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|Essay: Should parents reward their children with money for each good grade from school?
4 - Dear Coke: Thank you for your feedback. It really helps me a lot. Sometimes when I come across...
Writing FeedbackFuntomas Chen - Apr 10, 2019 / Funtomas Chen - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS: Plan-cancelling letter to a friend
2 - I would suggest that you revise your opening line.While it is nice that you are being straightforward, I would...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Apr 11, 2019 / Maria - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2: Bettering public health by the number of sport facilities or other measures
Writing FeedbackHarrypham0109 - Apr 6, 2019 / icebear24 - Apr 10, 2019
|IELTS: Is direct actions or donation of money more preferable to help someone?
3 - Thank you @Constance for your detailed correction. I really appreciate your help in each paragraph....
Writing Feedbackcoke - Apr 9, 2019 / coke - Apr 10, 2019
|Social mindset - some people try to look younger than they really are
Writing Feedbackprisid - Apr 9, 2019 / prisid - Apr 9, 2019
|Writing Part 2 - Citizens know little about their neighbors. Reasons and solutions.
3 - @Alicia2019 I think that your essay is impressive on its own. However, I do have a couple of suggestions...
Writing FeedbackAlicia2019 - Apr 8, 2019 / Maria - Apr 8, 2019
|Writing Part 2. What factors may have caused that highly qualified graduates are without job?
4 - I think it's better to illustrate your article by first stating reasons, and give some suggestions corresponding to these...
Writing FeedbackSyIlhamzultami - Apr 7, 2019 / sgyyan38 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - Prolonged incarceration or... Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Writing Feedbacksgyyan38 - Apr 7, 2019 / sgyyan38 - Apr 8, 2019
|Youth crime, reason and solution
3 - regarding to point #3, I don't understand the usage of alongside. We'll be happy to help again if this...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Unethical and immoral advertising in our daily lives
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Significant developments in the field of information technology and its effects for the future
2 - I would recommend that you watch out for your modifications in the verbs.There were instances sprinkled throughout your essay...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / Maria - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - Opinion - Is our planet in peril?
3 - Depending on the application of this article, simple and clear introduction is usually welcomed in examination. You may consider...
Writing Feedbackmailnaycuachi - Apr 7, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - aids by developed countries to third-word countries
3 - thanks a lot...
Writing Feedbackahmedaly11 - Apr 7, 2019 / ahmedaly11 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS 2: In some regions, a great number of young adults are elected for key roles in the government
4 - @andrewfoy273 Hi there. I have a few words to say on this Paragraph 1 these two viewpoin this two...
Writing Feedbackandrewfoy273 - Apr 6, 2019 / mailnaycuachi - Apr 7, 2019
|Should we use a bicycle as our main form of transport?
Writing Feedbackhendrac15 - Apr 7, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 7, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: reasons and positive/negative development for shopping malls designed for the young?
Writing Feedbackgoodorfood - Apr 5, 2019 / nguyenholinhchi - Apr 7, 2019
|Worty Cost? - New railway lines for high speed trains or improving existing public transport
Writing FeedbackOceanandsun - Apr 4, 2019 / Oceanandsun - Apr 7, 2019
|Options on transportation improvement
3 - @tcl1120 Great start for your essay!I do still have a couple of key recommendations to better your structure and...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|Ielts 1 - statistical information on the amount of flora and fauna extinction in tropical forests
2 - I would switch your first two sentences. In the process of doing so, you could briefly expound and touch...
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|Childcare preparation to all new parents
3 - Thank you for your valuable comments. May I adopt "In fact" or "Nevertheless" replacing the word of "Perhaps"...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|In some countries there are more young adults than older people - advantages?
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|Sport stars are paid too much for what they do. Discuss your opinion [IELTS]
3 - good article with range of lexicon. I would recommend you to consolidate the point 1 and 2 to...
Writing Feedbacknguyenholinhchi - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|Essay (Problem-Solution-Evaluation Essay) about Drones
2 - I would suggest simplifying your language to make your sentences more precise and comprehensive. It would be appreciated by...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|Nowadays people can buy cheaper products. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
4 - ... necessities such as clothes,food. ==> clothes and food Thus people are ... this word cannot use as the...
Writing Feedbackdrnikonian - Apr 4, 2019 / dynastylee0929 - Apr 6, 2019
|Public libraries are no longer important / replaced by gadgets
4 - There are some good points in both sides, I would recommend to link those point together in order to...
Writing Feedbacksurbhisid96 - Apr 1, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 5, 2019
|"Parents should be free to decide whether or not to vaccine their babies" ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY
6 - Good article with using a wide range of lexicon and technical terms. I would recommend you to strengthen...
Writing Feedbackfreshjul287 - Mar 25, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 5, 2019
|Security Concerns, American People, and National Terrorism
Writing Feedbackcja365 - Apr 4, 2019 / Day999 - Apr 4, 2019
|Ielts part 1_Table: compares the data about the underground systems of railway in six cities
2 - My first recommendation is for you to condense your writing. This is especially useful for ESL learners because it...
Writing FeedbackMonicamita - Apr 4, 2019 / Maria - Apr 4, 2019
|IELTS writing task 1 - line graph of waste produced
3 - @DoctorWho Thanks for your feedback. I divided into 2 periods of time that were 2000-2005 and 2005-2015 for 2...
Writing FeedbackJin_KT - Mar 26, 2019 / Jin_KT - Apr 4, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2: agree or disagree: the national or international literature and history
3 - In paragraph two write "to teach local literature." Remove the comma after invaders. Remove "From that" and write This...
Writing Feedbackhappiness89 - Apr 3, 2019 / Constance - Apr 3, 2019
|Writing task 1 : fast food consumption by income groups
3 - i'm so sorry... i prepared but i didn't understand why i forget attaching to this essay thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Apr 3, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 3, 2019
|Learning Motivation - IELTS Writing Task 2: Discursive Essay
2 - I would watch out for your construction of paragraphs. You have a tendency to leave behind thoughts, meaning that...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Apr 3, 2019 / Maria - Apr 3, 2019
|IELTS: Global resources are consumed in dramatically increased rate
4 - in my opinion, i suggest you divide 2 measures to solve this problem in your body of the essay...
Writing Feedbackmaggy311344 - Mar 30, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 3, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - Free or not? Charged information makes a more sustainable development in a long term.
3 - This is a discusive essay, therefore, I think you should include some phrases like "some people believe that, it...
Writing Feedbackbobodoris - Apr 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Apr 3, 2019
|IELTS2 In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.
5 - Hi, there are some problems related to your essay. Firstly, I'd like to talk about the essay's structure. Although...
Writing FeedbackFrancescaD - Apr 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Apr 3, 2019
|Writing task 2 - factors impact on the editors' decision what to broadcast
3 - actually, i think you have misconception with my tense i used in the essay. i only use the present...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Mar 31, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 2, 2019
|Radiologist Informative Essay for English I
2 - In paragraph one last sentence ...and the types of jobs that are available. In paragraph two, paraphrase the...
Writing Feedbacktnoelle110 - Apr 1, 2019 / Constance - Apr 2, 2019
|Is it feasible for a country provide university places for a high proportion of people?
2 - I would suggest incorporating more concrete data into your essay.While the essay has a general flow and direction, it...
Writing Feedbackkatkat - Apr 1, 2019 / Maria - Apr 1, 2019
|Cooking doesn't take much time any longer - Has this improved the way people live?
4 - your ideal make me have some confusion firstly, i think it's a long and rambling essay, just because the...
Writing Feedbackpunkart - Mar 30, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 31, 2019
|IELTS writing task 1 - adult education argument
3 - i had the same topic with you, i think you can have your own lesson from it essayforum.com/writing/adults-study-costs-courses-shared-82581/...
Writing Feedbackngothanhnam2211 - Mar 30, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 31, 2019
|IELTS: Graph - the amount of fast food consumed by juveniles in Australia
4 - @Maria thank you for your comment ^^.i'll rewrite again @buttercup hi buttercup.thank you for your advice....
Writing FeedbackNguyen Cuong - Mar 30, 2019 / Nguyen Cuong - Mar 31, 2019
|IELTS task 2 - railway transport vs existing public transport
3 - Giving a specific band score would be difficult as assessing is quite different from being suggestive. However, I'll provide...
Writing Feedbackkhanbahadar12 - Mar 30, 2019 / Maria - Mar 30, 2019
|IELTS: Along with men, should the army recruit women?
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 29, 2019 / coke - Mar 30, 2019
|The idea to study English in an English-speaking country - IELTS 2: agree or disagree essay
3 - @mzoetemdroomm A couple of things to take note of. I would avoid using words that drag your essay. I...
Writing Feedbackmzoetemdroomm - Mar 28, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|A police force carring guns will encourage a higher level of violence?
4 - @Maria (*^▽^*)You gave me a very detailed line of thought，it's really useful to my writing,Thank you very much! @coke...
Writing Feedbackdmdxw - Mar 29, 2019 / dmdxw - Mar 29, 2019
|TOEFL - Is working while studying better than taking for example a college loan?
3 - @Phoebe789 I do not suggest starting your essay with a personal statement. Instead, opt for making an introduction that...
Writing FeedbackPhoebe789 - Mar 29, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country
2 - If you could provide the graph that you are referring to, it would help with providing more substantial feedback...
Writing Feedbackhmn - Mar 29, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|Government invest in the arts vs public services
3 - Let's look through your essay carefully. In your first paragraph, you can see a lack of substantiation on your...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 28, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|IELTS: agree/disagree : Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
3 - Thanks for your help. Actually, I had trouble with my final example in para 3. Your suggestions helped me...
Writing Feedbackfrankly - Mar 29, 2019 / frankly - Mar 29, 2019
|IELTS: Why money should not be spent on finding life on other planets
4 - @coke you use too many "the". sometimes it is not necessary because it does not specificly refer to anothy...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 28, 2019 / yanhong - Mar 29, 2019
|The importance of fashionable clothes to humans - Review my IELTS
5 - Thanks Holt. It is a good idea about my shortcomings. I'll base on this to improve my writing skills....
Writing Feedbacktvda - Mar 12, 2019 / tvda - Mar 29, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: The benefits of multigenerational workplace
3 - ... with the older ones haves become more ... ... brings huge advantages to the workplace. company/business I...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 21, 2019 / anhpnguyen - Mar 28, 2019
|Effect of air pollution on health
Writing FeedbackLinda68 - Mar 17, 2019 / Linda68 - Mar 28, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 1] UK commuters using three different means of transport
3 - Hello hachihachi137 I don't think that you could determine whether the train is the least favorable type of...
Writing Feedbackhachihachi137 - Mar 27, 2019 / coke - Mar 28, 2019
|Which is needed more: formal qualifications or practical skills to do the job better?
3 - Hi icebear24 I think there is a conflict between these two sentences. 'For example, in order to fix ......
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Mar 27, 2019 / coke - Mar 28, 2019
|[IELTS - Writing Task 2] : Discuss both views in penalizing villains.
2 - Welcome to the forum! I have a couple of key suggestions to your essay. Avoid dragging your sentences. You...
Writing Feedbackridhoswasta - Mar 27, 2019 / Maria - Mar 27, 2019
|Task 1 - the figure for internet usage
3 - @yanhong I suggest moving your second paragraph to the last portion of the essay. The text was pertaining to...
Writing Feedbackyanhong - Mar 27, 2019 / Maria - Mar 27, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 1] - Table: The amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries.
Writing Feedbacknhinhi123 - Mar 26, 2019 / nhinhi123 - Mar 27, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 2] Should children read entertainment books only
3 - @anhpnguyen Hi, the structure of this essay looks fine, but there are some areas that you still need to...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 27, 2019 / yanhong - Mar 27, 2019
|[IELTS task 2] Museums and the entrance fee - different viewpoints
3 - Here are some slightly revised sentences I would suggest, using asterisks to indicate specific words changed: In the...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 26, 2019 / ColinLooper - Mar 26, 2019
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