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|Multiple short school-free days or one long vacation for children?
3 - Ahh, thank you very much for the review of my essay. I am slowly learning from my mistakes, nonetheless,...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 13, 2018 / jalp - May 25, 2018
|Increasing the prices of fuels are the only way to reduce its consumption and pressure on the world
2 - Hi, make sure to always include the complete prompt so we can determine if you have addressed it in...
Writing Feedbacklamtuyen0610 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|The given diagram illustrates the process of brick making [Writing task 1]
4 - Yes, treating is not the same as handling. Think of a water treatment plant, where water is filtered and...
Writing Feedbackphongdang04 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|People have different views about what young individuals should do when they leave high school.
Writing Feedbackthaoduyen - May 18, 2018 / thaoduyen - May 23, 2018
|Effect of technology. Do the advantages of the online business meetings outweigh the disadvantages ?
2 - Mai, the issue is not about online tools. It is about online business meetings. Your reference to business tools...
Writing Feedbackmailoc - May 20, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|IELTS GT Essay - The use of cellular phones has negatively impacted person to person communication
2 - Neha, opinion discussions in the opening statement is only acceptable in the direct question essay. Unfortunately, this essay that...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|Unequality in this world; Ielts topic: The gap between the rich and the poor. Problems and solutions
2 - Hi, it is important that you include the complete prompt along with your essay. That is the only way...
Writing Feedbackjenniferngo - May 20, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 23, 2018
|With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper-books-What are the advantages and disadvantages
2 - Hi, I think you did a pretty good job of addressing the prompt until your final paragraph. The prompt...
Writing Feedbackwoemam - May 20, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 22, 2018
|Solution for traffic - providing free public transport 24 hours per day, and seven days a week
3 - Nguyen, the essay that you wrote is not going to get a passing score because your whole approach to...
Writing Feedbackphuonglinhng23 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|Teaching a foundation of logical reasoning gives more to a moral society that teaching morality
2 - Mohit, this is a seriously flawed GRE essay that cannot gain any score higher than a 2 for the...
Writing Feedbackmvarma - May 21, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT A SOCIETY MUST PUT IT'S OVERALL SUCCESS BEFORE PEOPLE.
3 - Hi, firstly, thank so much for a detailed review. On going into the details of the mistakes , what...
Writing Feedbackjaimatadi90 - May 19, 2018 / jaimatadi90 - May 22, 2018
|Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss Advantages, Disadvantages & opinion.
4 - @Holt, thank you for providing detailed feedback. I do not have a tutor, but I follow an online blog...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 10, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 22, 2018
|Gift giving should not be encouraged because of waste. What extent do you agree or disagree with it?
2 - Hello! You have some good ideas for the content, but the structural framework of most sentences are incorrect...
Writing FeedbackPemo Hoang - May 18, 2018 / DoctorWho - May 21, 2018
|The free information, available on the internet, is double-edged sword. It can be helpful or harmful
3 - Wasel, I hope that you are just writing this essay as an English writing practice activity because if you...
Writing Feedbackwasel - May 17, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|An uncharged service as a part of high school programs
2 - Wendy, the first mistake that you made in the writing of this essay is that your opening presentation did...
Writing Feedbackwendy900327 - May 14, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|Young people causing trouble often. The reason/solution of juvenile delinquency
Writing FeedbackCong19082001 - May 21, 2018 / chidau - May 21, 2018
|Computer is being used more and more popular in every field, especially in education
2 - Truc, the minimum word requirement for the Task 2 IELTS essay is 250 words delivered in a 5 paragraph...
Writing Feedbackbaotruc - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Fast Food is Killing America One Combo Meal at a Time
2 - @bultmlisaj when you write an academic research paper, do the writing from the third person point of view. You...
Writing Feedbackbultmlisaj - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Passengers on London Underground per hour, from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. - IELTS Task 1
2 - Sil, there are 2 mistakes in this essay. The first, is that Your opening and closing paragraphs are run...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 12, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|People tend to live alone which may have both beneficial and detrimental effects
3 - Nguyen, this is a single opinion essay that you opted to discuss as a double point of view. That...
Writing FeedbackToantranchauquoc - May 10, 2018 / Holt - May 19, 2018
|Explain some possible reasons and solutions for the issue of obesity - IELTS writing task 2
3 - David, the main problem with your essay is that you began the discussion of the given topic in the...
Writing FeedbackDavid Doan - May 9, 2018 / Holt - May 18, 2018
|Could taxation decrease fast food consumption? - IELTS - Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 13, 2018 / Ann777 - May 15, 2018
|Social status and material possions as the best parameters to judge the people's value?
2 - Please write the prompt of the essay in the start. To be honest the complete essay appears to be...
Writing Feedbacklhyang - May 13, 2018 / Rizwan89 - May 13, 2018
|Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity/IETLS task one
Writing Feedbackwonderinwander - May 10, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 11, 2018
|MOTIVATING OTHERS FOR ARMED FORCES
2 - Hi, here are my suggestions: time and again and that stated, 'The Military ... joined themilitary I...
Writing Feedbackresalat - May 4, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 11, 2018
|DISCUSS- If living in a country where you have to speak different language can cause social problems
Writing FeedbackAnn777 - May 9, 2018 / forsil - May 9, 2018
|Smacking children is the best form of discipline. - IELTs writing task 2.
3 - Quang, this essay will receive an immediate failing score based on the prompt deviation that you created. The essay...
Writing Feedbackrotlata01 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|A competition entry: An important person in history
2 - Loc, this essay indicates information that covers only the reason why this person became famous. It does not give...
Writing Feedbackkakaloc1681998 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|Help ! Ielts writing task 1 about the percentage of men and women regular exercise
2 - Dorothy, this analytical essay will receive an automatic failing score due to the lack of word count. You failed...
Writing Feedbackso11123 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 8, 2018
|Pollution and countries development - IELTS - Writing Task 2
4 - Thank you Holt, I have now searched how to structure different typologies of Writing Task 2 in IELTS and...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 6, 2018 / forsil - May 7, 2018
|Show reasons why young people should not leave school before the age of 18
2 - Hi trifecta, is this a Essay for IELTS/TOEFL? If you provide us the purpose it will be easier...
Writing Feedbacktrifecta - May 6, 2018 / forsil - May 6, 2018
|The crime is still increasing - how to stop this? Teach criminals a lesson.
Writing Feedbackbollbat5566 - May 6, 2018 / bollbat5566 - May 6, 2018
|An ongoing discourse on whether children playing computer games is inherently a bad thing or not
3 - @martmaye Currently, there is an ongoing discourse ... awkward sentence end OR sentence fragment (unsure) Second paragraph:...
Writing Feedbackmartmaye - May 2, 2018 / tuedearerbluejay - May 3, 2018
|Looking for more other measures (than petrol price) to resolve problems with traffic and pollution
2 - Dung, this is an extent essay. So you need to provide a response that has an emotional extent to...
Writing Feedbackdungdevil216 - May 3, 2018 / Holt - May 3, 2018
|Overseas Study Tour is Worthwhile for Young Students
NEW - pre-school children and elementary school students abroad Although many people think that study tour programs for pre-school children...
Writing FeedbackCharlotte TTTT - May 3, 2018 / — -
|It is argued that the attainment of goals is often determined by the factor of fortune.
Writing FeedbackQuaAng - May 2, 2018 / QuaAng - May 3, 2018
|The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong
2 - @zandu, your essay has good vocabulary and examples, but Introduction is too long. If you can break it down...
Writing Feedbackzandu - Apr 29, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|"How does the increase in the availability of information influence life in today's world?"
Writing FeedbackHoffmann161 - May 1, 2018 / Hoffmann161 - May 2, 2018
|Human activity has had a negative impact on our planet
2 - If you are writing for IELTS, please avoid sentences like "Although I am more favor ... his essay will...
Writing Feedbacktrunghau - May 1, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|The rich are getting richer but the poor are getting poorer. What is the reason for this situation?
2 - Trung, I cannot mark this test because you did not indicate what kind of test you are taking. There...
Writing FeedbackMai Quoc Trung - Apr 30, 2018 / Holt - May 1, 2018
|TOEFL Writing "Public libraries are no longer useful!"
2 - Zheng, you must change all the wording of the first paragraph. You cannot borrow any portion from the original...
Writing Feedbacknickbigbang - Apr 30, 2018 / Holt - May 1, 2018
|Provide examples of solutions to reduce traffic in big cities
2 - Dao, this is a pretty good direct response essay. The prompt that you provided, along with the discussion instructions...
Writing Feedbacklvddqt - Apr 29, 2018 / Holt - Apr 30, 2018
|Free online download. Positive or negative?
3 - Thank you Holt for your detailed assessment. I will work on the key points that you mentioned. Although with...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 28, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 29, 2018
|Should animal experiments be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer?
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice! So for this prompt, can i use the following structure: 1. Paraphrase...
Writing FeedbackThisisJanice - Apr 27, 2018 / ThisisJanice - Apr 29, 2018
|Your company organizes a sports event for a local community. LETTER
3 - You need to stop putting a title for your letters. The IELTS test does not require you to give...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 28, 2018 / Holt - Apr 29, 2018
|The best of the best inventions for the last decade - PTE writing
2 - Hi Peter, The quality of an academic essay is measured by its complexity; how cogent and concrete are the...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Apr 27, 2018 / abdo65619 - Apr 28, 2018
|What is better: work only three days a week for long hours or five days a week for shorter hours?
3 - Ling, the weakness of your TOEFL essay starts with your first paragraph. The introduction of the discussion topic and...
Writing FeedbackMaiya - Apr 27, 2018 / Holt - Apr 28, 2018
|IETLS Writing Task 2: The measures to improve waste management through recycling
3 - I noticed that you have missed incidentally some commas Therefore,when substantial ... Also, the question is asking you...
Writing Feedbackkhalit - Apr 27, 2018 / PeterBrown - Apr 27, 2018
|Junk Food Is Harmful To Teenagers
4 - You need to make good points of reasoning to support your stand in the topic. "Make local dishes" is...
Writing Feedbackderin - Apr 22, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 27, 2018
|Why so many children work instead of going to school? Child labor
2 - Joze, are you writing this for an English test or just for an English writing class? I am going...
Writing FeedbackJozelearner - Apr 26, 2018 / Holt - Apr 27, 2018
|Animals are being used in medical researchers
2 - There are 2 topics for combined discussion in this essay. These topics are medical research and product safety tests....
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 26, 2018 / Holt - Apr 27, 2018
|You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Letter
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 25, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 27, 2018
|Essay about the fraudulents
Writing Feedbackdd_ee - Apr 26, 2018 / dd_ee - Apr 27, 2018
|What is better: participating in different outdoor activities or just spending time at home?
2 - for me, your essay is well organized. there may be some grammatical errors like: In additions, I stand...
Writing FeedbackQuynhAnhHo - Apr 25, 2018 / curiouscat - Apr 26, 2018
|Ielts Writing task 2 about Married women and teens
2 - Hi so11123, I thought your writing was pretty understandable in this essay. Maybe your thesis statement could have been...
Writing Feedbackso11123 - Apr 25, 2018 / TJLuschen - Apr 25, 2018
|Many students attempt to study abroad in foreign countries - merits and demerits of such decision
4 - @hassonmax some corrections are bellow Studying abroad refers is a lucrative way to studying educate those...
Writing Feedbackhassonmax - Apr 24, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 25, 2018
|More advantages than disadvantages of life in a house compared with living in an apartment
6 - Living in house(Bad) : 1.Consume energy E.g. If your house has a side-walk, you have to shovel snow. 2....
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 22, 2018 / so11123 - Apr 25, 2018
|The Earth is facing a huge environmental problem such as climate change
2 - In your essay, you should clearly tell the control measures that government should use to reduce the future impact...
Writing Feedbackgauhar_tem - Apr 22, 2018 / Wanyabanda - Apr 24, 2018
|TOEFL writing task 2: Which of the two approaches should busy parents spend with their children?
3 - Sera, when you are asked "Which of the two methods do you prefer?" you are being asked to pick...
Writing Feedbackpepe33 - Apr 22, 2018 / Holt - Apr 23, 2018
|Funds for building a sophisticated railway network.
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