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|IELTS-News is a source of knowledge about the world. How much we trust the journalist
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 8, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 8, 2013
|(IELTS essay) violent t.v reports to be banned?
4 - real depth of a these calamities or violence. --> i think real information is possible but real depth is...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 8, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 8, 2013
|IELTS - One year break after highschool to university studies
Writing Feedbackphatz025 - Feb 8, 2013 / dumi - Feb 8, 2013
|Mao Zedong might be a hero in China's history, but his actions devastated the country
3 - I enjoyed reading it. Its a very systematic and well structured essay. Though I felt you described the...
Writing Feedbackclippanation - Feb 5, 2013 / strider - Feb 8, 2013
|IELTS-Design of newly constructed buildings in big cities controlled by government
4 - ... pay attention to the corrections I made... It's good to keep them in plural form. However, I...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 6, 2013 / dumi - Feb 8, 2013
|About the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Feb 5, 2013 / orkhan - Feb 8, 2013
|Where Children Should Grow Up; ENGLISH WRITING
3 - ... Break this line for two sentences as they are two ideas; Today, many families move to the...
Writing Feedbackyu0219 - Feb 7, 2013 / dumi - Feb 7, 2013
|IELTS - Worldwide rubbish problem; Causes and Measures
3 - Thank you so much for your corrections! I had a very difficult time constructing that essay. I am just...
Writing Feedbackphatz025 - Feb 7, 2013 / phatz025 - Feb 7, 2013
|Promoting healthy psychological growth of students should be set up in high schooL?
3 - .... ever heightening .... this is too long :( Try and write shorter and interesting sentences....
Writing Feedbackgsisland - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 7, 2013
|My friend Daniel is a fan of Manchester United
3 - Your tenses need work, the essay is filled with intricate details, yet the flow seems abrupt to me. I...
Writing Feedbackenglishessay - Feb 6, 2013 / triox99 - Feb 7, 2013
|IELTS-Television news shows many scenes disasters and violence.Effects on individuals
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 7, 2013 / dumi - Feb 7, 2013
|The role of fathers in children's upbringing.
3 - Almost in modern families both of parents are working and both of them are responsible for child -rearing. -->...
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Feb 7, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 7, 2013
|ESSAY: CHILHOOD'S THE THE HAPPIEST TIME OF ONE'S LIFE
Writing FeedbackLiza91 - Feb 1, 2013 / dumi - Feb 7, 2013
|television shows many foreign - made programmes harmful or not ????
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Feb 6, 2013 / dumi - Feb 7, 2013
|TOEFL: IMPACT OF INTERNET on LIFE
4 - Good start. But you need to bring out the idea clearly and powerfully. The Internet can be regarded...
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Feb 6, 2013 / Pahan - Feb 7, 2013
|THESIS ; INCREASE IN GUN VIOLENCE
3 - when a mass shooting occurs but don't want the government to make laws or regulations that may prevent those...
Writing Feedbackclbrock14 - Feb 5, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 6, 2013
|IELTS - there is a great gap in between the living standards of the people of cities and villages
4 - focus on only on agriculture. --> focus only on agriculture. complicated than it is there in countryside. -->...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 5, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 6, 2013
|Some people prefer change while some dont -IELTS
Writing Feedbackjaijagadeesh - Feb 1, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|IELTS Writing- Jury should not be given the past criminal records of a defendant
3 - These sentences does not refer to anything of your topic. In the introduction you should introduce topic to...
Writing FeedbackBinny - Feb 1, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|Contributions to an enjoyable vacation- Good Food/ Good Location/ Good Friends?
Writing Feedbackholycoww - Feb 6, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) Effects of reading newspaper and watching television news
6 - In the modern world, media such as newspapers and television have become an integral part of peoples' lives....
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|Microwave oven and fastfood store in our lives
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Feb 5, 2013 / Mai Chu - Feb 5, 2013
|The mass media has a great influence in shaping people's ideas
6 - I meant "moderate stance" which means you can both agree and disagree to certain extent. That's why I...
Writing Feedbackfredrick1003 - Feb 4, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|TOEFL essay:The world is changing fast, people are less happy
3 - Dumi, thank you very much for your revision. You give me so much encouragement to continue learning writing....
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Feb 5, 2013 / hywb2 - Feb 5, 2013
|How can we evaluate the culture of reading in our society?
3 - Thank you so much Dumi. I really appreciate your help. I am going to consider all of the points...
Writing Feedbacksamviolet - Feb 5, 2013 / samviolet - Feb 5, 2013
|Experienced learning or classroom learning?
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Feb 5, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|THROW-AWAY CULTURE IS GOOD OR BAD? - IELTS
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 4, 2013 / somysojan - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS-visiting foreign countries, visitors take advantage of learning the culture
5 - .... make two sentences; People visit other countries for various reasons such as tourism, business, studies etc. Whatever...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|Today more people are travleing then ever before; IELTS
Writing Feedbacknadrian - Feb 5, 2013 / nadrian - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS;"Charities in developed countries should donate to underdeveloped countries"
5 - Therefore,it is urgent that we should help poeple living in poverty as we could help more people ,even save...
Writing Feedbackbeyondmtk - Feb 5, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS "computers and the Internet are important resources "
5 - Generally this task requires you to support your views and opinion with specific examples. In this case you...
Writing Feedbackbeyondmtk - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS-Nowadays a growing throw-away culture causes people to throw away their goods
2 - Due to rapid technological advancement endless number of new technological products, decvises adn equipment are introduced to the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 4, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|Write a short story about a meal at a Thai restaurant
Writing Feedbackdaivinhtran1993 - Jan 30, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|TOEFL; Studying history and literature is more important!
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - Feb 1, 2013 / JangGemini - Feb 4, 2013
|The characteristics we are born with or the experiences we have in our life.
Writing FeedbackSinny073 - Feb 3, 2013 / Sinny073 - Feb 4, 2013
|Analysis of Native American Archetypes
2 - ... you have not completed this sentence? The White Buffalo Woman represents an archetype of the...
Writing Feedbacksammieee - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effect of mobile phones on young children.
12 - Hai Somy... Yes, you are right...)Ř› But you mentioned your opinion in the introduction itself.. Sorry for...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS essay) Dangerous sports banned or not; Children put themselves in trouble
5 - Hai dumi... Thanks for your correction and suggestions.. So many people concerned about the time for my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2. TALENTED PEOPLE
3 - ... this sentence is poorly constructed.... It doesn't deliver a relevant idea too....In any society there should be...
Writing FeedbackJanett - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS-Many children these days have their own mobile phones. advantages/disadvantages
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) Effects of short time work
Writing Feedbackrombos - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) MODES OF LEARNING OTHER CULTURE AND TRADITION..
2 - ...good start :) learning about others' lifestyles help you learn more about those people like their...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|one can understand the society by studying major cities; rural and heritage area
NEW - Issue: "To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Studying Major...
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|IELTS Writing Task 2: 'ageing population' topic
2 - Hi, I think you write pretty good. So I thought giving my suggestions for different presentations of your ideas...
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|'neat and tidy'; Students who can keep their rooms organized are sure to succeed
4 - I take your point and thank you. And I doubt that there may be some other faults,especially the logy...
Writing Feedbacktofel201304 - Jan 28, 2013 / tofel201304 - Feb 2, 2013
|IELTS- Effects of replacing sports and games with more acdemic sessions in schools
6 - Hai bosco... Over all good essay.. Nice to read.. Nowadays many schools.... Keep on reading and...
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS-Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time.
2 - Hai dev.. Over all good attempt....). You have so many good points also...). Be careful about the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS- people have different way of escaping the stress and difficulties
5 - you used many places stress instead use another vocabulary like anxiety, pressure, strain, tension, trauma, distress...
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Feb 1, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013
|Some prefer living in places with same weather. Which do you prefer?
4 - ... your previous sentence says you generally have a colder weather throughout the year. This highlighted part...
Writing Feedbackmayraschmidt - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS ; What factors contribute to job satisfication?
Writing Feedbackcaoxue - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Lazy talk - Television is dangerous because it has destroyed the family living and communication.
2 - .... I suggest you to present this differently; Some people argue that Television distances the family members and...
Writing Feedbackabcd1234 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Should educators be paid according to their students performance?
2 - this sounds a bit awkward .... this is my suggestion; to the academic performance of students ...
Writing FeedbackMabossani - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Memoir of the Chevalier ; Writing Section of the Toefl, Question 1
7 - Hello. I am a former ETS TOEFL exam rater with 4 years of experience. My comments are intended to...
Writing Feedbackharetche - Jan 23, 2013 / toeflrater - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS - Eat at food stands or restaurants? Eat at home
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Jan 31, 2013 / rombos - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS-Some people think that museums entertain people, while others it is to educate
4 - First, it seems your essay is two short. Try to maintain at least the minimum word count required for...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS-Children prefer electronic games to other games and toys.Why is it happening
2 - It should be either "rapid technological advancement" or "technological revolution" "Software companies deliver " is the correct form....
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|(practicing writing) Should first world countries offer economic help to third world?
3 - Thank you very much for your points there! =) I'm not practicing for a certificate (not yet though),...
Writing Feedbackkiniggit - Jan 31, 2013 / kiniggit - Jan 31, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effects of electronic games on children
4 - ... Your sentence is too complex.. Let's simplify it. Today, it is not an unfamiliar sight to see...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2013
|schools replacing sports and exercise classes with more academic
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 31, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Both man and women should share domestic works..?
6 - Hai dumi, syed, dev and cuong... Thanks to you all, for your valuable time and concern for correcting...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 22, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
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