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|Competition and Co-operation should be there moderately ;IELTS
3 - i guess unless groups have competed to each means ''unless groups have cooperated with each other.'' by the way,...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Dec 20, 2012 / Frenzyzqq - Dec 24, 2012
|Facebook Users - Classification Essay
3 - Well written and very informative. The last sentence doesn't make sense at all. Maybe say 'the friend seekers, the...
Writing FeedbackpirFena - Dec 19, 2012 / blondie51295 - Dec 23, 2012
|Time & how it passes by; should we blame distance or time?
4 - Hey.. Thanks for your comments... I was actually kind of mad when I wrote it, especially the conclusion... Lol.....
Writing FeedbackSRabia - Dec 23, 2012 / SRabia - Dec 23, 2012
|Government should support student's or professional athelets ? Students!
3 - Hai Alphy.. You have some good points.. But it didn't come out nicely..You have lots of spelling mistakes. Careless...
Writing Feedbackalphy - Dec 22, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 23, 2012
|( IELTS essay) Cigarette advertisements should be banned completely?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 23, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 23, 2012
|IELTS topic. animal experiments have more disadvantages over their advantages
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 23, 2012 / alphy - Dec 23, 2012
|[iels task 2]The government spends about 220 million pounds a year supporting museums
2 - .... what do you mean by "unnecessary to be substantially" ? .... that part sounds a bit confusing...
Writing FeedbackLunate - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|(IELTS ESSAY) merits and demerits of MNCs in developing countries..
3 - .... the presence of many multinational companies in the developing countries have a mushrooming effect. The...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|IELTS Topic. the power of advertising and its impact on high sales
2 - ....Very interesting : )... Good introduction ! ....I feel "specialists in advertising" sounds better ...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 23, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|Gender and Language in Advertisements
Writing Feedbackalyney - Dec 22, 2012 / dumi - Dec 23, 2012
|(IELTS essay) Effect of action movies on young children/ Solutions
7 - thanks a lot for correcting my essay. i am always grateful to u guys..dumi, pahan , collin,ozia tessy..etc.....
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Dec 21, 2012 / ash5005 - Dec 23, 2012
|Ä°ELTS TASK1:children's leisure activities; pie chart illustrations
Writing Feedbacksrns - Dec 22, 2012 / dumi - Dec 22, 2012
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Video games - positives and negatives
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Dec 22, 2012 / April April - Dec 22, 2012
|IELTS:best way to make new friends?sports, community activities or travelling?
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 22, 2012 / YanSun - Dec 22, 2012
|Toefl subject : Nowadays, spending budget on space exploration is not reasonable
4 - Space exploration, for the exploration of space, has been possible for human in the 20th century. The United...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Dec 14, 2012 / colin - Dec 22, 2012
|( IELTS essay) Computer will diminish the writing skills
3 - ... This is a strong opening statement. It sounds general but it has relevance to your topic. ...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 22, 2012 / dumi - Dec 22, 2012
|GRE- Argument on letter by Central Plaza store owners; Hidden factors
Writing Feedbackkettyabc - Dec 21, 2012 / kettyabc - Dec 22, 2012
|Advantages of living in a big city; Jobs and Entertainment
Writing FeedbackAslan - Dec 17, 2012 / alphy - Dec 22, 2012
|Children are very sensitive about what they see or hear from their friends
5 - ????? I don't understand this sentence. Please rephrase it. First and foremost, it is proven psychologically...
Writing FeedbackDibaa - Dec 21, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 22, 2012
|GRE ANALYTICAL-relationships can only develop after a CONFLICT
2 - this is a really interesting topic, I have experienced this before and for me things got better after conflict....
Writing Feedbackkethsaxena - Dec 16, 2012 / loth - Dec 22, 2012
|[IELTS Essay] Serveral langages die out every year, Is it not important? AD
7 - Thanks all! Good suggestions. Here is the revised version, any other suggestions? There are many languages disappear...
Writing Feedbackchristyzhongs - Dec 20, 2012 / christyzhongs - Dec 21, 2012
|IELTS - Technology: taking control our lives or positive developements
3 - Ozia In the modern era, the topic of technological influence is controversial. There is clear divergence of opinions on...
Writing FeedbackOzia - Dec 21, 2012 / Frenzyzqq - Dec 21, 2012
|( IELTS essay) ageing population: impacts on society.
5 - Hai Dumi... Thanks for the correction and support.. I mean the less productive workforce may leads to...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 20, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 21, 2012
|IELTS:The best extra-curriculum activity, sports, community activities or traveling?
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 20, 2012 / alphy - Dec 21, 2012
|Toefl:Should children grow up in coutryside or in a city?
Writing Feedbackartin - Dec 19, 2012 / dumi - Dec 21, 2012
|Toefl: A good neighbor should be honest, cooperative and considerate!
Writing Feedbackartin - Dec 18, 2012 / dumi - Dec 21, 2012
|Technology has influenced the way that people interact; Is this positive or negative?
3 - Thanks for your reply colin!What would you give me band about my this essay.I am a student of intermediate...
Writing Feedbackcaiden sanetor - Dec 20, 2012 / caiden sanetor - Dec 21, 2012
|IELTS:Cash and coins will be replaced by credit cards in the future.Positive/Negative
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 20, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 21, 2012
|five paragraph essay about where should company spend his money on art or environment
Writing FeedbackAliAkbarzarei - Dec 15, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 20, 2012
|IELTS:Young people today are more likely to help others than young people in the past
4 - Your introduction contains good points; follows the right structure for this task. However, I feel the above sentence...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 19, 2012 / dumi - Dec 20, 2012
|American Dream is deeply rooted in the America culture and ideology
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|TOEFL : parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life
2 - Nowadays, the society has become exceedingly competitive than ever before, parents have the responsibilitis to teach their children to...
Writing Feedbacktmartin - Dec 19, 2012 / colin - Dec 19, 2012
|may 1990 was my final in hight school
3 - I agree that you should take the essay to an English teacher. You chose a good topic, but you...
Writing Feedbackundidiamaka - Dec 15, 2012 / brazilian01 - Dec 19, 2012
|About New Hobby - Reading can change my life
2 - I suggest that you rewrite your essay. It is quite short and throws in arguments without elaborating on them....
Writing Feedbackturtkbdr - Dec 19, 2012 / brazilian01 - Dec 19, 2012
|IELTS; Guns should be better controlled or even banned
Writing FeedbackFrenzyzqq - Dec 18, 2012 / brazilian01 - Dec 19, 2012
|News of "End of world"
Writing Feedbacksiamak - Dec 19, 2012 / ellstudent - Dec 19, 2012
|although some works may be rewarding, social life has more influence on people
2 - colin The over all essay is good but this correction I feel necessary to replace this opening: With...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 18, 2012 / Millin Gabani - Dec 19, 2012
|Cheating at examinations - Must find solutions for this problem!
Writing FeedbackEdna - Dec 17, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 19, 2012
|This is an informative essay on culture creating conflict - rough draft.
2 - Double in(in in) in the second line I believe the influx of dates and serious facts makes it a...
Writing Feedbackjheisler - Dec 16, 2012 / Genieo - Dec 19, 2012
|Should cyber bullying get more punishment?
2 - In an era where the internet and cell phones are being used... ...schoolyard bully's it but also to...
Writing Feedbackiccalove - Dec 17, 2012 / pirFena - Dec 19, 2012
|Toefl:Television destroys communication among friends and family; Reasons & Examples
6 - heartstation I rated your essay using the free online tool available at gmatawa.com. Your essay scored 4.68 on a...
Writing Feedbackheartstation - Dec 18, 2012 / awaratr - Dec 19, 2012
|It is easier to maintain good health than in the past
4 - Hai, you have presented well. but you don't forget , home made vegetable is good than any where in...
Writing FeedbackShirley0426007 - Dec 18, 2012 / alphy - Dec 19, 2012
|television station has devoted more time to national news: GRE-Argument response
3 - You can start with (( It's an idea)).. if you like it. The conclusion that the station should...
Writing Feedbackarchan_dave - Dec 4, 2012 / shenoooo - Dec 19, 2012
|Consulting others before making an important decision; 'experienced people'
3 - Babysnow: I like your essay...you have written well...your ideas are clear and sound. Dumi..please with my essays too....
Writing FeedbackBabysnow - Dec 18, 2012 / AryanK - Dec 19, 2012
|IELTS : Home or Office? Home is better
2 - Good introduction. You introduce the topic well; express your opinion clearly.... Good Job! : ) .... With...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 18, 2012 / dumi - Dec 19, 2012
|Managing money is one of the most important skill for everyone; IELTS
Writing Feedbackbehruz - Dec 17, 2012 / behruz - Dec 18, 2012
|(IELTS essay) Corporal punishment to discipline children?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 17, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 18, 2012
|mix gender at schools - Good or bad?
2 - Your introduction is written well. It introduces your topic to the reader and clearly states on which side of...
Writing Feedbackeva19950927 - Dec 18, 2012 / dumi - Dec 18, 2012
|Causes for increasing average weight of people; 'unwholesome fast food'
Writing Feedbackeva19950927 - Dec 18, 2012 / dumi - Dec 18, 2012
|IELTS - What is the best age for Children attending school? depends on the country
8 - I guess your essay already deserves a band 6, just beware of some grammatical mistakes and try to use...
Writing Feedbacklielts - Dec 17, 2012 / eva19950927 - Dec 18, 2012
|ROUGH DRAFT,, GLOBAL WARMING MYTH OR REALTHY
2 - "Global warming has turn into a very different term, but is it reality?" This doesn't really make sense and...
Writing Feedbackfahad123 - Dec 15, 2012 / chithon - Dec 17, 2012
|iIelts essay;government should expand the road or car owners
4 - Hai...Alphy... Monu.. Read the essays of others as much as possible.. Take simle questions to practice first, slowly...
Writing Feedbackalphy - Dec 17, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 17, 2012
|Toefl : Haste makes waste? Yes, I think so
6 - Thank you very much dear Dumi for kind,complete and prompt checking.I will work on your given comments in my...
Writing Feedbackartin - Dec 16, 2012 / artin - Dec 17, 2012
|Global Concern over Global warming & Climate change
5 - Hmm yeah it does sound better but I think it's best to stick with just simply saying awareness of...
Writing FeedbackEdna - Dec 15, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 17, 2012
|Balancing the demands of work and family is a tremendous issue;Work & Family Conflict
Writing Feedbackrealestatemom - Dec 15, 2012 / dumi - Dec 17, 2012
|past has value or no value?
5 - thanks so much everybody! I will check and correct it. @Pahan: " brings up our soul". In my opinion,...
Writing Feedbackcuctrinh92 - Dec 15, 2012 / cuctrinh92 - Dec 17, 2012
|Teacher plays an essential and crucial role in the mental growth of a student: TOEFL
Writing FeedbackJesli - Dec 15, 2012 / Broese - Dec 17, 2012
|IETLS - the government should support education and healthcare system
2 - ... it sounds better if you keep this in present tense. It's always better you state your opinion...
Writing Feedbacksean0007 - Dec 17, 2012 / dumi - Dec 17, 2012
|IELTS: We should spend more time listening in the teamwork.
3 - Hi Colin, Your prompt is; The prompt suggests that you should talk about the importance of listening...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 16, 2012 / dumi - Dec 16, 2012
|IELTS writing task 1 - Diagram - real exam question in Oct 2012
6 - Excellent! Actually, your writing skills are quite good and I even envy you for this. Keep fighting!...
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Dec 16, 2012 / flyfreesophie - Dec 16, 2012
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