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|TOEFL Essay: "Before an important exam, do you think it is better to prepare for ..."
2 - an introduction should include Motivator, thesis statement, your opinion, and blueprint. I think you should improve the structure...
Writing Feedbackzinboo - Jul 14, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 14, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"It was easy in past to identify career or job"
2 - I think you should improve the organization of the introduction. The highlighted sentence includes the points that you...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 13, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 13, 2012
|IELTS - Essay about woman's place in society
3 - There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in the society inthe last decades. Some people advocate the opinion...
Writing Feedbackhds62 - Jul 13, 2012 / Peter Piper - Jul 13, 2012
|People always leave
2 - Look sometimes in this world you are living you have to just let go if something is noloonger important...
Writing Feedbackjehona - Jul 13, 2012 / terencetufuor - Jul 13, 2012
|I would like to emphasize - all we have now resulted from the past
NEW - Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or...
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|'dancing is important and influential' - our culture
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement, dancing plays an important role in our culture? Each...
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|A POSİTİVE OUTLOOK and people's lives
3 - thank you for checking and could you please explain that how I can improve my sentence sturucture and can...
Writing Feedbackccrnn - Jul 13, 2012 / ccrnn - Jul 13, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"Influence of information available on internet"
3 - --------- change the order; In ancient days, people had to travel a lot to find out information...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 13, 2012 / dumi - Jul 13, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY:Growing violence in films has affected youngsters in a negative way?
10 - You choose very important topic. Growing violence in films has affected not only youngsters but also it has affected...
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 6, 2012 / Bahrom_4474 - Jul 13, 2012
|[IELTS] People born with talent or taught later
Writing Feedbackpratikdbl - Jul 11, 2012 / pratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012
|Where do communal responsibility and individual responsibility begin and end?
6 - Everyone get stuck once in a while, Denzel. The main point is that you must try harder and you'll...
Writing Feedbackdenzelmcd - Jul 11, 2012 / KhanhZ - Jul 12, 2012
|IELTS-Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software
5 - I think one of the parts that you need to improve is giving practical examples to support your opinion,...
Writing Feedbackmiumiu0422 - Jul 4, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 12, 2012
|IELTS Topic: Predict a child to be a criminal in the future by studying his behavior
4 - Thank you 'pravi, Alicesh, deepakbaniya and smogito'. The advice that you provide is valuable and helpful. I will modify...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 11, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 12, 2012
|Teachers must have fixed and high salary regardless if they do a good job or not
2 - Good essay!! However, from my quick look 1. Check your commas, where you should put and where not....
Writing FeedbackLILUSH - Jul 12, 2012 / pratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012
|HEALTH AND HYGIENE - Many diseases can be prevented
NEW - TERENCETUFUOR HEALTH AND HYGEINE Many diseases can be prevented from having a damaging effect on the body by...
Writing Feedbackterencetufuor - Jul 12, 2012 / — -
|'money is much important' - The Main reason people go to work is to earn money
6 - I think you have been given enough corrections about your grammar, so I'm only go to suggest a few...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jul 9, 2012 / smogito - Jul 12, 2012
|'many motives' - Why go to University?
Writing FeedbackBahrom_4474 - Jul 9, 2012 / Bahrom_4474 - Jul 12, 2012
|Essay about too much payment for film and sports stars - feed back
4 - ...
Writing Feedbackpravi - Jul 11, 2012 / dumi - Jul 12, 2012
|Spending a semester in a foreign university (GRE Issue Essay)
4 - I think the content is good. U provided some good examples, but there is an important thing that...
Writing Feedbackcomputergem - Jul 11, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 12, 2012
|'gossip-based information' - toefl ibt
4 - A very impressive introduction. I introduced a small change to strengthen your flow further. One small tip...
Writing FeedbackNataschaAbra - Jul 11, 2012 / dumi - Jul 11, 2012
|IELTS: wellbeing at work
Writing Feedbackmarczawa - Jul 10, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 11, 2012
|[IELTS] - Topic:international organisations should provide technology
Writing Feedbackaimee8812 - Jul 9, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 11, 2012
|It is said that the human beings are becoming slaves of modern technology
5 - You begin the sentence with electricity and then talk about computers without establishing a link between them....
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jul 9, 2012 / dumi - Jul 11, 2012
|Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in
2 - I believe that teenagers nowadays is very difficult. But I totally agree wit you. Nice one Tau...
Writing FeedbackALI ASADI - Jul 11, 2012 / tau - Jul 11, 2012
|'coming up with solution for social problems' - essay about issues and young people
Writing FeedbackPvtValley - Jul 9, 2012 / PvtValley - Jul 10, 2012
|'our friendship is not selfish' - my paragraph on my best friends
Writing Feedbackmilkyunique999 - Jun 25, 2012 / medapplicant12 - Jul 10, 2012
|highest purpose of university education, personal or national goals?
2 - Many individuals wonder the about the highest purpose of university education. The founders of tertiary institutions all around...
Writing Feedbackjueeem - Jul 10, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jul 10, 2012
|IELTS Topic: How do organizations give help to poor countries
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 9, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 10, 2012
|IELTS; How technology has affected the types of relationships people make?
3 - introduction: Toady new technology has become as indispensable part of my life and has affected a positive and negative...
Writing Feedbackduongphuong473 - Jul 10, 2012 / ALI ASADI - Jul 10, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY:In the future, students have the choice of studying at home by using tech
5 - Dear farzin_1875 in my opinion , It will be useful if you consider some note as below: 1- take...
Writing Feedbackfarzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012 / ALI ASADI - Jul 10, 2012
|IELTS Writing task 1: Percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet
2 - Hi, the essay contains 148 words, while u should write at least 150 words. However, I think the essay...
Writing Feedbacksmogito - Jul 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 9, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY : best time usage - people visit museums when they travel to new places?
3 - These two sentences are very poor for opening your essay. They do not add value to your argument...
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 9, 2012 / dumi - Jul 9, 2012
|"my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most?
Writing Feedbacksherry_6711 - Jul 7, 2012 / sherry_6711 - Jul 9, 2012
|'forced to become my own competitor' - UCF Essay
Writing Feedbackbbird17 - Jul 7, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 9, 2012
|"our" city, bank and school district - Causal Essay, English 101
4 - Good job , and thanks for your comments Ahmad. You are always brilliant really You deserve more than 7...
Writing Feedbacklovekayliex - Jul 8, 2012 / hadi1981 - Jul 9, 2012
|LIFE SUCCEEDS IN THAT IT SEEMS TO FAIL
3 - The point depicted in the expression reveals that a person gets success in his life when he feels that...
Writing FeedbackSilentlips - Jun 30, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 9, 2012
|'camping in the mountains' - Ideal Vacation Literary Essay
4 - Well.... I just gave you my suggestions for this part of your essay in view of improving its presentation....
Writing FeedbackSharonNicole - Jul 8, 2012 / dumi - Jul 9, 2012
|"The playback: late night, Brooklyn.." - respone to a narrative
Writing Feedbacklovekayliex - Jun 12, 2012 / aspiringwriter - Jul 8, 2012
|'acceptable solutions for global village' - IELTS-Globalisation
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 8, 2012 / EF_Team - Jul 8, 2012
|Employee should have chance to select their retirement age
6 - It is quite embarrassing to talk about this issue. I know that there are a lot of problems in...
Writing FeedbackMrCuty - Jul 5, 2012 / MrCuty - Jul 8, 2012
|[IELTS] Teenagers with unpaid work is justifiable!
2 - ----- as Ahmad suggested, you better rephrase this sentence because your idea does not come out with...
Writing Feedbackpinkyjuju - Jul 8, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS-international media and cultural diversity.....
2 - -- cultural diversity means a variety of cultures in a specific region; cultural globalization actually refers to...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|Toefl essay:Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your
Writing Feedbackfarzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012 / farzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS essay: Should government immunize people compulsively?
3 - --------------Though you have issues with presenting your ideas clearly, this introductory para is in line with the expected...
Writing FeedbackTinaGu - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS essay : About factors of job satisfaction
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 7, 2012 / Paijin - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS: Should people take care of others_Discuss?
9 - Absolutely! I will consider your suggestions and write my own version for the clincher. Thank you so much, Ahmad!...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 7, 2012 / April April - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS - REWRITE - Public libraries should not provide books only
Writing Feedbackltw - Jul 7, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 8, 2012
|'outstanding sport players deserve high salaries' - Essay
NEW - TASK: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people...
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|IELTS-people who have original ideas... (scientists and innovators)
2 - For an "agree and disagree" topic, an introduction should have four main parts :1) Motivator: use interesting opening sentence...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 7, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 7, 2012
|Both parents work, bad or good??
8 - Nowadays, it is very common that both parents in a family go out to work. Some people believe...
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Jun 20, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 7, 2012
|IELTS essay : Fixed punishment for each type of crime or Flexibility in punishing?
6 - your ideas are not well-organized. you should pay attention to the topic question. in the essay you wrote...
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 5, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 7, 2012
|IELTS - REWRITE - children development and modern games
4 - The only way you can improve your speed is by practicing to write more and more essays. Also reading...
Writing Feedbackltw - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 7, 2012
|toelf essay: offering a good platform (teachers lecture)
Writing Feedbackxxy8862002 - Jul 3, 2012 / xxy8862002 - Jul 7, 2012
|The best way to achieve happiness is not to make others happy.
2 - We all are social animal. the system prevailing in this world is like no one can live by cutting...
Writing FeedbackJeslyn - Jul 6, 2012 / suggestion - Jul 7, 2012
|(Music Choice / Pop Parade) IELTS COMPARISON OF TWO NEW MUSIC SITES
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 6, 2012 / April April - Jul 7, 2012
|The skill of writing letters will disappear completely - do you agree?
2 - Mobile phones and computers , which are accompanied by thea considerable development ofin technology, have today become two...
Writing Feedbackjessicapham1612 - Jul 6, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 7, 2012
|'magnesium alloys' - The introduction of a scientific paper
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jun 15, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 6, 2012
|RENTING A HOUSE -PROS AND CONS
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 6, 2012 / dumi - Jul 6, 2012
|'science books and skill books' - What kinds of books should we read?
2 - Books are one of the best tools that help connecting the world. Nowadays, many books are established, which makes...
Writing Feedbackpinkyjuju - Jul 6, 2012 / akanjigbolahan - Jul 6, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1 BAR CHART ABOUT RENTS AND SALARIES
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