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|A person's worth VS old-fashioned value : IELTS WRITNG TASK 2
2 - The essay does not follow the correct requirements for the original prompt. The instruction prompt for this essay indicates:...
Writing Feedbackppbbjakarta - Dec 17, 2017 / Holt - Dec 17, 2017
|Urban areas have more crimes. Direct question essay.
7 - The number of people who commit crimes in the cities are significantly larger than in the country side. ...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Dec 11, 2017 / shereenzalloum - Dec 16, 2017
|University is the better route than school to reach successful career
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Dec 15, 2017 / Holt - Dec 16, 2017
|Which is better for a country? A few people earning high salary or government limiting?
NEW - In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think this is good for the country,...
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|TOEFL: Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
4 - When a choice is given between two topics by the representation of the word "or" , the writer must...
Writing Feedbackalwakeel - Dec 13, 2017 / Holt - Dec 15, 2017
|I WANT BAND 8.0 - IELTS2 - FATHERHOOD IS AS MUCH IMPORTANT AS MOTHERHOOD.
Writing Feedbackadin3a1 - Dec 13, 2017 / Holt - Dec 13, 2017
|Trying new things and taking risks is the cornerstone of success
2 - Mo, are you preparing for an IELTS test? The response essay that you wrote sounds like it. I wish...
Writing Feedbackalwakeel - Dec 13, 2017 / Holt - Dec 13, 2017
|The development of photography has changed the way people see the world. (Causal Effect Analysis)
Writing FeedbackJoe_edeskuty - Dec 12, 2017 / Holt - Dec 12, 2017
|IELTES Task 2: Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores.
8 - yes. online shopping is replacing in stores.Today people are very busy that they wont time for shopping.The one who...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 15, 2017 / brucedeniger - Dec 11, 2017
|Many countries invest a lot of money on art or on public services and facilities. What do you think?
3 - Qi Ji, everything about this essay presentation is going to make it fail. You failed to offer a proper...
Writing FeedbackMiracle0819 - Dec 9, 2017 / Holt - Dec 10, 2017
|Cyber Security being important in the world today
2 - Amber , the first half of the essay seems to contain repetitive information in succeeding paragraphs. This makes the...
Writing Feedbackamberstar - Dec 9, 2017 / Holt - Dec 10, 2017
|Wealthy countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor areas
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Dec 9, 2017 / Holt - Dec 9, 2017
|Technology in food making. How have those inventions changed citizens life habits?
3 - @Pureness Over the pass LAST few decades, together with the advantages of technologies are CAUSES the...
Writing FeedbackPureness - Dec 8, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 9, 2017
|Professional sportsmen have become very popular and their salaries are a lot of money.
4 - dear,@KCN in this essay, introduction is not able to present full prompt. please focus on how to paraphrase...
Writing FeedbackKCN - Dec 6, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 8, 2017
|IELTS Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online.
2 - Yujia, your essay response is inappropriate based upon the original prompt. The discussion is clearly requesting you to create...
Writing FeedbackYoga - Dec 7, 2017 / Holt - Dec 8, 2017
|Rainfall in Johannesburg and Cape Town from January to December//IELTS TASK 1
Writing Feedbacknewraki - Dec 3, 2017 / sbina - Dec 6, 2017
|Educated people are more valuable? Direct questions essay.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Dec 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Dec 6, 2017
|We should help minority nations to keep their languages for the cultural diversity
6 - Hi Ernazar, I believe the reason that you failed in this essay is not about off-topic but rather, an...
Writing Feedbackernazaralakoz - Dec 1, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Dec 5, 2017
|Internet is a convenient place for finding the information, provided it is used wisely.
2 - Shruti, you did not fully understand the discussion instructions that were provided to you. This essay has a very...
Writing Feedbacksvirmani - Dec 5, 2017 / Holt - Dec 5, 2017
|Tax reforms proposed by republicans. Three categories in which you feel my essay could be stronger
NEW - Why Tax Cuts Are Bad For The Middle Class Taxes are considered to be one of the certainties of...
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|Information in a specific sector should be shared freely or not
2 - bism, your essay does not follow the appropriate discussion instruction. You were asked to discuss both points of view...
Writing Feedbacksbina - Dec 4, 2017 / Holt - Dec 4, 2017
|A situation of the government schools and their students
Writing FeedbackTanveer775 - Dec 3, 2017 / giangchu210 - Dec 4, 2017
|It is needless to use libraries because everyone can get all information they need on the Internet
3 - Hi Trang, I would like to offer a paraphrasing of the original prompt for your reference. In our...
Writing FeedbackLonar213 - Dec 3, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Dec 4, 2017
|Flame The Patriotic Into Integrity Unity and Creativity
2 - Indah , there are a few points for further development in your essay in relation to the thesis statement....
Writing Feedbackindahmuthmainnah - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|5 different kinds of communication service which were used by people over 6 years
2 - @dotuananh2001, you forgot to include the image that your analytical essay is supposed to be based on. I cannot...
Writing Feedbackdotuananh2001 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|The Internet, despite being the most significant breakthrough in history, is indeed a mixed blessing
2 - Anna, I think you can score a 6 with this essay. What lowered the score for this otherwise strong...
Writing Feedbackanna1239 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Cooperation between individual and global governments to cope with environmental problems
Writing FeedbackTuan Anh 10c - Dec 3, 2017 / Tuan Anh 10c - Dec 3, 2017
|Essay about "several languages die out and many people think this is a good thing, do you agree?"
4 - khaled, please remember to always provide the complete original prompt with your essay. It is not to be used...
Writing FeedbackkhaledQasem25 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|One who pretends to be a friend but he/she is not, so called a fair weather friend
4 - @Holt Though I do appreciate your feedback, however, somewhere down the line, I still have doubts regarding what all...
Writing FeedbackTanveer775 - Dec 2, 2017 / Tanveer775 - Dec 3, 2017
|Animals do feel. Express an opinion on animal treatment.
2 - @happyfunny I cannot help you fix your essay because you did not provide the complete original prompt for me...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|A discussion has been ongoing regarding the development of roads and railways
3 - fiZa, Actually, in the scoring procedure for IELTS, you are asked to represent only your understanding of the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Same-sex Marriage and The Effects on the Society
2 - Jesse, your essay is heavy on theory, but lacking in examples and additional information that will support the data...
Writing Feedbackray8171 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|IELTS task 1: People who lived in Charlestown
3 - Hi Peter, let me show what you are supposed to improve. Please, meet my notes and deal with them....
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Dec 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Dec 2, 2017
|The school system should start teaching foreign language class at primary school.
3 - Roba, contrary from what the above poster said, you MUST use the pronoun "I" in these discussions because these...
Writing FeedbackRobaa - Dec 1, 2017 / Holt - Dec 2, 2017
|The top performing sportsmen earn huge amount of money as compared to people in other professions
5 - @chinkybehl22 hello, I have read your whole essay. as per my knowledge I have rearrange your essay to...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 18, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 1, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1-The chart gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity
3 - Hi Ulica,I have read your writing closely and it is actually a good job. However, you forgot a few...
Writing FeedbackUlica - Dec 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Dec 1, 2017
|IELTS WT2, Fast-food companies should not be allowed to give away free toys with their food
3 - Kay, you have set an admirable goal for yourself with regards to your desired score for the IELTS test....
Writing Feedbackmacbz - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 1, 2017
|A university education should include an internship or some type of work experience.
2 - Trà , which of the English tests are you preparing for? IELTS or TOEFL? Also, what is the complete...
Writing FeedbackSakiCCS - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 1, 2017
|The information superhighway was greatly transformed the way man conducts his activities today
Writing FeedbackErica Tin - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Material Possessions or Kindness/Trust?
Writing Feedbackzeqiyasin - Nov 29, 2017 / happyfunny - Nov 30, 2017
|Internet is as violent as entertaining - essay based on a short story
3 - @Holt Dear Holt. Thank you very much for your advice! I will reconsider the problem that you have mentioned...
Writing Feedbackqin6882060 - Nov 29, 2017 / qin6882060 - Nov 30, 2017
|Exercise should be a more important part of the school curricullum - persuasive essay
2 - Alex, your teacher is right. This is not a persuasive essay. This is an opinion paper and nothing more....
Writing Feedbackaryanxxx - Nov 29, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|The idea of using a standardized national curriculum in the entire nation
4 - Hello, I think your response is adequate, but i believe you should change somethings to make the essay fall...
Writing Feedbacksy9891 - Nov 27, 2017 / jrd519 - Nov 29, 2017
|Reading reflections about artical
5 - Hi Jeannie! I am also a non-English as a first language-person. I agree with Holt that translating the English...
Writing FeedbackJeannieHo - Nov 27, 2017 / benamilada - Nov 29, 2017
|Female teachers were dominant in pre-school, primary and secondary school in the UK in 2100
Writing Feedbackquanghuy219 - Nov 29, 2017 / quanghuy219 - Nov 29, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: TV or newspaper? neither? Internet
2 - Peter, This is a pretty good essay, even though your opening paraphrase is not proper. The opening paraphrase is...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017 / Holt - Nov 28, 2017
|task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone
8 - Some spelling mistakes For example Although nowadays we are ... Frist of all First? Aim for long sentences. Normally,...
Writing FeedbackNguyenBinh - Nov 21, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|People today suffer from pressures different from that present in the past. Life is more stressful.
4 - I believe that you should make your sentences longer as that what they are looking for as far as...
Writing Feedbacknooraleslam - Nov 19, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|WRITING TASK 1: opinions of male and female members about a city sports club.
3 - ... male members are not satistifed unsatisfied with compared ... You use the same word too many...
Writing FeedbackJames Hoang - Nov 25, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|People increasingly access the news online these day, rather than buying newspapers and magazines
7 - @Hiwi_Life Thanks a lot for your feedback. :) @Holt yes, maybe Holt is right. I'm really "thinking in...
Writing FeedbackHanh Mai - Nov 26, 2017 / Hanh Mai - Nov 28, 2017
|IELTS task 1: reasons for either driving or cycling to work
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017 / Holt - Nov 28, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: More people are moving away from an agriculture background to big cities
5 - Hi Vu, You should address what are you about to do to the reviewer in your essay by providing...
Writing Feedbackchauvb38 - Nov 26, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017
|The caused of deforestation around the world. Solution essay.
3 - @Holt, thank you so much for the informative feedback. You are right, this is called cheating if I revise...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017
|Opening the novelties of efficient train services for travel across city capitals
3 - Hi Qianting, I have paraphrased the topic for its reference. Some people who live in a portion of...
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 27, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 27, 2017
|Sharing is a vital step in conducting research and doing business
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 11, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|TASK 1 - BAR GRAPH - ANNUAL RIDERSHIP; public transport in Williamsville
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham2608 - Nov 23, 2017 / hunghoiham2608 - Nov 27, 2017
|Technology has a significant influence on communication and relationships between people.
4 - Sophie, since this is not a comparison essay, you should not be discussing both points of view in the...
Writing Feedbackilove199784 - Nov 26, 2017 / Holt - Nov 27, 2017
|IELTS WRITNG 1: The total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
3 - I also find it struggling to describe a bar char every time when I check with the sample answers....
Writing FeedbackThuyLinhMarC - Nov 22, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|Do you prefer to eat out or at home? Life in a big city versus a small town. Toefl independent essay
3 - Hi naseernasrati, Here are some suggestions to your essay: 1. Your opinions are too absolute. Try to...
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 26, 2017 / qinshirl - Nov 26, 2017
|The percentage of U.K. university students in England who were capable to speak different languages
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