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|The loss of many traditional values and customs due to the working hard of modern men
3 - Thank Ahmad for your quick reply. I'll revise my introduction and conclusion. Good luck to you!...
Writing FeedbackCherry Dang - May 26, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 26, 2012
|TOEFL : What recent news story has affected you the most? In what ways?
NEW - Question: What recent news story has affected you the most? In what ways has it affected you? Use reasons...
Writing Feedbackshift_alan - May 26, 2012 / — -
|'traditions of predecessors and society' - IELTS TASK 2
3 - Hi Your essay missed a lot of essay structures I think you should follow a considerable plan to...
Writing Feedbackabdr95 - May 26, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 26, 2012
|Bar chart - New York and Tokio house prices - IELTS
2 - Hi dear, I just want to suggest smt about your overall. In my opinion, you should make combine...
Writing Feedbackansergeyg - May 23, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 26, 2012
|Setting up Cameras in public places us a controversial issue!
2 - Hi Lan Anh, your thesis format is nice. However the concession ideas that you gave in the beginning of...
Writing Feedbacklananh87512 - May 25, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 26, 2012
|Regular class attendance important to college students?
4 - BCIT kicks students out of a particular course if they miss 10% of the course (unexcused ofcourse.) The primary...
Writing Feedbacktuongvi - Apr 17, 2012 / JeremyW - May 26, 2012
|Character Is a Crucial Thing in a Fiction Story
Writing Feedbackxitrona - May 23, 2012 / xitrona - May 25, 2012
|EIKEN's ESSAY (should endangered species be protected?)
5 - Positive impacts: by dint of, thanks to,... Negative impacts: owing to, due to,... Neutral impacts: because of, for the...
Writing Feedbackmikimousekiki - May 24, 2012 / lananh87512 - May 25, 2012
|Society represents the different characteristics of human lifestyle
3 - yeah. . i mean saying that people not even spending much time to have food. thanx Susan for pointing...
Writing Feedbackvarun1960 - May 23, 2012 / varun1960 - May 25, 2012
|People should take time to relax with hobbies very different from their job
2 - I immediately noticed that the first sentence does not sound introductory. I think it would be helpful to open...
Writing Feedbackvickey - May 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 24, 2012
|Sat essay: is it best not to change our ideas, opinions, or behaviours？
3 - hey,u can as u had earlier done put alternative theory about "changing your opinion"...as a 3rd paragraph.When you do...
Writing Feedbackkimuratakuya - May 17, 2012 / tanvi3595 - May 24, 2012
|IELTS - it's about media, advertisements and sales
4 - Great help~thank you very much.I think we come here just to improve the writting ability..so..it doesn't matter where u...
Writing Feedbackvickywang - May 21, 2012 / vickywang - May 24, 2012
|[IELTS task 2 essay] Should we first explore our own countries? Discuss?
6 - I have made a few notes of changes you might consider underlined below: Others, however, claim this allegation...
Writing Feedbacksophie789 - May 23, 2012 / JCEstrada - May 24, 2012
|Death penalty for or against; We should abolish DEATH PENALTY!
NEW - Death penalty appears in many countries from advanced nations to developing ones. Some people believe that this policy has...
Writing Feedbacklananh87512 - May 24, 2012 / — -
|Ielts: English-speaking country teacher (notice / advertisement)
2 - Dear sir, I am writing with regards to your advertisement in The Newsweek magazine, Issue 190 about teaching...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 22, 2012 / ThuyChi - May 23, 2012
|Stop Online Piracy Act (SOPA) - Argumentative Essay
2 - I agree with the author, because censorship from the whole worldwide web will only be an inconvenience to the...
Writing Feedbackunsure - May 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 23, 2012
|FSOT - "The so called 'stars' are promoting politicians of their choice'
2 - During the 2008 elections, popular entertainers were heavily involved in the electoral process, and raised unprecedented amounts of money...
Writing FeedbackUPGRAYEDD - May 21, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 23, 2012
|A father is more than a male parent
Writing Feedbackchincheta - May 20, 2012 / chincheta - May 23, 2012
|Ielys: lost luggage
NEW - Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag....
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 23, 2012 / — -
|IELTS ESSAY1 : a complaining letter about broken equipment you bought
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 22, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 23, 2012
|IELTS; The media should stop reporting detailes of crimes reports
2 - Nowadays,(I don't think you need to put annotation here as you have to hang loose the meaning) detailed...
Writing Feedbackjasmine4gjc7 - May 23, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 23, 2012
|People relying more on technology to solve problems is not a negative trend
Writing Feedbackvarun1960 - May 22, 2012 / varun1960 - May 23, 2012
|Student's main purpose in getting an education is to earn a lot of money (Toefl)
2 - I agree with the statement that students main purpose of getting an education is to earn a lot of...
Writing FeedbackBahrom_4474 - May 22, 2012 / ola77 - May 22, 2012
|Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this
Writing Feedbackkawin - May 22, 2012 / kawin - May 22, 2012
|SAT essay-Do we put too much emphasis on self reliance and independence ?
2 - Dear Tanvi, I find that you're key points are well explained and supported. I just corrected some of...
Writing Feedbacktanvi3595 - May 22, 2012 / Athena - May 22, 2012
|What catches your attention more ; Are Scandals useful ?
2 - Okay ,firstly there are too many spelling mistake here. Scandals - be it political or otherwise, are scandalous -they...
Writing Feedbackhellokitty - May 22, 2012 / tanvi3595 - May 22, 2012
|'War in Afghanistan and Iraq' essay reviewed with the top 3 areas of improvement
2 - Hello. Well, I can offer you some suggestions for improvement. Firstly, I don't know if this assignment was to...
Writing Feedbackfuse15k - May 16, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 22, 2012
|Write a letter to the local English teacher to arrange some English lessons; IELTS
2 - Dear Mr. Johns, This letter is a letter in corresponding toregarding your advertisement in athe Sunday daily newspaper about...
Writing Feedbacksheikhnabeel - May 17, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 22, 2012
|[Toefl] improvements in transportation will make daily life more convenient
NEW - Traffic congestion in a narrow road costs people a long time to get rid of it; we even have...
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|Aurangzeb; great emperor, or a failure as a ruler?
Writing FeedbackPip3mAn - May 21, 2012 / Pip3mAn - May 21, 2012
|Should or should not following local culture when travelling?
4 - thank you!...
Writing Feedbacksophie789 - May 20, 2012 / sophie789 - May 21, 2012
|Task 1 IELTS - Letter about defective kitchen product
4 - Hi Pedro, I like your approach, though I would suggest a more formal tone throughout the letter as...
Writing FeedbackPBeltrao - May 19, 2012 / Athena - May 20, 2012
|IELTS:narrow the gap; should wealthy nations share their wealth with poorer ones
3 - Hi, I feel that you are contradicting yourself in the essay. Instead, try to stick to one perspective...
Writing Feedbacknmcong95 - May 15, 2012 / Athena - May 20, 2012
|Cell phones, make life easier or make human depend on it?
4 - Oh, thank you very, Ahmad Zafari. When I'm working on this essay, I know little information about that. I...
Writing FeedbackAlice3105 - May 19, 2012 / Alice3105 - May 20, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY 1: a letter of complaining about the class schedule changes
3 - Dear sir, I am an undergraduate student of the computer science college and currently completing my third year,...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 20, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 20, 2012
|IELTS: Extra coaching classes
NEW - Topic: Nowadays children are joining extra coaching classes apart from their school studies. Some think it is important for...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - May 20, 2012 / — -
|GRE issue:instead of requiring students to take courses in a varied of disciplines...
Writing Feedbackagoodweather - May 19, 2012 / agoodweather - May 19, 2012
|300 Word Analysis of Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken"
2 - hey I am also major in literature :) so far, that's the analysis of the poem. you exlplain it...
Writing FeedbackAztec1 - May 17, 2012 / xitrona - May 19, 2012
|Children can handle school and work simultaneously, but that can lead to some health problems.
Writing FeedbackAbdumannon - May 18, 2012 / Abdumannon - May 19, 2012
|ielts task 2: married women nowadays are not at home to take care for their children
3 - Hi Ahmad Zafari thank you very much indeed Cuz of your feedbacks I learn many useful thing how to...
Writing Feedbacknmcong95 - May 17, 2012 / Ikboljon - May 19, 2012
|WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF BEING FAMOUS?
2 - As a resulIn conclusion t, whilealthough it is true to say that famous people live a great life, I...
Writing Feedbackrosa44 - May 17, 2012 / ah_zafari - May 18, 2012
|my first motorcycle ride
Writing Feedbackkskwings - May 17, 2012 / schickdamih - May 18, 2012
|IELTS Essay about Immigration and adapting the local laws
3 - Lee and Tommy ur thoughts: On the other hand, forming a minority community will help the people become...
Writing FeedbackHani Lee - May 16, 2012 / sheikhnabeel - May 17, 2012
|most people prefer shopping in super markets to small shops or local markets
2 - Nowadays, I think we need supermarket than small shop because when we go to supermarket, we can buy a...
Writing Feedbackgsrinu_78 - May 17, 2012 / Alice3105 - May 17, 2012
|Integrity of family - Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood.
3 - Dear, Thanks for your reply. Its having the following context on which I have written "Fatherhood ought to...
Writing Feedbacksheikhnabeel - May 16, 2012 / sheikhnabeel - May 17, 2012
|'Finding my Mother' - TITLE BASED ON "A MEMORABLE DAY"
3 - I was not aware that posting my essay online to recieve help and feedback was considered plaigarism. I was...
Writing Feedbacknegon503 - May 3, 2012 / negon503 - May 17, 2012
|the same national curriculum until college; real world is rarely black and white
2 - i totally agree with u,considering my example.i was totally against learning the dates or years when a king was...
Writing Feedbackgoku123 - May 16, 2012 / kskwings - May 17, 2012
|Sat essay - worrying too much about other people's opinions...
Writing Feedbackkimuratakuya - May 17, 2012 / kimuratakuya - May 17, 2012
|'Forms of entertainment' + 'a court to maintain the society balance' -topics of IELTS
NEW - Hi all, I am taking IElts test next month, trying to practise writing as much as possible. but the...
Writing Feedbackcaotinh87 - May 16, 2012 / — -
|financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program
2 - it's great writing abot financial education,but i think, you should add more negative effects about financial education. you can...
Writing Feedbackloandinh - May 13, 2012 / jessiangela - May 16, 2012
|ielts - Can technology alone solve the world's environmental problems?
2 - just one small thing, in the conclusion paragraph, it should be "impractical" not "unpractical"...
Writing Feedbackgulim - May 16, 2012 / nmcong95 - May 16, 2012
|TOEFL Essay " Business Research Center OR Agriculture Center"
2 - I've just done a grammatical correction but that still does'nt save the essay . Firstly, your essay has a...
Writing Feedbackana_p - May 15, 2012 / Elena_lovSL - May 16, 2012
|'Born in Thailand, majoring in finance' - Introduce myself essay
NEW - Welcome to my sites. My name is Chokkhana Trisuwan but most people call me Tonkla. I am a PC2...
Writing Feedbackchokkhana - May 16, 2012 / — -
|IELTS: wealthy nations vs poorer nations; 'Children and Charity Foundation'
NEW - Hello Everybody, Please check my essay and give your comments, Thank you very much in advance, Kh. ...
Writing Feedbackkhumayra - May 15, 2012 / — -
|Why Golf is my favorite Sport?
Writing FeedbackNajah1987 - May 14, 2012 / Najah1987 - May 15, 2012
|'Immigration Reform - Necessary or Not?
2 - our immigrant population accesssaccess to our lands that they cost us so much money. from the entry level,...
Writing Feedbackchristian_edge - May 15, 2012 / Zubaida - May 15, 2012
|Advantages of an early creating family
NEW - This is my first IELTS essay too. Could you please correct it? In recent times it is common...
Writing Feedbackphysiart - May 15, 2012 / — -
|The Influence of Homework on Students' Learning
2 - Hi, You have covered all important points. I don't think that there is a need of any corrections....
Writing Feedbackdeetoon - May 15, 2012 / ana_p - May 15, 2012
|Ielts essay. A letter.You and your family are living in rented accommodation
NEW - You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking city, and you are not satisfied...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 15, 2012 / — -
|IELTS essay. International music vs traditional ('music is vital to us')
6 - It is great job to open Ielts essays forum But I would like to suggest a sort of categorization...
Writing Feedbackkhumayra - May 12, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 15, 2012
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