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|TOEFL Essay: Advantages and disadvantages of sports.
8 - Hi Vickey & Sudhir, I think, this is a Description/Explanation type of essay and not a preference or...
Writing Feedbackana_p - May 30, 2012 / ana_p - Jun 1, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: Compare different modes of transportation to travel.
Writing Feedbackana_p - May 31, 2012 / ana_p - Jun 1, 2012
|'he is right people to work and learn from' - reflective Journal
2 - Even thoughwe had only a few months of working together, he has contributed a great deal to the group...
Writing Feedbackphabee007 - May 29, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 31, 2012
|GRE issue essay (Effects of technology, human interaction)?
2 - The rapidly shifting world of technology has drastically changed the way in which people behave in society. Technologies...
Writing FeedbackBucketOfFish - May 28, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 31, 2012
|Writing report about "Convenient Computers" - feedback
3 - Hi, There is no relationship between the first sentence of the introduction and what you wrote in the other...
Writing FeedbackLulz94 - May 28, 2012 / ah_zafari - May 31, 2012
|Essay : Which type of movie do you prefer? seious or entertaining?
2 - i really liked your essay...your ideas are clear and it is easy to follow them for the reader. The...
Writing Feedbackbuituandung231 - May 31, 2012 / Saidakhror - May 31, 2012
|'leisure activities are necessary for students' - IELTS 2
Writing Feedbackbtxdzsz - May 29, 2012 / Athena - May 31, 2012
|'important to make large amount to money' - essay
3 - Thanks Ahmad for your advice. Request you review the whole essay I have corrected the sentence below. Nowadays...
Writing Feedbackinform - May 30, 2012 / inform - May 31, 2012
|Definition of heroes - Gandhi, Luther King, Lincoln essay
4 - go to this website it will help articulate info.gcsu.edu/intranet/univ_senate/Feb_23_04/Feb_04/newsat_scoring.pdf...
Writing Feedbackrishav25 - May 29, 2012 / chessman567 - May 30, 2012
|Crime news should not be reported in newspapers or tv
7 - Ahmad, i really appreciate your words and you are 100 percent right. But someone who has got so called...
Writing FeedbackSaidakhror - May 30, 2012 / Saidakhror - May 30, 2012
|'to promote medical standard and science through sports facilities' - IELTS TASK II
2 - is play ----->is palying.? sorry..my writting is so bad. so...I can't correct it for you. but.that's my little suggestion......
Writing Feedbackbtxdzsz - May 30, 2012 / vickywang - May 30, 2012
|'more money has to be spent on the road system' - IELTS Essay
3 - this essay is partially out of topic. the question asks to discuss both views are government's and users' payment...
Writing Feedbackbtxdzsz - May 29, 2012 / Saidakhror - May 30, 2012
|'Science deserves more attention' - IELTS Task2
4 - Thanks for your advices. I do need to structure the paragraphs. maybe.I think,when i was writting a essay, i...
Writing Feedbackvickywang - May 28, 2012 / vickywang - May 30, 2012
|Parents know better their children than teachers -To be a good member of society
3 - Some sentences are simple and there are some minor grammatical mistakes. I would recommend you to work on coherence...
Writing Feedbacklamck - May 29, 2012 / Saidakhror - May 30, 2012
|(development studies / Japan / WB president) - Reflective Journal essays
NEW - Hi all, i am writing my reflective journals, it woul be nice if some body can correct my grammar...
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|About me and my big dreams
2 - My name is Suhartini and I come from Johor Bahru. My English teacher in secondary school was named Tini...
Writing Feedbacktinie - May 28, 2012 / BaileyLeong - May 29, 2012
|Effects of theBaby Boom Generation on society.
Writing Feedbackfdm1995 - May 28, 2012 / fdm1995 - May 28, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY PRACTICE: Computers replace human teachers.
3 - I am a teacher. the present use of computers is very helpful in teaching but we can not summarily...
Writing Feedbacksharkondiet - May 24, 2012 / tinie - May 28, 2012
|"The technology connecting people" - The gre issue 1
2 - Hmm... well, there's a lot of grammatical errors in there, which I'll get into below. However, the structure is...
Writing Feedbackforever299 - May 27, 2012 / BucketOfFish - May 28, 2012
|Multi-cultured has more benefit...
NEW - Some people think there is no drawback to ethnic in the multi-cultured country. Multi-cultured does more benefit than the...
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|GRE- 'Scandals can be useful'? Do they focus our attention on problems better ?
3 - i ve just read the essay; it run smoothly to its closing. It is a good essay, containing much...
Writing Feedbackgoku123 - May 19, 2012 / hafidgg - May 27, 2012
|(Hamburger, Fish & Chips, Pizza) - IELTS - help with writing task 1 line graph
NEW - Question and line graph is the attached .png My task 1 writing is below The presented information from...
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|'wonder woman' - write about a person you admire - my mum
Writing Feedbackawesome123 - May 27, 2012 / muslim24 - May 27, 2012
|WHY DRUGS are used by teenagers?
Writing Feedbackburssuztalebe - May 26, 2012 / burssuztalebe - May 27, 2012
|Visual Arts Essay Writing on Post Modern artisits, architects or designers -feedback
NEW - Discuss how Post Modern artisits, architects or designers have used appropriation to represent cultural and emotional reactions. "The...
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|Dallas- the town you were raised in...
NEW - -discuss the town you were raised in how has it and the people in it help develop certain traits...
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|The loss of many traditional values and customs due to the working hard of modern men
3 - Thank Ahmad for your quick reply. I'll revise my introduction and conclusion. Good luck to you!...
Writing FeedbackCherry Dang - May 26, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 26, 2012
|TOEFL : What recent news story has affected you the most? In what ways?
NEW - Question: What recent news story has affected you the most? In what ways has it affected you? Use reasons...
Writing Feedbackshift_alan - May 26, 2012 / — -
|'traditions of predecessors and society' - IELTS TASK 2
3 - Hi Your essay missed a lot of essay structures I think you should follow a considerable plan to...
Writing Feedbackabdr95 - May 26, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 26, 2012
|Bar chart - New York and Tokio house prices - IELTS
2 - Hi dear, I just want to suggest smt about your overall. In my opinion, you should make combine...
Writing Feedbackansergeyg - May 23, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 26, 2012
|Setting up Cameras in public places us a controversial issue!
2 - Hi Lan Anh, your thesis format is nice. However the concession ideas that you gave in the beginning of...
Writing Feedbacklananh87512 - May 25, 2012 / Cherry Dang - May 26, 2012
|Regular class attendance important to college students?
4 - BCIT kicks students out of a particular course if they miss 10% of the course (unexcused ofcourse.) The primary...
Writing Feedbacktuongvi - Apr 17, 2012 / JeremyW - May 26, 2012
|Character Is a Crucial Thing in a Fiction Story
Writing Feedbackxitrona - May 23, 2012 / xitrona - May 25, 2012
|EIKEN's ESSAY (should endangered species be protected?)
5 - Positive impacts: by dint of, thanks to,... Negative impacts: owing to, due to,... Neutral impacts: because of, for the...
Writing Feedbackmikimousekiki - May 24, 2012 / lananh87512 - May 25, 2012
|Society represents the different characteristics of human lifestyle
3 - yeah. . i mean saying that people not even spending much time to have food. thanx Susan for pointing...
Writing Feedbackvarun1960 - May 23, 2012 / varun1960 - May 25, 2012
|People should take time to relax with hobbies very different from their job
2 - I immediately noticed that the first sentence does not sound introductory. I think it would be helpful to open...
Writing Feedbackvickey - May 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 24, 2012
|Sat essay: is it best not to change our ideas, opinions, or behaviours？
3 - hey,u can as u had earlier done put alternative theory about "changing your opinion"...as a 3rd paragraph.When you do...
Writing Feedbackkimuratakuya - May 17, 2012 / tanvi3595 - May 24, 2012
|IELTS - it's about media, advertisements and sales
4 - Great help~thank you very much.I think we come here just to improve the writting ability..so..it doesn't matter where u...
Writing Feedbackvickywang - May 21, 2012 / vickywang - May 24, 2012
|[IELTS task 2 essay] Should we first explore our own countries? Discuss?
6 - I have made a few notes of changes you might consider underlined below: Others, however, claim this allegation...
Writing Feedbacksophie789 - May 23, 2012 / JCEstrada - May 24, 2012
|Death penalty for or against; We should abolish DEATH PENALTY!
NEW - Death penalty appears in many countries from advanced nations to developing ones. Some people believe that this policy has...
Writing Feedbacklananh87512 - May 24, 2012 / — -
|Ielts: English-speaking country teacher (notice / advertisement)
2 - Dear sir, I am writing with regards to your advertisement in The Newsweek magazine, Issue 190 about teaching...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 22, 2012 / ThuyChi - May 23, 2012
|Stop Online Piracy Act (SOPA) - Argumentative Essay
2 - I agree with the author, because censorship from the whole worldwide web will only be an inconvenience to the...
Writing Feedbackunsure - May 22, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 23, 2012
|FSOT - "The so called 'stars' are promoting politicians of their choice'
2 - During the 2008 elections, popular entertainers were heavily involved in the electoral process, and raised unprecedented amounts of money...
Writing FeedbackUPGRAYEDD - May 21, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 23, 2012
|A father is more than a male parent
Writing Feedbackchincheta - May 20, 2012 / chincheta - May 23, 2012
|Ielys: lost luggage
NEW - Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag....
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|IELTS ESSAY1 : a complaining letter about broken equipment you bought
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - May 22, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 23, 2012
|IELTS; The media should stop reporting detailes of crimes reports
2 - Nowadays,(I don't think you need to put annotation here as you have to hang loose the meaning) detailed...
Writing Feedbackjasmine4gjc7 - May 23, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 23, 2012
|People relying more on technology to solve problems is not a negative trend
Writing Feedbackvarun1960 - May 22, 2012 / varun1960 - May 23, 2012
|Student's main purpose in getting an education is to earn a lot of money (Toefl)
2 - I agree with the statement that students main purpose of getting an education is to earn a lot of...
Writing FeedbackBahrom_4474 - May 22, 2012 / ola77 - May 22, 2012
|Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this
Writing Feedbackkawin - May 22, 2012 / kawin - May 22, 2012
|SAT essay-Do we put too much emphasis on self reliance and independence ?
2 - Dear Tanvi, I find that you're key points are well explained and supported. I just corrected some of...
Writing Feedbacktanvi3595 - May 22, 2012 / Athena - May 22, 2012
|What catches your attention more ; Are Scandals useful ?
2 - Okay ,firstly there are too many spelling mistake here. Scandals - be it political or otherwise, are scandalous -they...
Writing Feedbackhellokitty - May 22, 2012 / tanvi3595 - May 22, 2012
|'War in Afghanistan and Iraq' essay reviewed with the top 3 areas of improvement
2 - Hello. Well, I can offer you some suggestions for improvement. Firstly, I don't know if this assignment was to...
Writing Feedbackfuse15k - May 16, 2012 / EF_Susan - May 22, 2012
|Write a letter to the local English teacher to arrange some English lessons; IELTS
2 - Dear Mr. Johns, This letter is a letter in corresponding toregarding your advertisement in athe Sunday daily newspaper about...
Writing Feedbacksheikhnabeel - May 17, 2012 / hadi1981 - May 22, 2012
|[Toefl] improvements in transportation will make daily life more convenient
NEW - Traffic congestion in a narrow road costs people a long time to get rid of it; we even have...
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|Aurangzeb; great emperor, or a failure as a ruler?
Writing FeedbackPip3mAn - May 21, 2012 / Pip3mAn - May 21, 2012
|Should or should not following local culture when travelling?
4 - thank you!...
Writing Feedbacksophie789 - May 20, 2012 / sophie789 - May 21, 2012
|Task 1 IELTS - Letter about defective kitchen product
4 - Hi Pedro, I like your approach, though I would suggest a more formal tone throughout the letter as...
Writing FeedbackPBeltrao - May 19, 2012 / Athena - May 20, 2012
|IELTS:narrow the gap; should wealthy nations share their wealth with poorer ones
3 - Hi, I feel that you are contradicting yourself in the essay. Instead, try to stick to one perspective...
Writing Feedbacknmcong95 - May 15, 2012 / Athena - May 20, 2012
|Cell phones, make life easier or make human depend on it?
4 - Oh, thank you very, Ahmad Zafari. When I'm working on this essay, I know little information about that. I...
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