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|[IELTS Essay] Government - Investments in Arts is not a waste of money
2 - This is too close to the prompt introduction. You may take the idea, but present it differently; Governments...
Writing Feedbackmt22 - Jan 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS : museum is for education or for entertainment? BOTH
5 - Hai somy.. Overall good attempt.. Your opinion about why museums to be enjoyable is weak in terms of...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 28, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS-Countries develop economies improve living standards.degradation social values
6 - .... In my view, unemployment cannot be eradicated, but can be controlled or reduced. Even in highly develped...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN VIEWED AS A TWO EDGED SWORD, preparing for IELTS in Feb...
3 - Hai... :The basic example is THE invention.... :now distance===> now LONG distances... :this luxury has brings...
Writing FeedbackSKhan - Jan 27, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS- Advertisement encourages consumers to buy in bulk, instead of high quality
3 - ... I feel the postive form sounds better; Advertisements play a major role Sometimes they motivate...
Writing FeedbackSKhan - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) necessity of child rearing programs for parents?
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS: all parents should take children training courses
5 - i think it would be better if you agreed to the question to list out your ideas perfectlty.. but...
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Jan 28, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 28, 2013
|'my first day on a new job' - narrative essay
2 - Yes, I like where you're getting but I suggest you add an anecdote in this essay. I really like...
Writing Feedbackevadfa - Jan 28, 2013 / janajackson - Jan 28, 2013
|GRE essay/Topic: job satisfication is an important element of individual wellbeing.
Writing Feedbackmultivariate - Jan 28, 2013 / evadfa - Jan 28, 2013
|Advertisement encourages to buy in bulk, whereas it should promote high quality of the products sold
5 - but it is not showing importance to the quality of the product ă‹other than reflect the quality of products...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 26, 2013 / caoxue - Jan 28, 2013
|I pinch myself but easily notice this isn't a dream; Creative Writing
3 - Bent!...
Writing Feedbackh4rry - Jan 28, 2013 / LewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013
|Film review on MEN IN BLACK - A-list stars, an excellent production team
Writing Feedbackwroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013 / wroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013
|We were in a terrible state, trapped by all exits; Creative Writing
3 - I burnt essay...
Writing FeedbackLewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013 / LewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013
|All I knew was that I was safe; creative writing piece
Writing Feedbackwroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013 / wroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013
|[IELTS] Learning foreign languages is common now. Good or Not? Can prevent drawbacks
Writing Feedbackchristyzhongs - Dec 24, 2012 / devabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013
|IELTS; Museums are meant for educating people or entertaining them?
3 - skeleton of skeleton of -->typing mistake The role of the museums in teaching visitors that they do not...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 27, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013
|UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS IMPORTANT OR NOT?
3 - not uncommon -- common As an ordinary person, we would be well-advised to attend university to gain knowledge...
Writing FeedbackYukiCat - Jan 27, 2013 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2013
|IELTS: Ageing population. What are the advantages and disadvantage
Writing Feedbackcolin - Jan 20, 2013 / colin - Jan 27, 2013
|IELTS-Nowadays people becoming parents later in life. Some think not good development
5 - hello. i think that there are not various ideas in this essay. For example, late childbearing causes...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 25, 2013 / gsisland - Jan 26, 2013
|Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food
11 - Thank you sooooo much for your revise, Dumi. ^^ To be honest, i'm still confuse about using inappropriate word...
Writing FeedbackSalikron - Dec 2, 2012 / Salikron - Jan 26, 2013
|CLIMATE CHANGE AND GLOBAL WARMING
2 - I think you did a good job of addressing all of your points. Do you need an introduction before...
Writing Feedbackmrice4 - Jan 26, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Jan 26, 2013
|Adolescence - Are parents the best teachers? No they are not.
Writing FeedbackEnhsaruul - Jan 26, 2013 / dumi - Jan 26, 2013
|strict rules of children's behavior, children are allowed to do anything they like
2 - The strict education of behavior means that --> The strict education system shows that which contributes to the...
Writing Feedbackgsisland - Jan 25, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 26, 2013
|What difficulties do you foresee in living away from home? Essay.
2 - Reading the prompt over, I feel like they were asking for your own personal experience rather than asking what's...
Writing FeedbackSchoolWorkHard - Jan 25, 2013 / megciso - Jan 26, 2013
|GOVERNMENT SYSTEM; Important thing I want to change in my country
2 - If i could change one important thing about my country, it would be a proverty. Poverty is a a...
Writing FeedbackXAVI XAVY - Jan 26, 2013 / sadammar - Jan 26, 2013
|Which kind of friendship and respect is required?
Writing FeedbackXAVI XAVY - Jan 23, 2013 / XAVI XAVY - Jan 26, 2013
|BODY PARAGRAPH OF SINGLE SEX VS CO-ED
2 - in my opinion, co-ex education is much better. About the distraction between girls and boys is too old-fashioned. Right...
Writing Feedbackmissdee - Jan 25, 2013 / lily41628 - Jan 26, 2013
|TOEFL - Contribution of young people to their communities is not sufficient.
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|IELTS - Some ex-prisoners commit crimes after being released from the prison. Cause
6 - Dear devabe2005, Well, your writing is ok. There are some grammar mistakes, but you can sort them out...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 24, 2013 / Agustin - Jan 25, 2013
|GOVERNMENT SHOULD BARE THE COST FOR SPECIAL UNDERGRADUATE COURSE
Writing Feedbacknida khan - Jan 25, 2013 / nida khan - Jan 25, 2013
|Laughter is the best medicine. Keeping everyone's happy makes us happy too
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|SAT; Always essential to tell the truth? Or should lie under special circumstances?
NEW - Is it always essential to tell the truth, or are there circumstances in which it is better to lie?...
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|IELTS; Children should learn science in school or not?
3 - Good introduction. Pleas start your sentences with capital letters because it is a distraction for us to follow what...
Writing Feedbackcaoxue - Jan 25, 2013 / dumi - Jan 25, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Doing jobs for a long spell ; Good or bad..?
3 - he is doing a very high salary job --> working is better vocabulary -->he is working in high salary...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 25, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 25, 2013
|IELTS-Elder people should be looked after by family members or professionals?
7 - Hai... Dumi, Dev and Han, Hai Dumi.. Thanks for the site id.. It was filttered from here, but...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 22, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 25, 2013
|What kinds of places do you avoid visiting when you travel?
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Jan 21, 2013 / faizan - Jan 25, 2013
|Art Management; Colleges and universities should offer Job preparation training
Writing FeedbackAseaDai - Jan 24, 2013 / dumi - Jan 25, 2013
|RAPID ECONOMIC DEVELOPMENT RESULTED HIGHER LIVING STANDARDS IN TOWNS, NOT IN VILLAGES
6 - Well... you should not be worried... With practicing you can improve a lot...There's a tip that EF_Kevin used to...
Writing Feedbacknida khan - Jan 24, 2013 / dumi - Jan 25, 2013
|Safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today
3 - I am in favor of the argument: safe alternative to fossil fuels should be our global priority. ......
Writing Feedbacknida khan - Jan 24, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 25, 2013
|IELTS - Many countries spend large amounts of sports events. Agree or Disagree
4 - Hi Devraj / Tessy / Duminda, I got my IELTS results. Listening - 7.5 , Reading -7.5, Speaking -...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 24, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 24, 2013
|Qualified people moving from poor to rich countries _Ielts
3 - hai... you have some good points ... Try not to copy the words from the question, use other words.....
Writing Feedbacksalmav - Jan 24, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 24, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Globalization:Negative sides should not be forgotten.
5 - Hai..Dumi, dev and Sayed.. Hai Dumi.. Thanks for your comments and time especially for the tip...): Thanks...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 21, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 24, 2013
|advantages & disadvantages of high rise apartments - (IELTS essay)
5 - Hai Katrina... Thanks for the comments.. I specially mentioned in my essay a point that if it is...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 23, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 24, 2013
|Do we behave differently in different clothes? Well, It is a complex issue
NEW - DO we behave differently in different clothes? Well, It is a complex issue and there is no straightforward answer...
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|IELTS-Do children behave better when they are rewarded or punished? Discuss both view
4 - I think you have an interesting idea and the structure is well organized but with mistakes. I think you...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 23, 2013 / ritared - Jan 24, 2013
|Career in today's world; Chances for a good job
2 - Your essay sounds like an IELTS or TOEFL one. But without the prompt, it is difficult to understand for...
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Jan 24, 2013 / dumi - Jan 24, 2013
|Number of Japan tourists travelling abroad within 10 years
2 - This sentence is too long. Avoid very lengthy sentences because they require your examiner to remember too much...
Writing Feedbackaayaan - Jan 21, 2013 / dumi - Jan 24, 2013
|IELTS - making money would never replace a teddy bear for a child
Writing FeedbackChilie - Jan 23, 2013 / ritared - Jan 24, 2013
|Book vs Experience; Which is more important?
4 - dear Dumid. I appreciate your comments. They are really helpful for a non-native speaker like me. However I don't...
Writing Feedbackducanhhut - Jan 23, 2013 / ducanhhut - Jan 24, 2013
|Governments should ban smoking in all public places and also build some places for smokers there
Writing Feedbacknomad22001 - Jan 23, 2013 / samnemeth - Jan 23, 2013
|What would I prefer- long hours more money or short hours less money-critique
Writing Feedbackriyak - Jan 21, 2013 / riyak - Jan 23, 2013
|Higher petrol price solve growing traffic and pollution problems-- IELTS
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Jan 23, 2013 / dumi - Jan 23, 2013
|Machinery stuffs vz hand made stuff? Which is better?
Writing FeedbackEverytime - Jan 22, 2013 / Everytime - Jan 23, 2013
|'quite arguable question'; should kids begin learning foreign language early?
Writing Feedbacktjtajinder - Jan 22, 2013 / tjtajinder - Jan 23, 2013
|iELTS Spending a lot on holding wedding celebrations are waste others are oppose
5 - hi joythblessy Show their status and to get respect from others ---> i missed to explained about respect...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 22, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 23, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Money spent for in.national sports events /sports training to children
5 - like, galleries, tracks, and so on. --> comma after like you can avoid --> i think typing mistake ...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 21, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 23, 2013
|IELTS 2: Living in high apartments : Advantages and Disadvantages
5 - For example, a house woman may need to drop her children at school or go for shopping, but every...
Writing Feedbacksanaqvi - Jan 22, 2013 / Callie0202 - Jan 22, 2013
|TOEFL: "I cannot wait back to my job"- social life vs job happiness
Writing Feedbackritared - Jan 22, 2013 / dumi - Jan 22, 2013
|IELTS-Wealthy nations should share wealth among poorer? Yes, but in a feasible manner
3 - This is pretty good, but it is even better if you state your opinion in the introduction itself....
Writing FeedbackBasha101 - Jan 22, 2013 / dumi - Jan 22, 2013
|IELTS - Weather forcats (Graphical presentation)
3 - Your essay is well rounded... I would prefer if you said It is also extremely helpful for drivers when...
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