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|Research Report three hostels in Sydney
2 - You better start with introducing the city and its connection to hostels; Sydney, the capital of Australia is...
Writing Feedbackmrbin - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 12, 2013
|Living with Family vs. Living in dormitory While Studying in the University
3 - Thanks. It is not for TOEFL. it was an assignment.Well, i never wrote a good paragraph.And when i joined...
Writing Feedbackpositive thinkr - Jul 11, 2013 / positive thinkr - Jul 12, 2013
|Benefit of supermarket and how it affects on small buisness
4 - In conclusion., supermarkets and small shops collectively have a great role in our daily life, government should have such...
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jul 11, 2013 / rozha - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL/ Do you agree that professional athletes deserve high salaries ?
8 - .... "show up" or "appear". As April April suggested, "appear" sounds better. get involved with many...
Writing Feedbackelan - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL- How people's behavior is influenced by TV and movies?
4 - There are many mistakes in your essay . I suggest you shoud make your sentences short , easy to...
Writing FeedbackErgenekon - Jul 11, 2013 / yucky - Jul 12, 2013
|IELTS 'do everything by rules'; children learn to be good members of society
6 - I think you should learn some basic grammars ~ it seems that you wanna write some long sentences, but...
Writing Feedbackzzwestmanzz - Jul 10, 2013 / guy2010 - Jul 12, 2013
|TOEFL Essay-Professional athletes do not deserve the high salaries Y or N?
5 - WOW I'm practicing this article too. I like your article! It's skillful! Strong structure and explicit explanation!(far better...
Writing Feedbackguy2010 - Jul 11, 2013 / elan - Jul 12, 2013
|Toefl: more important to work at a job that you enjoy than to earn a lot of money
8 - Well you can even do your own assessment with the insights provided by their TOEFL official website; ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/ibt_writing_sample_responses.pdf...
Writing Feedbackeden68 - Jul 8, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|<TOEFL> Is it good to have students employed?
Writing Feedbackicarusfly - Jul 11, 2013 / rozha - Jul 11, 2013
|TOEFL- "A development of more intensive ways to exploit the natural environment"
7 - Well.... I don't think that you really need to worry about complex vocab structure.... this is a pretty...
Writing Feedbackwestside9 - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|ielts task 2: do we should exclude males and females from certain jobs?
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS Task 2: Opinion on wearing uniforms in schools
5 - Thank you for correcting my essay! I appreciate all your suggestions! Yes, you are correct. Some kinds...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jul 8, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 11, 2013
|TOEFL; Nowadays, dependence on neighbors is much less compared to previous eras
Writing Feedbackaxn1118 - Jul 11, 2013 / dumi - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:things learned by children from watching tv and movies
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 10, 2013 / xueweinian - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS: solve growing traffic and pollution problems - people's awareness
Writing Feedbacknancy07 - Jul 10, 2013 / nancy07 - Jul 11, 2013
|IELTS；The power of advertising or consumers` demand.
4 - ... you have too many spelling mistakes throughout your essay. Be careful about it! I feel you should...
Writing Feedbackxueweinian - Jul 9, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 10, 2013
|'cultural homogenization'; Effects of increasing tourism in different countries
6 - ... well... it is the technological advancement and not the globalization effects that had caused a decline...
Writing Feedbacktroublehappy - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 10, 2013
|Studying alone is a best fit for my life. It allows me to freely choose the convenient time to study
Writing Feedbackholylua - Jul 9, 2013 / holylua - Jul 10, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: I think it is worth being a celebrity in spite of the problems
3 - Introduction is confusing and unbalanced.You were mentioning some examples of problems being a celebrity and nothing on its benefits....
Writing Feedbackyirunli - Jul 9, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 10, 2013
|There are many types of friendships; Friendships Classification Paragraph
Writing FeedbackLizzaanna - Jul 9, 2013 / Lizzaanna - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY TASK 2: Some jobs are better done by men and others by women.
3 - ... some careers better suite a particular gender. Although there are valid reasons to justify this...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 9, 2013 / dumi - Jul 9, 2013
|Adult Education; Bar chart and pie chart illustrations
Writing Feedbackyucky - Jul 8, 2013 / yucky - Jul 9, 2013
|GRE - ISSUE ESSAY; Do we need ceremonies & rituals to define ourselves?
Writing Feedbackptejas40 - Jul 9, 2013 / ptejas40 - Jul 9, 2013
|Parents have numerous influences to teach us what to do
6 - ...you can present this idea more strongly; Secondly, the parents do not leave us when we are in...
Writing Feedbackaxn1118 - Jul 7, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS task 1; male and female fitness membership @ fitness center
Writing Feedbackm_q8 - Jul 4, 2013 / mangdoli - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 : Adult Education (Pie graphs)
4 - In introductory paragraph, you should paraphrase the sentences. For example: show=illustrate=indicate=point out... If you copy the instruction of the...
Writing Feedbackkokett - Jul 4, 2013 / mangdoli - Jul 9, 2013
|TOEFL; High paid insecure jobs VS low paid secure jobs - Which option is better?
Writing Feedbacksherry manson - Jul 3, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS; Do you agree to making unpaid community service compulsory in schools?
Writing FeedbackHayleyyy - Jul 3, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS ; Job satisfaction and individual well being / What factors& How realistic ?
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jul 7, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 9, 2013
|IELTS: agricultural land becomes less productive; Worldwide land degradation
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jul 8, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Should driving be taught at school?
10 - hi pahan and dumi...thanks for the feedback.. it is my pleasure..yes I think that would be a...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 1, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 8, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Fixed or variable punishment for crimes
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 8, 2013
|Nations should pass laws in order to preserve nature; GRE/ Analyze an issue
6 - ... actually, this is better termed as "echo tourism" which is based on supporting conservation efforts of tourism....
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|education is important in the development of the country. Discuss.
4 - I think others have provided you good suggestions for your essay content. This is my suggestion for your essay...
Writing Feedbackminnie then - Jul 8, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|Understanding Who we are! ; SAT Essay
Writing Feedbackkazure14 - Jul 6, 2013 / wzncx - Jul 8, 2013
|Health budget should allocate more funds for medical technology or health education?
4 - .... yes you are right. let's say the same idea a bit differently; First, there are many adverse...
Writing Feedbacktu_phinh - Jul 8, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 8, 2013
|Why tracing family history become popular and it is a negative trend
6 - Ok....then I would suggest you to read the following essays. They follow this structure very well. Also, by reading...
Writing Feedbackymin8957 - Jul 7, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|Can a child be taught talents or he is born with talents?
5 - I think your essay is too short. You should give more details, examples, rather than just use reasoning to...
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jul 1, 2013 / caozeyuan - Jul 8, 2013
|Are Technology and Tradition incompatible? ; TOEFL
Writing Feedbackcaozeyuan - Jul 7, 2013 / caozeyuan - Jul 8, 2013
|Should elder people live in nursing houses or stay with their family members?
Writing Feedbackcaozeyuan - Jul 7, 2013 / caozeyuan - Jul 8, 2013
|IELTS task 1: Family living in poverty in Australia in 1999
2 - ...You need to improve clarity; The table illustrates the percentage of people from different household types that live...
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 8, 2013 / dumi - Jul 8, 2013
|TOEFL; Universities should require students to study subjects in different fields?
Writing Feedbackpowerof1005 - Jul 7, 2013 / powerof1005 - Jul 8, 2013
|IELTS: Older people should live with their families or at a nursing home
7 - In my opinion, people should not be abandoned by their families in their old age during which...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jul 4, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|Underground railway systems in the field of opening date, total length of route and annual ridership
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jun 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 7, 2013
|Who Am I?The most basic question, but I'm never able to answer!
Writing Feedbacktish1396 - Jun 9, 2013 / tish1396 - Jul 7, 2013
|GRE Argument Essay; Letter to the editor from Central Plaza store owner
Writing Feedbackmorning - Jul 7, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|More reliance on technology for problem solving affects human's ability to think
4 - You need to introduce the issue to the reader first. Don't answer the prompt directly and write your response...
Writing Feedbackmaseeha - Jul 7, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 7, 2013
|Watching too much TV and violent images - essay
8 - .... watching what? .... Also, this has some grammar issues too. Watching TV too often can have many...
Writing Feedbackchauuyenbinh - Jun 27, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 7, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1_ Proportion of teachers as per gender in 6 different types
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 6, 2013 / mangdoli - Jul 7, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; Internet Usage in Taiwan during 3 years from 1998
6 - First, make sure that you upload the chart using the feature "Attach file(s)". It's always better for you to...
Writing Feedbackhaje9alshoo8 - Jun 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|ielts task1 Japanese travel abroad
Writing Feedbackwuzhi - Jul 6, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|Percentage of clear differences between the national consumer expenditure of five various countries
3 - ... you are supposed to write a report. So, it's important to stay away from verbose. Simply say;...
Writing Feedbackjenny90 - Jun 26, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY: IMPROVEMENTS OF THE TOURISM INDUSTRY
5 - I believe he means that your essay doesn't stand out among the applicants in the application pool. Going in...
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Jul 6, 2013 / luky0ne - Jul 6, 2013
|IELTS; Today young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs!
11 - Much of the corrections has been made. However, I will say this I would leave out "and their...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jul 3, 2013 / kawsneffect - Jul 6, 2013
|'staying in touch' : Phones and E-mail have made communication less personal
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jul 5, 2013 / dumi - Jul 5, 2013
|Do you agree or disagree ? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country.
10 - Compared to other issues, it means almost nothing. Don't sweat it unless you're doing it for a sneaky...
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jun 29, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 5, 2013
|Some people enjoy reading novels and short stories. Others like watching movies. ?
6 - ... Well... I find there are more than one sentences here; I spend my leisure time reading books....
Writing FeedbackNaveen 54 - Jun 28, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 5, 2013
|IELTS; Every country should produce more materials and goods? Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackbein - Jul 4, 2013 / bein - Jul 5, 2013
|IELTS Task 2: fixed punishment vs adjustable punishment. discuss
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jul 4, 2013 / dumi - Jul 5, 2013
|IELTS: people believe "unpaid community service should be compulsory part of shool"
2 - ... facilities does not seem to be the best word to use there; Such activities that include charity...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 4, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 4, 2013
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