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|'Understanding your child' - Essay about three things good parents do
2 - The second thing is too short I think. Maybe you can add that parents should give their children more...
Writing FeedbackJasmine92 - Oct 12, 2012 / lucy123 - Oct 27, 2012
|(choosing fields of study based on job availability) - GRE issue
Writing FeedbackHalehh - Oct 25, 2012 / Halehh - Oct 26, 2012
|IElTS: 'fast food as an alternative'; the average weight of people is increasing
NEW - Hi everybody, here is my second essay over here wish you guys help me in elevating my writing level...
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|Gandhi - About a World Leader
5 - Sure. He would be the perfect example of a leader if you feel that he inspired others through his...
Writing Feedbackinform - May 31, 2012 / admission2012 - Oct 24, 2012
|Nation should attempt to regulate school curriculum - one for all students
NEW - "A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum" Discuss the extent to...
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|Apartment Vs House; depends on individual financial status and areas of comfort
2 - Living in an apartment undoubtedly has many advantages. First of all, it is cheaper to rent or buy an...
Writing FeedbackNemoo - Oct 12, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|This is my GRE awa practice essay - advance Thanks for Review
2 - All in all, pretty solid grammar wise and some great word choices (exaggerated, libertine, digress) I would do a...
Writing Feedbacknakul123 - Oct 19, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|too much fat, salt and sugar; Weight of people is increasing, health decreasing
3 - Hi Gangster777 You have pretty good ideas for the body paragraphs. However, the problem is that your essay doesn't...
Writing FeedbackGangster777 - Oct 21, 2012 / April April - Oct 24, 2012
|IELTS essay: Whether reading is better than TV or internet?
2 - It seems much better now. Thanks very much to you, Elena. I have some questions here: 1. Basically Honestly...
Writing Feedbackbwithu - Oct 23, 2012 / bwithu - Oct 24, 2012
|IELTS TASK2 Pros and cons of building nuclear power plants
5 - In my opinion, the very first thing is that you'd better write more (IELTS Task 2 essay requires at...
Writing Feedbackz1z1z1z1 - Oct 9, 2012 / Chicken - Oct 24, 2012
|'People should not work as slow as turtles' - TOEFL Writing
NEW - Could anyone help me check this and correct my grammatical errors? Big thanks. :) Topic: In today's world,...
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|IELTS Essay : Reading fiction or watching movies : Introduction only
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 23, 2012 / w_even - Oct 23, 2012
|Support the arts or protect the environment? 'stop this massacre of the nature'
2 - [quote=juliamedeiross]The humans being hashave been deterioratingdoing lot of damage to the environment for a long time, and nowadays something...
Writing Feedbackjuliamedeiross - Oct 21, 2012 / dumi - Oct 22, 2012
|Going overseas for university study
5 - Countries try to exemplify their greatest traits and most beautiful architecture to entice internationalists to come and visit them....
Writing FeedbackSayed Naeem - Mar 6, 2010 / caseySchooling - Oct 21, 2012
|My father and my eldest brother shaped my personality into what I am today
NEW - Please proofread my essay and correct if there is any grammatical mistake. Thank you in advanced. I have to...
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|GRE Analytical Argument Task: Memo to WWAC station
Writing Feedbackjackketch - Oct 19, 2012 / westway50 - Oct 21, 2012
|Media Analysis Essay - Vietnam War
2 - If you want to be more specific you could say, for example; that ...as independent news organizations presented real...
Writing FeedbackJustawriter7 - Oct 5, 2012 / nelsond1960 - Oct 21, 2012
|An aberrant curriculum in every other state of a nation would certainly be a reason of chaos
Writing Feedbackaaqibmir007 - Sep 30, 2012 / chiragjain - Oct 21, 2012
|Essay about my close friend, Sasha
4 - I really like how you`re approaching this piece of writing but I found that there were too many line...
Writing FeedbackSofi - Oct 21, 2012 / lollypop12 - Oct 21, 2012
|[TOEFL] Choose friends who are similar to yourself or different from yourself?
2 - We all have our own friends, and they can be either similar or different from us. Friends who are...
Writing Feedbackcrz_keane - Oct 20, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 21, 2012
|Females & males education [IELTS] Writing Task 1_2
2 - The charts show the number of girls per 100 boys in all levels of education. Compared with nineteen's nineteenth,...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Oct 1, 2012 / goldmanswalking - Oct 21, 2012
|'Life standards and food preparation these days' - criticize my essay
Writing FeedbackDcool - Oct 14, 2012 / humanx - Oct 20, 2012
|IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time
7 - Sure I will practice more :), thank you dumi. @Mriytunjay : IELTS task 2 writing requires at least 250...
Writing Feedbackdonniedarko - Oct 17, 2012 / donniedarko - Oct 20, 2012
|[TOEFL] Attending a live performance vs. TV? 'live football game at a stadium'
NEW - Hi everyone, I'm preparing for TOEFL iBT test. Please help me to improve my writing skills. This is my...
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|'It's not that easy' - The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad
2 - (The example is not that effective: say some shortcoming those are not easily available and accessible in your country...
Writing FeedbackLinhSua - Oct 19, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Oct 20, 2012
|'county tournament' - narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience
Writing Feedbackalexgrey - Oct 17, 2012 / alexgrey - Oct 19, 2012
|IELTS Exam: people and technology
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|'Reducing the effort' - high salary or enjoyable job essay
5 - I think you should check your grammatical structure. See the corrections i made to the paragraph just above the...
Writing Feedbacksuperhero - Oct 17, 2012 / emmasaintly - Oct 19, 2012
|"International Study" - Higher education should be open to all (discuss)
2 - Chhan Naroth, I completely agree with you. This applies to me because, I am from a not very rich...
Writing Feedbackchhan naroth - Oct 18, 2012 / megsters99 - Oct 18, 2012
|I want to improve my writing for IELTS exam.Kindly indicate my mistakes in the essay
2 - But, these days there isIn recent years,there is an increase in sales oftrend of prepared and processed food, known...
Writing Feedbacknuroon - Oct 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 18, 2012
|'Effects of government's spending on culture and education' [IELTS] Writing Task 1_1
5 - I think it always helps to write the effects of something. You could do what cooldudebill suggested, and on...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Sep 24, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 18, 2012
|news editors; country condition, citizens education, living condition; influence
Writing Feedbackademcelik - Oct 17, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 17, 2012
|'unsolved trouble' - Traffic Congestion leads to several critical impacts
3 - First off, you're writing in English. I believe Thai is probably your first language. I cannot write one word...
Writing Feedbackraiyan - Oct 17, 2012 / wesleysuhler - Oct 17, 2012
|'Aerobic excercises and modest health' - Dieting can change a person's life
Writing FeedbackFalahatgar - Dec 8, 2011 / Zaara - Oct 17, 2012
|Happiness directly relates to economic success
4 - Jenny,thanks very much for your comment. i think i need to insert some transitional word such as " firstly,secondly...etc"...
Writing Feedbackpolsestart - Oct 16, 2012 / polsestart - Oct 16, 2012
|Social Networking - how does it affect us? Need third body paragraph and conclusion.
3 - Hello bansmart06, The reason why you are stuck at your third paragraph is because the scope of your...
Writing Feedbackbansmart06 - Sep 29, 2012 / nanoflame - Oct 16, 2012
|"Teachers' role in the classroom"; IELTS
5 - if I want to give an example in the first paragraph in the body like this: " Accordingly, they...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Oct 14, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 16, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: How to define Happiness
2 - Some individuals feel happy when they have intimate relations (relationship) with (their) friends and family members, while others become...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 16, 2012 / mahsaa - Oct 16, 2012
|Toefl: Students working while studying? More disadvantages than advantages
3 - Certainly dumi is right you need to support your arguments with real life examples. You can write short parapgraphs...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012 / williamcosta - Oct 16, 2012
|ielts writing, traffic & environmental problems. NEED to improve to Band 7-8
3 - This sounds like an incomplete sentence. Whilst and While (both mean the same) function mostly as a conjuction...
Writing Feedbackafra514 - Oct 2, 2012 / dumi - Oct 16, 2012
|writting a parapraph about Vietnamese occasion .
NEW - Tet is the most important celebration of Vietnamese culture. It is an opportunity to reunite family and enjoy many...
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|sat esay: Does the process of doing something matters more than the outcome?
Writing Feedbackeason chen - Sep 26, 2012 / MoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2 - Sport man makes more money than other. Discuss both views
3 - To be success in --- To ACHIEVE success in (it must be either BE SUCCESSFUL or ACHIEVE SUCCESS) Many...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 10, 2012 / April April - Oct 16, 2012
|narrative essay : the wonderful annoucement
Writing Feedbackquyensunny - Oct 14, 2012 / quyensunny - Oct 15, 2012
|Essay about The Child is father of the Man
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|Over-reliance on technology & ability of humas to think for themselves
2 - Hi! I think it's great you are trying to improve your writing skills. What I noticed in your essay...
Writing Feedbackshkh23 - Sep 30, 2012 / abbieflis - Oct 14, 2012
|Human cloning - is it moral or immoral?
2 - The meaning of the humans cloning is that scientist creates the lab human. They copy the genetic real human,...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Sep 29, 2012 / Ownpudi - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS :I would prefer to run my business than to own a new house
3 - Thank you phasetwozero for your valuable comments. I am unable to understand what is the problem with following...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 14, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|Is giving the same grade to every student in a group a good way to evaluate students?
5 - One more thing: your second last paragraph presents the opposite view. I am not sure about this but I...
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Oct 13, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1: GRaph/ consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat
2 - Hi, Williamcosta "Overall, there was a gradual decrease...." => I think you should replay Overall with In the case...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 13, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 14, 2012
|Dilemma whether it is right decision to make Free health care for the POOR
Writing Feedbackfizuli - Oct 14, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 14, 2012
|Problems in relationships have led to separation ; Conflict and Relationship
5 - As this is my first essay I really require your reviews on structure , grammer , sentences , punctuations....
Writing Feedbackiamtrying - Oct 8, 2012 / iamtrying - Oct 13, 2012
|Daily schedules and the glorious life are main reasons that the individuals work to gain money
2 - I do agree that some people work only for money. However, there are also those who work to make...
Writing Feedbackuzbek_sheikh - Oct 12, 2012 / sophiezhu - Oct 13, 2012
|IELTS 'university students' tuition fees - beneficial to the public
Writing Feedbackcarole - Oct 11, 2012 / carole - Oct 12, 2012
|Average weight of people is increasing, causes and solutions; 'burgers & pizzas'
3 - Your essay is good 1- Good vocabulary. 2- Good supporting ideas. however you have to think about the essay...
Writing Feedbackwilliamhayt - Oct 12, 2012 / Nemoo - Oct 12, 2012
|If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need talent or motivation?
3 - Thank you :)...
Writing FeedbackDiana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012 / Diana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012
|SAT: disagreement makes progress
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012 / jineshwar1995 - Oct 12, 2012
|(SAT Essay) Can knowledge be a burden? (grade it based on the SAT criteria)
4 - excellent writing skill and ideas are good, but the structure of the article is a little bit messy....
Writing FeedbackGuest - Sep 30, 2012 / beibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012
|'Farmers and unemployment' - Factory near my community TOEFL
2 - This sentence has several issues; first grammer and then about clarity and its presentation. These issues tend...
Writing Feedbackhang123 - Oct 11, 2012 / dumi - Oct 12, 2012
|Narrative essay about the time I went on a date with my current boyfriend / "Shelby"
2 - What is the prompt? For the first paragraph, I'd recheck the punctuation. You might want to replace some semicolons...
Writing Feedbacklourdesl - Oct 1, 2012 / zeppy1995 - Oct 11, 2012
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