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|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PIE CHART - AGRICULTURAL PRODUCTION
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham - Nov 17, 2017 / summerlin - Nov 19, 2017
|Should schools allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as to their libraries?
4 - @Holt I thank you so much for your constructive comment. This is an IELTS essay, and due to the...
Writing FeedbackAnn Ngo - Nov 19, 2017 / Ann Ngo - Nov 19, 2017
|Every success is because of hard working, luck has not much in common with success.
5 - @naseernasrati, You did a great job. But still, you need more practice same as all of us:). I am...
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Nov 19, 2017
|TOPIC:- Crime is a problem all over the world, crime prevention will make no difference.
2 - P1 ... unlawful activities, etc." (I hope your intention to use etc. is to imply that the the reader...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 17, 2017
|Young members of a society wants independence from their parents
4 - Overall good read, there are few sentence construction errors for which I would like to give suggestions: 1st...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 14, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017
|A paragraph about "Causes of children obesity"
4 - I recommend using e-prime. It allows your paragraph to have more specific information. Basically, you do not use any...
Writing Feedbackfrankovidaxt - Nov 17, 2017 / sugarcanexox - Nov 17, 2017
|The graph provides an overview of the percentages of people whose age is 65 or more
4 - The graph provides an overview... The graph shows the percentages of people from the United States, Japan, and Sweden...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 16, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017
|IELTS essay Task 2. English as a global language. Advantages overweight the disadvantages? 250words
5 - Dariela, you totally misunderstood the prompt requirement. This is an "emotional" essay response. Note the existence of the word...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 16, 2017 / Holt - Nov 17, 2017
|Different opinions regarding weather children should be taught to be competitive or cooperative
Writing Feedbackeeeeeeehsan - Nov 16, 2017 / eeeeeeehsan - Nov 16, 2017
|We should make factories and other forms of industry pay for all the pollution that they have caused
3 - Dear Chinky, your essay seemed nice to me. However, I can give you some suggestions that you might want...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 16, 2017 / eeeeeeehsan - Nov 16, 2017
|A significant fall in the proportion of production of energy from coal in four European countries
4 - Dear @pier @Holt Thanks for your detail feedback, I ask your consent to record your feedback as my...
Writing FeedbackRidho Kodel - Nov 16, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 16, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing prompt: kids are obsessed with video games and that causes health problems
4 - @yooceii, your essay will not pass the test in an actual setting for a serious number of reasons. The...
Writing Feedbackyooceii - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 16, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2, University education should be free for everyone
5 - @masako I think it would be better if you kept the body of the essay (other than introduction and...
Writing Feedbackmasako - Nov 14, 2017 / raidaakr - Nov 16, 2017
|Idea of going abroad for university study is an exciting prospect for many people
6 - Hello, Thanks for all the valuable feedback, based on the feedback I wrote it again. Please suggest if...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 15, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 16, 2017
|Universities should spend the same budget for libraries and sports activities.
2 - Good discussion and points. There are few grammatical mistake which I would like to highlight: 3rd paragraph: ......
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 16, 2017
|What the graph shows, what is the type of graph shown? What is the data?
2 - Ridho, you only wrote a summary overview in this essay. This is not the complete essay at all. I...
Writing FeedbackRidho Kodel - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Should the community service in the high school be built by a volunteer or compulsory system
4 - Hi i have a suggestion about the whole style of writing an agree/disagree essay follow the (predicted) essay respond...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / naseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017
|Does the progress is always good for the society? Why? Or why not?
2 - @al50332 Please provide the original prompt that you are trying to respond to because I need it to base...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|It is better for children to start learning English language at primary school already
2 - @al50332 Your opening paraphrase is off course, your discussion paragraphs do not follow the required information presentation, and you...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|I have to write about one-day excursion - report
3 - Nastya, for starters, you can correct the title of the essay from Flesh Mob to "Flash Mob" which is...
Writing Feedbackravenrebel - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Sport is reducing international controversies and leads citizens to express their patriotism
2 - Dang, the above example is inaccurate and does not properly represent the prompt requirements in the paraphrased statement that...
Writing Feedbackdangtam - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea.
5 - Chinky, did you provide us with the complete original prompt? The reason I am asking is because the prompt...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS essay Task 2. Advantages Vs Disadvantages of buying things on the Internet.250words
5 - There are few sentence correction which I would like to make: 1st paragraph:- ... aspect of our dairy...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 7, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2. Resembling of most countries today. Positive or negative development?
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 13, 2017 / cuban27 - Nov 14, 2017
|The government spending on sport training for top players as compared to everyone
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar based drinks. what are the reasons and solutions?
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|People should sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing as it can be beneficial
3 - Trang, you cannot write more than 5 sentences per paragraph for this test. You should also do your best...
Writing Feedbacktrang2311 - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|Our lives has been changed by the Internet significantly in recent years. IELTS task 2
4 - Lin, this essay will receive an automatic failing score because you did not discuss the essay in the manner...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing part2, congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities.
8 - Kay, you did not paraphrase the original prompt enough for it to not be considered a plagiarism or cut...
Writing Feedbackmacbz - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing - Why go to university?
6 - Please find below the sentence correction which I would like to make: ... is a bridge for the...
Writing Feedbackyauyau727 - Nov 10, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017
|Essay about dicussing 2 ways (Building subway and building more wider road) to ruduce traffic jams
3 - @Holt Dear Contributor, Thank you for your advice Yes, this essay is for tast 2 in ielts exam. Below...
Writing FeedbackDuong Dung - Nov 13, 2017 / Duong Dung - Nov 13, 2017
|College Mid-Term Essay about facilities funding
4 - Deadline is 3 days away, I'm starting to get worried a little bit... I'd be really glad for some...
Writing FeedbackPlutonus - Nov 11, 2017 / Plutonus - Nov 13, 2017
|The pie charts show the expenditure of a school in the UK in three separate years over 20 years
8 - @Holt Thanks for your bonus advice and examples, I really appreciate it. But I am still a little confused...
Writing Feedbackniennien260 - Nov 12, 2017 / niennien260 - Nov 13, 2017
|"Never, never give up" that translated as we should never stop pursuing our goals through hard work
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 12, 2017 / ChannelBlonde - Nov 12, 2017
|TASK 1: Recycling Rate of Selected Materials: 1982-2010
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it. Actually, I had difficulties when writing this essay. You're right,...
Writing Feedbacknisarahma - Nov 12, 2017 / nisarahma - Nov 12, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 Essay - The birth rate begin to fall and the population is aging
8 - @niennien260 hi, thank you for your suggestion. I assume my writing styles is influenced by my mother language. :D...
Writing Feedbacknisarahma - Nov 3, 2017 / nisarahma - Nov 12, 2017
|Research Paper on Anabolic Steroid Abuse (Need peer review)
2 - Briana, you need to write a stronger introduction to this research paper. Before you launch into the discussion of...
Writing FeedbackBMass20 - Nov 12, 2017 / Holt - Nov 12, 2017
|IELTS Writing 2 The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years.
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 9, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 11, 2017
|Nowadays food is easier to get and there's avariety of it. Has this change improved your life?
4 - @naseernasrati Looking at the question, I'm not sure if you had to answer it or not, if you were...
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 9, 2017 / MrVictor - Nov 11, 2017
|Should America decriminalize drugs for personal use?!
2 - Sandra, your essay is heavy on quoted information, weak on information analysis, comparative discussions, and supporting evidences within paragraph...
Writing Feedbacksandcastle227 - Nov 10, 2017 / Holt - Nov 10, 2017
|The number of people in Australia who visited seven the most popular tourist destinations
2 - LI , you failed to deliver an accurate summary of the essay in the sense that your opening statement...
Writing Feedbackadaxli - Nov 10, 2017 / Holt - Nov 10, 2017
|The role of public health workers in helping community protect from communicable diseases.
Writing FeedbackLinhmira - Nov 7, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 9, 2017
|Should air fares be increased to discourage people from travelling by plane
3 - Andy, kindly remember to provide the complete prompt the next time that you provide an essay for review. We...
Writing Feedbacksantiagovirus - Nov 8, 2017 / Holt - Nov 9, 2017
|Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative
Writing Feedbackvincentwap - Nov 6, 2017 / vincentwap - Nov 8, 2017
|You have decided to resign from your work in order to try a new field.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 7, 2017 / Holt - Nov 7, 2017
|Whether families should pay educational taxes if their kids don't go to government-financed schools
2 - ... that people aregrowing up ... consider their children must be educated in ... Some people believe that the...
Writing Feedbackanitaho577 - Nov 7, 2017 / cuban27 - Nov 7, 2017
|Essay about the influence of the internet
7 - . By the strength of the consequences, Nowadays, already half of the population has access to the internet on...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Oct 24, 2017 / acsstudent - Nov 7, 2017
|Essay: responsibility of parents for their children behaviour
5 - I cannot really make a recommendation because I am not the one who will be taking the test. I...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 5, 2017 / Holt - Nov 7, 2017
|A letter of application to the organisers. (IELTS TASK ONE)
3 - CJ, you only accomplished the most minimal of word requirements to suit this test. When you limit the words...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 6, 2017 / Holt - Nov 6, 2017
|Computer games are time consuming and they do not provide educational value
3 - I think you already have a quite good sense of grammar and vocabulary. What you need now is to...
Writing Feedbackfafut123 - Nov 5, 2017 / rubychautran - Nov 6, 2017
|Studying English will give many advantages to myself and to the future of Timor-Leste.
5 - @Holt Thank You so much, it's my mistake. I've made this essay to applying free IELTS, this essay talking...
Writing FeedbackCrissia - Nov 5, 2017 / Crissia - Nov 6, 2017
|Population worldwide until 2100 and its distribution between developed and developing countries
2 - Khang, you are looking at a possible high score of 4 with the type of presentation that you have...
Writing Feedbacktmkhang1999 - Nov 5, 2017 / Holt - Nov 5, 2017
|Vegetables are the best thing you can eat.
Writing FeedbackMyNguyuen - Nov 4, 2017 / zamzamii - Nov 5, 2017
|"Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other" - Chevening essay
2 - Yomna, your presentation is too greenhorn. The one problem with presenting an academic leadership and influencing presentation in this...
Writing FeedbackYomnaelkhiamy - Nov 4, 2017 / Holt - Nov 4, 2017
|Is government responsible for child obesity? The positive intervention would be beneficial.
9 - Hi @holt Somehow, all of your comments in this thread has given improvement in my IELTS writing. Thank...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 3, 2017 / Yeskiputri11 - Nov 4, 2017
|A letter of reference to my English teacher from the previous school (IELTS TASK ONE)
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 4, 2017 / Holt - Nov 4, 2017
|Rate and comment on my argumentative essay for GRE- Late night television news viewership decline
4 - Hi, this essay is already good but there are some tiny english mistakes in term of grammar and typos....
Writing Feedbackxin - Nov 1, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|The topic describe positive side when living in city - opportunities, career, raising children, etc.
4 - I'd have to assume that this is for an academic essay because you didn't specify it. Or is it...
Writing Feedbackse7enkieu - Nov 3, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|Essay: Do the advantages of shopping online outweigh the disadvantages?
4 - @WriteWell @Holt Thanks for your assessment about my essay, it's immensely valuable. Hope to receive more help from you...
Writing FeedbackLonggbauu - Nov 3, 2017 / Longgbauu - Nov 4, 2017
|Essay: television influence on people's behaviour. The effect is negligible.
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 2, 2017 / TJLuschen - Nov 3, 2017
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