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|IELTS: capital punishment is essential to our society
3 - Great start. I suggest this small alteration ; Practiced in more than 21 countries around the globe, death...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 28, 2012 / dumi - Dec 31, 2012
|Introducing "Right" or "Wrong" to the children is the responsibility of school? IELTS
Writing Feedbackfalks405 - Dec 28, 2012 / dumi - Dec 31, 2012
|IELTS:Extracurricular activity is as important as their academic class?
2 - As per my opinion there is no flaws in u'r essay...The content are very well structured with suitable reasoning!!!!!!!!...
Writing Feedbackcolin - Dec 28, 2012 / ganesh_007b - Dec 30, 2012
|GRE-ARGUMENT- Prunty County should undertake the same kind of road improvement
2 - 2-3/6 a lot of grammatical mistakes that is inhibiting the flow that a reading piece establishes, as I try...
Writing Feedbackkettyabc - Dec 22, 2012 / kethsaxena - Dec 30, 2012
|IELTS: same job for life or frequently change it?
2 - nice!...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 30, 2012 / engg - Dec 30, 2012
|Report on the Dark Side of Chocolate
4 - I believe when saying "rumoured ", should be typed as "rumored ". Also when reading this essay, though...
Writing FeedbackJessicaG - Dec 29, 2012 / bng16210 - Dec 30, 2012
|( IELTS essay) college degree is less valuable now compared to the past?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 26, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 30, 2012
|IELTS: Address the causes of crime or not? yes, we should
5 - yes dumi, that's what i wanted to say, but I ended up talking about delicacies. thank you, i appreciate...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 29, 2012 / y0_3mma - Dec 30, 2012
|Nowadays, radio is being replaced by TV and the Internet.
5 - .... the most appropriate word is "replacing" and not "displacing". ... broadcasting is likely to disappear...
Writing Feedbackfalks405 - Dec 27, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|SAT:"Is it always better to be original than to imitate or use the ideas of others?"
Writing FeedbackObaid Allah - Dec 25, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|A letter to make arrangements for the stay during the weekend at a hotel to hold a seminar at there
Writing Feedbacknhym93 - Dec 27, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|Preferred leisure activities of Australian children; IELTS - Task 1
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Dec 27, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|TOEFL :The government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries
3 - your essay is well structured and well drafted. I like your essay but I guess you can be little...
Writing Feedbackfanju45 - Dec 30, 2012 / AryanK - Dec 30, 2012
|Toefl essay: One very important skill a person should learn; Soft-skills
2 - Good point :) .... There are a few grammar issues; Nowadays, besides one's knowledge, soft skills are one...
Writing Feedbacksir_alex92 - Dec 30, 2012 / dumi - Dec 30, 2012
|Broad knowledge or Specific knowledge? Broader knowledge is more important; TOEFL
3 - Its more like liberal arts...you seem to promote liberal arts background so I guess add some more skills and...
Writing Feedbackg2080800 - Dec 30, 2012 / AryanK - Dec 30, 2012
|I'm influenced by my religion, Buddhism / University of Michigan supp / Community
2 - Hi :) I think this is a very interesting topic to write about,however I still want to recommend some...
Writing Feedbackpainglintun - Dec 29, 2012 / Edna - Dec 30, 2012
|ESSAY: NOWADAYS YOUNG PEOPLE ARE MORE WILLING TO HELP OTHERS?
Writing Feedbackheadshot0313 - Dec 29, 2012 / headshot0313 - Dec 30, 2012
|Happiness is an emotional or affective state; Causes of Happiness
6 - I think the ending is too dull. Add some flavor to the conclusion; it will make it more interesting....
Writing Feedbackyumna - Dec 14, 2012 / xxxbluefrogxxx - Dec 29, 2012
|Successful Women in Saudi Arabia
Writing Feedbackyumna - Dec 29, 2012 / BlackWaltzIV - Dec 29, 2012
|ESSAY: IN ORDER TO DEVELOP THE ECONOMY, WE CAN IGNORE THE ENVIRONMENT ISSUES.
Writing Feedbackheadshot0313 - Dec 29, 2012 / headshot0313 - Dec 29, 2012
|"Talk is cheap"- "All mankind is divided into three classes"
Writing Feedbackxphyllisx - Dec 16, 2012 / xphyllisx - Dec 29, 2012
|First Snow - Winter has begun.
6 - Snow (is) soft, clean All of them sheltered -> Snow covers everything: help them spend the winter....
Writing FeedbackHell Yeah - Dec 29, 2012 / KnyazKnyazev - Dec 29, 2012
|We cannot reduce the increasing crime rate? Need proper measures to control (IELTS)
3 - hai Leo.. Thanks for the correction... I didn't get a stronge word in that position. One of my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 29, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 29, 2012
|'skip the trial and error period and save the time toward a right way'; what future job for a child?
7 - Hi, you do have many clear points in your essay, and as pointed out before, the main problem is...
Writing FeedbackJoyce zhuang - Dec 22, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|It's better to have broader knowledge than to specializing in one specific subject
3 - Well, thanks a lot. Would you like to give me some suggestions on how to improve the vocabulary? I...
Writing FeedbackMercury23 - Dec 27, 2012 / Mercury23 - Dec 29, 2012
|[TOEFL] Friendship is more important than mistake by a friend, although mistake is terrible.
3 - Alright I'm going to be quite critical here so please don't take offense. "First of all, a mistake...
Writing Feedbackgoodluck - Dec 19, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|TOEFL: Children should grow up in a big city!!
5 - It's a good essay, however, I think you should structure your two arguments better. Try to follow a PEEL...
Writing FeedbackRaviSouza - Dec 22, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|TOEFL TOPIC: Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now.
4 - I would clarify your topic sentence, at first read, I thought you had agreed with "patience is a virtue"....
Writing Feedbackhaikie - Dec 28, 2012 / alicederp - Dec 29, 2012
|Colleges shouldn't offer more courses to prepare students; 'value system'
2 - Thus if paying to much attention to those job preparations, the research development speed will slow down. ==>>if we...
Writing Feedbackgleam - Dec 28, 2012 / colin - Dec 28, 2012
|TOPIC:disagree or agree-it is impossible to be completely honest with your friend.
Writing Feedbackgleam - Dec 28, 2012 / joah5454 - Dec 28, 2012
|The song "Marry you"; Sociology term paper, analyzing song lyrics
NEW - Marry You Song Analysis (with Lyrics) The song "Marry you," by Bruno Mars is a catchy and a...
Writing Feedbacktalktosky - Dec 28, 2012 / — -
|IELTS- Modern person should have several careers or ways of earning money!
Writing Feedbackskynet0512 - Dec 27, 2012 / skynet0512 - Dec 28, 2012
|Tell the Truth or Lie? Persuasive Essay
2 - The McKinley story is false. You have him mixed up with Grover Cleveland. Passable essay. What class is this...
Writing Feedbackshorty365 - Dec 28, 2012 / joah5454 - Dec 28, 2012
|Which should your school choose to buy -computer or books; 'advanced science'
4 - sjmzzz95 thank you I appreciate your feedback. I did the essay revision with your accurate notes....
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 28, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 28, 2012
|City is more convienent than countryside
2 - A big question that boggles people's minds in the modern world is whether children should grow up in the...
Writing FeedbackSardor 77 - Dec 28, 2012 / nounouboo - Dec 28, 2012
|"How to be a parent"/ What makes a person an adult?
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 26, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 28, 2012
|Trends on non-cash transactions; IELTS writing tips on Graphs
3 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackfalks405 - Dec 27, 2012 / falks405 - Dec 28, 2012
|imagine how our ancestors would have survived without Computers, televisions,internet
4 - .... sounds better without "to" :) Internet instantly connects people across the globe without any time...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Dec 25, 2012 / dumi - Dec 28, 2012
|Universities and high schools should teach students specific careers
5 - I disagree with this statement/ I disagree with these statements However, I disagree with this statement...
Writing FeedbackJinQ1212 - Dec 2, 2012 / dumi - Dec 28, 2012
|IElTS: benefits and drawbacks of urbanization; urbanization is a phenomenon
6 - ...move from countryside to the city due to undeveloped financial and social facilitieslooking for more opportunities for life. ...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 24, 2012 / dumi - Dec 28, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY, couples decide to have children later in their life.
2 - Hai Dev... Nice to read the answer of the latest question... ===> ....financial steability and macturity... ...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Dec 28, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 28, 2012
|Immigrants should abandon their own ways and adapt to local customs?
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Dec 21, 2012 / devabe2005 - Dec 27, 2012
|organization deal with recycling; The one thing you do to improve your community?
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 26, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 27, 2012
|Christmas & continuity of traditions; Stanford/ What matter to you and why?
4 - Your Christmas essay was very warm and fuzzy :) Your roommate note, however, felt disorganized and very list-y, if...
Writing Feedbackblondie51295 - Dec 23, 2012 / haneom94 - Dec 27, 2012
|IELTS - petrol price increment (Traffic and pollution)
3 - Hi, You are really wise in limiting your essay length with just slightly over 250 words, which enables yourself...
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Dec 26, 2012 / mcuong01 - Dec 27, 2012
|Sports & no risky behavior; What do you do for good health ?
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Dec 26, 2012 / aqeel - Dec 26, 2012
|PHOTOGRAPHY ESSAY, it would take too much time to build a time machine.
Writing Feedbackhelloitsjoi - Nov 16, 2012 / helloitsjoi - Dec 26, 2012
|Shifting large factories to countryside helps solve traffic&housing issues... I agree
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 24, 2012 / dumi - Dec 26, 2012
|Changed from being a loner
Writing FeedbackBeza101 - Dec 26, 2012 / luying9682 - Dec 26, 2012
|Having children late in life; 'A family without children is not a really family'
Writing FeedbackMorain - Dec 26, 2012 / Morain - Dec 26, 2012
|You created something using your bare hands, and your takeaway from the experience
3 - Thanks...
Writing FeedbackIkennaBlack - Dec 25, 2012 / IkennaBlack - Dec 25, 2012
|American Literature Literary Criticism Unit - "Easy A"
Writing Feedbackcollege13 - Dec 25, 2012 / hongyen2192 - Dec 25, 2012
|Changing jobs frequently?I feel it's good to continue at least for six years (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 25, 2012
|'Guitar is my friend' - Essay on my hobby of playing guitar
4 - It seems like you play guitar as well, cool!! Glad I can have comments from other guitar player....
Writing Feedbackhanksze - Nov 20, 2012 / hanksze - Dec 25, 2012
|External/ internal Reasons for School dropouts & possible measures ;IELTS
4 - Hi, I think you can talk about the mesures in the same sequence as the resons you listed external:...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Dec 23, 2012 / christyzhongs - Dec 25, 2012
|my perspective on how one should live life to obtain happiness and success!
Writing Feedbackaaldana1 - Dec 24, 2012 / Millin Gabani - Dec 25, 2012
|( IELTS essay) Advertisements encourages to buy unwanted things?
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Dec 21, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 25, 2012
|Studying abroad or in our own country? Both options have plus and minus results
NEW - Question: The idea of going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. However, while it...
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|Magical Girl Warrior; Sailor moon essay
7 - I don't watch the show, but you should just bring out more of your personality in your essay if...
Writing Feedbacksailorjupiter - Dec 24, 2012 / NRessay - Dec 24, 2012
|Main function of universities; Well-rounded graduates
3 - Hi, I like your conclusion. clear state your ideas. I feel the below sentence is a bit strange....
Writing FeedbackFrenzyzqq - Dec 24, 2012 / christyzhongs - Dec 24, 2012
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