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|IELTS WRITING TASK1: ESSAY ABOUT UK BIRTH RATE IN WOMEN AT 6 AGE GROUPS
4 - I think the overall writing is very good, however, you should pay more attention to the plural form, for...
Writing Feedbackvodat1512002 - Jul 26, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TOPIC ABOUT NEWS AND QUALITIES OF JOURNALISTS
3 - Vo, your total approach to the essay is wrong. You turned a direct question essay into an opinion essay,...
Writing Feedbackvothuong - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Children watching TV instead of doing active things
2 - Duong, excellent work in merging your 2 reasons for why kids prefer to watch TV. You also did a...
Writing Feedbackdghhnh - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1: The graph shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
3 - Huynh, if you review the graph notes, you will see that there is a clear indication of the measurements...
Writing Feedbackduchuynhtan - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Experiences of official travel
Writing Feedbackasepmylocal - Aug 2, 2018 / asepmylocal - Aug 6, 2018
|Writing task 1: Illustration of Dubai Gold sales over four quarters of the year 2002
NEW - the gold demand in Dubai The given line graph exhibits the gold consumption of Dubai over four quarters...
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|Ielts, Task2 - the critical environmental problems should be worked upon by all countries united
Writing FeedbackAditya0211 - Aug 1, 2018 / Aditya0211 - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Information sharing. Should or shouldn't?
2 - Anh, the approach to this essay requires you to discuss the public opinion regarding the sharing of information with...
Writing Feedbacktieuanhanh - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|Newcomers in a foreign country - should they obey local rules and customs?
3 - Nghiep. your essay is not responding to the question being asked of you in the essay. For this extent...
Writing FeedbackNavy Captain - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|TOEFL Independent Writing-having fun playing game or doing thing with HW
2 - Lilo, you have written a level 3 essay presentation. You have some difficulty in forming sentences that have an...
Writing Feedbackliloyeh - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|The levels of unemployment among young people between 1993 and 2012 in England
6 - Hi Holt. Thanks a lot for your help. I extremely appreciate your enthusiasm. 😊❤ I'm going to note it...
Writing FeedbackLAKHANH - Aug 2, 2018 / LAKHANH - Aug 4, 2018
|A rise in price of petrol is the most effective method to tackle the growth of traffic congestion
3 - Gnyuen, for an extent essay, you do not need to discuss the opposing point of view. This exam wants...
Writing FeedbackJasonQuan - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|People's motivation to work in the state-run sector in the country of Bananala during 1995-2010.
2 - Tra, it is extremely difficult to review your paper because you did not properly upload the image. It doesn't...
Writing Feedbacktheblacktea - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Printed newspaper vs Online newspaper. What will be more important?
3 - Phuong, your response automatically failed the Task Accuracy considerations. That means your essay is not properly addressing the prompt...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 3, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|Parents need to learn how to be skillful in looking after their children
Writing FeedbackTungfromVN - Aug 3, 2018 / TungfromVN - Aug 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Printed books vs Electronical books - what brings the future?
5 - Thank you Red Moon, problems with time management. After 40 minutes I have no time at all to double...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 3, 2018
|Topic relates with recycling system, could you check up my essay? Is that appropriate?
Writing FeedbackNurislam1404 - Jul 31, 2018 / Nurislam1404 - Aug 2, 2018
|More and more animal species are becoming extince by human activies in land and sea.
4 - @TriceLiu and @Holt Thank you very much for your advice. I look forward to receiving your further advice on...
Writing Feedbackthuhabk - Aug 1, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 2, 2018
|The population of major cities is rising sharply and continually - evaluate this trend
3 - @HoaBui There is a missing element in your research presentation. You have covered the existing problems and the suggested...
Writing FeedbackHoaBui - Aug 1, 2018 / Holt - Aug 2, 2018
|The pie charts below describes how six regions in the world utilized water with unalike purpose
Writing Feedbacklynn1601 - Jul 20, 2018 / lynn1601 - Aug 2, 2018
|A Call to Action Against Pollution Essay. Concerns of the environment.
2 - Ben, your opening paragraph is confusing. What is the actual thesis statement for this essay? What sort of pollution...
Writing FeedbackBenvanhook - Aug 1, 2018 / Holt - Aug 2, 2018
|Task 2 - Reading books vs. Watching films and television
6 - Thanks @PaulthePhoenix! It's great to know that I should focus on a point in the topic in the case...
Writing Feedbackritanguyen167 - Jul 28, 2018 / ritanguyen167 - Aug 1, 2018
|ESSAY- What can human being do to help stop global warming?
Writing FeedbackRobyn_Chau - Aug 1, 2018 / Robyn_Chau - Aug 1, 2018
|Overfishing threatens many species with extinction and steals the livelihood of countless people.
Writing Feedbacksweetlife1234321 - Jul 31, 2018 / thuhabk - Aug 1, 2018
|Should environmental problems be solved on a global scale or better to deal with it nationally?
Writing FeedbackDanielphan - Jul 21, 2018 / Danielphan - Aug 1, 2018
|The maps inform about the present changes in the town center of Islip and planned in the future.
2 - Anh, in this analytical report, you should be delivering the following paragraphs in order to meet the expected report...
Writing Feedbacktaat5991 - Jul 31, 2018 / Holt - Aug 1, 2018
|Alternative resources - an effective solution that should be encouraged to use in the near future.
3 - Nguyen, the TA score for this essay will be a 1. That is because you are not properly delivering...
Writing FeedbackNhat Px - Jul 31, 2018 / Holt - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS writing 2 - will tax on fuel ease the traffic and pollution?
6 - Hi Smally Nice essay in term of structure and vocab. As the other two pointed out you need to...
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Jul 29, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|Smoking is detrimental to the smoker and those who are nearby - smoking ban in public places
2 - Dear Tricie Liu Your essay is neat and thorough with clear structure. However, I would argue that you can...
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Jul 31, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: Discuss both view on whether or not to keep animal in zoo.
4 - Thank you all for your comments. I'm really appreciate your contribution. Hope you all have a good revision...
Writing FeedbackPaulthePhoenix - Jul 31, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Musical albums purchased in the UK according to sex and age
4 - It's fine Hien. Given in this specific topic with 3 graphs combined into one essay, I think the length...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Jul 29, 2018 / PaulthePhoenix - Aug 1, 2018
|Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately?
5 - @Holt Thank you very much for your help. I'll definitely try my best to write better in the following...
Writing FeedbackQuynh Nguyen - Jul 31, 2018 / Quynh Nguyen - Aug 1, 2018
|Essay about Southland's crucial exports in 2000 and predictions for the next years
2 - Please post the chart so that we could help you more :) A few grammatical suggestions: 1. ... 1...
Writing Feedbackthanhphuc2049 - Jul 26, 2018 / TriceLiu - Jul 31, 2018
|The quantity of waste generation in millions of tonnes in six nations during the 1980-2000 period
2 - Moon, your summary just needed the enumeration of the nations included in the table and the comparison type for...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 31, 2018
|Children are educated about the right and wrong differentiation, and often by force
3 - Thank you very much for your really great comments. I will try to practice more and hope that you...
Writing FeedbackHoang Dinh - Jul 30, 2018 / Hoang Dinh - Jul 31, 2018
|Air transfer, some people agree and some disagree, discuss both views and give your opinion
2 - Medhi, one of the many problems that your essay possesses is that you did not compose an accurate prompt...
Writing Feedbackimehdisadeghi - Jul 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 31, 2018
|Separate education for disruptive school students?
Writing Feedbackhhtttl13112002 - Jul 29, 2018 / hhtttl13112002 - Jul 30, 2018
|Global Water Temper: Effects on Hurricanes - research paper
2 - Mark, you have a tendency to confuse the discussion by presenting unrelated natural disasters such as earthquakes and crime...
Writing Feedbackmnobleb - Jul 29, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|The two maps depict the land-use changes on an island. IELTS TASK 1
2 - Mia, you wrote a pretty decent comparison report for the images presented. However, by using the proportional scale reference,...
Writing FeedbackMia33109 - Jul 30, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|Essay about free transportation 24/7
3 - Kudzai, if you want to really help your friend prepare for the IELTS test then the best thing that...
Writing Feedbackmalvykay - Jul 29, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|The bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females doing sport exercises IELTS
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|Students should choose fields based on their preferences or just focus on job related subjects?
3 - Hoang, your essay is not responding to the task at all. You are being asked to discuss whether or...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - it is good to share as much information, while others think the opposite
3 - Siti, the original prompt clues you into the fact that this is supposed to be a 5 paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|IELTS task 2: Reason why children play less with others and the effects on their development
4 - Anh, while your vocabulary is impressive, the fact that your paragraphs are not completely developed in terms of reasoning...
Writing FeedbackAnnLee - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|The pollution of water in rivers, lakes and seas - Writing task 2 IELTS.
4 - Hey, answer for answer here :) Although you complimented on my writing style, i think yours is also pretty...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Jul 29, 2018 / hphuc123 - Jul 30, 2018
|Advantages and disadvantages of having tourists and scientists travel to remote natural environment
4 - @smally01 I'm not sure if you're being somewhat sarcastic, but thanks for the help though :) The data and...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 29, 2018 / hphuc123 - Jul 30, 2018
|IELTS WRITNG TASK 2: The impact of ageing populations on both individuals and society
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 27, 2018 / Red Moon - Jul 28, 2018
|Budget spent on building new fastest train railroad or public transport infrastructure? IELTS 2
2 - HI Indri! i have a few suggestions for your essay. 1. this sentence should be Transportation has already...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Jul 28, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 28, 2018
|The government ought to prioritize railways as the primary sector to receive funds rather than roads
2 - Siti, I have several points for correction in your essay in this instance. To start, you must try to...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|Age problem in choosing a leader for an organization
5 - Huynh, this is a single opinion essay. All IELTS Task 2 essays are one sided unless otherwise specified. In...
Writing Feedbacktrangtrang96 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|The oversea tourist is the reason for causing tension and negative impacts to the country they visit
4 - Bui, you have some major errors in this essay that will automatically garner yo a failing score. The first...
Writing Feedbackphuongbui - Jul 26, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|The government should punish young criminals in the same way as mature people.
NEW - Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults....
Writing Feedbackdieuanh0111 - Jul 27, 2018 / — -
|Students eager to traveling and earning more money instead of studying continuously
Writing Feedbackngoccamtu323 - Jul 27, 2018 / Holt - Jul 27, 2018
|Statistical information about the underground railway systems in six cities
2 - Hoang, if you take 27 minutes to write one analytical report, you are taking too much time. You only...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 26, 2018 / Holt - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS 2: Zoos and Wildlife protection; Is it cruel to keep animals in zoos?
2 - Hi caroline! I have a few suggestions related to your writing. 1. Avoid to use this sentence I...
Writing FeedbackCaroline77 - Jul 27, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS 2: music should not be taught in schools instead other subjects such as computers and science
5 - Avoid use this sentence this essay will discuss about ... because it will make the examiner think that...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 22, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - A mandatory parents training course is necessary
4 - @Tran Minh Hien Sorry, look like I made a mistake. If your subject is "bad solutions" then it is...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Jul 12, 2018 / Red Moon - Jul 26, 2018
|What I do in my free time - thinking about my goal
3 - Jhuang, this is more of a statement than an essay. So you should present short but clear sentences Since...
Writing FeedbackSandy047 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 26, 2018
|The distribution of tourist to different type of tourist attraction particular in Theme Parks
2 - Please include a picture in your thread or your next message for other people to give you feedback...
Writing Feedbackhuyen1109 - Jul 22, 2018 / hphuc123 - Jul 26, 2018
|The society and young people impact on it
3 - Thank you so much for your suggestion, Holt. Those are really helpful! Now I have the direction to work...
Writing Feedbackimprove_writing - Jul 25, 2018 / improve_writing - Jul 26, 2018
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