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|My father and my eldest brother shaped my personality into what I am today
NEW - Please proofread my essay and correct if there is any grammatical mistake. Thank you in advanced. I have to...
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|GRE Analytical Argument Task: Memo to WWAC station
Writing Feedbackjackketch - Oct 19, 2012 / westway50 - Oct 21, 2012
|Media Analysis Essay - Vietnam War
2 - If you want to be more specific you could say, for example; that ...as independent news organizations presented real...
Writing FeedbackJustawriter7 - Oct 5, 2012 / nelsond1960 - Oct 21, 2012
|An aberrant curriculum in every other state of a nation would certainly be a reason of chaos
Writing Feedbackaaqibmir007 - Sep 30, 2012 / chiragjain - Oct 21, 2012
|Essay about my close friend, Sasha
4 - I really like how you`re approaching this piece of writing but I found that there were too many line...
Writing FeedbackSofi - Oct 21, 2012 / lollypop12 - Oct 21, 2012
|[TOEFL] Choose friends who are similar to yourself or different from yourself?
2 - We all have our own friends, and they can be either similar or different from us. Friends who are...
Writing Feedbackcrz_keane - Oct 20, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 21, 2012
|Females & males education [IELTS] Writing Task 1_2
2 - The charts show the number of girls per 100 boys in all levels of education. Compared with nineteen's nineteenth,...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Oct 1, 2012 / goldmanswalking - Oct 21, 2012
|'Life standards and food preparation these days' - criticize my essay
Writing FeedbackDcool - Oct 14, 2012 / humanx - Oct 20, 2012
|IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time
7 - Sure I will practice more :), thank you dumi. @Mriytunjay : IELTS task 2 writing requires at least 250...
Writing Feedbackdonniedarko - Oct 17, 2012 / donniedarko - Oct 20, 2012
|[TOEFL] Attending a live performance vs. TV? 'live football game at a stadium'
NEW - Hi everyone, I'm preparing for TOEFL iBT test. Please help me to improve my writing skills. This is my...
Writing Feedbackcrz_keane - Oct 20, 2012 / — -
|'county tournament' - narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience
Writing Feedbackalexgrey - Oct 17, 2012 / alexgrey - Oct 19, 2012
|IELTS Exam: people and technology
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|'Reducing the effort' - high salary or enjoyable job essay
5 - I think you should check your grammatical structure. See the corrections i made to the paragraph just above the...
Writing Feedbacksuperhero - Oct 17, 2012 / emmasaintly - Oct 19, 2012
|"International Study" - Higher education should be open to all (discuss)
2 - Chhan Naroth, I completely agree with you. This applies to me because, I am from a not very rich...
Writing Feedbackchhan naroth - Oct 18, 2012 / megsters99 - Oct 18, 2012
|I want to improve my writing for IELTS exam.Kindly indicate my mistakes in the essay
2 - But, these days there isIn recent years,there is an increase in sales oftrend of prepared and processed food, known...
Writing Feedbacknuroon - Oct 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 18, 2012
|'Effects of government's spending on culture and education' [IELTS] Writing Task 1_1
5 - I think it always helps to write the effects of something. You could do what cooldudebill suggested, and on...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Sep 24, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 18, 2012
|news editors; country condition, citizens education, living condition; influence
Writing Feedbackademcelik - Oct 17, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 17, 2012
|'unsolved trouble' - Traffic Congestion leads to several critical impacts
3 - First off, you're writing in English. I believe Thai is probably your first language. I cannot write one word...
Writing Feedbackraiyan - Oct 17, 2012 / wesleysuhler - Oct 17, 2012
|'Aerobic excercises and modest health' - Dieting can change a person's life
Writing FeedbackFalahatgar - Dec 8, 2011 / Zaara - Oct 17, 2012
|Happiness directly relates to economic success
4 - Jenny,thanks very much for your comment. i think i need to insert some transitional word such as " firstly,secondly...etc"...
Writing Feedbackpolsestart - Oct 16, 2012 / polsestart - Oct 16, 2012
|Social Networking - how does it affect us? Need third body paragraph and conclusion.
3 - Hello bansmart06, The reason why you are stuck at your third paragraph is because the scope of your...
Writing Feedbackbansmart06 - Sep 29, 2012 / nanoflame - Oct 16, 2012
|"Teachers' role in the classroom"; IELTS
5 - if I want to give an example in the first paragraph in the body like this: " Accordingly, they...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Oct 14, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 16, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: How to define Happiness
2 - Some individuals feel happy when they have intimate relations (relationship) with (their) friends and family members, while others become...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 16, 2012 / mahsaa - Oct 16, 2012
|Toefl: Students working while studying? More disadvantages than advantages
3 - Certainly dumi is right you need to support your arguments with real life examples. You can write short parapgraphs...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012 / williamcosta - Oct 16, 2012
|ielts writing, traffic & environmental problems. NEED to improve to Band 7-8
3 - This sounds like an incomplete sentence. Whilst and While (both mean the same) function mostly as a conjuction...
Writing Feedbackafra514 - Oct 2, 2012 / dumi - Oct 16, 2012
|writting a parapraph about Vietnamese occasion .
NEW - Tet is the most important celebration of Vietnamese culture. It is an opportunity to reunite family and enjoy many...
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|sat esay: Does the process of doing something matters more than the outcome?
Writing Feedbackeason chen - Sep 26, 2012 / MoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2 - Sport man makes more money than other. Discuss both views
3 - To be success in --- To ACHIEVE success in (it must be either BE SUCCESSFUL or ACHIEVE SUCCESS) Many...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 10, 2012 / April April - Oct 16, 2012
|narrative essay : the wonderful annoucement
Writing Feedbackquyensunny - Oct 14, 2012 / quyensunny - Oct 15, 2012
|Essay about The Child is father of the Man
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|Over-reliance on technology & ability of humas to think for themselves
2 - Hi! I think it's great you are trying to improve your writing skills. What I noticed in your essay...
Writing Feedbackshkh23 - Sep 30, 2012 / abbieflis - Oct 14, 2012
|Human cloning - is it moral or immoral?
2 - The meaning of the humans cloning is that scientist creates the lab human. They copy the genetic real human,...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Sep 29, 2012 / Ownpudi - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS :I would prefer to run my business than to own a new house
3 - Thank you phasetwozero for your valuable comments. I am unable to understand what is the problem with following...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 14, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|Is giving the same grade to every student in a group a good way to evaluate students?
5 - One more thing: your second last paragraph presents the opposite view. I am not sure about this but I...
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Oct 13, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1: GRaph/ consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat
2 - Hi, Williamcosta "Overall, there was a gradual decrease...." => I think you should replay Overall with In the case...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 13, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 14, 2012
|Dilemma whether it is right decision to make Free health care for the POOR
Writing Feedbackfizuli - Oct 14, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 14, 2012
|Problems in relationships have led to separation ; Conflict and Relationship
5 - As this is my first essay I really require your reviews on structure , grammer , sentences , punctuations....
Writing Feedbackiamtrying - Oct 8, 2012 / iamtrying - Oct 13, 2012
|Daily schedules and the glorious life are main reasons that the individuals work to gain money
2 - I do agree that some people work only for money. However, there are also those who work to make...
Writing Feedbackuzbek_sheikh - Oct 12, 2012 / sophiezhu - Oct 13, 2012
|IELTS 'university students' tuition fees - beneficial to the public
Writing Feedbackcarole - Oct 11, 2012 / carole - Oct 12, 2012
|Average weight of people is increasing, causes and solutions; 'burgers & pizzas'
3 - Your essay is good 1- Good vocabulary. 2- Good supporting ideas. however you have to think about the essay...
Writing Feedbackwilliamhayt - Oct 12, 2012 / Nemoo - Oct 12, 2012
|If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need talent or motivation?
3 - Thank you :)...
Writing FeedbackDiana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012 / Diana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012
|SAT: disagreement makes progress
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012 / jineshwar1995 - Oct 12, 2012
|(SAT Essay) Can knowledge be a burden? (grade it based on the SAT criteria)
4 - excellent writing skill and ideas are good, but the structure of the article is a little bit messy....
Writing FeedbackGuest - Sep 30, 2012 / beibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012
|'Farmers and unemployment' - Factory near my community TOEFL
2 - This sentence has several issues; first grammer and then about clarity and its presentation. These issues tend...
Writing Feedbackhang123 - Oct 11, 2012 / dumi - Oct 12, 2012
|Narrative essay about the time I went on a date with my current boyfriend / "Shelby"
2 - What is the prompt? For the first paragraph, I'd recheck the punctuation. You might want to replace some semicolons...
Writing Feedbacklourdesl - Oct 1, 2012 / zeppy1995 - Oct 11, 2012
|'Weekly money expenditure on fast food' - IELTS
NEW - Hi everybody, I really just need someone to read it over for me.This is Ä°ELTS writing task 1....
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|school attend: to further knowledge, to experience new things, to earn a degree
2 - to furtherget knowledge, to experience new things, and to earn a degree. use parallel structures...
Writing Feedbackmmouse - Sep 28, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|Work in a company vs. have your own business, TOEFL
NEW - Society is often divided into two groups regarding major issues involving occupation. Some people like to have their own...
Writing Feedbacknavid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012 / — -
|I am preparing for TOEFL iBT - Students choice of places to live
Writing Feedbackaniketkumar - Oct 7, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|I really need help next month I have TOEFL and your comment will help me
Writing Feedbackparnian - Oct 7, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|SAT - Is it always necessary to find new solutions to problems?
Writing FeedbackJenny_ysy - Sep 28, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 10, 2012
|'Time of judgement' - college essay
Writing Feedbackjustintubbs - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE
2 - Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE Be sure to discuss each of these topics equally. If you were to...
Writing Feedbackphantan252 - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Property prices and rents affected the livelihood of many Hong Kong people?
Writing Feedbackzer000 - Sep 20, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 10, 2012
|Harmful human activity damages the Earth
2 - Sorry for my bad english because i'm still beginner with the language. I think is very interesting the comment...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 10, 2012 / Chapapote - Oct 10, 2012
|"Traditional Market"- Narration for a theme : Look before you leap
2 - Shopping with my mother in traditional market has become a nightmare for me recently. - Recently, shopping in...
Writing FeedbackAlyssa - Oct 9, 2012 / skinbag - Oct 9, 2012
|'Norwegian Philosopher Arne Naess' article correction
3 - Can anyone with good english correct this A Norwegian Philosopher Arne Naess invented the term 'Deep Ecology'. An environmental...
Writing Feedbackbat - Oct 9, 2012 / bat - Oct 9, 2012
|'A person of good moral character' - Writing Sample
Writing Feedbackgospelkeys - Oct 9, 2012 / anniejerry - Oct 9, 2012
|Essay: compare and contrast between communicating by mobile phone and letter
Writing Feedbackthao phuong - Oct 8, 2012 / thao phuong - Oct 9, 2012
|IETLS writing practice: university education-preparation for employment or knowledge?
Writing FeedbackWang Ying - Oct 5, 2012 / Wang Ying - Oct 9, 2012
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