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|IELTS writing-international organisations should provide poor countries
14 - Miumiu0422, I suggested that because your reasoning in paragraph 3, 4 and 5 are advocating both sides- "agree" and...
Writing Feedbackmiumiu0422 - Jul 3, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 4, 2012
|'unnecessory and unethical' - DEATH PENALTY ESSENTAL OR NOT?
7 - THANKS AHMAD MAY DOD BLESS YOU Now I understand what you meant.I will try to adapt your ideas and...
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 2, 2012 / jobymonpj - Jul 4, 2012
|'the depth and the width of the Brim river' - GRE Argumentative
2 - some more flaws; # the quantity of basket found in the village across the river. Is it only a...
Writing Feedbackroshb - Jul 3, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 4, 2012
|GREW issue topic:law to protect remaining wilderness against economic gain
2 - I could not understand that which paragraph was the introduction, but I thought what I quoted above was...
Writing FeedbackRamesh A - Jul 4, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 4, 2012
|'I must learn from my father' - Academic writing for Ielts
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Jul 3, 2012 / sally awada - Jul 4, 2012
|Some items such as clothes or furniture can be made by hand or by machine?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 3, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 4, 2012
|People need government's help or not.
2 - Hi, The essay contains only 211 words, while u should write at least 250 words..You can use a free...
Writing FeedbackJeslyn - Jul 4, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 4, 2012
|IELTS (academic) city living in the 21 century is stressful
7 - In either case, you are free to express your opinion. You need to either agree. disagree or take a...
Writing FeedbackYurine - Jul 2, 2012 / dumi - Jul 3, 2012
|"Do you agree/disagree that teenagers should work part time job?" - TOEFL Writing
4 - Thanks a lot. I struggle much in grammar and using the right vocabulary. I just discovered that I tend...
Writing Feedbackgiovani - Jun 29, 2012 / giovani - Jul 3, 2012
|IELTS: Stressful jobs and long working day_problem and solutions
7 - I've taken all your suggestions into account and will make the best out of them to improve this one...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 1, 2012 / April April - Jul 2, 2012
|[Ielts Essay] Single Careeer vs Multiple career (A new fasion)
3 - Hi imagirl, There seems to be a lot of grammatical errors. Here's my correction to the first paragraph....
Writing Feedbackimagirl - Jul 2, 2012 / peterc - Jul 2, 2012
|IELTS GT -- should governments be responsible to help the unemployed and homeless
4 - Hi bingle2012, After reading your essay, I am confused that in the first paragraph you state "it is...
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jun 30, 2012 / peterc - Jul 2, 2012
|'health is the most important thing' - fast food restaurants or not
NEW - The number of fast food restaurants has increased over the last few years. Some people are very anxious about...
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 2, 2012 / — -
|My (Ever-Changing) Neighborhood - Windows on Williams
Writing Feedbacklafortuna - Jul 1, 2012 / lafortuna - Jul 1, 2012
|'Talk is cheap' -the way modern communication shapes the way people communicate
2 - I like the theme here... we communicate more but say less. I'll correct the run on thesis sentence at...
Writing FeedbackPh1lla - Jul 1, 2012 / EF_Kevin - Jul 1, 2012
|Argumentative Essay: Global Warming is simply part of nature's cycle.
2 - That is a wonderful essay but i know there definitely be people disagreeing with you so i suggest you...
Writing Feedbackpuppylove261 - Jul 1, 2012 / knan43 - Jul 1, 2012
|'Better future but lost family?' - advantages and disadvantages of studying aboard
4 - Either one of these works, but using both makes it wordy. You should probably go with "To begin...
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 30, 2012 / rsr1919 - Jul 1, 2012
|Is it more difficult to teach children than it was in the past?
NEW - Nowadays, life is more and more developed, children also have better life conditions than their parents in the past....
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|Causes of increasing spectator violence In international games . comment .
Writing FeedbackSandy _Angle - Jul 1, 2012 / Sandy _Angle - Jul 1, 2012
|IELTS: People migrating to cities causing problems?
9 - --------------- usually, IELTS and TOEFL essays expect you to support your reasons with examples. That is generally expressed...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jun 30, 2012 / dumi - Jul 1, 2012
|IELTS-children in wealthy and poor families....
5 - Well.... here you talk about adults who have been children of wealthy parents. That's why the correction ''are...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 29, 2012 / dumi - Jun 30, 2012
|Go out to work (both parents have to work nowadays)
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 30, 2012
|IELTS-drug use in children (parents should be more attentive to their children)
2 - The structure of the body is not appropriate. The topic asked you to write about "causes", "effects", and "solutions"....
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 30, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 30, 2012
|LIFE IN A BIG CITY (disadvantages)
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jun 28, 2012 / Silentlips - Jun 29, 2012
|IELTS：Modern community life
7 - 1. Is it necessary to use firstly, secondly instead of first, second? The use of "firstly" in academic writing...
Writing Feedbackwoyunsi3000 - Jun 28, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 29, 2012
|THE CHILD IS FATHER OF MAN
Writing FeedbackSilentlips - Jun 29, 2012 / Silentlips - Jun 29, 2012
|IELTS- factors for teenagers to commit a crime
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 28, 2012 / Slim shady - Jun 29, 2012
|As the delegate of Poland, and to share the idea about Euro crisis
Writing Feedbackecho5016 - Jun 28, 2012 / tau - Jun 29, 2012
|It is like making comments for a book without reading it; Some judge others by external appearance
Writing Feedbackgiovani - Jun 29, 2012 / canis89 - Jun 29, 2012
|"The function of university" ielts writing
6 - I think I just wrote a typical Chinese essay~most Chinese students will write with the same template and not...
Writing Feedbacktiffanyboa - Jun 28, 2012 / tiffanyboa - Jun 29, 2012
|Children should be allowed and guided to partake in free time activities
3 - You have good points to be discussed. I think your grammar and vocabulary are good as well. I suggest...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Jun 28, 2012 / giovani - Jun 29, 2012
|Alternative forms of transport and international laws on controlling automobiles are necessary
4 - Thank you very much for your swift reply and careful correction. It's so helpful. As you mentioned, I have...
Writing FeedbackPasaAnkit - Jun 28, 2012 / PasaAnkit - Jun 28, 2012
|Hope is the buoy of life
Writing Feedbackkashifalvi - Jun 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jun 28, 2012
|Toefl: 'I can accumulate wealth' - purchase either a house or a business
3 - Prefer therefore or hence to so; that will make the essay more official. You can also use some great...
Writing Feedbackkrishnakant - Jun 21, 2012 / echo5016 - Jun 28, 2012
|SOCIETY essay; In China students have to take the classes at least 9 hours a day
NEW - Some people think that teachers at school are more responsible for children's intellectual and social development than parents. To...
Writing Feedbackzhangyebiaoba - Jun 28, 2012 / — -
|'good writer loves his/her characters' - AP English Essay
Writing Feedbackgulleyluke - Jun 27, 2012 / gulleyluke - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS-travel, increase tension...
2 - learn different nations' [/i]traditions and cultures while others believe that it provides rising tension among people from different races[i]....
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 28, 2012 / mppaniz - Jun 28, 2012
|Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they going.
NEW - Please check my essay. I'm so nervous now and i don't know how many mistakes are there. Thank you...
Writing FeedbackMadeka - Jun 28, 2012 / — -
|IELTS TASK 2: People gaining more weight_problem and solutions
2 - Nowadays it is undeniable that the average weight of people is increasing, leading to the decrease in their health...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jun 28, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 28, 2012
|'selecting a city as my favorite place' - TOEFL:Where to Visit
2 - Hi! I just edited some of your errors. Others are more courageous andtowards undertaking the risk of traveling...
Writing Feedbackmamad60 - Jun 28, 2012 / niesaysi - Jun 28, 2012
|TOEFL (Business should hire employees for their entire lives)
Writing Feedbackvickey - Jun 13, 2012 / Mark Jose - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS2 - 'demanding sports and special diets and physical fitness'
Writing Feedbackdadudi - Jun 27, 2012 / zhangyebiaoba - Jun 28, 2012
|Writing an Essay on Unfairness - How it can shape our perspective on life
3 - Rigid but wordy.. Try to be concise as You've succeded in electrifying the idea! Please comment on...
Writing Feedbackaliciadylewski - Jun 27, 2012 / Opara - Jun 28, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2: PUBLIC TRANSPORT SHOULD BE FREE OF CHARGE
2 - This section has several issues; First, it sounds like you are going out of topic because you...
Writing Feedbackcryingshell - Jun 27, 2012 / dumi - Jun 28, 2012
|My life changed the morning I witnessed my friend have a diabetic seizure.
5 - The opening line is quite good. You're a good writer already! bang up job! When you finish writing it,...
Writing Feedbacknivanova889 - Jun 27, 2012 / Vineesha - Jun 27, 2012
|IELTS- children development and modern games
2 - It is undeniablewidely accepted that nowadaysmodern children's- games are totally different withthan the traditional games that kids entertained with....
Writing Feedbackmppaniz - Jun 27, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 27, 2012
|IELTS-Overpopulation - What problems can it cause and what are the possible solutions
NEW - thanks everybody. sorry, let me know band score by the way. Overpopulation. What problems does overpopulation cause? Suggest...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 27, 2012 / — -
|IELTS- Discussion & Opinion about an essay on how the new sport objects impacting people's health.
5 - hi wellwell! it is really good job, keep it. you have enough source of academic words and it is...
Writing Feedbackwellwell - Jun 17, 2012 / Slim shady - Jun 27, 2012
|Cities become unpleasent places....
NEW - It is an IELTS essay. I need more comments. thank you in advance!!! Many cities have become less...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jun 27, 2012 / — -
|IELTS ESSAY2: helping of wealthy countries to poor ones
4 - i completely concur with deepakbaniya. the first paragraph of the body part need to be rewritten....
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jun 27, 2012 / Slim shady - Jun 27, 2012
|Topic: whether convenience food will replace traditional food
4 - It is believed that convenience food will become more popular and eventually replace the traditional food and the conventional...
Writing Feedbackhallucinate - Jun 27, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 27, 2012
|Persuasive essay - Why you should exercise
4 - More than (not that) 1.6 billion... " it's proven that exercising can improve self-esteem and confidence" THIS IS...
Writing Feedbackradair1014222 - Jun 26, 2012 / Opara - Jun 27, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"Teachers should take courses or training to upgrade"
4 - and teachers are the most important person(u should use a plural word here) ...after parents to makeshape ...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jun 26, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jun 26, 2012
|the age of the competition - IELTS - technologies and the demand for services change
6 - It has become a new /trend/ (requirement ) to learn more than one skill for (successful) career. In this...
Writing Feedbackdnile2012 - Jun 25, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jun 26, 2012
|Student can be severely influenced from school by unsuitable schedules and stresses
5 - @land1111: Thanks for your comments. What do you mean by the first sentence: "but your opinion does not off...
Writing FeedbackPhat Tran Van - Jun 25, 2012 / Phat Tran Van - Jun 26, 2012
|IELTS: London, Tokyo, New York, Madrid, Frankfurt - Average house prices in 5 cities.
Writing Feedbackmppaniz - Jun 26, 2012 / dumi - Jun 26, 2012
|Flying Piper Warrior ii in Malaysia
NEW - I am actually searching for " Raisin" who wrote a very touching essay back in 2008 with regards to...
Writing Feedbackcwchawt2000 - Jun 26, 2012 / — -
|'applying to several different schools is the better choice' -essay on college choice
2 - You follow the expected structure of TOEFL essays. Your introdutory para is great in which you give a brief...
Writing FeedbackShali95 - Jun 25, 2012 / dumi - Jun 25, 2012
|TOEFL Ess; development of housing or industry is also profitable but not healthy
4 - Thank you so much Duminda..:) That was very useful... I will try to insert that sentences and rewrite...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jun 22, 2012 / ana_p - Jun 25, 2012
|Is it right to exclude females and males from certain professions because of gender?
2 - Good argument, but the essay is missing clarity and flow. I have fixed some of the grammatical errors, but...
Writing Feedbackmik2202 - Jun 25, 2012 / jaybird88 - Jun 25, 2012
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