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|'Weekly money expenditure on fast food' - IELTS
NEW - Hi everybody, I really just need someone to read it over for me.This is Ä°ELTS writing task 1....
Writing Feedbackademcelik - Oct 11, 2012 / — -
|school attend: to further knowledge, to experience new things, to earn a degree
2 - to furtherget knowledge, to experience new things, and to earn a degree. use parallel structures...
Writing Feedbackmmouse - Sep 28, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|Work in a company vs. have your own business, TOEFL
NEW - Society is often divided into two groups regarding major issues involving occupation. Some people like to have their own...
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|I am preparing for TOEFL iBT - Students choice of places to live
Writing Feedbackaniketkumar - Oct 7, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|I really need help next month I have TOEFL and your comment will help me
Writing Feedbackparnian - Oct 7, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|SAT - Is it always necessary to find new solutions to problems?
Writing FeedbackJenny_ysy - Sep 28, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 10, 2012
|'Time of judgement' - college essay
Writing Feedbackjustintubbs - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE
2 - Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE Be sure to discuss each of these topics equally. If you were to...
Writing Feedbackphantan252 - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Property prices and rents affected the livelihood of many Hong Kong people?
Writing Feedbackzer000 - Sep 20, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 10, 2012
|Harmful human activity damages the Earth
2 - Sorry for my bad english because i'm still beginner with the language. I think is very interesting the comment...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 10, 2012 / Chapapote - Oct 10, 2012
|"Traditional Market"- Narration for a theme : Look before you leap
2 - Shopping with my mother in traditional market has become a nightmare for me recently. - Recently, shopping in...
Writing FeedbackAlyssa - Oct 9, 2012 / skinbag - Oct 9, 2012
|'Norwegian Philosopher Arne Naess' article correction
3 - Can anyone with good english correct this A Norwegian Philosopher Arne Naess invented the term 'Deep Ecology'. An environmental...
Writing Feedbackbat - Oct 9, 2012 / bat - Oct 9, 2012
|'A person of good moral character' - Writing Sample
Writing Feedbackgospelkeys - Oct 9, 2012 / anniejerry - Oct 9, 2012
|Essay: compare and contrast between communicating by mobile phone and letter
Writing Feedbackthao phuong - Oct 8, 2012 / thao phuong - Oct 9, 2012
|IETLS writing practice: university education-preparation for employment or knowledge?
Writing FeedbackWang Ying - Oct 5, 2012 / Wang Ying - Oct 9, 2012
|side effect to the society; Higher petrol price Vs Level of traffic & pollution
NEW - Hi, I need to improve my writing skill. kindly give me feedback so that i can improve. Pollution...
Writing Feedbackkasturib89 - Oct 9, 2012 / — -
|The process of making tea
Writing FeedbackHeina - Oct 7, 2012 / Heina - Oct 9, 2012
|IELTS: Investment in public transportation to against pollution; Agree/ Disagree
NEW - The policy to increase spending on public transportation to reduce air pollution has been common in many cities in...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 8, 2012 / — -
|visitors going to music sites / sales and prices of Coca Cola - IELTS Writing task 1
3 - the numbers of Pop Parade's guesses stay around 120.000 = he numbers of Pop Parade's guests stays around 120.000...
Writing Feedbackding - Oct 8, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 8, 2012
|Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment of crime. Others however
2 - Mankind is subject to imperfection and its own mistakes. There are to ways to live a life either honorably...
Writing Feedbackpgaur - Oct 5, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 8, 2012
|'Myths are the symbols of humans primitive cognition about the world' TOEFL ESSAY
2 - We are living in a world that isconsists of substances which are ,scientifically speaking,the productresult of the Bigbang that...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 7, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 8, 2012
|"Afraid" - Filipinos and reptiles essay
2 - Hello, Theresa) Welcome to EssayForum) Always include a topic or question of your essay next time. Your essay is...
Writing Feedbackoptimus3 - Sep 24, 2012 / KhanhZ - Oct 7, 2012
|The best aspect of the job is the money one earns
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 29, 2012 / chadenlabiad - Oct 7, 2012
|Read the selection below on glycolysis. Rewrite this in your own words
2 - splitting sugar also known as glycolisis, is split into three carbon sugar These smaller sugars are then oxidized then...
Writing Feedbackclarke13 - Sep 18, 2012 / chadenlabiad - Oct 7, 2012
|IELTS_importance of academic qualifications and personality in employment
2 - After reading your passage,in addition to some of the influent sentences,I feel you'd better think about how to make...
Writing Feedbackchfrank - Oct 7, 2012 / Jue - Oct 7, 2012
|SAT essay -Which is more powerful? Conscience Vs Money, Fame, or Power
NEW - I would like some feedback on improving this, also, I would like to know what score I would get,...
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|IELTS; parents and schools are able to share the responsibility to educate children
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 2, 2012 / April April - Oct 6, 2012
|Report on culture shock between China and French for exchange student
NEW - Hey, it is a little bit longer. Please help me look at the structure and writing. Thank you ...
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|IELTS letter: requesting some information about the scholarship
3 - jue, thanks for your suggestions by which make the viewpoint more convinced by giving more elabration on the application...
Writing Feedbackredstone - Oct 5, 2012 / redstone - Oct 6, 2012
|Nuclear Family Essay - needs a LOT of reconstructing
2 - On the first sentence i think you shld remove 'or not' because it will sound better if there's only...
Writing Feedbacksamanthaxo - Oct 5, 2012 / jomk - Oct 6, 2012
|Factors influencing job satisfaction; salary and high level position in ranking
Writing Feedbackjahan - Oct 3, 2012 / jahan - Oct 6, 2012
|Outline-- Responses in relation to the attacks of September 11
5 - Man that must be a big essay, for the general idea, try to include things about how the planes...
Writing Feedbackttc1234 - Apr 21, 2009 / saichicka39 - Oct 5, 2012
|TOEFL essay - help / technology effects
4 - internet,which -> Use space after commas internet, which is the grand an invincible product of technology of 21...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 5, 2012 / krishnakant - Oct 5, 2012
|Movies expand our knowledge and information about other countries. TOEFL Essay
2 - The last and most important but not the least reason is that movies enhance/escalate our knowledge about other countries....
Writing Feedbacknavid_zarif - Oct 5, 2012 / krishnakant - Oct 5, 2012
|IELTS: Should University education be free? 'Everything has two sides'
Writing Feedbackquy - Oct 5, 2012 / pgaur - Oct 5, 2012
|Essay about a car incident
6 - First try to focus on maintaining the structure of the essay. I mean there should be introduction which clearly...
Writing FeedbackArmo - Jan 27, 2009 / quy - Oct 5, 2012
|Government expenses for roads and highways or public transportation - TOEFL essay
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 5, 2012 / besttermpaper - Oct 5, 2012
|Sat essay; punishment as kids teaching method. Intro and Body - grade it, any ways to improve it?
2 - Hi, I made a few corrections/suggestions to your essay. Hope they help. Sorry I couldn't get the strike through...
Writing FeedbackAminemouj - Oct 4, 2012 / Duffy1513 - Oct 4, 2012
|IELTS task 2 - What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?
2 - This statements is too broad and does not establish a close link to your topic theme.... Specify the...
Writing Feedbacklavinia94 - Oct 3, 2012 / dumi - Oct 4, 2012
|IELTS - International travel and mass media: Duchess Kate topless
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|ancient humans formed rhythms by stones; traditional vs international music
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Sep 26, 2012 / orkhan - Oct 3, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1 - Immigration figures for the UK
3 - Thank you so much. Those are basic errors. Unacceptable. Normally, I cannot see all of my errors, even I've...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 2, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 2, 2012
|IELTS ; The roads are getting more crowded with increasing number of cars
2 - With the number of cars increasing,roads are getting more crowded and the environment is becoming more polluted. But I...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 2, 2012 / giaaahhh28 - Oct 2, 2012
|'How has technology affected relationships' I am preparing to score band 7+ in IELTS
3 - Hey pgaur, thanks for you comment. But could you please elaborate on this more by giving me some...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 1, 2012 / goldmanswalking - Oct 1, 2012
|Creative artists should be given liberty to express themselves; like on Facebook
3 - 1. Actually i try to show that yes freedom to be given to creative persons but with some restrictions....
Writing Feedbackpgaur - Oct 1, 2012 / pgaur - Oct 1, 2012
|Cell Phones Impact on Society - they have made communication easier
3 - thank you so much!! yes you did help me alot; i added few things thanks to ur feedback...is that...
Writing Feedbackrwony - Oct 1, 2012 / rwony - Oct 1, 2012
|'comparison the sales of CD' - Bar chart of IELTS task-1
Writing Feedbacknitish582 - Sep 3, 2012 / color - Oct 1, 2012
|There are many diffrent types of music in the world today. Whay do we need music ?
NEW - Hi everybody, I am a newcomer, and I am trying to improve my writing to get ielts examination next...
Writing Feedbackluckyman - Oct 1, 2012 / — -
|Prehistoric village of Palea, evidences. GRE Argument topic 1
6 - Hi Westway50 Thanx for your grading my essay. I seek your suggestion for the practice of Essay. Can...
Writing FeedbackMriytunjay - Sep 12, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Oct 1, 2012
|'Past achievements are requirements of a significant contribution' A GRE ISSUE
2 - Your introduction is a bit unclear, it is wordy and hard to understand. write it in a clear concise...
Writing Feedbackiceyniex - Sep 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|Should we trust someone in the first impression or not?
NEW - Hi everybody, please give me some your comments for my essay. Thank you very much :) Some people...
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|TOEFL Essay,"It is not possible to eliminate poverty"
3 - Yes, you are right, but at the end of each para, I have mentioned solution or my opinion, that...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Sep 25, 2012 / ana_p - Sep 29, 2012
|Human needs vs endangered animals. TOEFL IBT ESSAY
NEW - here is the topic: some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than...
Writing Feedbackafsanehrazi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|IELTS CUe card. Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision.
NEW - Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. You should say: who the person was what the situation...
Writing Feedbackviratdg - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|Toefl Essay "Parents should let their children to make mistakes"
3 - Dear ana_p Many thanks for your assistance I rewrite this topic Parents should let their children to make...
Writing Feedbackya3r - Sep 28, 2012 / ya3r - Sep 28, 2012
|'Education should be free to all people' Do you agree or disagree with this statement
3 - thank you for your cerrection for my task. this is a practice task for my IELTS Examination. i think...
Writing Feedbacksmxzdy528 - Sep 23, 2012 / smxzdy528 - Sep 28, 2012
|Two types of transportation: Is Compare and Contrast Clear Enough?
Writing Feedbacklibrarylover - Apr 7, 2010 / mmouse - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL - Should schools focus more on teaching cooperation or on teaching competition?
2 - Your essay is pretty good. It's persuasive and well written. There are some minor errors -> myself...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 25, 2012 / hxuanhung - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL - 'Beethoven' - A person in history whom you want to talk to
NEW - Music has become an essential part of every one's life and many musical artists have also been idols of...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 28, 2012 / — -
|The process of chocolate production; IELTS (Report)
2 - For the word ingredient, you could try replacing some with words like "components" or "factors" Also, your introduction sentence...
Writing Feedbackthe optimists - Sep 28, 2012 / dianephm - Sep 28, 2012
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