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|WritingTask1: Boys and Girls cultural and leisure activities
2 - Your essay is great. However, I suggest you to use more linking words such as on the contrary, while,...
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|Good and Bad news and factors which influence to news editors.
2 - Hai Orxen... Your introduction is bigger than your body paragraph. Cut it short and make a clear introduction.....
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|Conventional schools are still the right choice for most students - IELTS essay
3 - Hai Dumi... Thank you so much for your correction and guidence. I really liked your introduction which forwading...
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|IELTS Writing - Should children learn science in school?
Writing FeedbackMJ_LAU - Nov 18, 2012 / salih - Nov 19, 2012
|More houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations.
Writing Feedbackkurianjoseph1 - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|My IELTS Task 1 Reports (UK citizens travel abroad and the countries visited)
Writing Feedbackahmedsamir - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 19, 2012
|Child-centred practice ignores the individuality of children's needs. Essay regarding bullying....
11 - Yes there are many highly qualified people in this website that would help you, but you need to post...
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|Description of a friend - The genius
7 - Salam Alaikon A khay I Have only one suggesten in the intrudoction you shift from I to You and...
Writing FeedbackMatrix student - Nov 18, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 18, 2012
|How to learn vocabulary: 'writing the words, association, learning by reading'
3 - thanks...
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|His life has been unusual; The Spectacular For Me
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|By punishing murders with the death penalty.
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|William Shakespeare and his great works!
2 - --------------- I wish you rephrase this sentence... Seems having a problem with its length --------- he...
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|IELTS_WRITING) What are some important characteristics of a co-worker?
6 - Thank princedynasty and dumi for your proofreading. I want to tell you it is a big help for me....
Writing FeedbackLOMOBOY - Nov 15, 2012 / LOMOBOY - Nov 17, 2012
|Alcohol and exercise are particularly important when it comes to balancing a healthy lifestyle
NEW - Here is my rough draft of my research paper on Obesity. Please let me know how I can improve....
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|"Today is not a winter day yet. Why is it so thrill?" ; Narrative paragraph
2 - ---------- better rephrase this; it doesn't come clearly : ( Either she couldn't open her eyes or...
Writing FeedbackJames89 - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 17, 2012
|'Yoga practice' - What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress?
4 - .... good opening and you have quickly set up the link and achieved alignment with the topic. Good!...
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|'You have been my role model' - Essay on my inspiration
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|'modern appliances' - Technology help improve our lifestyle
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|Health safety and budget - how important to the society - Ielts test
Writing Feedbackmanjit809 - Nov 16, 2012 / dumi - Nov 16, 2012
|'Educate first' - an uneducated person cannot teach an educated person.
2 - Notes -You keep switching between "someone" and "you". Pick one -Openings and closings are too short -Grammar, Punctuation -Honestly,...
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|Research Paper: Steroid Use in Baseball
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|'Learnt how to type with 10 fingers' - A New Expermient essay
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|'Our parents and grandparents may be obstacles to the new world order' - [IELTS]
3 - Hi ah_zafari !!! Please have a look at my recent essay please...:) Really need some final advice......
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|IELTS ; Nowadays travelling abroad is more convenient and cheaper!
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|IELTS WT2: Position of women in Society and their career status
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|[IELTS] - 'The unsolvable problem' - In many countries, people are living longer.
3 - Thanks Scientiana. I learned so much from you:) Thanks for your encouragement, Inspired2012. I will remember that. ...
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|AP Lang Essay: The Twerp in the Photo is Me
Writing FeedbackKnighted - Nov 6, 2012 / Martin80 - Nov 15, 2012
|Money spent on FAST FOOD IN BRITAIN (IELTS TASK1)
NEW - The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows...
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|What historical event in your country has had a major effect on your country?
2 - I think the historical event that had great effect on my country is a Treaty of Gulistan.Because with the...
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|Ielts task 2: today, more school leavers are unable to find jobs.
7 - @Inspired2012: I'm impressed by your fighting-to-death spirit in English writing. You will probably succeed. At least it's what I...
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|'the development of science' - IELTS TASK2- TECHNOLOGY
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|'working for the childrens right' - Children engaged in paid work essay
5 - Hi Ibadullah, From the writing task description, I can see that this is for the IELTS writing exam....
Writing Feedbackibadullah - Nov 6, 2012 / Inspired2012 - Nov 14, 2012
|how important is to maintain old buildings?should history stand in the way of progres
2 - Hi Saaaaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmm ;) Is this for IELTS? If yes, What is the task for this essay? Is it to...
Writing Feedbacksam2012 - Nov 14, 2012 / Inspired2012 - Nov 14, 2012
|'Independent, Artistic, Curious' - 3 WORDS TO DESCRIBE YOURSELF ESSAY
5 - MY SECOND DRAFT. I get rid of the curiosity part because I cannot find anything else to back it...
Writing Feedbacksydvu76 - Nov 9, 2012 / sydvu76 - Nov 14, 2012
|IELTS essay main benefit of international cooperation
7 - Your essay have specific ideas and examples. I'm just wondering how we can think up such interesting ideas within...
Writing Feedbackjenny45 - Nov 13, 2012 / princedynasty - Nov 14, 2012
|Your Music, Your Emotions, You (news article for concert)
NEW - Please read this and tell me ASAP, what the mistakes and everything else that's wrong. I will reply to...
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|Nation should attempt to regulate school curriculum - one for all students
2 - I have refined a little bit here: There are two main problems with the recommendation. The first is the...
Writing FeedbackMBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012 / niesaysi - Nov 14, 2012
|Narrative essay in betrayal; 'John Dustin was the most popular boy in school'
2 - hey... women don't envy good looking guys, but go crazy... only men envy ...lol So, I suggest you...
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|Movement away from written exams to practical skills.Discuss this trend
2 - These days, besides written papers , many universities have been applying other forms of assessment like practical or oral...
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|Changes to the society and the suicide rates essay
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|Narrative ESSAY; UNUSUAL VOYAGE, Footballer, and Britain
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|'Teen Responsibility' - dropingout of high school (agree or disagree)
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|Ielts; teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work
Writing Feedbackskop - Nov 13, 2012 / renlyso - Nov 13, 2012
|Universities should provide graduates with the knowledge or with work experience?
3 - Thanks a lot for valuable corrections. I agree with your suggestion about introduction completely....
Writing Feedbacknazadjou - Nov 12, 2012 / nazadjou - Nov 12, 2012
|'Corrupt-free governments and stable economy' - IELTS preparation
Writing FeedbackTrave - Nov 12, 2012 / renlyso - Nov 12, 2012
|Old buildings and nation's history; History in pages can fade out from our minds
NEW - hi, I am preparing for IELTS can any one correct my essay and tell me how can i improve.thank...
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|'experience of survival life, South Pole' - Ielts, task 2
3 - Thank you very , very much !!! Could you just point me if isn't there any other mistake, pleasee...
Writing Feedbackskop - Nov 12, 2012 / skop - Nov 12, 2012
|Computers overweigh schools so schools will disappear
NEW - Some people think computers and the Internet have more benifit than schools so schools will disappear from our lives....
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|'Competitive life' - Ielts essay
5 - thank you writersmyth what do you mean about "make it more effective by pros and cons" can you give...
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|'all writers started career at their 20s' - Ielts - graph
Writing Feedbackgop - Nov 10, 2012 / dumi - Nov 12, 2012
|IElLTS - reducing pollution and damage to the remote environments
Writing Feedbackjenny45 - Nov 8, 2012 / skop - Nov 12, 2012
|Rich countries should share wealth among poor countries!
3 - Thank you very much Scientiana for your valuable advices and corrections.Ä°n the third paragraph i have considered that if...
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Oct 29, 2012 / orkhan - Nov 12, 2012
|'The source of media and private information about famous people' band according to IELTS
4 - Dear Scientiana, Thanks for providing me your feedback and the impressive correction and suggestion .That for sure help me...
Writing Feedbackdeep9012 - Oct 25, 2012 / deep9012 - Nov 11, 2012
|'Electing a representative in government' - Essay help for midterm
2 - The entire third paragraph seems to drag on. Maybe try spacing out the essay a little better. It appears...
Writing Feedbackalexnsarria - Oct 16, 2012 / mhk1294 - Nov 11, 2012
|'positive and inspirational trend' - IELTS: Creative artists' freedom
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|'Good atmosphere' - What change to hometown more appealing to people your age?
4 - "Although there are many buses in the urban and rural area, but it is pretty hard for people to...
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|IELTS: WHETHER BOTTLED WATER SHOULD BE BANNED
3 - Thank you dumi and scientiana, I greatly appreciate your comments. I will write as many essay as I can...
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|'Harmful effects' - IELTS Essay about the influence of advertisement
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|'better standard of living for people' - ielts - 2 task
4 - I've changed the pointed mistakes by you guys thank you very much, I really need to get down to...
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|'From Qatar and an independent school for girls' - about yourself
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