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|Advantages of learning English
3 - Thank to Jennyflower81 for adjusting my writing. The adjusted writing is very helpful for me in the next English...
Writing Feedbackhuybinh111 - Nov 5, 2012 / huybinh111 - Nov 5, 2012
|Learners have different preference s ; Self assessment
2 - You have really good ideas here, but in many cases you don't have complete sentences. Sometimes, it's just a...
Writing Feedbackrsantiago - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|"in text Referencing" - This essay is correted by my teacher
2 - I think your teacher is right that you should expand your conclusion somewhat. Think about expanding your idea. Perhaps...
Writing FeedbackBraveheart - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Teacher vs parent role in children's intellectual and social development IELTS Task2
Writing FeedbackIris77 - Oct 9, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|IELTS: World literacy rates by region and by gender; 'lower for men than women'
2 - Hello! This makes sense, but has a few grammatical errors. Lack of literacy skills IS found (currently you have...
Writing Feedbackding - Oct 10, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Is talent a key element for children to become professionals?
3 - Thank you very much. The question is "Discuss should we teach all of children to be expert or only...
Writing Feedbackzzzz - Oct 29, 2012 / zzzz - Nov 5, 2012
|[AWS] Pros and cons of permissive parenting style
2 - Hello symptom, Your essay is clear, but needs more examples to back up why you do not agree with...
Writing Feedbacksymptom - Oct 24, 2012 / linmark - Nov 5, 2012
|IELTS Essay : Borrowing money from a friend is harmful to friendship
Writing Feedbackw_even - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 5, 2012
|'improvement of education' - change something in your hometown
5 - That is something you can fix quickly through learning. However, in essay writing you need more things; good...
Writing Feedbackyammm95 - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 4, 2012
|Do the Right Thing Violence Paper
3 - Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackLyndsey9201 - Nov 3, 2012 / Lyndsey9201 - Nov 4, 2012
|Common App (Essay B) - The Importance of Worldwide Cooperation
Writing FeedbackThePirateKing - Nov 4, 2012 / rezwan3 - Nov 4, 2012
|[IELTS TOPIC] - In many countries, students who behave badly in class are expelled
4 - children should not be out of school for any reason this sentense seems a little wired ,but i don't...
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Nov 1, 2012 / jenny45 - Nov 4, 2012
|Design Rationale - Essay about advertising for communication class
2 - Instead of saying this "Advertisements surround us, they appear everywhere" you could maybe say something to the fact of...
Writing FeedbackmBluebear - Oct 9, 2012 / Tabby - Nov 3, 2012
|moving to America when I was three as the biggest struggle - personal statement
2 - Why not start with "the people,the environment...unfamiliar to me" this will keep the reader wondering up until the 4th...
Writing FeedbackMemona - Nov 3, 2012 / Phoebe Africa - Nov 3, 2012
|capital punishment is a brustal decision and should be abolished?
2 - Honestly, this essay is not very convincing. I stand with you, but if I didn't, then this would not...
Writing Feedbackphamngocduy - Nov 3, 2012 / ericramon - Nov 3, 2012
|IELTS Essay severe punishment for traffic offensese
Writing Feedbackjenny45 - Nov 1, 2012 / jenny45 - Nov 3, 2012
|IELTS Essay : How is your generation different from your parent's generation
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 31, 2012 / Heina - Nov 2, 2012
|Fiction books are better than reality? - essay
3 - Contain means capable of holding something. So you should use it with what it is holding. Eg. contain...
Writing Feedbackasdfgg - Nov 2, 2012 / dumi - Nov 2, 2012
|IELTS examination; Adults and adolescents have many differences
Writing FeedbackNigora - Oct 31, 2012 / Nigora - Nov 2, 2012
|Academic or non academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
4 - I admire your position. However, if you use shorter sentences, your main idea will undoubtedly stand out...
Writing FeedbackGagandeep - Oct 10, 2012 / rezwan3 - Nov 1, 2012
|'Pursuance, never succeed in track again' - College Essay Revision
2 - For the first time ever, my life, my passion, my love for track, was fading away from me like...
Writing FeedbackMeiling - Oct 14, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|old buildings need to protected by government or not
NEW - Now a days government spend lot of money to protect old buildings which reflects the history of our nation.Some...
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|does cheap air travel damage the environment
2 - Your way of description is good . Straight to the point. I like your way of description and how...
Writing FeedbackLIGE - Oct 10, 2012 / alfredeie - Nov 1, 2012
|Learning from Electronic Media: GRE essay topic
Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|"each fresh crisis is an opportunity in disguise" - Grade My SAT Essay
Writing Feedbacksaanuu - Oct 26, 2012 / Obaid Allah - Nov 1, 2012
|'You helped America' - Patriots Pen-TELL MY FOUNDING FATHERS
Writing FeedbackDancingstar22 - Oct 23, 2012 / fashion520 - Nov 1, 2012
|GRE issue- #Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect...
NEW - Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect--- that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills. The...
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|'consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City' - GRE Argumentative
4 - mahsaa furthermore it is said that two-income families express more concern about healthful eating, Therefore, the new Captain Seafood...
Writing Feedbackmahsaa - Oct 13, 2012 / Halehh - Oct 31, 2012
|It was a great EXPERIENCE; A day in shopping mall.
2 - During my vacation last month, I had been to the biggest mall in south India with my family. I...
Writing Feedbacknithin1234 - Oct 31, 2012 / keroro - Oct 31, 2012
|Ielts - "culture shock" - nowadays more people traveling around the world
Writing Feedbackelnora - Oct 30, 2012 / elnora - Oct 31, 2012
|Stress is the body's reaction to a change
Writing FeedbackJennyChi - Oct 28, 2012 / JennyChi - Oct 31, 2012
|'spacious and desirable' - Apartment is better than a house
2 - I agree with the suggestions the prior contributor suggested, as well as I would advise for you to re-read...
Writing Feedbackmonaalvand - Oct 28, 2012 / BrwPrd - Oct 30, 2012
|IELTS - Traditional and International music complete each other.
Writing FeedbackAndrixH - Oct 1, 2012 / AndrixH - Oct 30, 2012
|Having unity and social skills through sports games
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their...
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|Living in the big cities is better than living in the country
NEW - Some people prefer to living in the big cities but some people prefer to living in the countryside, in...
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|'qualities of a good student and respect is earned' - illustraction Paragraph?
NEW - Qualities of a good student There are several different qualities of a good student. First as a good student,...
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|'Keep healthy and don't eat junk' - Convenience foods vs traditional foods
2 - It was really good essay. :) I don't have much confident to correct essays, but I commented below. Except...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Oct 25, 2012 / springflowers - Oct 30, 2012
|[IELTS] (academic) What is the main function of a university?
Writing Feedbackspringflowers - Oct 27, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 29, 2012
|The World & Experience - UC Prompts
Writing Feedbackdresdenflyer - Oct 7, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 28, 2012
|'avoid prolonged exposure to the Sun' - My essay for term's examination
Writing FeedbackHeina - Oct 24, 2012 / ah_zafari - Oct 28, 2012
|TOEFL - People are not satisfied with what they have; they want something more
Writing FeedbackMunkhjin - Oct 28, 2012 / zhdevilla - Oct 28, 2012
|IELTS: I believe that poorer countries require rich ones support to develop their countries
3 - I do not know what books are you studying now, but for improving your writing you should write...
Writing Feedbacklayla88 - Oct 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Oct 28, 2012
|Pregnant Working Women and Finance
Writing FeedbackAimeyMalambri - Oct 1, 2012 / hagertahir - Oct 27, 2012
|College Essay on Dads Heart Attack
Writing FeedbackAmzad123 - Oct 11, 2012 / edenh18 - Oct 27, 2012
|People should share domestic responsibilities - "equality depends on esteem"
NEW - Hello :-) I would really appreciate if someone helps me with my essay and fix my mistakes. I am...
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|'Understanding your child' - Essay about three things good parents do
2 - The second thing is too short I think. Maybe you can add that parents should give their children more...
Writing FeedbackJasmine92 - Oct 12, 2012 / lucy123 - Oct 27, 2012
|'It's not that easy' - The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad
3 - Thank you so much, Mriytunjay :) Can you tell me more about structure of an essay? Thanks a lot...
Writing FeedbackLinhSua - Oct 19, 2012 / LinhSua - Oct 26, 2012
|(choosing fields of study based on job availability) - GRE issue
Writing FeedbackHalehh - Oct 25, 2012 / Halehh - Oct 26, 2012
|IElTS: 'fast food as an alternative'; the average weight of people is increasing
NEW - Hi everybody, here is my second essay over here wish you guys help me in elevating my writing level...
Writing Feedbackhumanx - Oct 25, 2012 / — -
|Gandhi - About a World Leader
5 - Sure. He would be the perfect example of a leader if you feel that he inspired others through his...
Writing Feedbackinform - May 31, 2012 / admission2012 - Oct 24, 2012
|Nation should attempt to regulate school curriculum - one for all students
NEW - "A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum" Discuss the extent to...
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|Apartment Vs House; depends on individual financial status and areas of comfort
2 - Living in an apartment undoubtedly has many advantages. First of all, it is cheaper to rent or buy an...
Writing FeedbackNemoo - Oct 12, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|This is my GRE awa practice essay - advance Thanks for Review
2 - All in all, pretty solid grammar wise and some great word choices (exaggerated, libertine, digress) I would do a...
Writing Feedbacknakul123 - Oct 19, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|too much fat, salt and sugar; Weight of people is increasing, health decreasing
3 - Hi Gangster777 You have pretty good ideas for the body paragraphs. However, the problem is that your essay doesn't...
Writing FeedbackGangster777 - Oct 21, 2012 / April April - Oct 24, 2012
|IELTS essay: Whether reading is better than TV or internet?
2 - It seems much better now. Thanks very much to you, Elena. I have some questions here: 1. Basically Honestly...
Writing Feedbackbwithu - Oct 23, 2012 / bwithu - Oct 24, 2012
|IELTS TASK2 Pros and cons of building nuclear power plants
5 - In my opinion, the very first thing is that you'd better write more (IELTS Task 2 essay requires at...
Writing Feedbackz1z1z1z1 - Oct 9, 2012 / Chicken - Oct 24, 2012
|'People should not work as slow as turtles' - TOEFL Writing
NEW - Could anyone help me check this and correct my grammatical errors? Big thanks. :) Topic: In today's world,...
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|IELTS Essay : Reading fiction or watching movies : Introduction only
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 23, 2012 / w_even - Oct 23, 2012
|Support the arts or protect the environment? 'stop this massacre of the nature'
2 - [quote=juliamedeiross]The humans being hashave been deterioratingdoing lot of damage to the environment for a long time, and nowadays something...
Writing Feedbackjuliamedeiross - Oct 21, 2012 / dumi - Oct 22, 2012
|Going overseas for university study
5 - Countries try to exemplify their greatest traits and most beautiful architecture to entice internationalists to come and visit them....
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