaeun, is this supposed to be a research paper or an opinion paper? I am confused as to what...
Writing Feedbackhanuely - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Similarity and Difference between Child and Adult Language Acquisition
2 - Chaeun, the major problems that I see with this research paper stem from the non-academic tone that you have...
Writing Feedbackhanuely - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Relocation to cities in order to look for a job.
3 - @ismigyul you have the right idea regarding the discussion for this essay topic but you have the wrong approach...
Writing Feedbackismigyul - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|Has knowledge about the past value for those of us living today?
3 - imchang, , your response to the essay is right on the mark. However, your extent response is not appropriate....
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jun 25, 2018 / Holt - Jun 26, 2018
|IELTS - The digital and traditional newspapers
6 - Hi, I agree with Holts suggestion on deciding which side you are 'agree' or' disagree' and focus on...
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jun 22, 2018 / Kino18 - Jun 25, 2018
|Several advantages of playing sport games
4 - Your essay has a lot of 'they', 'therefore', and 'children'. I understand why you are using it but why...
Writing Feedbackhoanghadhtm - Jun 19, 2018 / hanuely - Jun 25, 2018
|TEACHING CHILDREN THE LITERATURE THEIR OWN COUNTRY - OTHER COUNTRIES
3 - Nana, it is evident that you have misunderstood the prompt you were provided for discussion. The prompt instruction is...
Writing Feedbacksumidakanae - Jun 24, 2018 / Holt - Jun 25, 2018
|Why do we need music? And what about 'traditional' tracks? Aren't they obsolete today?
Writing Feedbackhanaa1989 - Jun 22, 2018 / hanaa1989 - Jun 25, 2018
|IELTS - Artists have more attention than scientists
5 - Thank you, I should have mentioned that artists are more visible through their work more than scientists. For example,...
Writing FeedbackMTALY - Jun 22, 2018 / MTALY - Jun 24, 2018
|Some countries have a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of elderlies
3 - Hi Holt, Thank you for your feedback. I did review the site that I am referring to improve my...
Writing FeedbackKino18 - Jun 22, 2018 / Kino18 - Jun 24, 2018
|Should government be fully responsible for the underprivileged people?
7 - @Holt I did not notice that I have repeated thesis statement. Thank you very much for the review, as...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 9, 2018 / jalp - Jun 24, 2018
|The advertisers use advanced techniques to show their products better and more attractive. TOEFL
Writing Feedbacksalvia - Jun 22, 2018 / salvia - Jun 23, 2018
|IELTS GT Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.
2 - Franciane, your essay suffers in terms of C&C in some sections. For example, I am unclear about what you...
Writing Feedbackfrancigd - Jun 22, 2018 / Holt - Jun 23, 2018
|What invention in the last 30 years has made the most difference in the lives of people?
3 - @pp50123 You have chosen some very good lines of reasoning for the topic you chose to discuss in this...
Writing Feedbackpp50123 - Jun 22, 2018 / Holt - Jun 23, 2018
|Essay about the charts' summarization - money for children's sports in Britain
2 - Linh, your paper has a factual error located within it. The first error is that you are citing the...
Writing FeedbackLinh Pham - Jun 22, 2018 / Holt - Jun 23, 2018
|Many employers are now offering their employees the option to work from home.
4 - Hello, do you mean i should write 5 paragraph? Paragraph 1: Introduction Paragraph 2: Opinion Paragraph 3: Reason...
Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 21, 2018 / cherny - Jun 22, 2018
|IELTS - useful or harmful chemicals in our food
3 - Franciane, I can say that you have a good understanding of the topic provided for discussion. However, you do...
Writing Feedbackfrancigd - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - Jun 22, 2018
|IELTS; The media should reduce bad news that they write or say
3 - Artin, it is difficult to help you. I am unsure about how to advise you regarding possible improvements to...
Writing FeedbackIMRXI - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - Jun 22, 2018
|The youngster population surpass the number of older people in some countries
3 - Nguyen, this is a direct response question. The response should be coming from a singular point of view. A...
Writing Feedbackkhanhmeoxx - Jun 21, 2018 / Holt - Jun 22, 2018
|Should we allow children to make their own decisions on a common matters (such as food or clothes)
6 - Na na, I got special permission to expand on my explanation to you. This is going to happen only...
Writing FeedbackChiuviu - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 21, 2018
|Some people become famous at young age. Is it good thing or bad thing?
5 - Hoa, you were only asked whether the topic provided was a good or bad thing. To exaggerate the response...
Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Jun 20, 2018 / Holt - Jun 21, 2018
|Some people think that the teenager years are the happiest times of most people's lives.
3 - "In spite of that sometimes teens ..." I think this sentence is contradicting to your reason in second...
Writing FeedbackAmelie - Jun 16, 2018 / cherny - Jun 20, 2018
|Some parent allow their children to get busy with paid work
3 - Yi, the reference in the essay is people, not "parents". Therefore, you should not have used the parental reference...
Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 19, 2018 / Holt - Jun 20, 2018
|(CBEST)- A sharp increases in the minimum wage or no
4 - Queenie, your approach to this essay is too simple for a CBEST essay. The way you wrote it only...
Writing Feedbacknguyenqn - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 20, 2018
|Practical ideas, and the life guidance suggestions
Writing Feedbackjessig - Jun 17, 2018 / cherny - Jun 19, 2018
|In order to improve a country's education system.... criticize teachers?
3 - Gian, when writing the prompt paraphrase, you must never repeat any word or phrase from the original. So, rather...
Writing Feedbackgdoan1104 - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 19, 2018
|The question about publication of crucial scientific information - Ielts writing task 2 cambrige 12
4 - Vu, due to the fact that your essay totally discusses only your point of view rather than the two...
Writing Feedbackthi112233 - Jun 18, 2018 / Holt - Jun 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 Discuss both point of view: should children learn mathematic in school
4 - @vannguyetthanh how to write conclusion in this type of question? i mean the 2 side of views question....
Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 16, 2018 / cherny - Jun 18, 2018
|Participating in voluntary work in which youngsters provide support for others
2 - Hi, I think your essay is very clear and well-structured. I just see this structure rather strange: "this,...
Writing FeedbackChris Farm - Jun 18, 2018 / Chiuviu - Jun 18, 2018
|Should people date at a young age?
2 - Hoa, for starters, your first short paragraph is already a complete essay presentation unto itself. The Task 2 essay...
Writing Feedbacksoulpancake - Jun 16, 2018 / Holt - Jun 17, 2018
|In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents' home.
3 - Chuni, your sentence lose cohesiveness and coherence because you are writing run-on sentences in every paragraph. Overly long sentences...
Writing FeedbackChuni lal - Jun 16, 2018 / Holt - Jun 17, 2018
|What are the similarities and differences between children and adults in acquiring language?
4 - Thanks for your informative comments. This essay was my midterm paper and my foreign teacher gave me a good...
Writing FeedbackDani96 - Jun 16, 2018 / Dani96 - Jun 17, 2018
|Should share information as much as possible? IELS 12 Test 5 Task 2
3 - your conclusion and third paragraphs are contradicting, in the other point of view, you have described that knowledge/information of...
Writing Feedbackcherny - Jun 15, 2018 / Chuni lal - Jun 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2- Influence of television and computer games on children.
4 - Thi, you misunderstood the prompt requirements. You were being asked to discuss both points of view from a general...
Writing FeedbackThanh Nguyen - Jun 15, 2018 / Holt - Jun 16, 2018
|The number of graduates and postgradutes in Britain in terms of the work they did after study
2 - Hien, I found this essay to be highly confusing. lacking in a clear singular trending sentence, and not really...
Writing FeedbackHien N - Jun 15, 2018 / Holt - Jun 16, 2018
|Online education as a replacement to traditional education. Which is more benefitial for a student?
3 - Thank you very much for the review and grateful for the samples and approach you have mentioned. I focused...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jun 12, 2018 / jalp - Jun 14, 2018
|Universities can control the number of seats in the different subjects
3 - Diksha, while the approach that you took to writing this essay is one of the many possible methods of...
Writing Feedbackny14 - Jun 12, 2018 / Holt - Jun 13, 2018
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