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|'Adapting effective laws' - Tobacco and alcohol should be illegal?
3 - Hai.. Instead of poisonous 'gases' change to substances. Waste of economy... Government is spending a large amount...
Writing Feedbackhongkyanh - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'Health budget' - Prevention is better than cure
5 - Well, I understand your idea. Actually, I have been working in the field of marketing for the last ten...
Writing Feedbackimranawan - Nov 25, 2012 / imranawan - Nov 25, 2012
|which job do you prefer, university master, being self-employed,politician,research?
Writing Feedbackbehnaz - Nov 25, 2012 / behnaz - Nov 25, 2012
|'architecture or town-planning' - GRE Analytical essay Societies and Cities
4 - However in ancient times, great cities like Angkor in Cambodia, and Borobudur in Indonesia would have reflected the belief-systems...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 25, 2012
|'Athletes and sports professionals deserve it' - essay
Writing Feedbackarminima - Aug 31, 2012 / arminima - Nov 25, 2012
|Informative essay about the evolutions of man and stages of hunting
2 - but began with simple methods, but it began with simple... isn't it what you wanted to say? your introduction...
Writing Feedbackmish1493 - Nov 25, 2012 / programmer - Nov 25, 2012
|Public celebrations are a waste of money..?
4 - hai... Your 1st essay you closed before any correction. If it is by mistake, leave it open. You selected...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|'They read our emails, messages, and look at our private pictures..' - essay
5 - Hai.. It was interesting to read....but... I didn't find the related question and a sufficient conclution......
Writing Feedbacksuad - Nov 22, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|Essay about my visit to a friend and his wife's problems
2 - Hai.. You wrote you friend's wife fell down and died.. what about changing the word died..To unconcious.....
Writing Feedbackundidiamaka - Nov 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|Gifted by nature women plays a significant role in bringing a new child
3 - Hai... Please add the full question before starting your essay. Even one question can ask in different ways....
Writing FeedbackRedtape - Nov 23, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
|GRE - technology deteriors our critical thinking abilities - feedback/grading
2 - Although technology has given us great comfort and amenities in our daily lives, its rapid advancement is also regressing...
Writing Feedbackhappydaisy - Nov 12, 2012 / undidiamaka - Nov 24, 2012
|success in developed countries/ immigrants adopting a new culture
NEW - hola, soy gisela, quisiera que me corrijan estos essays, cuanto antes mejor, michas gracias Success in Education and...
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|'More comfortable with parents' - Toefl Essay-Parents are the best teacher.
2 - Hai Sonia... Always write the question because, there are so many types of essays.. it was simple...
Writing Feedbackchikoo09 - Nov 6, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 24, 2012
|'USA has a lot of international students' - My ILEIST exam essay
Writing Feedbackten - Nov 21, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 24, 2012
|The role of women - they should not sit at home if they don't want to
7 - ... I think rather than, solving problems, it is the decision making process that earlier women were kept...
Writing Feedbackeynar - Nov 17, 2012 / dumi - Nov 24, 2012
|IELTS Essay, leisure activities: physical or mental rest
4 - Hi joythblessy, I think you write very well... Also your essay structure is in well conformity with the...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 24, 2012
|'Global challenges' - Countries should not isolate themselves
2 - bayron Nowadays there are different methods of governing countries. Some countries use the method of isolation instead of...
Writing Feedbackbayron - Nov 11, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 23, 2012
|Humanity is in a tight fit with carbon emissions and climate change; NUCLEAR ENERGY
Writing FeedbackJude2005 - Nov 5, 2012 / CubiksRuber - Nov 23, 2012
|'Finding Confidence ' - my essay for COLLEGE
Writing FeedbackAlianicole123 - Nov 23, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 23, 2012
|Causes and Effects of Stress; stress affects your health and spirit
NEW - Causes and Effects of Stress of Students Nowadays, the life is becoming hurry and busy, so people have...
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|Learn to speak English On-line
2 - When you make posts, better you include the topic of your essay.... So that others would give you more...
Writing Feedbacknedaaa - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 23, 2012
|Ielts_writing2: poor children better at solving problems than rich children?
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Nov 21, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|Ielts:60% of freshmen alter their major subject in the second year of university
6 - Secondly, organization is how candidates divide an writing into many paragraphs as well as how they link them together....
Writing FeedbackNam12lehoan - Nov 15, 2012 / mcuong01 - Nov 22, 2012
|Education is undeniably the driving force in every country's evolution.
6 - Amazing essay! I can not believe this has been produced in 40 minutes. In my view your essays deserve...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Nov 15, 2012 / Ravichandra - Nov 22, 2012
|benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad...argumentative essay
2 - However, as a coin has two sides,this situationstudying abroad brings both benefits and drawbacks. The advantages of getting a...
Writing Feedbackspongebob123 - Nov 8, 2012 / Shoko0229 - Nov 22, 2012
|'advice from immature people' - about making decisions
4 - Well... what I mean is that your sentences do not convey the idea clearly. This happens when you include...
Writing Feedbackcanyouhelpme - Nov 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 22, 2012
|US government to cease funding the NASA
10 - Thanks Esther...
Writing Feedbackcanyouhelpme - Nov 20, 2012 / canyouhelpme - Nov 22, 2012
|How important is ANZAC story to Australian Identity? clarification on this intro
4 - I just wanted clarification on the direction of my essay is going. I have dificulty writing essays, and I'm...
Writing FeedbackMaraJade10 - Oct 12, 2012 / MaraJade10 - Nov 21, 2012
|How TV can affect children? no physical activity, eat unhealthy foods..
2 - I do not know what the topic has exactly asked, but you should pay more attention to an essay's...
Writing Feedbackrgahra - Nov 21, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 21, 2012
|'adequate rest and sleep are essential' - IELTS- Writing task 2
5 - Good Introduction : ) ------------ This is not a complete sentence. Look at the suggestion provided by...
Writing Feedbackkurianjoseph1 - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 21, 2012
|solving environmental problems : international agency instead of state/national govts
8 - hai dumi.. Thanks a lot for the details.. Nice intrduction.. I have no idea about international environmental program. I...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 20, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 21, 2012
|Individualism and Personal Diversity
Writing Feedback2320beyodor - Nov 5, 2012 / canyouhelpme - Nov 21, 2012
|A long line of stopped vehicles extends to the end of the road; CONTROVERSIAL ESSAY
3 - Thank you!...
Writing Feedbackflyingpuma - Nov 20, 2012 / flyingpuma - Nov 20, 2012
|'Not just sharing profits' - Should rich countries share wealth among poor countries?
10 - All the suggestions mentioned above are correct. To add, its very important to read sample essays either TOEFL/ IELTS...
Writing Feedbacksidraziaahmad - Nov 18, 2012 / iamtrying - Nov 20, 2012
|Religion Studies 100 - Buddhism and Hinduism; 'concepts of rebirth'
4 - Buddhism and Hinduism is an interesting topic. Do include your topic so that we can review your essay....
Writing Feedbackruthpreciouslam - Nov 20, 2012 / iamtrying - Nov 20, 2012
|A nation should be responsible for the health, welfare and prosperity of its citizens
Writing Feedbackiamtrying - Oct 28, 2012 / iamtrying - Nov 20, 2012
|IELTS WT2: TV HAS NO VALUE ON CHILDREN. AGREE? DISAGREE?
4 - Hai.. I like your essay.. Some more points.. Foreign channels like BBC, national Geographic and so on...
Writing FeedbackInspired2012 - Nov 20, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 20, 2012
|IELTS essay: free health care or not
3 - Thanks,Scientiana! I am going to take the IELTS test recently. And I still have a slow writing speed, I...
Writing Feedbackwoyunsi3000 - Oct 22, 2012 / woyunsi3000 - Nov 20, 2012
|Ielts ( preventing crimes with childhood behavior analyzing)
Writing FeedbackAlicesh - Jul 12, 2012 / dumi - Nov 20, 2012
|The Cobra - journey to the Amazon; Narrative Essay
2 - Being in nature is very good forexcellent not only physically but also mentally as wellhealth ....
Writing FeedbackHelenSwan - Nov 4, 2012 / geebs5 - Nov 20, 2012
|Drawbacks of studying abroad can be noticed, but these are temporary in nature..
4 - ------------ hahaha :D .... it does not matter so long as you don't act like an "it" -----------------...
Writing Feedbackpjembernate - Nov 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 20, 2012
|IELTS WT2: Library vs. Computer Technology
7 - Thanks Dumi, I started reading introduction tips and surely I have issues with introducing my topic. I recalled some...
Writing FeedbackInspired2012 - Nov 16, 2012 / Inspired2012 - Nov 20, 2012
|Random checks for guns,knives & other weapons; PERSUASIVE ESSAY
3 - Thank you for your feedback, I am currently re-writing the whole thing to make it look better, and with...
Writing Feedbackearthstar75 - Nov 20, 2012 / earthstar75 - Nov 20, 2012
|This is preparation for my Greek mythology Finals, I need reviews.
Writing Feedbackmin33 - Oct 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 20, 2012
|WritingTask1: Boys and Girls cultural and leisure activities
2 - Your essay is great. However, I suggest you to use more linking words such as on the contrary, while,...
Writing FeedbackHewlett1920 - Nov 8, 2012 / Scientiana - Nov 19, 2012
|Good and Bad news and factors which influence to news editors.
2 - Hai Orxen... Your introduction is bigger than your body paragraph. Cut it short and make a clear introduction.....
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|Conventional schools are still the right choice for most students - IELTS essay
3 - Hai Dumi... Thank you so much for your correction and guidence. I really liked your introduction which forwading...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|IELTS Writing - Should children learn science in school?
Writing FeedbackMJ_LAU - Nov 18, 2012 / salih - Nov 19, 2012
|More houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations.
Writing Feedbackkurianjoseph1 - Nov 19, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 19, 2012
|My IELTS Task 1 Reports (UK citizens travel abroad and the countries visited)
Writing Feedbackahmedsamir - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 19, 2012
|Child-centred practice ignores the individuality of children's needs. Essay regarding bullying....
11 - Yes there are many highly qualified people in this website that would help you, but you need to post...
Writing Feedbacksuperkaytee - Mar 5, 2007 / AzizZ - Nov 18, 2012
|Description of a friend - The genius
7 - Salam Alaikon A khay I Have only one suggesten in the intrudoction you shift from I to You and...
Writing FeedbackMatrix student - Nov 18, 2012 / AzizZ - Nov 18, 2012
|How to learn vocabulary: 'writing the words, association, learning by reading'
3 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackle bao - Nov 12, 2012 / le bao - Nov 18, 2012
|His life has been unusual; The Spectacular For Me
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Oct 31, 2012 / dumi - Nov 18, 2012
|By punishing murders with the death penalty.
Writing FeedbackAlicegaga - Nov 16, 2012 / Alicegaga - Nov 18, 2012
|William Shakespeare and his great works!
2 - --------------- I wish you rephrase this sentence... Seems having a problem with its length --------- he...
Writing Feedbackelma96 - Nov 1, 2012 / dumi - Nov 17, 2012
|IELTS_WRITING) What are some important characteristics of a co-worker?
6 - Thank princedynasty and dumi for your proofreading. I want to tell you it is a big help for me....
Writing FeedbackLOMOBOY - Nov 15, 2012 / LOMOBOY - Nov 17, 2012
|Alcohol and exercise are particularly important when it comes to balancing a healthy lifestyle
NEW - Here is my rough draft of my research paper on Obesity. Please let me know how I can improve....
Writing Feedbacklor2166380 - Nov 17, 2012 / — -
|"Today is not a winter day yet. Why is it so thrill?" ; Narrative paragraph
2 - ---------- better rephrase this; it doesn't come clearly : ( Either she couldn't open her eyes or...
Writing FeedbackJames89 - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 17, 2012
|'Yoga practice' - What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress?
4 - .... good opening and you have quickly set up the link and achieved alignment with the topic. Good!...
Writing Feedbackbamboo - Nov 12, 2012 / dumi - Nov 17, 2012
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