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|To find a better job the T2 qualified people are moving to more wealthy countries - IELTS
5 - This is a well written essay. Never crossed the world limit. Strong points and connecting words and punctuation. Well...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 1, 2013 / banjo - Mar 9, 2013
|TOEFL; I would purchase a house instead of a business if I have enough money!
2 - In this task, they expect you to introduce your topic in the introduction. So, don't answer to the...
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Mar 1, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|"keep your hands to yourself"; SAT ( keep things private?)
2 - .... this comparison is somewhat confusing... first part talks of young children and the second part does not...
Writing Feedbackemily54 - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|toefl - independence from parents, or living with family?
Writing Feedbackshack555 - Mar 5, 2013 / shack555 - Mar 8, 2013
|I suppose that parents are really best teachers!
4 - First, parents are the first teachers in our lives. ... now give examples; They are the people who...
Writing Feedbacktranthucbkv - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Overpopulation of urban areas has lead to numerous problems.
2 - ... I suggest; The main reason is that every individual adds trash to the environment through his...
Writing FeedbackLilu Nguyen - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|A cultural experience that has given me the greatest satisfaction
Writing FeedbackRaghvi - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|TOEFL; We must admit young people in the past were more innocent
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 7, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Civilized behavior is one of the most valuable traditions of ancient Chinese good moral
5 - yes dumi, I am preparing for the Toefl test. THank you so much for suggestions and proofreading. I also...
Writing FeedbackAseaDai - Mar 6, 2013 / AseaDai - Mar 8, 2013
|In university, we can augment our knowledge; why go to university?
4 - Alright... Good to know that.... When you post your TOEFL essays mention that and also include your prompt. That...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Mar 6, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Vaule of Money & Hardwork: work experience
Writing Feedbackstinna11 - Feb 26, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|Teachers' performance should be evaluated by students; 'biased judgment'
7 - Thank you so much for your useful tips. I will revise it and post the 2nd edition, hopefully I...
Writing FeedbackFaroe - Mar 6, 2013 / Faroe - Mar 7, 2013
|IELTS, Should government pay for looking after old aged people
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 7, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|IELTS; Alternate solution for energy crisis - Nuclear energy?
4 - Hi toant. You should split your essay into paragraphs. Follow this style Introduction --A background sentence --A...
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 5, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|Growing traffic and pollution issues; 'formulation of proper road traffic'
8 - Excellent essay mate. I can suggest a minor correction. Also reduce the word count to maximum of...
Writing Feedback123raja - Mar 5, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|public services should be invested by the government; why invest in arts
Writing FeedbackReya - Mar 6, 2013 / christyj - Mar 6, 2013
|Essay about the direction of financing of government for culture (Issue Task GRE)
Writing FeedbackVolkstuintje - Feb 9, 2013 / Volkstuintje - Mar 6, 2013
|IELTS, Doctor nurses and teachers should be paid more than celebrities
7 - I think it is compulsory to give your view in the conclusion. It's ok if you want to summarize...
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 5, 2013 / toantva509 - Mar 5, 2013
|TOEFL; Television & Movies influence our lives both negatively and positively
Writing Feedbacktsungu - Mar 5, 2013 / tsungu - Mar 5, 2013
|The disadvantages of small towns; Social life, educational opportuinities
3 - Well... this looks like a writing for IELTS or TOEFL speaking task. If it is so, then it's ok....
Writing Feedbackhope_HD - Mar 5, 2013 / dumi - Mar 5, 2013
|technology raise awareness; Young people are more aware of issues..
Writing Feedbacktieuthanhlong - Mar 4, 2013 / tieuthanhlong - Mar 5, 2013
|IELTS; Effects of Technology on traditional role of classroom teacher
7 - This is a very serious question. I have asked it another thread also. As far as I understand there...
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 3, 2013 / banjo - Mar 5, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 2: Choose a job that you love,rather than the one with high salary
4 - @Pahan: Thanks for your advice,I was kind of stuck when I wrote the second paragraph. I'll absorb these idea...
Writing Feedbackpj0607tw - Mar 4, 2013 / pj0607tw - Mar 5, 2013
|Raising petrol price must be the last solution for controlling traffic and pollution
2 - Hi, Your range of grammar and vocabulary are really impressive. Make a note on this You will lose marks...
Writing Feedbackphantan252 - Mar 4, 2013 / mhss - Mar 5, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1 Average GDP in globalizers & non-globalizers (GRAPH)
4 - Hi Dumi, Graph did not appear due to a technical problem. Your comment are always inspiring me to write...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 4, 2013 / mhss - Mar 4, 2013
|People have become overly dependent on technology. What's your opinion?
6 - Hi, Try to make a balance in your supporting and opposing views. Though you conclude that "people are overly...
Writing Feedbackhalyphananh - Mar 1, 2013 / mhss - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS A 2 "Are violent games responsible for the increased violence in major cities"
7 - Don't specifically direct personality disorders to teenagers; instead, generalize it and specify a the disorders, such as parent separation...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 3, 2013 / halhante - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2 Brought up in a village or a city
3 - Many people believe that raising children in cities help them meet their educational requirements better while others prefer...
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 3, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|Had classroom teacher become less important with the increase use of internet?
Writing Feedbackkiran_gr8 - Feb 17, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS essay 2 Achieving good health and fitness through physically demanding sports
Writing Feedbackmhss - Feb 27, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|TOEFL; Knowledge without Experience is not fruitful!
4 - "get" is not something you use with knowledge. Try However, acquiring knowledge without any experience does not lead...
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Feb 26, 2013 / Pahan - Mar 4, 2013
|Students having part-time jobs during their study in college has many negatives!
4 - I'm really thankful for your replies. In fact, my teacher asked me to write an introduction and paragraph for...
Writing Feedbackningo - Feb 25, 2013 / ningo - Mar 4, 2013
|(ielts graph) Different modes of transport in one of the European city
2 - After forty years from 1960, in 2000 there were a remarkable difference (differences) between the percentages of commuters in...
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Mar 4, 2013 / orkhan - Mar 4, 2013
|'Children learn at home the basic values of life such as love, respect, honesty'
Writing FeedbackChandni Kumari - Mar 4, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|Group Study promotes sharing ideas and knowledge, correcting faults, learning communication skills
4 - What's the purpose of this writing? IELTS or TOEFL? In any case, I think your introduction is not powerful....
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Mar 2, 2013 / dumi - Mar 4, 2013
|IELTS: Germany and Italy spend between 150 to 158 thousand pound sterling in all categories
2 - Hi, Your analysis is wonderful so as writing. Hear are some few points. In Britain expanse on...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Mar 3, 2013 / mhss - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph)Yearly percentage of home schooling in Some country during six years
2 - Hi, 1. The introduction can be altered as, The given bar chart describes the percentage of home schooling...
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Mar 3, 2013 / mhss - Mar 3, 2013
|Old men live with young people or in the clubs? discuss.
3 - Thank for your feedback. My writing is for IELTS, but I actually follow your structure you suggested....
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 1, 2013 / toantva509 - Mar 3, 2013
|(ielts graph) leisure time in a typical week spend by male and female
4 - Hai Dumi, Wu and Desilva.. thanks for your great corrections.. it was really valuable about the grammar corrections....)....
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Feb 27, 2013 / christyj - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph) Death rates and Medical funds for Someland in 1990
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Feb 24, 2013 / christyj - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph)The average hours of unpaid work per week
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 22, 2013 / joythblessy - Mar 3, 2013
|IELTS; SPACE VS MALNUTRITION- Which is more important?
5 - Thanks Dumi....
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 1, 2013 / mhss - Mar 3, 2013
|IELTS: The factors that contribute for happiness
4 - Hai Han.. Your essay is good. But the ideas in it is confusing. i personally believe that the...
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Mar 2, 2013 / joythblessy - Mar 3, 2013
|"a memory from my armed past" ; Enormous peaks of Himalayas
5 - please i need to know my mistakes... it seems its a pretty long one... i want corrections for i...
Writing Feedbacktemptprovidence - Feb 26, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 3, 2013
|IELTS essay: an enjoyable job or a well-paid job
2 - If you search you may find here many essays under this topic. So get some points by reading them....
Writing FeedbackQuynh Teddy - Mar 2, 2013 / dumi - Mar 3, 2013
|(IELTS graph)the hours of leisure time/yr spend by people in Someland.
3 - .... here the most important information is the difference (100hrslyr), but it does not come clearly with...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 24, 2013 / dumi - Mar 2, 2013
|IELTS Task2 Types of music albums purchased by people in Britain
Writing FeedbackIZKK - Feb 26, 2013 / IZKK - Mar 2, 2013
|(IELTS essay) Decrease in future international travel is a positive development?
4 - I think use used tourist in may places you can also use traveler, sightseer, visitor, vacationer....
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Mar 1, 2013 / devabe2005 - Mar 2, 2013
|IELTS offenders should be sent to prison, or give alternatives such as community work
2 - Hai... THE way she killed: may be typing mistake... the prompt asked you to discuss about sending...
Writing Feedbacknavarannan - Mar 1, 2013 / christyj - Mar 1, 2013
|TOEFL:Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
Writing FeedbackGrace7 - Feb 24, 2013 / navarannan - Mar 1, 2013
|(IELTS graph)The difference in the percentage of expense for seven items:30yrs period
2 - it will be remarkable rise.. not raise... and such petty mistakes only.. otherwise a good one......
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Mar 1, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 1, 2013
|TRAVELLING ABROAD & REASON FOR TRAVEL (IELTS TASK1)
4 - Hai Orxan.. in 1998 this figure totalled 3.639====| in 1998 this figure reached the peak 3.957.. good...
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Feb 28, 2013 / christyj - Mar 1, 2013
|IELTS- Should children engage in some kind of paid work? Yes, it has lots of pluses
Writing Feedbackmhss - Feb 28, 2013 / mhss - Mar 1, 2013
|Money should be spent on space centers or poor and needy people?Views
2 - What issue has become controversial? this sentence is incomplete. You need to first introduce the topic to the...
Writing Feedbackmehak sharma - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 1, 2013
|IELTS Many people think that international travel will decrease in the future.
6 - I don't think everyone does travel, especially the people in developing countries. You need to be careful in...
Writing Feedbacknavarannan - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 1, 2013
|IELTS qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies
3 - Sure :) but, you should post your IELTS essays under "Writing Feedback" forum (select this forum) Also you...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 1, 2013
|IELTS money is spent on keeping pets, while people throughout world are starving
Writing Feedbackmhss - Feb 27, 2013 / mhss - Feb 28, 2013
|(ielts graph)The trends in consumption of fast foods in U.K
2 - Hi, Tence need to be "past" You can reduce the word count by, The given graphs illustrate the...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 28, 2013 / mhss - Feb 28, 2013
|(ielts graph) The computer and internet use per 1000 inhabitants in the Arab word.
3 - Hi, It is better to mention the type of the graph ..bar,pie,line... It is expected to be sound nice...
Writing Feedbackchristyj - Feb 28, 2013 / mhss - Feb 28, 2013
|Corporal punishment good or bad
6 - There are a lot of grammatical errors and many of the sentences do not start correctly. I think you...
Writing Feedbackmehak sharma - Feb 27, 2013 / jennnyyyy - Feb 28, 2013
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